新外研版八上英语U1作文指导
第1阶 高分词句储备
一、话题词汇
1. 尽管 ______
2. 差别 ______
3. 能力 ______
4. 讨厌 ______
5. 坚持 ______
6. 代替;而不是 ______
二、佳句仿写
7. 【教材原句】I suppose everyone has something they don’t like about themselves. (I suppose...)
→我认为我会变得越来越好。
8. 【教材原句】Instead of looking away, Maddie studied my face. (instead of...)
→我在空闲时候做家务而不是玩游戏。
9. 【教材原句】I have already learnt that I am what I am. (现在完成时)
→这段经历把他变成了一个勇敢的男孩。
10. 【教材原句】In fact, I’m not good at basketball at all. (be good at...)
→我擅长打乒乓球。
第2阶 经典范文模版
How I have changed!
How time flies! I am a student in Grade 9(介绍年级)now. I have changed a lot in the last two years.(总述变化很大)
First, I used to be short and thin, but now I’m tall and strong.(对比过去与现在)Second, I used to watch too much TV(介绍过去喜欢做什么). Now I like doing sports(介绍现在喜欢做什么). Third, I wasn’t so interested in studying two years ago. When my head teacher learnt about that, she helped me patiently.(改变的原因)I began to study very hard. Now I have a good habit that I will go over my homework one more time when I finish it.(发生的变化)Last but not least, I was too weak to do much exercise two years ago(介绍过去). But with the help of the teachers and classmates, I can run very fast and I’m also good at playing basketball.(介绍现状)
第3阶 高分范文赏析
常常回望过去能使得我们更清晰地认识到自身的不足,总结现在的积极变化能让我们更好地往前走。在八年级开始之际,你所在的班级将举行一次主题班会,要求同学们谈谈过去一年来自己的收获与变化,请为Simon准备一份英语演讲稿,要点如下:
| 学习 | 过去 | 现在 |
| | 做作业不细心 | 更认真听讲,对课程越来越喜欢了 |
| 业余生活 | 玩游戏,不做家务 | 参加志愿(volunteer)活动,因为…… |
| 家庭关系 | 与父母吵闹 | 和睦相处,家人间有礼貌…… |
| 展望未来 | 相信自己在八年级会…… | |
要求:
1. 作文应包括所给要点,可适当发挥;
2. 词数80左右(开头已给出,但不计入总词数)。
Hello, everyone. I’m Simon. In the past one year, I suppose I have changed a lot and achieved a lot in some ways.
第一步 审
体裁:记叙文
时态:以一般现在时和一般过去时为主
人称:以第一人称为主
内容要点:根据所给信息介绍自己的变化
写作框架:总—分—总
第二步 列
开头: 开门见山,引出主题
In the past one year, I suppose...
中间: 介绍自己的变化等
I used to.../But now I...
结尾: 展望未来
I think I will get better and better in Grade Eight.
高分范文
Hello, everyone. I'm Simon. In the past one year, I suppose I have changed a lot and achieved a lot in some ways.①
I used to do my homework carelessly.② But now I listen more carefully and enjoy the lessons more and more. I used to play games in my spare time instead of doing housework. But now I do volunteer activities and do housework, because I can learn a lot of life knowledge.③ I used to argue with my parents. Now I get along well with them and my family members are polite.
I think I will get better and better in Grade Eight.④
名师点评
①文章开头直接点题,用“In the past one year, I suppose I have changed a lot...”总述自己变化很大,这是一个很好的开头方式。
②用 used to do sth 描述过去常常做的事。
③用 because 引导原因状语从句,阐述参加志愿者活动和做家务的原因。
④I think 后加宾语从句,展望未来。
本文介绍自己的变化,使用了 used to do, instead of, get along well with 等短语,使得句子结构丰富多样,避免了重复。
第4阶 实战演练
成长的道路上,我们努力改变以提升自我。假如你是李华,你校英语广播站正在开展主题为“The Change Made Me...”(改变让我……)的征文活动。请参考图文信息,积极投稿。
要求:
1. 补全标题;
2. 内容积极向上,不少于80词;
3. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名。
The Change Made Me ______ (Better/Improve/...)
- change
weak strong
careless careful
...
- story
What happened
Who was in the story
...
- feelings
It made me...
I got to know...
...
范文
The Change Made Me Better
I have changed a lot this year. I used to be a careless boy. I often made mistakes in homework and exams.
One day, I failed a math test. My teacher said to me, "You can do better if you are more careful." Her words made me think a lot.
After that, I started to change. I began to check my answers carefully. I listened to the teacher more in class. I also asked questions when I didn't understand.
Now, I make fewer mistakes. My grades are getting better. This change made me a better student. I'm very happy about it.