2025 届青岛市高三第一次诊断考试
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Johnny, a 17-year-old from Whitehorse, had been competing in Cross-Country Skiing for five years. For many young athletes like him in Whitehorse, Yukon, the Yukon Cross-Country Ski Championships were more than just a competition. It was their dream. A year ago, Johnny qualified for the Championships and successfully won a medal.
After the competition, Johnny was eager to share his experience with Hayden, his teammate and best friend. Hayden had narrowly missed qualifying for the Championships. Johnny had watched his friend train tirelessly, push himself to the limit, and always keep his big smile. Johnny knew how much the Championships meant to Hayden.
Johnny handed Hayden some colorful pins. “These are pins I traded with athletes from all over Yukon,” Johnny said with a smile, “I want you to have them, so you can feel a part of the event too.”
Hayden was touched, “Thanks, Johnny. This means a lot.”
“Next time,” Johnny continued, “I hope you can also experience the event. I know you’ll make it.”
Hayden nodded, “I’ll work even harder for that.”
This year’s Yukon Cross-Country Ski Championships would be held in a month. Coach Nick guided the team through daily tough training and the team made significant progress in their skating, cornering, and downhill techniques. Meanwhile, they enhanced their endurance and balance. Both Johnny and Hayden met the Championship standards. Given Johnny’s rich competitive experience. Coach Nick once again qualified Johnny for this year’s event and Hayden was selected as an alternate (替补).
The qualification for the competition excited Johnny, but there was always an idea staying in his mind. Johnny knew his friend had been wanting to go to the Championships for several years. This was the last chance for both of them to attend the Championships, as they would age out of the competition after this year. The thought became clear in his mind, strong and steady.
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The next day, Johnny went to see the coach.
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Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships.
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【原文翻译】
17 岁的约翰尼来自怀特霍斯，已经参加越野滑雪比赛五年了。对于育空地区怀特霍斯的许多像他一样的年轻运动员来说，育空越野滑雪锦标赛不仅仅是一场比赛，更是他们的梦想。一年前，约翰尼成功晋级锦标赛并赢得了一枚奖牌。
比赛结束后，约翰尼迫不及待地想和队友兼最好的朋友海登分享自己的经历。海登当年以微弱差距未能获得锦标赛参赛资格。约翰尼亲眼目睹了好友不知疲倦地训练，一次次挑战自己的极限，却始终挂着灿烂的笑容。他深知这场锦标赛对海登意味着什么。
约翰尼递给海登几枚色彩鲜艳的徽章。“这些是我和育空各地的运动员交换来的，” 约翰尼笑着说，“我想把它们送给你，这样你也能感受到自己是这场赛事的一份子。”
海登深受感动：“谢谢你，约翰尼。这对我意义重大。”
“下次，” 约翰尼继续说道，“我希望你也能亲身体验这场赛事。我知道你一定能做到。”
海登点点头：“我会更加努力的。”
今年的育空越野滑雪锦标赛将于一个月后举行。尼克教练带领团队进行了日常高强度训练，队员们在滑行、过弯和下坡技巧上取得了显著进步，耐力和平衡能力也得到了提升。约翰尼和海登都达到了锦标赛的参赛标准。考虑到约翰尼丰富的比赛经验，尼克教练再次给予他今年赛事的正选资格，而海登则被选为替补。
获得参赛资格让约翰尼欣喜不已，但一个想法却始终萦绕在他心头。约翰尼知道，好友多年来一直渴望参加这场锦标赛。今年是他们两人最后的参赛机会 —— 赛后，他们就会因超龄而无法再参加这项赛事了。这个想法在他心中逐渐清晰、坚定起来。
【写作训练步骤】
一、通读全文，深度解读
1. 读情节
开端：17 岁的 Johnny 来自怀特霍斯，有 5 年越野滑雪参赛经验，去年曾晋级育空地区越野滑雪锦标赛并获奖；好友兼队友 Hayden 因微小差距未能晋级，Johnny 将与其他运动员交换的徽章赠予 Hayden，鼓励他未来参赛。
发展：今年锦标赛倒计时 1 个月，在 Nick 教练的指导下，Johnny 和 Hayden 通过高强度训练，滑雪技巧（滑行、过弯、下坡）、耐力与平衡能力均大幅提升，双双达到参赛标准；最终 Johnny 凭借丰富经验获正选资格，Hayden 成为替补。
转折：Johnny 深知 Hayden 多年渴望参赛，且今年是两人最后一次机会（赛后将超龄），内心萌生 “让好友圆梦” 的想法，决心采取行动。
续写开端：描写 Johnny 找到教练，提出让贤想法的过程、教练的反应（惊讶→理解→支持）。
续写结局：描写 Hayden 接受参赛机会后的备战状态、比赛中的表现，以及两人赛后的互动，升华 “无私友情与梦想传承” 的主题。
2. 读人物
Johnny：越野滑雪经验丰富（5 年参赛史 + 去年获奖），重情重义（主动鼓励未晋级的 Hayden），无私大度（愿放弃正选资格圆好友最后梦想），有担当（直面抉择并向教练沟通）。
Hayden：训练刻苦（“tirelessly”“push himself to the limit”），性格乐观（始终保持 “big smile”），对锦标赛执念深（多年渴望 + 最后机会），懂得感恩（珍惜 Johnny 的徽章与让贤机会）。
Coach Nick：专业负责（指导日常高强度训练），公正客观（按经验与实力定正选 / 替补），通情达理（理解 Johnny 的善意并支持决定），是推动情节发展的关键配角。
3. 读时态
全文以一般过去时为主。
4. 读冲突
外在冲突：Hayden “多年渴望参赛” 与 “替补身份” 的矛盾；Johnny “自身参赛资格” 与 “好友最后圆梦机会” 的选择冲突。
内在冲突：Johnny 的 “个人参赛意愿” 与 “对好友的情谊” 的心理挣扎；Hayden “替补的失落” 与 “对正选资格的向往” 的内心矛盾。
5. 读情绪发展
Johnny：自豪（去年获奖）→ 关切（鼓励未晋级的 Hayden）→ 兴奋（今年获正选）→ 纠结（萌生让贤想法）→（续写发展：坚定，向教练提出请求）→（续写结局：欣慰，见证好友圆梦）Hayden：失落（去年未晋级）→ 感动（收到 Johnny 的徽章）→ 努力（今年刻苦训练）→ 遗憾（成为替补）→（续写发展：惊喜，获参赛机会）→（续写结局：激动，珍惜比赛并感恩好友）Coach Nick：严谨（指导训练）→ 公正（确定参赛名单）→（续写发展：惊讶→理解→支持，认可 Johnny 的决定）
6. 读主题
无私友情的价值（Johnny 放弃个人机会，成就好友梦想）
梦想的传承与守护（将 “参赛机会” 转化为对好友多年执念的回应）
青春的遗憾与圆满（用 “让贤” 弥补好友的遗憾，成就两人共同的圆满）
二、【十句五定法】—— 搭建你的写作框架
请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。
段落 句子功能 你的句子构思
第一段 1. 接续 Hint1 描写 Johnny 找教练的场景（如 “训练结束后，Johnny 攥着滑雪杖，犹豫片刻后走向教练的办公室”），体现他的坚定与些许紧张。
2. 动作 / 心理推进 刻画 Johnny 向教练说明来意的细节（如 “低头搓了搓手套，轻声说出‘想把正选资格让给 Hayden’”），及教练的第一反应（如 “放下手中的训练计划，挑眉表示惊讶”）。
3. 有效过渡 描写 Johnny 解释让贤的理由（如 “强调这是 Hayden 最后一次机会，且好友比自己更需要这个舞台”），展现其无私的初衷。
4. 有效衔接 描述教练的态度转变（如 “沉默片刻后，拍了拍 Johnny 的肩膀，认可他的情谊与担当”），并达成共识（如 “同意调整参赛名单”）。
5. 段落收束 以 Johnny 离开办公室的心情（如 “脚步轻快，期待 Hayden 的反应”）收尾，为第二段 “Hayden 接受机会” 铺垫。
第二段 6. 接续 Hint2 描写 Hayden 得知消息的反应（如 “接过教练递来的参赛确认表，双手微颤，反复确认名字”），体现其惊喜与不敢置信。
7. 情节发展 描写 Hayden 的备战状态（如 “每天提前 1 小时到场练习过弯，Johnny 在旁指导下坡技巧”），展现两人的互助与默契。
8. 主题升华 通过比赛中的关键瞬间（如 “Hayden 在最后一个弯道想起 Johnny 的鼓励，奋力冲刺”）或赛后对话，点明 “友情比输赢更重要”。
9. 结局呈现 描写比赛结果（如 “Hayden 获季军，举着奖牌冲向 Johnny”），及两人的互动（如 “拥抱庆祝，Johnny 为好友骄傲”）。
10. 富有余韵的结尾 10. 主题升华 用象征或场景定格收尾（如 “夕阳下，两人并肩走在雪道上，滑雪杖的影子交叠，像多年未变的友情”），回扣主题。
三、【微写作训练】—— 打磨你的语言
1. 人物心理描写
纠结 / 坚定（Johnny 决定让贤时）：A mix of hesitation and determination filled Johnny’s mind—he’d dreamed of defending his medal, but Hayden’s tired yet hopeful smile during training kept popping up.（Johnny 心中交织着犹豫与坚定 —— 他本想卫冕奖牌，但训练时 Hayden 疲惫却充满希望的笑容总在眼前浮现。）
惊喜 / 不敢置信（Hayden 获机会时）：Shock washed over Hayden as he read his name on the list, his fingers brushing the paper repeatedly as if to confirm it wasn’t a dream.（看到名单上自己的名字，Hayden 满是震惊，手指反复拂过纸张，仿佛要确认这不是梦。）
欣慰 / 骄傲（Johnny 见证好友获奖时）：A warm sense of pride swelled in Johnny’s chest as he watched Hayden stand on the podium—this medal meant more than any he’d ever won.（看着 Hayden 站在领奖台上，Johnny 心中涌起温暖的自豪感 —— 这枚奖牌比他自己获得的任何一枚都更有意义。）
2. 情感描写
友情的无私：Johnny’s decision to give up his spot wasn’t just a favor—it was a silent promise to guard his friend’s long-held dream, even at the cost of his own.（Johnny 放弃资格的决定不只是帮忙，更是守护好友多年梦想的无声承诺，即便要以自己的机会为代价。）
梦想实现的激动：Tears of joy glistened in Hayden’s eyes as he held the medal, knowing it was the result of his years of training and Johnny’s selfless kindness.（Hayden 握着奖牌，喜悦的泪水在眼眶闪烁，他知道这是自己多年训练与 Johnny 无私善意共同的结果。）
遗憾的弥补与圆满：The championship, once a regret for Hayden, had now become a memory of 圆满（fulfillment）—all because of a friend who cared more about his happiness than his own glory.（曾经是 Hayden 遗憾的锦标赛，如今变成了圆满的回忆 —— 这一切都源于一个更在乎他的快乐而非自身荣耀的朋友。）
3. 动作描写
滑雪训练（Johnny/Hayden）：Johnny glided down the snow-covered trail, his body leaning slightly to navigate the corner; Hayden followed closely, adjusting his posture to improve balance, his poles pushing against the snow with steady force.（Johnny 滑过积雪的赛道，身体微倾过弯；Hayden 紧紧跟随，调整姿势以提升平衡，雪杖用力撑向雪地。）
沟通让贤（Johnny 与教练）：Johnny gripped his ski poles tightly, his knuckles white, as he said, “Coach, I want to give my spot to Hayden.” He paused, then added, “It’s his last chance.”（Johnny 紧紧攥着滑雪杖，指节发白，说道：“教练，我想把我的名额让给 Hayden。” 他顿了顿，又补充：“这是他最后一次机会了。”）
赛后互动（两人）：Hayden ran across the snow, the medal bouncing against his chest, and threw his arms around Johnny. Johnny patted his back, laughing as Hayden mumbled, “Thank you—this is for both of us.”（Hayden 跑过雪地，奖牌在胸前晃动，一把抱住 Johnny。Johnny 拍着他的背，笑着听 Hayden 嘟囔：“谢谢你 —— 这是我们两个人的。”）
4. 环境象征描写
滑雪场→梦想的舞台：The snow-covered trails of the championship venue, once a distant dream for Hayden, now became a witness to his effort and Johnny’s friendship.（锦标赛场地积雪的赛道，曾是 Hayden 遥不可及的梦想，如今成了他的努力与 Johnny 友情的见证者。）
滑雪徽章→友情的起点：The colorful pins Johnny gave Hayden a year ago—small, shiny, and full of championship memories—had sown the seed of their unbreakable bond.（一年前 Johnny 送给 Hayden 的彩色徽章 —— 小巧、闪亮，满载锦标赛回忆 —— 早已播下了两人牢不可破的羁绊之种。）
夕阳下的雪道→友情的延续：The golden sunset painted the snow trails orange, and the two boys’ shadows stretched side by side—just like their friendship, which would continue long after the championship ended.（金色夕阳将雪道染成橙色，两个男孩的影子并肩延伸 —— 正如他们的友情，即便锦标赛结束，也将长久延续。）
【专项微训练】—— 为故事注入灵魂
训练一：环境描写 烘托心情
（选择贴合氛围的词语造句，强化场景与情绪的关联）
心情 可选词汇（中英对照） 你的造句
纠结 / 坚定 寒风呼啸 (cold wind howling); 雪粒飞溅 (snowflakes swirling); 紧握滑雪杖 (grip ski poles tightly) Johnny 站在训练场边，______，心中反复权衡着参赛与让贤的选择，最终握紧滑雪杖，决定去找教练。
惊喜 / 激动 阳光洒满雪场 (sunlight covering the snowfield); 欢呼声回荡 (cheers echoing); 奖牌反光 (medal shining) ______，当 Hayden 听到自己获得正选资格时，他愣在原地，直到周围的欢呼声传来，才反应过来这是真的。
欣慰 / 温暖 夕阳柔和 (soft sunset); 积雪发光 (snow glowing); 并肩剪影 (side-by-side shadows) ______，Johnny 看着 Hayden 在领奖台上挥手，心中没有丝毫遗憾，只有为好友圆梦的踏实与温暖。
参考答案
Johnny 站在训练场边，cold wind howling around him, snowflakes swirling in the air, and his hands gripping the ski poles tightly（寒风在身边呼啸，雪花在空中飞舞，他双手紧紧攥着滑雪杖），心中反复权衡着参赛与让贤的选择，最终握紧滑雪杖，决定去找教练。
Sunlight covering the snowfield, the medal on the table shining brightly, and cheers echoing from the team（阳光洒满雪场，桌上的奖牌闪闪发光，团队的欢呼声四处回荡），当 Hayden 听到自己获得正选资格时，他愣在原地，直到周围的欢呼声传来，才反应过来这是真的。
Soft sunset casting a warm glow, the snow underfoot glowing faintly, and their side-by-side shadows stretching on the ground（夕阳洒下温暖的光晕，脚下的积雪微微发光，两人并肩的影子映在地上），Johnny 看着 Hayden 在领奖台上挥手，心中没有丝毫遗憾，只有为好友圆梦的踏实与温暖。
训练二：人物刻画 于细微处见真情
（将抽象描述与具体动作 / 神态连线，选择一句仿写，凸显人物性格）
Johnny 无私且重友情 A. He handed his championship qualification form to the coach, his voice steady: “Give it to Hayden—he deserves it more.”
Hayden 刻苦且感恩 B. He stayed an hour late every day, practicing downhill turns until his legs ached, and later hugged Johnny tightly: “I’ll never forget this.”
Coach Nick 通情达理 C. He put down his pen, looked at Johnny thoughtfully, and said, “Your kindness matters more than any medal.”
连线答案：1-A；2-B；3-C仿写示例（选择第 1 句）：She passed her concert ticket to her best friend, her eyes sincere: “Take it—you’ve been waiting for this show for months.”（她把音乐会门票递给最好的朋友，眼神真诚地说：“拿着吧 —— 你等这场演出好几个月了。”）
训练三：情感表达 找到 “高级替身”
（替换直白词汇，让情感表达更细腻生动）
直白表达 高级替代表达（中英对照）
“纠结”（Johnny） be torn between two choices（在两个选择间纠结）；a battle between desire and friendship（欲望与友情的挣扎）
“惊喜”（Hayden） eyes widen in shock（惊讶地睁大双眼）；a surge of joy rushing through his body（一阵喜悦席卷全身）
“骄傲”（Johnny） swell with pride（心中涌起骄傲）；feel a deep sense of fulfillment（感到深深的满足）
例句升级原句：Johnny was torn between competing and giving his spot to Hayden, and he felt proud when Hayden won.升级句：Johnny was torn between defending his title and giving his spot to Hayden—a battle between his desire and their friendship. When Hayden won, a deep sense of pride swelled in his chest.（Johnny 在卫冕与让贤间纠结 —— 这是他的欲望与两人友情的挣扎。当 Hayden 获胜时，他心中涌起深深的自豪感。）
训练四：动作细节 让情感可视化
（为情境补充具体动作，体现人物内心，避免 “直白描述”）
情境 直白版 细节版（参考）
1. Johnny 向教练提出让贤时（体现 “坚定与紧张”） Johnny told the coach he wanted to give his spot to Hayden. Johnny took a deep breath, walked into the coach’s office, and placed his ski gloves on the desk. He stared at the qualification form in his hand for a second, then looked up: “Coach, I want to give my spot to Hayden. It’s his last chance.”（Johnny 深吸一口气，走进教练办公室，把滑雪手套放在桌上。他盯着手中的参赛资格表看了一秒，然后抬头说：“教练，我想把我的名额让给 Hayden，这是他最后一次机会了。”）
2. Hayden 得知获参赛资格时（体现 “惊喜与不敢置信”） Hayden was surprised to get the spot. Hayden’s eyes fixed on the revised list, his mouth dropping open. He rubbed his eyes and checked again, then let out a shaky laugh: “Is this real Did Johnny... ”（Hayden 的目光定格在修改后的名单上，嘴巴微张。他揉了揉眼睛再看一遍，然后发出一声颤抖的笑：“这是真的吗？是 Johnny…… 做的吗？”）
3. 两人赛后庆祝时（体现 “友情与圆满”） They celebrated happily after the game. Hayden held the medal up to Johnny, his eyes shining: “We did it.” Johnny smiled, tapping the medal gently: “No—you did it. I’m just glad I got to watch.” They walked off the snowfield together, their shoulders bumping lightly as they laughed.（Hayden 把奖牌举到 Johnny 面前，眼睛发亮：“我们做到了。”Johnny 笑了，轻轻碰了碰奖牌：“不 —— 是你做到了。我很开心能见证这一切。” 两人一起走出雪地，笑着时肩膀轻轻相撞。）
训练五：象征与隐喻 让主题更深刻
（将抽象概念与故事中的 “具体事物” 关联，深化主题，避免 “直白点题”）
参赛资格 → 不仅是 “比赛名额”，更象征着 the gift of friendship（友情的礼物），Johnny 用它圆了好友的梦，比自己参赛更有意义。
滑雪徽章 → 不仅是 “纪念品”，更象征着 the start of mutual support（互助的起点），从去年的鼓励到今年的让贤，徽章见证了友情的成长。
锦标赛雪道 → 不仅是 “竞技赛道”，更象征着 the journey of dreams and friendship（梦想与友情的旅程），两人在雪道上的并肩与成全，比奖牌更珍贵。
四、综合训练与范文引导
训练：补全段落（结合 “十句五定法” 框架与微写作技巧，完善续写内容）
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The next day, Johnny went to see the coach.Training had just ended, and the cold winter air still clung to Johnny’s jacket as he knocked on Coach Nick’s office door. “Come in,” the coach said. Johnny stepped inside, his ski poles leaning against the wall, and took a deep breath. “Coach, I have a request,” he said, his voice quieter than usual. “I want to give my spot in the Championships to Hayden.” Coach Nick looked up from his training plan, his eyebrows lifting in surprise. “Are you sure ” he asked. Johnny nodded firmly: “It’s his last chance—he’s trained so hard for years, and he deserves to be there more than I do.” The coach stared at Johnny for a moment, then smiled softly. “You’re a good friend, Johnny,” he said, picking up a pen. “I’ll update the list right away.” Johnny felt a weight lift off his shoulders as he thanked the coach, already imagining Hayden’s reaction.
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Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships.When Coach Nick announced the revised list, Hayden froze—he’d toed the line of hope for so long that he could barely believe his ears. He turned to Johnny, his eyes wide, and Johnny nodded with a grin. Over the next month, Hayden trained harder than ever, staying late to practice downhill turns and asking Johnny for tips on cornering. Johnny stood by the trail every day, cheering him on and correcting his posture. On the day of the race, Hayden glided down the snow-covered course with steady hands and a calm mind, remembering every piece of advice Johnny had given him. When he crossed the finish line in third place, he didn’t hesitate to run to Johnny. “We did it!” he yelled, pulling Johnny into a hug. Johnny patted his back, his eyes warm: “No—you did it.” As they watched the sunset paint the snow orange, Hayden held up his medal. “This is for both of us,” he said. Johnny smiled—he’d never felt more proud, or more sure that he’d made the right choice.
范文亮点解析
情节连贯：严格遵循 “Johnny 提出让贤→教练支持→Hayden 惊喜备战→比赛获奖→友情升华” 的逻辑，呼应原文 “最后一次机会”“好友执念” 的核心线索，无脱节。
细节鲜活：通过 “滑雪杖靠墙”“教练挑眉”“Hayden 揉眼睛确认” 等动作细节，凸显人物性格（Johnny 的坚定、教练的惊讶、Hayden 的不敢置信）；用 “课后加练”“Johnny 指导技巧” 等情节，展现两人的互助与默契。
情感真挚：用 “Johnny 如释重负”“Hayden 颤抖的笑”“拥抱时的对话” 等描写，传递 “无私友情” 的温暖；结尾 “奖牌为两人共有” 的感悟，避免直白说教，深化 “梦想与友情共存” 的主题。
时态准确：全程使用一般过去时（如 “knocked”“stepped”“lifted”“froze”“glided”“cheered”），符合原文时态要求，无语法错误。2025 届青岛市高三第一次诊断考试
读后续写二次学案学生版
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整短文。
Johnny, a 17-year-old from Whitehorse, had been competing in Cross-Country Skiing for five years. For many young athletes like him in Whitehorse, Yukon, the Yukon Cross-Country Ski Championships were more than just a competition. It was their dream. A year ago, Johnny qualified for the Championships and successfully won a medal.
After the competition, Johnny was eager to share his experience with Hayden, his teammate and best friend. Hayden had narrowly missed qualifying for the Championships. Johnny had watched his friend train tirelessly, push himself to the limit, and always keep his big smile. Johnny knew how much the Championships meant to Hayden.
Johnny handed Hayden some colorful pins. “These are pins I traded with athletes from all over Yukon,” Johnny said with a smile, “I want you to have them, so you can feel a part of the event too.”
Hayden was touched, “Thanks, Johnny. This means a lot.”
“Next time,” Johnny continued, “I hope you can also experience the event. I know you’ll make it.”
Hayden nodded, “I’ll work even harder for that.”
This year’s Yukon Cross-Country Ski Championships would be held in a month. Coach Nick guided the team through daily tough training and the team made significant progress in their skating, cornering, and downhill techniques. Meanwhile, they enhanced their endurance and balance. Both Johnny and Hayden met the Championship standards. Given Johnny’s rich competitive experience. Coach Nick once again qualified Johnny for this year’s event and Hayden was selected as an alternate (替补).
The qualification for the competition excited Johnny, but there was always an idea staying in his mind. Johnny knew his friend had been wanting to go to the Championships for several years. This was the last chance for both of them to attend the Championships, as they would age out of the competition after this year. The thought became clear in his mind, strong and steady.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The next day, Johnny went to see the coach.
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Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships.
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【原文翻译】
17 岁的约翰尼来自怀特霍斯，已经参加越野滑雪比赛五年了。对于育空地区怀特霍斯的许多像他一样的年轻运动员来说，育空越野滑雪锦标赛不仅仅是一场比赛，更是他们的梦想。一年前，约翰尼成功晋级锦标赛并赢得了一枚奖牌。
比赛结束后，约翰尼迫不及待地想和队友兼最好的朋友海登分享自己的经历。海登当年以微弱差距未能获得锦标赛参赛资格。约翰尼亲眼目睹了好友不知疲倦地训练，一次次挑战自己的极限，却始终挂着灿烂的笑容。他深知这场锦标赛对海登意味着什么。
约翰尼递给海登几枚色彩鲜艳的徽章。“这些是我和育空各地的运动员交换来的，” 约翰尼笑着说，“我想把它们送给你，这样你也能感受到自己是这场赛事的一份子。”
海登深受感动：“谢谢你，约翰尼。这对我意义重大。”
“下次，” 约翰尼继续说道，“我希望你也能亲身体验这场赛事。我知道你一定能做到。”
海登点点头：“我会更加努力的。”
今年的育空越野滑雪锦标赛将于一个月后举行。尼克教练带领团队进行了日常高强度训练，队员们在滑行、过弯和下坡技巧上取得了显著进步，耐力和平衡能力也得到了提升。约翰尼和海登都达到了锦标赛的参赛标准。考虑到约翰尼丰富的比赛经验，尼克教练再次给予他今年赛事的正选资格，而海登则被选为替补。
获得参赛资格让约翰尼欣喜不已，但一个想法却始终萦绕在他心头。约翰尼知道，好友多年来一直渴望参加这场锦标赛。今年是他们两人最后的参赛机会 —— 赛后，他们就会因超龄而无法再参加这项赛事了。这个想法在他心中逐渐清晰、坚定起来。
【写作训练步骤】
一、通读全文，深度解读
1. 读情节
开端：_______________________________________________________________________。
发展：_______________________________________________________________________。
转折：_______________________________________________________________________。
续写开端：_______________________________________________________________________。
续写结局：_______________________________________________________________________。
2. 读人物
Johnny：_________________________________________________________________________。
Hayden：_________________________________________________________________________。
Coach Nick：______________________________________________________________________。
3. 读时态
全文以______________为主。
4. 读冲突
外在冲突：______________________________________________________________________。
内在冲突：______________________________________________________________________。
5. 读情绪发展
Johnny：自豪（去年获奖）→ 关切（鼓励未晋级的 Hayden）→ 兴奋（今年获正选）→ 纠结（萌生让贤想法）→（续写发展：______________________）→（续写结局：_________________）Hayden：失落（去年未晋级）→ 感动（收到 Johnny 的徽章）→ 努力（今年刻苦训练）→ 遗憾（成为替补）→（续写发展：_______________）→（续写结局：________________________）Coach Nick：严谨（指导训练）→ 公正（确定参赛名单）→（续写发展：_________________）
6. 读主题
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二、【十句五定法】—— 搭建你的写作框架
请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。
段落 句子功能 你的句子构思
第一段 1. 接续 Hint1 描写 Johnny 找教练的场景（如_________________________________），体现他的坚定与些许紧张。
2. 动作 / 心理推进 刻画 Johnny 向教练说明来意的细节（如 ____________________），及教练的第一反应（如 __________________________________）。
3. 有效过渡 描写 Johnny 解释让贤的理由（如___________________________），展现其无私的初衷。
4. 有效衔接 描述教练的态度转变（如 _________________________），并达成共识（如 “同意调整参赛名单”）。
5. 段落收束 以 Johnny 离开办公室的心情（如 _______________________）收尾，为第二段 “Hayden 接受机会” 铺垫。
第二段 6. 接续 Hint2 描写 Hayden 得知消息的反应（如 _________________________），体现其惊喜与不敢置信。
7. 情节发展 描写 Hayden 的备战状态（如______________________________），展现两人的互助与默契。
8. 主题升华 通过比赛中的关键瞬间（如 _________________________________）或赛后对话，点明 “友情比输赢更重要”。
9. 结局呈现 描写比赛结果（如___________________________），及两人的互动（____________________________）。
10. 富有余韵的结尾 10. 主题升华 用象征或场景定格收尾（如__________________________），回扣主题。
三、【微写作训练】—— 打磨你的语言
1. 人物心理描写
纠结 / 坚定（Johnny 决定让贤时）：________________________________________________.（Johnny 心中交织着犹豫与坚定 —— 他本想卫冕奖牌，但训练时 Hayden 疲惫却充满希望的笑容总在眼前浮现。）
惊喜 / 不敢置信（Hayden 获机会时）：_______________________________________________.（看到名单上自己的名字，Hayden 满是震惊，手指反复拂过纸张，仿佛要确认这不是梦。）
欣慰 / 骄傲（Johnny 见证好友获奖时）：______________________________________________.（看着 Hayden 站在领奖台上，Johnny 心中涌起温暖的自豪感 —— 这枚奖牌比他自己获得的任何一枚都更有意义。）
2. 情感描写
友情的无私：__________________________________________________________________.（Johnny 放弃资格的决定不只是帮忙，更是守护好友多年梦想的无声承诺，即便要以自己的机会为代价。）
梦想实现的激动：________________________________________________________________.（Hayden 握着奖牌，喜悦的泪水在眼眶闪烁，他知道这是自己多年训练与 Johnny 无私善意共同的结果。）
遗憾的弥补与圆满：________________________________________________________________.（曾经是 Hayden 遗憾的锦标赛，如今变成了圆满的回忆 —— 这一切都源于一个更在乎他的快乐而非自身荣耀的朋友。）
3. 动作描写
滑雪训练（Johnny/Hayden）：_______________________________________________________.（Johnny 滑过积雪的赛道，身体微倾过弯；Hayden 紧紧跟随，调整姿势以提升平衡，雪杖用力撑向雪地。）
沟通让贤（Johnny 与教练）：______________________________________________________（Johnny 紧紧攥着滑雪杖，指节发白，说道：“教练，我想把我的名额让给 Hayden。” 他顿了顿，又补充：“这是他最后一次机会了。”）
赛后互动（两人）：________________________________________________________________（Hayden 跑过雪地，奖牌在胸前晃动，一把抱住 Johnny。Johnny 拍着他的背，笑着听 Hayden 嘟囔：“谢谢你 —— 这是我们两个人的。”）
4. 环境象征描写
滑雪场→梦想的舞台：______________________________________________________________.（锦标赛场地积雪的赛道，曾是 Hayden 遥不可及的梦想，如今成了他的努力与 Johnny 友情的见证者。）
滑雪徽章→友情的起点：____________________________________________________________.（一年前 Johnny 送给 Hayden 的彩色徽章 —— 小巧、闪亮，满载锦标赛回忆 —— 早已播下了两人牢不可破的羁绊之种。）
夕阳下的雪道→友情的延续：________________________________________________________.（金色夕阳将雪道染成橙色，两个男孩的影子并肩延伸 —— 正如他们的友情，即便锦标赛结束，也将长久延续。）
【专项微训练】—— 为故事注入灵魂
训练一：环境描写 烘托心情
（选择贴合氛围的词语造句，强化场景与情绪的关联）
心情 可选词汇（中英对照） 你的造句
纠结 / 坚定 寒风呼啸 (cold wind howling); 雪粒飞溅 (snowflakes swirling); 紧握滑雪杖 (grip ski poles tightly) Johnny 站在训练场边，______，心中反复权衡着参赛与让贤的选择，最终握紧滑雪杖，决定去找教练。
惊喜 / 激动 阳光洒满雪场 (sunlight covering the snowfield); 欢呼声回荡 (cheers echoing); 奖牌反光 (medal shining) ______，当 Hayden 听到自己获得正选资格时，他愣在原地，直到周围的欢呼声传来，才反应过来这是真的。
欣慰 / 温暖 夕阳柔和 (soft sunset); 积雪发光 (snow glowing); 并肩剪影 (side-by-side shadows) ______，Johnny 看着 Hayden 在领奖台上挥手，心中没有丝毫遗憾，只有为好友圆梦的踏实与温暖。
参考答案
Johnny 站在训练场边，cold wind howling around him, snowflakes swirling in the air, and his hands gripping the ski poles tightly（寒风在身边呼啸，雪花在空中飞舞，他双手紧紧攥着滑雪杖），心中反复权衡着参赛与让贤的选择，最终握紧滑雪杖，决定去找教练。
Sunlight covering the snowfield, the medal on the table shining brightly, and cheers echoing from the team（阳光洒满雪场，桌上的奖牌闪闪发光，团队的欢呼声四处回荡），当 Hayden 听到自己获得正选资格时，他愣在原地，直到周围的欢呼声传来，才反应过来这是真的。
Soft sunset casting a warm glow, the snow underfoot glowing faintly, and their side-by-side shadows stretching on the ground（夕阳洒下温暖的光晕，脚下的积雪微微发光，两人并肩的影子映在地上），Johnny 看着 Hayden 在领奖台上挥手，心中没有丝毫遗憾，只有为好友圆梦的踏实与温暖。
训练二：人物刻画 于细微处见真情
（将抽象描述与具体动作 / 神态连线，选择一句仿写，凸显人物性格）
Johnny 无私且重友情 A. He handed his championship qualification form to the coach, his voice steady: “Give it to Hayden—he deserves it more.”
Hayden 刻苦且感恩 B. He stayed an hour late every day, practicing downhill turns until his legs ached, and later hugged Johnny tightly: “I’ll never forget this.”
Coach Nick 通情达理 C. He put down his pen, looked at Johnny thoughtfully, and said, “Your kindness matters more than any medal.”
连线答案：1-A；2-B；3-C
仿写示例（选择第 1 句）：She passed her concert ticket to her best friend, her eyes sincere: “Take it—you’ve been waiting for this show for months.”（她把音乐会门票递给最好的朋友，眼神真诚地说：“拿着吧 —— 你等这场演出好几个月了。”）
训练三：情感表达 找到 “高级替身”
（替换直白词汇，让情感表达更细腻生动）
直白表达 高级替代表达（中英对照）
“纠结”（Johnny） ________________________________（在两个选择间纠结）； ________________________________（欲望与友情的挣扎）
“惊喜”（Hayden） ______________________________（惊讶地睁大双眼）； ______________________________（一阵喜悦席卷全身）
“骄傲”（Johnny） _____________________（心中涌起骄傲）； ______________________________（感到深深的满足）
例句升级原句：Johnny was torn between competing and giving his spot to Hayden, and he felt proud when Hayden won.
升级句：_______________________________________________________________________.（Johnny 在卫冕与让贤间纠结 —— 这是他的欲望与两人友情的挣扎。当 Hayden 获胜时，他心中涌起深深的自豪感。）
训练四：动作细节 让情感可视化
（为情境补充具体动作，体现人物内心，避免 “直白描述”）
情境 直白版 细节版（参考）
1. Johnny 向教练提出让贤时（体现 “坚定与紧张”） Johnny told the coach he wanted to give his spot to Hayden.
2. Hayden 得知获参赛资格时（体现 “惊喜与不敢置信”） Hayden was surprised to get the spot.
3. 两人赛后庆祝时（体现 “友情与圆满”） They celebrated happily after the game.
训练五：象征与隐喻 让主题更深刻
（将抽象概念与故事中的 “具体事物” 关联，深化主题，避免 “直白点题”）
参赛资格 → 不仅是 “比赛名额”，更象征着___________________________，Johnny 用它圆了好友的梦，比自己参赛更有意义。
滑雪徽章 → 不仅是 “纪念品”，更象征着 ______________________________，从去年的鼓励到今年的让贤，徽章见证了友情的成长。
锦标赛雪道 → 不仅是 “竞技赛道”，更象征着 ________________________________________，两人在雪道上的并肩与成全，比奖牌更珍贵。
四、综合训练与范文引导
（一）短文填空训练（聚焦核心关键词，提示词 + 时态提示：全程用一般过去时）
请根据范文语境、提示词（中文释义 / 词性 / 时态 / 场景提示），补全下列段落，强化对越野滑雪主题 + 友情无私核心词的掌握。
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The next day, Johnny went to see the coach.Training had just ended, ______（提示：环境词块，寒风呼啸着掠过雪场）as Johnny ______（提示：动作词，敲门，past tense of “knock”）on Coach Nick’s office door. “Come in,” the coach said. Johnny ______（提示：动作词，走进，past tense of “step”）inside, his ski poles leaning against the wall, and took a deep breath. “Coach, I have a request,” he said, ______（提示：情感 + 动作，语气坚定而真诚）. “I want to ______（提示：核心动作词块，放弃我的锦标赛正选资格）to Hayden.” Coach Nick looked up from his training plan, ______（提示：动作 + 情感，惊讶地挑眉，past tense of “lift” + “eyebrows in surprise”）. “Are you sure ” he asked. Johnny ______（提示：动作词，坚定点头，past tense of “nod” + “firmly”）: “It’s his last chance—he’s trained so hard for years, and he deserves to be there more than I do.” The coach stared at Johnny for a moment, then smiled softly. “You’re a good friend, Johnny,” he said, picking up a pen. “I’ll update the list right away.” Johnny felt ______（提示：情感短语，如释重负，“a weight lift off one’s shoulders” 的过去式）as he thanked the coach, already imagining Hayden’s reaction.
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Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships.When Coach Nick announced the revised list, Hayden ______（提示：动作 + 情感，惊讶得愣住，past tense of “freeze” + “in disbelief”）—he’d toed the line of hope for so long that he could barely believe his ears. He ______（提示：动作词，转向，past tense of “turn”）to Johnny, ______（提示：动作 + 情感，惊讶又喜悦地睁大双眼）, and Johnny ______（提示：动作词，咧嘴笑，past tense of “grin”）, nodding in confirmation. Over the next month, Hayden ______（提示：动作词块，反复练习下坡转弯）, staying late to practice every day. Johnny stood by the trail every day, ______（提示：动作词，热情为他加油，“cheer sb on” 的现在分词形式 + “enthusiastically”）and ______（提示：动作词块，调整他的姿势，“adjust one’s posture” 的现在分词形式）. On the day of the race, Hayden ______（提示：动作词块，平稳滑过积雪赛道）, remembering every piece of advice Johnny had given him. When he crossed the finish line in third place, ______（提示：环境词块，欢呼声回荡在空气中）. Hayden ______（提示：动作词，冲过去，past tense of “rush”）to Johnny and ______（提示：动作词，紧紧拥抱，past tense of “hug” + “tightly”）, holding up his medal: “This is for both of us!” Johnny patted his back, his chest ______（提示：情感 + 动作，涌起无私的满足感，“a sense of selfless fulfillment” + “swell” 的现在分词形式）. As ______（提示：环境词块，金色夕阳将雪染成橙色）, Johnny realized he’d made the right choice.
（二）参考答案与关键词对应解析
填空位置 英文答案 关键词类型 对应高频词块（回顾强化）
Paragraph 1-1 cold wind howling across the snowfield 环境类 烘托让贤前的场景氛围，贴合越野滑雪主题
Paragraph 1-2 knocked 动作类 日常互动基础动作，高频实用词
Paragraph 1-3 stepped 动作类 场景过渡核心动作，衔接自然
Paragraph 1-4 his voice steady but sincere 情感 + 动作类 体现 Johnny 让贤的坚定与诚意，贴合 “无私友情” 主题
Paragraph 1-5 give up my championship spot 核心动作类 让贤主题关键词块，直接关联主线
Paragraph 1-6 his eyebrows lifting in surprise 动作 + 情感类 教练的典型反应，增加情节张力
Paragraph 1-7 nodded firmly 动作 + 情感类 凸显 Johnny 的决心，呼应 “重情重义” 特质
Paragraph 1-8 a weight lifted off his shoulders 情感类 让贤后的轻松心绪，高频情感短语
Paragraph 2-1 froze in disbelief 动作 + 情感类 Hayden 获机会后的真实反应，比 “be surprised” 更生动
Paragraph 2-2 turned 动作类 互动衔接动作，自然引出两人对视场景
Paragraph 2-3 his eyes wide with shock and joy 动作 + 情感类 细腻展现 Hayden 的惊喜，贴合 “圆梦” 主题
Paragraph 2-4 grinned 动作类 Johnny 的温柔回应，体现友情温度
Paragraph 2-5 practiced downhill turns repeatedly 滑雪动作类 越野滑雪备战核心词块，凸显 Hayden 的刻苦
Paragraph 2-6 cheering him on enthusiastically 友情互动类 好友互助的关键动作，深化 “支持” 主题
Paragraph 2-7 adjusting his posture 滑雪动作类 训练中互助的细节词块，提升场景专业性
Paragraph 2-8 glided down the snow trail steadily 滑雪动作类 越野滑雪核心动作，体现比赛中的稳定发挥
Paragraph 2-9 echoes of cheers rang through the air 环境 + 情感类 烘托比赛获奖的喜悦氛围，侧面强化 “圆梦”
Paragraph 2-10 rushed 动作类 赛后激动的衔接动作，节奏紧凑
Paragraph 2-11 hugged him tightly 动作类 友情升温的标志性动作，传递深厚情谊
Paragraph 2-12 a sense of selfless fulfillment swelling 情感类 Johnny 的核心情感，升华 “无私友情” 主题
Paragraph 2-13 the golden sunset painted the snow orange 环境类 结尾定格场景，烘托 “圆满” 氛围，呼应主题
