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山东省济南市2025-2026学年高二下学期期末检测英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My Dad, Matt, lost his job and when Christmas came, we had no money at all. On Christmas Eve, Dad took me into our yard. I was five that year and I sat next to Dad and we looked up at the sky, “Pick out your favorite star,” Dad said. He told me I could have one star for keeps. He said it was my Christmas present.
“You can’t give me a star! No one owns the stars.” “That’s right, Betty. No one else owns them. You just have to claim it before anyone else does.”
I looked up to the stars and tried to figure out which was the best one. I could see hundreds, maybe thousands or even millions, hanging in the clear sky. There was one in particular, in the west above the mountains but low in the sky, which shone more brightly than all the rest. I pointed and claimed it. Dad smiled, telling me I chose Venus. It looked bigger and brighter because it was much closer than other stars. It reflected the light of the sun. “I like it anyway,” I said. “Alright,” Dad agreed. “It’s Christmas. You can have a planet if you want.”
From then on, Venus got a new name in our family, Betty’s Planet. After Christmas, Dad found another job in the mine and he worked like mad. Gradually, we could make ends meet and there were presents under the Christmas tree and cakes when it was my birthday. But deep down, no present could match Betty’s Planet.
Years later, I entered university, majoring in engineering, but I stuck to my passion for astronomy in my spare time. In my junior year, I became the first undergraduate ever to discover an asteroid (小行星) when examining images of thousands of asteroids on my computer, due to which I was given the right to name this asteroid according to the tradition of International Astronomical Union.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:This time, I decided to give Dad a present.
Paragraph 2:Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas.
山东省济南市2024-2025学年高二下学期期末检测英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My Dad, Matt, lost his job and when Christmas came, we had no money at all. On Christmas Eve, Dad took me into our yard. I was five that year and I sat next to Dad and we looked up at the sky, “Pick out your favorite star,” Dad said. He told me I could have one star for keeps. He said it was my Christmas present.
“You can’t give me a star! No one owns the stars.” “That’s right, Betty. No one else owns them. You just have to claim it before anyone else does.”
I looked up to the stars and tried to figure out which was the best one. I could see hundreds, maybe thousands or even millions, hanging in the clear sky(现在分词做伴随动作). There was one in particular, in the west above the mountains but low in the sky, which shone more brightly than all the rest. I pointed and claimed it. Dad smiled, telling me(现在分词做伴随动作) I chose Venus. It looked bigger and brighter because it was much closer than other stars. It reflected the light of the sun. “I like it anyway,” I said. “Alright,” Dad agreed. “It’s Christmas. You can have a planet if you want.”
From then on, Venus got a new name in our family, Betty’s Planet. After Christmas, Dad found another job in the mine and he worked like mad. Gradually, we could make ends meet and there were presents under the Christmas tree and cakes when it was my birthday. But deep down, no present could match Betty’s Planet(重要的伏笔).
Years later, I entered university, majoring in engineering(现在分词做伴随动作), but I stuck to my passion for astronomy in my spare time. In my junior year, I became the first undergraduate ever to discover an asteroid when examining images of thousands of asteroids on my computer, due to which I was given the right to name this asteroid according to the tradition of International Astronomical Union.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:This time, I decided to give Dad a present.
Paragraph 2:Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas.
1. 文章分类及续写思路分析
分类：该读后续写属于科普知识+家庭温情类，主题围绕父女之间的爱与精神传承展开，核心是“无形的礼物比物质更重要”。
构思与布局：
步骤 具体内容
提炼框架 1. 续写方向：女儿用天文发现回报父亲当年的精神礼物。
2. 情感升华：父亲道歉，女儿揭示礼物的真正意义。
段落布局 第一段：女儿命名小行星的细节，体现对父亲的感恩。
第二段：父亲回忆往事，女儿点明“Betty’s Planet”的精神价值。
实施要点 - 紧扣“天文”与“礼物”的呼应。
- 通过对话和心理描写强化情感层次。
续写注意事项：
事项 具体内容
承接原文 - 沿用“Betty’s Planet”和“Venus”的象征。
- 保持父亲乐观、女儿感性的性格。
巧妙设计 - 以小行星命名呼应父亲的“星星礼物”。
- 用父亲道歉制造情感反转。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析
故事山模式：
阶段 原文内容
开端 父亲失业，用“星星礼物”安慰女儿。
发展 女儿爱上天文，大学发现小行星。
高潮 女儿决定将小行星命名为父亲的礼物（续写部分）。
结局 父女和解，揭示礼物的精神价值（续写部分）。
伏笔与冲突：
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
伏笔 女儿对天文的兴趣始于父亲的“星星礼物”。 “But deep down, no present could match Betty’s Planet.”
冲突 物质匮乏与精神富足的对比。 “we had no money at all” vs. “You can have a planet if you want.”
隐含线索 父亲的内疚（续写可揭示）。 无直接描写，但“worked like mad”暗示压力。
解决方案 女儿用天文成就回报父亲，化解其内疚。 续写需通过命名小行星实现。
3. 原文细节分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 父亲：乐观、智慧；女儿：感性、执着。 “Dad smiled, telling me I chose Venus.” / “no present could match...”
情感层次 从贫困的失落→星星的温暖→成长的感恩。 “we had no money” → “It’s my Christmas present.”
关键情节点 父亲送星星→女儿发现小行星。 “Pick out your favorite star” → “discover an asteroid”
语言特色 口语化对话，质朴中蕴含哲理。 “You can’t give me a star! No one owns the stars.”
心理描写 女儿对星星礼物的珍视。 “no present could match Betty’s Planet.”
动作描写 父女仰望星空，女儿指星。 “I pointed and claimed it.”
环境描写 夜空清澈，星光璀璨。 “hanging in the clear sky”
隐含主题 爱与精神传承胜过物质。 全文对比物质匮乏与精神满足。
情感转折 从贫困的悲伤→星星的惊喜→成长的回报。 无直接描写，需续写补充。
续写段落示例（提纲）
Paragraph 1:
动作描写：女儿在电脑前郑重提交小行星命名申请，命名为“Matt’s Promise”。
心理描写：回忆父亲当年的话，决定用科学成就回报他。
关键句：”This time, the stars were my language of love.”
Paragraph 2:
对话衔接：父亲落泪道歉：“I’m sorry I couldn’t give you real gifts.”
主题升华：女儿回应：“You gave me the universe. ‘Betty’s Planet’ was the start of everything.”
环境呼应：结尾父女再次仰望星空，Venus依旧闪耀。
3. 读后续写例句及高级替换词
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
He gently pointed at the shimmering star.（他轻轻指向那颗闪烁的星星。）
She clutched the telescope, her fingers trembling with excitement.（她紧握望远镜，手指因兴奋而颤抖。）
Dad’s eyes glistened with unshed tears.（爸爸的眼中闪烁着未落的泪水。）
She scrolled through the astronomical data, her heart pounding.（她滚动浏览天文数据，心跳加速。）
He wrapped his arms around her in a tight embrace.（他紧紧拥抱住她。）
She traced the constellation with her fingertip.（她用指尖描摹星座的轮廓。）
His voice cracked as he whispered, “I’m so proud of you.”（他的声音哽咽，低声说：“我为你骄傲。”）
She leaned closer to the computer screen, squinting at the tiny dot.（她凑近电脑屏幕，眯眼盯着那个小点。）
Dad ruffled her hair affectionately.（爸爸疼爱地揉了揉她的头发。）
She clenched her fists, determined to prove herself.（她握紧拳头，决心证明自己。）
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
A wave of nostalgia washed over her as she recalled that Christmas.（回忆那个圣诞节时，一阵怀旧之情涌上心头。）
Her chest swelled with pride at her discovery.（她的发现让她心中充满自豪。）
Guilt gnawed at him for years, though he never spoke of it.（多年来，愧疚感一直折磨着他，尽管他从未提及。）
She bit her lip, torn between excitement and nervousness.（她咬着嘴唇，既兴奋又紧张。）
A sense of wonder filled her whenever she gazed at the stars.（每当她凝视星空，一种奇妙的感觉就会充满心间。）
His heart ached at the memory of their poverty.（回忆过去的贫穷，他的心隐隐作痛。）
She hesitated, unsure if her gift would mean anything.（她犹豫了，不确定自己的礼物是否有意义。）
A quiet determination settled in her mind.（她心中悄然下定决心。）
His words lingered in her mind like a comforting melody.（他的话像一首安慰的旋律，萦绕在她脑海。）
She blinked back tears, not wanting to seem sentimental.（她眨回泪水，不想显得多愁善感。）
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The night sky stretched endlessly, dotted with countless stars.（夜空无限延伸，点缀着无数星辰。）
A crisp winter breeze rustled the bare branches.（凛冽的冬风吹动光秃的树枝。）
The faint glow of Venus hung low on the horizon.（金星微弱的光芒低垂在地平线上。）
The computer screen cast a pale blue light in the dim room.（电脑屏幕在昏暗的房间里投下淡蓝色的光。）
Snowflakes drifted lazily from the sky, settling on the ground.（雪花懒洋洋地从天空飘落，覆盖在地面上。）
The mountains stood silent under the starry canopy.（群山在星空下静静矗立。）
The air smelled of pine and frost.（空气中弥漫着松树和霜冻的气息。）
The quiet hum of the computer filled the room.（电脑的轻微嗡鸣声充斥着房间。）
Moonlight spilled through the window, painting silver streaks on the floor.（月光透过窗户洒进来，在地板上留下银色的光痕。）
The distant howl of the wind added to the night’s melancholy.（远处风的呼啸为夜晚增添了一丝忧郁。）
高级替换词（场景分类）
情感类（Emotions）
Happy → Elated（狂喜的）
Sad → Melancholic（忧郁的）
Excited → Thrilled（激动的）
Nervous → Apprehensive（忧虑的）
Proud → Triumphant（胜利的）
动作类（Actions）
Look → Gaze / Peer（凝视 / 窥视）
Say → Whisper / Murmur（低语 / 喃喃）
Hold → Clutch / Grasp（紧握 / 抓住）
Walk → Stride / Trudge（大步走 / 艰难跋涉）
Run → Sprint / Dash（冲刺 / 飞奔）
环境类（Environment）
Dark → Gloomy / Murky（阴暗的 / 朦胧的）
Bright → Radiant / Luminous（灿烂的 / 发光的）
Cold → Frigid / Bitter（严寒的 / 刺骨的）
Quiet → Serene / Hushed（宁静的 / 寂静的）
Noisy → Cacophonous / Boisterous（刺耳的 / 喧闹的）
4. 固定搭配、词法解析及语料积累
固定搭配（Collocations）
Make ends meet（收支平衡）
After Dad found a job, we could finally make ends meet.
Stick to one’s passion（坚持热爱）
She stuck to her passion for astronomy despite challenges.
Deep down（内心深处）
Deep down, she knew no gift could replace Betty’s Planet.
Work like mad（拼命工作）
Dad worked like mad to provide for the family.
Claim something as one’s own（认领某物）
She claimed the star as her Christmas present.
词法解析（Lexical Analysis）
Shimmer (v.)（闪烁）
The stars shimmered in the night sky.
近义词: Glimmer, Sparkle
反义词: Dull, Fade
Nostalgia (n.)（怀旧）
She felt a pang of nostalgia when recalling that Christmas.
近义词: Longing, Reminiscence
反义词: Indifference, Forgetfulness
Determination (n.)（决心）
Her determination led her to discover the asteroid.
近义词: Resolve, Persistence
反义词: Hesitation, Indecision
Reflect (v.)（反射 / 反映）
Venus reflects the light of the sun.
近义词: Mirror, Echo
反义词: Absorb, Conceal
Whisper (v.)（低语）
Dad whispered, “You can have a planet if you want.”
近义词: Murmur, Mutter
反义词: Shout, Yell
可积累的语料（Useful Phrases）
Cast a light on（照亮 / 阐明）
The moon cast a soft light on the snowy ground.
Be given the right to（被授予…的权利）
She was given the right to name the asteroid.
Look up to（仰望 / 尊敬）
She looked up to her dad for his wisdom.
Stick with（坚持）
Despite difficulties, she stuck with her dream.
Owe someone an apology（欠某人一个道歉）
Dad said he owed her an apology for that Christmas.
Possible Versions（4）
Version 1
Paragraph 1: This time, I decided to give Dad a present. A real star, one that could forever carry our memory. Sitting alone in the lab(现在分词做伴随动作), I recalled the Christmas Eve sky and the warmth in his voice. After submitting the asteroid data to the International Astronomical Union, I was told I could name it. Without hesitation, I typed “Matt’s Star.” I imagined his face lighting up, just as mine had(省略句) when I was five. That year, he gave me Venus; now, it was my turn to return the light. I printed the certificate, framed it, and brought it home(动作串并列) during winter break. My hands trembled as I wrapped it up, realizing(现在分词短语做伴随动作)no present under our tree could ever match this moment. It wasn’t about the rock in the sky—it was about the love that once gave me a planet.
Paragraph 2: Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. The life burden pressed on our family, so then and there, all he could give me was the sky. “I felt like I failed you,” he whispered, eyes fixed on the framed name(独立主格). I shook my head, placing a hand on his(现在分词做伴随动作). “You didn’t give me less,” I said, voice firm but a little emotional(独立主格), “You gave me everything—dreams, hobbies, and the stars(名词并列).” His eyes glistened, and he pulled me into a tight hug. The room was silent except for the ticking clock and the crackling fire, but I felt the weight of years melting away. That star, floating in distant space(现在分词短语做后置定语), was now our shared legacy—proof that even in darkness, love can shine(同位语从句). We sat by the window, watching Venus rise again(现在分词短语做伴随动作), just as it had all those years ago.
语言亮点分析
类型 例词 / 短语 升级表达 / 同义替换
情绪描写 my hands trembled; eyes glistened; pulled me into a tight hug voice firm (坚定); warmth in his voice
动作描写 typed “Matt’s Star”; printed the certificate; wrapped it up; watching Venus rise placed a hand on his (细节动作)
搭配短语 carry our memory; light up one’s face; return the light; shared legacy under our tree → 表圣诞背景
高分语法点 without hesitation; just as I had; no present…could ever match…; now that I could 非谓语、倒装、强调、虚拟
词汇升级例句 light up one’s face → bring a gleam to one’s eyes give hope → plant the seed of hope a present → a token of love
Version 2
Paragraph 1: This time, I decided to give Dad a present. It was not just any gift, but something that belonged to both of us. Staring at the blinking cursor, I typed “Betty’s Planet,” the very name Dad had once given to Venus, the night he brought magic to our cold yard. I smiled, remembering his grin(现在分词做伴随动作) as he pointed to the sky, pretending(现在分词做伴随动作) we could claim a planet. But this time, it was real. That night, I called him and asked him to come to campus, without revealing the reason. When he arrived, I handed him a tiny box with the name certificate inside. Watching his eyes move across the letters(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I saw confusion turn to awe, then pride. “You really did it,” he whispered. “We did,” I replied.
Paragraph 2: Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. The financial status then was terrible, all he could give me was a made-up gift, a dream or a white lie(名词并列). “I didn’t know you’d remember it all these years.” “I never forgot,” I smiled. “That night, you gave me the sky when we had nothing.” His hands trembled slightly as he held the certificate tighter. “You turned a pretend planet into a real one,” he murmured, eyes misty(独立主格刻画人物). I nodded, heart full(独立主格). To me, this wasn’t just about science or astronomy. It was about turning love into legacy, and turning a little girl’s memory into a forever star. That night, we stepped outside. The sky looked just as it had years ago, but this time, a small part of it truly belonged to us.
语言亮点分析
类型 内容 升级/替换表达
情绪描写 confusion turn to awe; eyes misty; hands trembled slightly heart full (饱含情感); smiled through tears
动作描写 handed him a tiny box; stared at the blinking cursor typed the name slowly (细节处理)
搭配短语 reveal the reason; hold tighter; belong to us turn memory into a forever star
高分语法点 when all he could give…; not just… but…; as he held…; to me, this wasn’t just about… 强调结构+名词性从句
词汇升级例句 trembled slightly → quivered with emotion remembered it → etched in my memory pride → quiet joy
Version 3
Paragraph 1: This time, I decided to give Dad a present. One that came from the stars, just like the one he once gave me. My heart pounded as I entered “Matt 1995,” combining his name and the year(现在分词做后置定语) he gave me Venus. To me, that was when the stars first became reachable(表语从句). I enclosed the official document in a velvet folder, along with a note: For the man who gave me the sky. Returning home for winter break(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I waited till Christmas Eve. The moment mirrored our past(无灵主语句)—I led him to the yard, handed him the folder, and looked up(动作串). The cold wind carried whispers of the past, as starlight danced on our faces.This time, he was the one speechless(adj做补语).
Paragraph 2: Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. He had always regretted not being able to buy me a real gift. “But I didn’t realize that moment meant so much to you.” “It did,” I said, “and it always will.” He unfolded the certificate again, then looked up at the stars. “Matt 1995,” he murmured, voice cracking(独立主格刻画人物情绪). “That’s mine.” “It always was,” I nodded. The cold breeze wrapped around us, but our silence was warm. We stood in the yard like we had years ago, side by side, hearts full(独立主格刻画人物心理). Though time had passed, the stars remained. And in one of them, a daughter’s love quietly shone.
语言亮点分析
类型 内容 高阶表达替换
情绪描写 heart pounded; voice cracking; he was speechless hearts full; silence was warm
动作描写 led him to the yard; enclosed the document; looked up at the stars waited till Christmas Eve（时间暗示+悬念）
搭配短语 mirrored our past; came from the stars; stood side by side wrapped in silence; burned quietly（暗喻感情）
高分语法点 the man who gave me the sky; that’s me / it always was; though time had passed… 定语从句、倒装、让步状语
词汇升级例句 realized → came to understand meant so much → left an imprint voice cracking → his words caught in his throat
【官方答案】
This time, I decided to give Dad a present. I named the asteroid “Matt’s Star” to honor him. When I told Dad about it on the phone, he fell silent for a while. Then he said, “Betty, that’s the best gift I’ve ever received.” I explained that the asteroid was small but special, just like the star he gave me years ago(金星很小吗？). I also told him that whenever he looked up at the sky, he could think of it as a symbol of our love, which would never fade.
Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. “I was so poor then that I couldn’t give you a real present,” he said with a sigh. I told him that Betty’s Planet was the most precious gift because it taught me to find joy in simple things. I added that if there was no that Christmas, I might not have developed a love for astronomy(虚拟语气), which led me to discover the asteroid. Dad laughed and said he was proud of me, and from that day on, we often talked about “our stars” on the phone.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My Dad, Matt, lost his job and when Christmas came, we had no money at all. On Christmas Eve, Dad took me into our yard. I was five that year and I sat next to Dad and we looked up at the sky, “Pick out your favorite star,” Dad said. He told me I could have one star for keeps. He said it was my Christmas present.
“You can’t give me a star! No one owns the stars.” “That’s right, Betty. No one else owns them. You just have to claim it before anyone else does.”
I looked up to the stars and tried to figure out which was the best one. I could see hundreds, maybe thousands or even millions, hanging in the clear sky. There was one in particular, in the west above the mountains but low in the sky, which shone more brightly than all the rest. I pointed and claimed it. Dad smiled, telling me I chose Venus. It looked bigger and brighter because it was much closer than other stars. It reflected the light of the sun. “I like it anyway,” I said. “Alright,” Dad agreed. “It’s Christmas. You can have a planet if you want.”
From then on, Venus got a new name in our family, Betty’s Planet. After Christmas, Dad found another job in the mine and he worked like mad. Gradually, we could make ends meet and there were presents under the Christmas tree and cakes when it was my birthday. But deep down, no present could match Betty’s Planet.
Years later, I entered university, majoring in engineering, but I stuck to my passion for astronomy in my spare time. In my junior year, I became the first undergraduate ever to discover an asteroid (小行星) when examining images of thousands of asteroids on my computer, due to which I was given the right to name this asteroid according to the tradition of International Astronomical Union.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:This time, I decided to give Dad a present.
Paragraph 2:Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas.
山东省济南市2024-2025学年高二下学期期末检测英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My Dad, Matt, lost his job and when Christmas came, we had no money at all. On Christmas Eve, Dad took me into our yard. I was five that year and I sat next to Dad and we looked up at the sky, “Pick out your favorite star,” Dad said. He told me I could have one star for keeps. He said it was my Christmas present.
“You can’t give me a star! No one owns the stars.” “That’s right, Betty. No one else owns them. You just have to claim it before anyone else does.”
I looked up to the stars and tried to figure out which was the best one. I could see hundreds, maybe thousands or even millions, hanging in the clear sky(现在分词做伴随动作). There was one in particular, in the west above the mountains but low in the sky, which shone more brightly than all the rest. I pointed and claimed it. Dad smiled, telling me(现在分词做伴随动作) I chose Venus. It looked bigger and brighter because it was much closer than other stars. It reflected the light of the sun. “I like it anyway,” I said. “Alright,” Dad agreed. “It’s Christmas. You can have a planet if you want.”
From then on, Venus got a new name in our family, Betty’s Planet. After Christmas, Dad found another job in the mine and he worked like mad. Gradually, we could make ends meet and there were presents under the Christmas tree and cakes when it was my birthday. But deep down, no present could match Betty’s Planet(重要的伏笔).
Years later, I entered university, majoring in engineering(现在分词做伴随动作), but I stuck to my passion for astronomy in my spare time. In my junior year, I became the first undergraduate ever to discover an asteroid when examining images of thousands of asteroids on my computer, due to which I was given the right to name this asteroid according to the tradition of International Astronomical Union.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:This time, I decided to give Dad a present.
Paragraph 2:Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas.
1. 文章分类及续写思路分析
分类：该读后续写属于科普知识+家庭温情类，主题围绕父女之间的爱与精神传承展开，核心是“无形的礼物比物质更重要”。
构思与布局：
步骤 具体内容
提炼框架 1. 续写方向：女儿用天文发现回报父亲当年的精神礼物。
2. 情感升华：父亲道歉，女儿揭示礼物的真正意义。
段落布局 第一段：女儿命名小行星的细节，体现对父亲的感恩。
第二段：父亲回忆往事，女儿点明“Betty’s Planet”的精神价值。
实施要点 - 紧扣“天文”与“礼物”的呼应。
- 通过对话和心理描写强化情感层次。
续写注意事项：
事项 具体内容
承接原文 - 沿用“Betty’s Planet”和“Venus”的象征。
- 保持父亲乐观、女儿感性的性格。
巧妙设计 - 以小行星命名呼应父亲的“星星礼物”。
- 用父亲道歉制造情感反转。
2. 故事山模式与原文分析
故事山模式：
阶段 原文内容
开端 父亲失业，用“星星礼物”安慰女儿。
发展 女儿爱上天文，大学发现小行星。
高潮 女儿决定将小行星命名为父亲的礼物（续写部分）。
结局 父女和解，揭示礼物的精神价值（续写部分）。
伏笔与冲突：
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
伏笔 女儿对天文的兴趣始于父亲的“星星礼物”。 “But deep down, no present could match Betty’s Planet.”
冲突 物质匮乏与精神富足的对比。 “we had no money at all” vs. “You can have a planet if you want.”
隐含线索 父亲的内疚（续写可揭示）。 无直接描写，但“worked like mad”暗示压力。
解决方案 女儿用天文成就回报父亲，化解其内疚。 续写需通过命名小行星实现。
3. 原文细节分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 父亲：乐观、智慧；女儿：感性、执着。 “Dad smiled, telling me I chose Venus.” / “no present could match...”
情感层次 从贫困的失落→星星的温暖→成长的感恩。 “we had no money” → “It’s my Christmas present.”
关键情节点 父亲送星星→女儿发现小行星。 “Pick out your favorite star” → “discover an asteroid”
语言特色 口语化对话，质朴中蕴含哲理。 “You can’t give me a star! No one owns the stars.”
心理描写 女儿对星星礼物的珍视。 “no present could match Betty’s Planet.”
动作描写 父女仰望星空，女儿指星。 “I pointed and claimed it.”
环境描写 夜空清澈，星光璀璨。 “hanging in the clear sky”
隐含主题 爱与精神传承胜过物质。 全文对比物质匮乏与精神满足。
情感转折 从贫困的悲伤→星星的惊喜→成长的回报。 无直接描写，需续写补充。
续写段落示例（提纲）
Paragraph 1:
动作描写：女儿在电脑前郑重提交小行星命名申请，命名为“Matt’s Promise”。
心理描写：回忆父亲当年的话，决定用科学成就回报他。
关键句：”This time, the stars were my language of love.”
Paragraph 2:
对话衔接：父亲落泪道歉：“I’m sorry I couldn’t give you real gifts.”
主题升华：女儿回应：“You gave me the universe. ‘Betty’s Planet’ was the start of everything.”
环境呼应：结尾父女再次仰望星空，Venus依旧闪耀。
3. 读后续写例句及高级替换词
动作描写（Action Descriptions）
He gently pointed at the shimmering star.（他轻轻指向那颗闪烁的星星。）
She clutched the telescope, her fingers trembling with excitement.（她紧握望远镜，手指因兴奋而颤抖。）
Dad’s eyes glistened with unshed tears.（爸爸的眼中闪烁着未落的泪水。）
She scrolled through the astronomical data, her heart pounding.（她滚动浏览天文数据，心跳加速。）
He wrapped his arms around her in a tight embrace.（他紧紧拥抱住她。）
She traced the constellation with her fingertip.（她用指尖描摹星座的轮廓。）
His voice cracked as he whispered, “I’m so proud of you.”（他的声音哽咽，低声说：“我为你骄傲。”）
She leaned closer to the computer screen, squinting at the tiny dot.（她凑近电脑屏幕，眯眼盯着那个小点。）
Dad ruffled her hair affectionately.（爸爸疼爱地揉了揉她的头发。）
She clenched her fists, determined to prove herself.（她握紧拳头，决心证明自己。）
心理描写（Psychological Descriptions）
A wave of nostalgia washed over her as she recalled that Christmas.（回忆那个圣诞节时，一阵怀旧之情涌上心头。）
Her chest swelled with pride at her discovery.（她的发现让她心中充满自豪。）
Guilt gnawed at him for years, though he never spoke of it.（多年来，愧疚感一直折磨着他，尽管他从未提及。）
She bit her lip, torn between excitement and nervousness.（她咬着嘴唇，既兴奋又紧张。）
A sense of wonder filled her whenever she gazed at the stars.（每当她凝视星空，一种奇妙的感觉就会充满心间。）
His heart ached at the memory of their poverty.（回忆过去的贫穷，他的心隐隐作痛。）
She hesitated, unsure if her gift would mean anything.（她犹豫了，不确定自己的礼物是否有意义。）
A quiet determination settled in her mind.（她心中悄然下定决心。）
His words lingered in her mind like a comforting melody.（他的话像一首安慰的旋律，萦绕在她脑海。）
She blinked back tears, not wanting to seem sentimental.（她眨回泪水，不想显得多愁善感。）
环境描写（Environmental Descriptions）
The night sky stretched endlessly, dotted with countless stars.（夜空无限延伸，点缀着无数星辰。）
A crisp winter breeze rustled the bare branches.（凛冽的冬风吹动光秃的树枝。）
The faint glow of Venus hung low on the horizon.（金星微弱的光芒低垂在地平线上。）
The computer screen cast a pale blue light in the dim room.（电脑屏幕在昏暗的房间里投下淡蓝色的光。）
Snowflakes drifted lazily from the sky, settling on the ground.（雪花懒洋洋地从天空飘落，覆盖在地面上。）
The mountains stood silent under the starry canopy.（群山在星空下静静矗立。）
The air smelled of pine and frost.（空气中弥漫着松树和霜冻的气息。）
The quiet hum of the computer filled the room.（电脑的轻微嗡鸣声充斥着房间。）
Moonlight spilled through the window, painting silver streaks on the floor.（月光透过窗户洒进来，在地板上留下银色的光痕。）
The distant howl of the wind added to the night’s melancholy.（远处风的呼啸为夜晚增添了一丝忧郁。）
高级替换词（场景分类）
情感类（Emotions）
Happy → Elated（狂喜的）
Sad → Melancholic（忧郁的）
Excited → Thrilled（激动的）
Nervous → Apprehensive（忧虑的）
Proud → Triumphant（胜利的）
动作类（Actions）
Look → Gaze / Peer（凝视 / 窥视）
Say → Whisper / Murmur（低语 / 喃喃）
Hold → Clutch / Grasp（紧握 / 抓住）
Walk → Stride / Trudge（大步走 / 艰难跋涉）
Run → Sprint / Dash（冲刺 / 飞奔）
环境类（Environment）
Dark → Gloomy / Murky（阴暗的 / 朦胧的）
Bright → Radiant / Luminous（灿烂的 / 发光的）
Cold → Frigid / Bitter（严寒的 / 刺骨的）
Quiet → Serene / Hushed（宁静的 / 寂静的）
Noisy → Cacophonous / Boisterous（刺耳的 / 喧闹的）
4. 固定搭配、词法解析及语料积累
固定搭配（Collocations）
Make ends meet（收支平衡）
After Dad found a job, we could finally make ends meet.
Stick to one’s passion（坚持热爱）
She stuck to her passion for astronomy despite challenges.
Deep down（内心深处）
Deep down, she knew no gift could replace Betty’s Planet.
Work like mad（拼命工作）
Dad worked like mad to provide for the family.
Claim something as one’s own（认领某物）
She claimed the star as her Christmas present.
词法解析（Lexical Analysis）
Shimmer (v.)（闪烁）
The stars shimmered in the night sky.
近义词: Glimmer, Sparkle
反义词: Dull, Fade
Nostalgia (n.)（怀旧）
She felt a pang of nostalgia when recalling that Christmas.
近义词: Longing, Reminiscence
反义词: Indifference, Forgetfulness
Determination (n.)（决心）
Her determination led her to discover the asteroid.
近义词: Resolve, Persistence
反义词: Hesitation, Indecision
Reflect (v.)（反射 / 反映）
Venus reflects the light of the sun.
近义词: Mirror, Echo
反义词: Absorb, Conceal
Whisper (v.)（低语）
Dad whispered, “You can have a planet if you want.”
近义词: Murmur, Mutter
反义词: Shout, Yell
可积累的语料（Useful Phrases）
Cast a light on（照亮 / 阐明）
The moon cast a soft light on the snowy ground.
Be given the right to（被授予…的权利）
She was given the right to name the asteroid.
Look up to（仰望 / 尊敬）
She looked up to her dad for his wisdom.
Stick with（坚持）
Despite difficulties, she stuck with her dream.
Owe someone an apology（欠某人一个道歉）
Dad said he owed her an apology for that Christmas.
Possible Versions（4）
Version 1
Paragraph 1: This time, I decided to give Dad a present. A real star, one that could forever carry our memory. Sitting alone in the lab(现在分词做伴随动作), I recalled the Christmas Eve sky and the warmth in his voice. After submitting the asteroid data to the International Astronomical Union, I was told I could name it. Without hesitation, I typed “Matt’s Star.” I imagined his face lighting up, just as mine had(省略句) when I was five. That year, he gave me Venus; now, it was my turn to return the light. I printed the certificate, framed it, and brought it home(动作串并列) during winter break. My hands trembled as I wrapped it up, realizing(现在分词短语做伴随动作)no present under our tree could ever match this moment. It wasn’t about the rock in the sky—it was about the love that once gave me a planet.
Paragraph 2: Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. The life burden pressed on our family, so then and there, all he could give me was the sky. “I felt like I failed you,” he whispered, eyes fixed on the framed name(独立主格). I shook my head, placing a hand on his(现在分词做伴随动作). “You didn’t give me less,” I said, voice firm but a little emotional(独立主格), “You gave me everything—dreams, hobbies, and the stars(名词并列).” His eyes glistened, and he pulled me into a tight hug. The room was silent except for the ticking clock and the crackling fire, but I felt the weight of years melting away. That star, floating in distant space(现在分词短语做后置定语), was now our shared legacy—proof that even in darkness, love can shine(同位语从句). We sat by the window, watching Venus rise again(现在分词短语做伴随动作), just as it had all those years ago.
语言亮点分析
类型 例词 / 短语 升级表达 / 同义替换
情绪描写 my hands trembled; eyes glistened; pulled me into a tight hug voice firm (坚定); warmth in his voice
动作描写 typed “Matt’s Star”; printed the certificate; wrapped it up; watching Venus rise placed a hand on his (细节动作)
搭配短语 carry our memory; light up one’s face; return the light; shared legacy under our tree → 表圣诞背景
高分语法点 without hesitation; just as I had; no present…could ever match…; now that I could 非谓语、倒装、强调、虚拟
词汇升级例句 light up one’s face → bring a gleam to one’s eyes give hope → plant the seed of hope a present → a token of love
Version 2
Paragraph 1: This time, I decided to give Dad a present. It was not just any gift, but something that belonged to both of us. Staring at the blinking cursor, I typed “Betty’s Planet,” the very name Dad had once given to Venus, the night he brought magic to our cold yard. I smiled, remembering his grin(现在分词做伴随动作) as he pointed to the sky, pretending(现在分词做伴随动作) we could claim a planet. But this time, it was real. That night, I called him and asked him to come to campus, without revealing the reason. When he arrived, I handed him a tiny box with the name certificate inside. Watching his eyes move across the letters(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I saw confusion turn to awe, then pride. “You really did it,” he whispered. “We did,” I replied.
Paragraph 2: Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. The financial status then was terrible, all he could give me was a made-up gift, a dream or a white lie(名词并列). “I didn’t know you’d remember it all these years.” “I never forgot,” I smiled. “That night, you gave me the sky when we had nothing.” His hands trembled slightly as he held the certificate tighter. “You turned a pretend planet into a real one,” he murmured, eyes misty(独立主格刻画人物). I nodded, heart full(独立主格). To me, this wasn’t just about science or astronomy. It was about turning love into legacy, and turning a little girl’s memory into a forever star. That night, we stepped outside. The sky looked just as it had years ago, but this time, a small part of it truly belonged to us.
语言亮点分析
类型 内容 升级/替换表达
情绪描写 confusion turn to awe; eyes misty; hands trembled slightly heart full (饱含情感); smiled through tears
动作描写 handed him a tiny box; stared at the blinking cursor typed the name slowly (细节处理)
搭配短语 reveal the reason; hold tighter; belong to us turn memory into a forever star
高分语法点 when all he could give…; not just… but…; as he held…; to me, this wasn’t just about… 强调结构+名词性从句
词汇升级例句 trembled slightly → quivered with emotion remembered it → etched in my memory pride → quiet joy
Version 3
Paragraph 1: This time, I decided to give Dad a present. One that came from the stars, just like the one he once gave me. My heart pounded as I entered “Matt 1995,” combining his name and the year(现在分词做后置定语) he gave me Venus. To me, that was when the stars first became reachable(表语从句). I enclosed the official document in a velvet folder, along with a note: For the man who gave me the sky. Returning home for winter break(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I waited till Christmas Eve. The moment mirrored our past(无灵主语句)—I led him to the yard, handed him the folder, and looked up(动作串). The cold wind carried whispers of the past, as starlight danced on our faces.This time, he was the one speechless(adj做补语).
Paragraph 2: Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. He had always regretted not being able to buy me a real gift. “But I didn’t realize that moment meant so much to you.” “It did,” I said, “and it always will.” He unfolded the certificate again, then looked up at the stars. “Matt 1995,” he murmured, voice cracking(独立主格刻画人物情绪). “That’s mine.” “It always was,” I nodded. The cold breeze wrapped around us, but our silence was warm. We stood in the yard like we had years ago, side by side, hearts full(独立主格刻画人物心理). Though time had passed, the stars remained. And in one of them, a daughter’s love quietly shone.
语言亮点分析
类型 内容 高阶表达替换
情绪描写 heart pounded; voice cracking; he was speechless hearts full; silence was warm
动作描写 led him to the yard; enclosed the document; looked up at the stars waited till Christmas Eve（时间暗示+悬念）
搭配短语 mirrored our past; came from the stars; stood side by side wrapped in silence; burned quietly（暗喻感情）
高分语法点 the man who gave me the sky; that’s me / it always was; though time had passed… 定语从句、倒装、让步状语
词汇升级例句 realized → came to understand meant so much → left an imprint voice cracking → his words caught in his throat
【官方答案】
This time, I decided to give Dad a present. I named the asteroid “Matt’s Star” to honor him. When I told Dad about it on the phone, he fell silent for a while. Then he said, “Betty, that’s the best gift I’ve ever received.” I explained that the asteroid was small but special, just like the star he gave me years ago(金星很小吗？). I also told him that whenever he looked up at the sky, he could think of it as a symbol of our love, which would never fade.
Dad said he owed me an apology for that Christmas. “I was so poor then that I couldn’t give you a real present,” he said with a sigh. I told him that Betty’s Planet was the most precious gift because it taught me to find joy in simple things. I added that if there was no that Christmas, I might not have developed a love for astronomy(虚拟语气), which led me to discover the asteroid. Dad laughed and said he was proud of me, and from that day on, we often talked about “our stars” on the phone.