2025年3月济南市高三模拟考试
读后续写二次开发学案学生版
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整短文。
“Hey, Isaac! ” Dayna said. There was a touch of awkwardness in her voice. “Feeling ready for this year’s baking competition ” Dayna’s initiative greetings really surprised me.
“Do I look worried ” I forced a polite smile. To be honest, I had been hoping to fix our relationship but worried about being turned down and making things worse.
Dayna and I used to be best friends. Our shared love for baking brought us together, leading us to join Mrs Cooper’s baking classes. We always supported each other during the lessons, which greatly enhanced our baking skills. Last year, I cheered for her to win the championship, but we were in such an embarrassing situation just because of an argument.
“Prepare to be amazed, ” I said. She shot me a doubtful look. “We’ll see. ” Today was the day of this year’s competition, whose theme was “cupcakes”. We entered the kitchen at the Students’ Baking Club, where we attended baking classes every Saturday. Family and friends filled a makeshift seating area. After explaining the competition consisted of two rounds, Mrs. Cooper announced the official start of the competition. Immediately, all the contestants quickly dived into their work.
As I was working on my creations, I couldn't help glancing (瞥见) at Dayna now and then because I was so used to checking on her when baking. Dayna, on the other hand, was completely focused. Her hands were moving skillfully as she measured, mixed, and poured. She didn’t seem to be affected by our current relationship at all, or maybe she was just better at hiding it.
Everything went very well. Soon, Mrs. Cooper announced that Dayna, two other contestants, and I were advancing to the final round. In this round, I got right into my zone. But I quickly realized I hadn’t packed the chocolates that I used for decorating. It was my magic weapon for winning! Sweat rolling down my face, I didn’t know what to do.
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dayna must have sensed my panic.
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Thanks to Dayna’s chocolates, I won!
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【原文翻译】
“嘿，艾萨克！” 戴娜开口喊道，声音里带着一丝尴尬，“今年的烘焙比赛，你准备好迎接挑战了吗？” 戴娜主动打招呼的举动，着实让我吃了一惊。
“我看起来像担心的样子吗？” 我强挤出一个礼貌的微笑。说实话，我一直希望能修复我们的关系，却又害怕遭到拒绝，让情况变得更糟。
我和戴娜曾经是最好的朋友。对烘焙的共同热爱让我们走到了一起，还一起报名参加了库珀夫人的烘焙课。课上我们总是互相支持，这也大大提升了我们的烘焙技艺。去年，我还为她加油，盼着她能赢得冠军，可就因为一场争吵，我们陷入了无比尴尬的境地。
“等着看我惊艳全场吧。” 我说。她投来一个怀疑的眼神：“咱们走着瞧。” 今天就是今年比赛的日子，主题是 “纸杯蛋糕”。我们走进了学生烘焙俱乐部的厨房 —— 每个周六，我们都会在这里上烘焙课。临时搭建的观众席上坐满了家人和朋友。库珀夫人先说明比赛分为两轮，随后便宣布比赛正式开始。所有参赛者立刻投入到工作中，动作麻利。
我专注制作自己的作品时，总会不由自主地时不时瞥向戴娜 —— 毕竟以前烘焙时，我早就习惯了关注她的情况。可戴娜却完全沉浸在自己的世界里，双手熟练地称量、搅拌、倾倒材料。她似乎完全没受我们目前关系的影响，也可能只是她更擅长掩饰情绪罢了。
一切都进行得很顺利。很快，库珀夫人宣布，戴娜、另外两名参赛者和我晋级决赛。决赛中，我迅速进入了状态，可没多久就发现，我居然忘了带装饰用的巧克力 —— 那可是我的制胜法宝啊！汗水顺着脸颊滑落，我彻底慌了神，不知该如何是好。
【写作训练步骤】
一、通读全文，深度解读
1. 读情节
开端：______________________________________________________________________。
发展：______________________________________________________________________。
转折：______________________________________________________________________。
续写开端：__________________________________________________________________。
续写结局：__________________________________________________________________。
2. 读人物
Isaac：___________________________________________________________________。
Dayna：_________________________________________________________________。
Mrs. Cooper：_______________________________________________________________。
3. 读时态
全文以_________________为主。
4. 读冲突
外在冲突：_________________________________________________________________。
内在冲突：_________________________________________________________________。
5. 读情绪发展
Isaac：尴尬（被 Dayna 主动问候）→ 紧张（比赛中的专注与试探）→ 恐慌（发现忘带巧克力）→（续写发展：__________________________）→（续写结局：__________________________）Dayna：冷淡（初期互动的疏离）→ 专注（比赛中的投入）→ 关注（察觉 Isaac 异常）→（续写发展：_____________________________）→（续写结局：____________________________）
6. 读主题
_________________________________________
二、【十句五定法】—— 搭建你的写作框架
请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。
段落 句子功能 你的句子构思
第一段 1. 接续 Hint1 描写 Dayna 察觉恐慌的细节（如 _____________________________），及主动靠近的动作。
2. 动作 / 心理推进 刻画 Dayna 的询问（轻声关切）与 Isaac 的窘迫回应（____________________________)。
3. 有效过渡 描写 Dayna 的反应（______________________），制造轻微悬念，为 “提供帮助” 铺垫。
4. 有效衔接 描述关键帮助场景（_____________________________________），体现其善良与大度。
5. 段落收束 以 Isaac 的感激与重新投入比赛收尾（___________________________），为第二段获奖铺垫。
第二段 6. 接续 Hint2 描写获奖瞬间（如 __________________________________），及台下 Dayna 的反应（微笑鼓掌）。
7. 情节发展 描写 Isaac 获奖后的行动（______________________________________），主动打破隔阂。
8. 主题升华 通过两人的对话，解开过往矛盾（______________________________），点明 “友谊比输赢重要”。
9. 结局呈现 描写两人和解后的互动（______________________________________），展现友谊的回归。
10. 富有余韵的结尾 用象征或场景定格收尾（如 __________________________________），回扣主题。
三、【微写作训练】—— 打磨你的语言
1. 人物心理描写
恐慌 / 焦灼（Isaac 忘带巧克力时）：________________________________________________.（Isaac 反复翻找背包，恐慌席卷全身 —— 他的制胜法宝不见了。）
惊讶 / 感激（Isaac 收到帮助时）：____________________________________________________.（当 Dayna 递给他巧克力时，Isaac 心中涌起一阵惊讶与感激 —— 他从未想过她会在如此关键的时刻伸出援手。）
释然 / 喜悦（和解后）：_____________________________________________________________.（当两人相视而笑时，Isaac 心中满是释然与喜悦 —— 所有的尴尬与误解都烟消云散了。）
2. 情感描写
隔阂与试探：______________________________________________________________________.（起初两人间的尴尬沉默挥之不去，但 Dayna 温柔的询问打破了僵局，显露了疏离之下未曾言说的关心。）
互助的温暖：____________________________________________________________________.（Dayna 小小的善举不止是分享巧克力，更是修复破碎友谊的桥梁。）
和解的甜蜜：______________________________________________________________________.（他们曾因争吵而紧张的友谊，如今像纸杯蛋糕上的装饰花一样绽放 —— 甜蜜而真挚。）
3. 动作描写
恐慌失措（Isaac）：________________________________________________________________.（Isaac 双手颤抖地翻着烘焙包，目光扫过每个角落，汗水顺着额头滴落。）
主动关切（Dayna）：_______________________________________________________________.（Dayna 停下搅拌，微微皱眉，悄悄走向 Isaac，脚步轻柔以免打扰他人。）
和解互动（两人）：_________________________________________________________________.（Isaac 递出奖杯，语气真诚：“这应该是我们的”，而 Dayna 摇摇头，拿起一个纸杯蛋糕，也回递给他一个。）
4. 环境象征描写
烘焙房→友谊修复地：______________________________________________________________.（温暖芬芳的烘焙俱乐部，弥漫着面粉和糖的香气，从比赛场地变成了和解之地。）
巧克力→和解的钥匙：_________________________________________________________________.（曾经是 Isaac “制胜法宝” 的闪亮巧克力，如今成了 Dayna 大度与两人重燃友谊的象征。）
纸杯蛋糕→友谊的甜蜜：_______________________________________________________________.（装饰精美的纸杯蛋糕，带着五彩糖霜和新鲜配料，映射着他们修复后友谊的甜蜜。）
【专项微训练】—— 为故事注入灵魂
训练一：环境描写 烘托心情
（选择贴合氛围的词语造句，强化场景与情绪的关联）
心情 可选词汇（中英对照） 你的造句
恐慌 / 焦灼 烤箱嗡嗡作响 (ovens humming); 汗水滴落 (sweat dripping); 心跳急促 (heart pounding) 决赛现场，______，Isaac 翻遍背包却找不到巧克力，指尖都开始发凉。
惊讶 / 感激 香气弥漫 (fragrance lingering); 目光交汇 (eyes meeting); 嘴角微扬 (corner of the mouth lifting) ______，当 Dayna 把巧克力塞进他手里时，Isaac 愣住了，两人短暂的目光交汇让尴尬少了几分。
释然 / 喜悦 阳光洒落 (sunlight streaming in); 笑声清脆 (clear laughter); 纸杯蛋糕摆放整齐 (cupcakes lined up neatly) ______，Isaac 和 Dayna 并肩品尝着彼此的纸杯蛋糕，过往的矛盾仿佛从未存在过。
参考答案
决赛现场，ovens humming loudly, sweat dripping down his cheeks, and his heart pounding rapidly（烤箱嗡嗡作响，汗水顺着脸颊滴落，心跳急促），Isaac 翻遍背包却找不到巧克力，指尖都开始发凉。
Fragrance of vanilla lingering in the air, their eyes meeting briefly, and a faint smile lifting the corner of Dayna’s mouth（香草香气弥漫在空气中，两人目光短暂交汇，Dayna 嘴角微扬），当 Dayna 把巧克力塞进他手里时，Isaac 愣住了，两人短暂的目光交汇让尴尬少了几分。
Sunlight streaming through the club’s windows, clear laughter echoing around, and cupcakes lined up neatly on the table（阳光透过俱乐部的窗户洒落，清脆的笑声四处回荡，纸杯蛋糕整齐地摆放在桌上），Isaac 和 Dayna 并肩品尝着彼此的纸杯蛋糕，过往的矛盾仿佛从未存在过。
训练二：人物刻画 于细微处见真情
（将抽象描述与具体动作 / 神态连线，选择一句仿写，凸显人物性格）
Isaac 重感情且感恩 A. He held the chocolates tightly, his voice trembling slightly: “Thank you—this means more than winning.”
Dayna 外冷内热且大度 B. She didn’t say much, just pulled out her own chocolate bag, handed it to him, and said softly: “Competition is boring without a worthy rival.”
两人和解后默契 C. They glanced at each other, then laughed at the same time, reaching for the same cupcake on the plate.
连线答案：1-A；2-B；3-C
仿写示例（选择第 2 句）：___________________________________________________________（他没有再争辩，只是拿出一直珍藏的书，递给她，温柔地笑了：“友谊比输赢更重要。”）
训练三：情感表达 找到 “高级替身”
（替换直白词汇，让情感表达更细腻生动）
直白表达 高级替代表达（中英对照）
“恐慌”（Isaac） ___________________________（恐慌涌上心头）； ___________________________（心里一阵焦灼）
“感激”（Isaac） ____________________________________（发自内心深深感激）； ____________________________________（眼中满是感激）
“释然”（两人） _________________________________（如释重负）； _________________________________（紧张感消散）
例句升级原句：Isaac was very panicked when he couldn’t find chocolates, and he was very grateful when Dayna helped him.
升级句： _______________________________________________________________________.（Isaac 找不到巧克力时心里一阵焦灼，但 Dayna 递出自己的巧克力那一刻，他眼中满是感激。）
训练四：动作细节 让情感可视化
（为情境补充具体动作，体现人物内心，避免 “直白描述”）
情境 直白版 细节版（参考）
1. Isaac 发现忘带巧克力时（体现 “恐慌”） Isaac was panicked because he forgot chocolates. （Isaac 愣了一秒，然后疯狂翻找背包 —— 双手掠过面粉袋和量杯，却没有巧克力盒的踪影。他咬着嘴唇，汗水浸湿了额头。）
2. Dayna 递巧克力时（体现 “外冷内热”） Dayna gave Isaac her chocolates. （Dayna 轻轻叹了口气，转身走向自己的工作台，拿出一个银色小包。她不声不响地走到 Isaac 面前，递出袋子，微微避开他的目光：“拿着吧，我有多的。”）
3. 两人和解时（体现 “默契”） They made up and became friends again. （Isaac 从自己的托盘里拿起一个纸杯蛋糕，多抹了些糖霜，递给 Dayna。Dayna 笑了笑，接过它，也回递了自己的。两人手指短暂相触，都笑了 —— 无需更多言语，隔阂已然修复。）
训练五：象征与隐喻 让主题更深刻
（将抽象概念与故事中的 “具体事物” 关联，深化主题，避免 “直白点题”）
巧克力 → 不仅是 “烘焙材料”，更象征着 ____________________________________________，是危机中主动伸出的援手，打破了隔阂。
纸杯蛋糕 → 不仅是 “比赛作品”，更象征着___________________________________________，从共同热爱到彼此守护，承载着两人的情感联结。
烘焙比赛 → 不仅是 “竞技赛场”，更象征着___________________________________________，真正的竞争不是彼此对立，而是相互成就。
四、综合训练与范文引导
训练：补全段落（结合 “十句五定法” 框架与微写作技巧，完善续写内容）
请根据范文语境、提示词（中文释义 / 词性 / 场景提示），补全下列段落，强化对烘焙主题 + 友谊修复核心词的掌握。
Paragraph 1
Dayna must have sensed my panic.She ______（提示：动作词，停下搅拌，past tense of “pause”）her mixing, her brows ______（提示：动作词，皱起，past tense of “furrow”）slightly as she glanced in my direction. ______（提示：场景动作，留下自己装饰了一半的纸杯蛋糕）on the workstation, she walked over quietly, her steps light enough not to disturb other contestants. “Lost something ” she asked softly, her voice free of the usual ______（提示：情感名词，尴尬）. I nodded, my face ______（提示：情感 + 动作，因窘迫发烫，“burn” 的现在分词形式）with embarrassment: “My chocolates—they’re my magic weapon for ______（提示：烘焙动作，装饰，动词 - ing 形式）.” Dayna didn’t hesitate. She turned back to her workstation, ______（提示：动作词，取出，past tense of “pull out”）a small silver bag, and handed it to me. “I have extra,” she said simply, ______（提示：动作词，避开，past tense of “avoid”）my eyes for a second before adding, “Competition’s no fun without a real rival.” I held the chocolates tightly, a wave of ______（提示：情感名词，感激）washing over me. Without wasting a second, I got back to work, my hands steady now that the panic had faded.
Paragraph 2
Thanks to Dayna’s chocolates, I won!When Mrs. Cooper called my name, I ______（提示：动作 + 情感，愣住，“stare” 的过去式 +“in disbelief”）for a moment before rushing to the stage. As I held the trophy, my eyes immediately ______（提示：动作词，搜寻，past tense of “scan”）the crowd for Dayna—she was smiling and ______（提示：动作词，鼓掌，past tense of “clap”）loudly, her face bright with genuine joy. After the ceremony, I walked straight to her, ______（提示：动作词，递出，“hold out” 的现在分词形式）half of the prize cookies. “This is yours,” I said sincerely. “I couldn’t have done it without you.” Dayna took a cookie, her smile ______（提示：动作词，变柔和，past tense of “soften”）. “I’m sorry about last year,” she said suddenly. “I was too stubborn to apologize.” I laughed, feeling ______（提示：情感短语，如释重负，“a weight lift off one’s shoulders” 的过去式）off my shoulders: “Me too. Let’s not let a silly argument ruin our friendship again.” We stood there, ______（提示：动作词，用力咀嚼，past tense of “munch”）on cookies and chatting like old times. As we walked out of the baking club together, the sun ______（提示：动作词，温暖，past tense of “warm”）our backs, and I knew our friendship—just like the cupcakes we baked—would only get sweeter with time.
（二）参考答案与关键词对应解析
填空位置 英文答案 关键词类型 对应高频词块（回顾强化）
Paragraph 1-1 paused 动作类 pause mixing（烘焙场景核心动作，体现 Dayna 的敏锐）
Paragraph 1-2 furrowed 动作 + 情感类 furrow one’s brows（察觉他人异常的典型神态）
Paragraph 1-3 Leaving her half-decorated cupcakes 动作 + 场景类 half-decorated cupcakes（烘焙比赛细节，凸显 Dayna 的主动）
Paragraph 1-4 awkwardness 情感类 awkwardness（两人关系的核心情感，此处体现 “隔阂消散”）
Paragraph 1-5 burning 情感 + 动作类 face burn with embarrassment（窘迫的细腻表达，替代 “feel embarrassed”）
Paragraph 1-6 decorating 烘焙动作类 decorating（决赛关键步骤，呼应 Isaac “忘带巧克力” 的危机）
Paragraph 1-7 pulled out 动作类 pull out ingredients（互助的前置动作，高频实用词）
Paragraph 1-8 avoiding 动作 + 情感类 avoid one’s gaze（Dayna “外冷内热” 的性格体现）
Paragraph 1-9 gratitude 情感类 a wave of gratitude（感激的高级表达，比 “thankfulness” 更具画面感）
Paragraph 2-1 stared in disbelief 动作 + 情感类 stare in disbelief（获奖的真实反应，避免 “be surprised” 的直白）
Paragraph 2-2 scanned 动作类 scan the crowd（寻找朋友的动作，体现 “重视友谊”）
Paragraph 2-3 clapping 动作类 clap loudly（Dayna “真心为朋友高兴” 的直接表现）
Paragraph 2-4 holding out 动作类 hold out sth to share（获奖后主动分享，感恩的核心动作）
Paragraph 2-5 softened 动作 + 情感类 smile soften（和解时的神态变化，体现 “释然”）
Paragraph 2-6 a weight lifted 情感类 a weight lift off one’s shoulders（和解释然的高频短语）
Paragraph 2-7 munching 动作类 munch on snacks（和解后轻松互动的细节，增加真实感）
Paragraph 2-8 warmed 动作 + 环境类 warm one’s backs（结尾环境烘托，象征 “友谊温暖”）2025年3月济南市高三模拟考试
读后续写二次开发学案教师版
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整短文。
“Hey, Isaac! ” Dayna said. There was a touch of awkwardness in her voice. “Feeling ready for this year’s baking competition ” Dayna’s initiative greetings really surprised me.
“Do I look worried ” I forced a polite smile. To be honest, I had been hoping to fix our relationship but worried about being turned down and making things worse.
Dayna and I used to be best friends. Our shared love for baking brought us together, leading us to join Mrs Cooper’s baking classes. We always supported each other during the lessons, which greatly enhanced our baking skills. Last year, I cheered for her to win the championship, but we were in such an embarrassing situation just because of an argument.
“Prepare to be amazed, ” I said. She shot me a doubtful look. “We’ll see. ” Today was the day of this year’s competition, whose theme was “cupcakes”. We entered the kitchen at the Students’ Baking Club, where we attended baking classes every Saturday. Family and friends filled a makeshift seating area. After explaining the competition consisted of two rounds, Mrs. Cooper announced the official start of the competition. Immediately, all the contestants quickly dived into their work.
As I was working on my creations, I couldn't help glancing (瞥见) at Dayna now and then because I was so used to checking on her when baking. Dayna, on the other hand, was completely focused. Her hands were moving skillfully as she measured, mixed, and poured. She didn’t seem to be affected by our current relationship at all, or maybe she was just better at hiding it.
Everything went very well. Soon, Mrs. Cooper announced that Dayna, two other contestants, and I were advancing to the final round. In this round, I got right into my zone. But I quickly realized I hadn’t packed the chocolates that I used for decorating. It was my magic weapon for winning! Sweat rolling down my face, I didn’t know what to do.
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
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Dayna must have sensed my panic.
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Thanks to Dayna’s chocolates, I won!
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【原文翻译】
“嘿，艾萨克！” 戴娜开口喊道，声音里带着一丝尴尬，“今年的烘焙比赛，你准备好迎接挑战了吗？” 戴娜主动打招呼的举动，着实让我吃了一惊。
“我看起来像担心的样子吗？” 我强挤出一个礼貌的微笑。说实话，我一直希望能修复我们的关系，却又害怕遭到拒绝，让情况变得更糟。
我和戴娜曾经是最好的朋友。对烘焙的共同热爱让我们走到了一起，还一起报名参加了库珀夫人的烘焙课。课上我们总是互相支持，这也大大提升了我们的烘焙技艺。去年，我还为她加油，盼着她能赢得冠军，可就因为一场争吵，我们陷入了无比尴尬的境地。
“等着看我惊艳全场吧。” 我说。她投来一个怀疑的眼神：“咱们走着瞧。” 今天就是今年比赛的日子，主题是 “纸杯蛋糕”。我们走进了学生烘焙俱乐部的厨房 —— 每个周六，我们都会在这里上烘焙课。临时搭建的观众席上坐满了家人和朋友。库珀夫人先说明比赛分为两轮，随后便宣布比赛正式开始。所有参赛者立刻投入到工作中，动作麻利。
我专注制作自己的作品时，总会不由自主地时不时瞥向戴娜 —— 毕竟以前烘焙时，我早就习惯了关注她的情况。可戴娜却完全沉浸在自己的世界里，双手熟练地称量、搅拌、倾倒材料。她似乎完全没受我们目前关系的影响，也可能只是她更擅长掩饰情绪罢了。
一切都进行得很顺利。很快，库珀夫人宣布，戴娜、另外两名参赛者和我晋级决赛。决赛中，我迅速进入了状态，可没多久就发现，我居然忘了带装饰用的巧克力 —— 那可是我的制胜法宝啊！汗水顺着脸颊滑落，我彻底慌了神，不知该如何是好。
【写作训练步骤】
一、通读全文，深度解读
1. 读情节
开端：Isaac 与 Dayna 曾因共同热爱烘焙成为挚友，一起参加库珀夫人的烘焙课并相互支持，去年却因一场争吵陷入尴尬，今年两人一同参与以 “纸杯蛋糕” 为主题的烘焙比赛。
发展：比赛分为两轮，Isaac 和 Dayna 均顺利晋级决赛；决赛中 Isaac 专注创作，却突然发现忘带装饰用的巧克力（自己的制胜法宝），瞬间陷入恐慌。
转折：Dayna 察觉到 Isaac 的慌乱，后续将通过互助打破隔阂，推动友谊修复。
续写开端：描写 Dayna 察觉恐慌后的行动（主动询问、提供帮助），及 Isaac 的反应（惊讶、感激）。
续写结局：Isaac 凭借 Dayna 提供的巧克力获奖，两人解开过往矛盾，重建友谊，升华 “互助与和解” 的主题。
2. 读人物
Isaac：热爱烘焙、技艺娴熟，重感情（渴望修复与 Dayna 的友谊），性格略带被动（担心被拒绝不敢主动），遇危机易慌乱，但懂得感恩。
Dayna：烘焙技能精湛，专注认真，看似冷淡实则内心珍视友谊，观察力敏锐（察觉 Isaac 恐慌），善良大度，主动打破僵局。
Mrs. Cooper：烘焙课老师、比赛组织者，公正专业，是推动两人参与比赛的背景人物。
3. 读时态
全文以一般过去时为主。
4. 读冲突
外在冲突：Isaac 决赛前忘带关键装饰材料（巧克力），面临比赛失利的危机；两人因过往争吵产生的隔阂与尴尬。
内在冲突：Isaac “渴望修复友谊” 与 “害怕被拒绝” 的心理挣扎；Dayna “表面冷淡” 与 “内心珍视友谊” 的矛盾。
5. 读情绪发展
Isaac：尴尬（被 Dayna 主动问候）→ 紧张（比赛中的专注与试探）→ 恐慌（发现忘带巧克力）→（续写发展：惊讶 + 感激，接受 Dayna 帮助）→（续写结局：释然 + 喜悦，与 Dayna 和解）Dayna：冷淡（初期互动的疏离）→ 专注（比赛中的投入）→ 关注（察觉 Isaac 异常）→（续写发展：主动 + 坚定，提供帮助）→（续写结局：欣慰 + 释然，重拾友谊）
6. 读主题
友谊的韧性与珍贵（即使有隔阂，关键时刻仍会彼此守护）
互助的温暖力量（危机中的援手是打破隔阂的钥匙）
放下心结与和解（过往矛盾在理解与包容中化解）
二、【十句五定法】—— 搭建你的写作框架
请根据两个段落的开头语，构思并完成以下句子，以搭建清晰的段落结构。
段落 句子功能 你的句子构思
第一段 1. 接续 Hint1 描写 Dayna 察觉恐慌的细节（如 “停下手中的活，皱眉看向 Isaac”），及主动靠近的动作。
2. 动作 / 心理推进 刻画 Dayna 的询问（轻声关切）与 Isaac 的窘迫回应（坦白忘带巧克力），展现两人的互动张力。
3. 有效过渡 描写 Dayna 的反应（沉默片刻，转身取物），制造轻微悬念，为 “提供帮助” 铺垫。
4. 有效衔接 描述关键帮助场景（Dayna 递出自己的巧克力，简单说明 “一起竞争才有意思”），体现其善良与大度。
5. 段落收束 以 Isaac 的感激与重新投入比赛收尾（如 “握紧巧克力，快速回到工作台，心中满是暖意”），为第二段获奖铺垫。
第二段 6. 接续 Hint2 描写获奖瞬间（如 “听到名字后愣住，随后快步上台”），及台下 Dayna 的反应（微笑鼓掌）。
7. 情节发展 描写 Isaac 获奖后的行动（下台后径直走向 Dayna，递出部分奖品或表达感谢），主动打破隔阂。
8. 主题升华 通过两人的对话，解开过往矛盾（如 Isaac 道歉，Dayna 表示早已释怀），点明 “友谊比输赢重要”。
9. 结局呈现 描写两人和解后的互动（如 “约定下次一起练习烘焙”“相视一笑，尴尬尽消”），展现友谊的回归。
10. 富有余韵的结尾 用象征或场景定格收尾（如 “阳光透过烘焙房的窗户，洒在两人手中的纸杯蛋糕上，甜蜜一如重拾的友谊”），回扣主题。
三、【微写作训练】—— 打磨你的语言
1. 人物心理描写
恐慌 / 焦灼（Isaac 忘带巧克力时）：Panic surged through Isaac’s body as he searched his bag repeatedly—his magic weapon for winning was nowhere to be found.（Isaac 反复翻找背包，恐慌席卷全身 —— 他的制胜法宝不见了。）
惊讶 / 感激（Isaac 收到帮助时）：A wave of surprise and gratitude washed over him when Dayna handed him the chocolates—he never expected she’d help at such a crucial moment.（当 Dayna 递给他巧克力时，Isaac 心中涌起一阵惊讶与感激 —— 他从未想过她会在如此关键的时刻伸出援手。）
释然 / 喜悦（和解后）：A sense of relief and joy settled in Isaac’s heart as they smiled at each other—all the awkwardness and misunderstanding had vanished into thin air.（当两人相视而笑时，Isaac 心中满是释然与喜悦 —— 所有的尴尬与误解都烟消云散了。）
2. 情感描写
隔阂与试探：The awkward silence between them lingered at first, but Dayna’s gentle question broke the ice, revealing the unspoken care beneath the distance.（起初两人间的尴尬沉默挥之不去，但 Dayna 温柔的询问打破了僵局，显露了疏离之下未曾言说的关心。）
互助的温暖：Dayna’s small act of kindness wasn’t just about sharing chocolates—it was a bridge that mended their broken friendship.（Dayna 小小的善举不止是分享巧克力，更是修复破碎友谊的桥梁。）
和解的甜蜜：Their friendship, once strained by argument, now bloomed like the decorative flowers on their cupcakes—sweet and genuine.（他们曾因争吵而紧张的友谊，如今像纸杯蛋糕上的装饰花一样绽放 —— 甜蜜而真挚。）
3. 动作描写
恐慌失措（Isaac）：Isaac’s hands trembled as he rummaged through his baking bag, his eyes scanning every corner, sweat dripping down his forehead.（Isaac 双手颤抖地翻着烘焙包，目光扫过每个角落，汗水顺着额头滴落。）
主动关切（Dayna）：Dayna paused her mixing, frowned slightly, and walked over to Isaac quietly, her steps light as she didn’t want to disturb others.（Dayna 停下搅拌，微微皱眉，悄悄走向 Isaac，脚步轻柔以免打扰他人。）
和解互动（两人）：Isaac held out the trophy, his voice sincere: “This should be ours,” while Dayna shook her head, taking a cupcake and handing him one in return.（Isaac 递出奖杯，语气真诚：“这应该是我们的”，而 Dayna 摇摇头，拿起一个纸杯蛋糕，也回递给他一个。）
4. 环境象征描写
烘焙房→友谊修复地：The warm, fragrant baking club—filled with the smell of flour and sugar—transformed from a competition venue into a place of reconciliation.（温暖芬芳的烘焙俱乐部，弥漫着面粉和糖的香气，从比赛场地变成了和解之地。）
巧克力→和解的钥匙：The shiny chocolates, once Isaac’s “magic weapon,” now became a symbol of Dayna’s generosity and their rekindled friendship.（曾经是 Isaac “制胜法宝” 的闪亮巧克力，如今成了 Dayna 大度与两人重燃友谊的象征。）
纸杯蛋糕→友谊的甜蜜：The beautifully decorated cupcakes, with their colorful frosting and fresh toppings, mirrored the sweetness of their mended friendship.（装饰精美的纸杯蛋糕，带着五彩糖霜和新鲜配料，映射着他们修复后友谊的甜蜜。）
【专项微训练】—— 为故事注入灵魂
训练一：环境描写 烘托心情
（选择贴合氛围的词语造句，强化场景与情绪的关联）
心情 可选词汇（中英对照） 你的造句
恐慌 / 焦灼 烤箱嗡嗡作响 (ovens humming); 汗水滴落 (sweat dripping); 心跳急促 (heart pounding) 决赛现场，______，Isaac 翻遍背包却找不到巧克力，指尖都开始发凉。
惊讶 / 感激 香气弥漫 (fragrance lingering); 目光交汇 (eyes meeting); 嘴角微扬 (corner of the mouth lifting) ______，当 Dayna 把巧克力塞进他手里时，Isaac 愣住了，两人短暂的目光交汇让尴尬少了几分。
释然 / 喜悦 阳光洒落 (sunlight streaming in); 笑声清脆 (clear laughter); 纸杯蛋糕摆放整齐 (cupcakes lined up neatly) ______，Isaac 和 Dayna 并肩品尝着彼此的纸杯蛋糕，过往的矛盾仿佛从未存在过。
参考答案
决赛现场，ovens humming loudly, sweat dripping down his cheeks, and his heart pounding rapidly（烤箱嗡嗡作响，汗水顺着脸颊滴落，心跳急促），Isaac 翻遍背包却找不到巧克力，指尖都开始发凉。
Fragrance of vanilla lingering in the air, their eyes meeting briefly, and a faint smile lifting the corner of Dayna’s mouth（香草香气弥漫在空气中，两人目光短暂交汇，Dayna 嘴角微扬），当 Dayna 把巧克力塞进他手里时，Isaac 愣住了，两人短暂的目光交汇让尴尬少了几分。
Sunlight streaming through the club’s windows, clear laughter echoing around, and cupcakes lined up neatly on the table（阳光透过俱乐部的窗户洒落，清脆的笑声四处回荡，纸杯蛋糕整齐地摆放在桌上），Isaac 和 Dayna 并肩品尝着彼此的纸杯蛋糕，过往的矛盾仿佛从未存在过。
训练二：人物刻画 于细微处见真情
（将抽象描述与具体动作 / 神态连线，选择一句仿写，凸显人物性格）
Isaac 重感情且感恩 A. He held the chocolates tightly, his voice trembling slightly: “Thank you—this means more than winning.”
Dayna 外冷内热且大度 B. She didn’t say much, just pulled out her own chocolate bag, handed it to him, and said softly: “Competition is boring without a worthy rival.”
两人和解后默契 C. They glanced at each other, then laughed at the same time, reaching for the same cupcake on the plate.
连线答案：1-A；2-B；3-C仿写示例（选择第 2 句）：He didn’t argue anymore, just took out the book he’d been keeping, passed it to her, and smiled gently: “Friendship is more important than being right.”（他没有再争辩，只是拿出一直珍藏的书，递给她，温柔地笑了：“友谊比输赢更重要。”）
训练三：情感表达 找到 “高级替身”
（替换直白词汇，让情感表达更细腻生动）
直白表达 高级替代表达（中英对照）
“恐慌”（Isaac） panic surged through his veins（恐慌涌上心头）；a knot of anxiety in his stomach（心里一阵焦灼）
“感激”（Isaac） feel deeply grateful from the bottom of his heart（发自内心深深感激）；gratitude welled up in his eyes（眼中满是感激）
“释然”（两人） a weight lifted off their shoulders（如释重负）；the tension melted away（紧张感消散）
例句升级原句：Isaac was very panicked when he couldn’t find chocolates, and he was very grateful when Dayna helped him.升级句：A knot of anxiety settled in Isaac’s stomach when he failed to find his chocolates, but gratitude welled up in his eyes the moment Dayna offered her own.（Isaac 找不到巧克力时心里一阵焦灼，但 Dayna 递出自己的巧克力那一刻，他眼中满是感激。）
训练四：动作细节 让情感可视化
（为情境补充具体动作，体现人物内心，避免 “直白描述”）
情境 直白版 细节版（参考）
1. Isaac 发现忘带巧克力时（体现 “恐慌”） Isaac was panicked because he forgot chocolates. Isaac froze for a second, then rummaged through his bag frantically—his hands brushed past flour bags and measuring cups, but there was no sign of the chocolate box. He bit his lip, sweat soaking his forehead.（Isaac 愣了一秒，然后疯狂翻找背包 —— 双手掠过面粉袋和量杯，却没有巧克力盒的踪影。他咬着嘴唇，汗水浸湿了额头。）
2. Dayna 递巧克力时（体现 “外冷内热”） Dayna gave Isaac her chocolates. Dayna sighed softly, turned to her own workstation, and pulled out a small silver bag. She walked over to Isaac without much fanfare, held out the bag, and avoided his gaze slightly: “Take it. I have extra.”（Dayna 轻轻叹了口气，转身走向自己的工作台，拿出一个银色小包。她不声不响地走到 Isaac 面前，递出袋子，微微避开他的目光：“拿着吧，我有多的。”）
3. 两人和解时（体现 “默契”） They made up and became friends again. Isaac took a cupcake from his tray, spread some extra frosting on top, and handed it to Dayna. Dayna smiled, taking it and offering hers in return. Their fingers brushed briefly, and they both laughed—no more words were needed to mend the rift.（Isaac 从自己的托盘里拿起一个纸杯蛋糕，多抹了些糖霜，递给 Dayna。Dayna 笑了笑，接过它，也回递了自己的。两人手指短暂相触，都笑了 —— 无需更多言语，隔阂已然修复。）
训练五：象征与隐喻 让主题更深刻
（将抽象概念与故事中的 “具体事物” 关联，深化主题，避免 “直白点题”）
巧克力 → 不仅是 “烘焙材料”，更象征着 the bridge of reconciliation between friends（朋友间和解的桥梁），是危机中主动伸出的援手，打破了隔阂。
纸杯蛋糕 → 不仅是 “比赛作品”，更象征着 the sweetness of friendship（友谊的甜蜜），从共同热爱到彼此守护，承载着两人的情感联结。
烘焙比赛 → 不仅是 “竞技赛场”，更象征着 the test of friendship（友谊的考验），真正的竞争不是彼此对立，而是相互成就。
四、综合训练与范文引导
训练：补全段落（结合 “十句五定法” 框架与微写作技巧，完善续写内容）
Paragraph 1
Dayna must have sensed my panic.She paused her mixing, her brows furrowing slightly as she glanced in my direction. Leaving her own cupcakes half-decorated, she walked over quietly, her steps light enough not to disturb other contestants. “Lost something ” she asked softly, her voice free of the usual awkwardness. I nodded, my face burning with embarrassment: “My chocolates—they’re my magic weapon for decorating.” Dayna didn’t hesitate. She turned back to her workstation, pulled out a small silver bag, and handed it to me. “I have extra,” she said simply, avoiding my eyes for a second before adding, “Competition’s no fun without a real rival.” I held the chocolates tightly, a wave of gratitude washing over me. Without wasting a second, I got back to work, my hands steady now that the panic had faded.
Paragraph 2
Thanks to Dayna’s chocolates, I won!When Mrs. Cooper called my name, I stared in disbelief for a moment before rushing to the stage. As I held the trophy, my eyes immediately found Dayna in the crowd—she was smiling and clapping loudly, her face bright with genuine joy. After the ceremony, I walked straight to her, holding out half of the prize cookies. “This is yours,” I said sincerely. “I couldn’t have done it without you.” Dayna took a cookie, her smile softening. “I’m sorry about last year,” she said suddenly. “I was too stubborn to apologize.” I laughed, feeling a weight lift off my shoulders: “Me too. Let’s not let a silly argument ruin our friendship again.” We stood there, munching on cookies and chatting like old times. As we walked out of the baking club together, the sun warmed our backs, and I knew our friendship—just like the cupcakes we baked—would only get sweeter with time.
范文亮点解析
情节连贯：严格遵循 “察觉恐慌→主动帮助→获奖致谢→解开矛盾→友谊重燃” 的逻辑，呼应原文 “修复友谊” 的核心线索，无脱节。
细节鲜活：通过 “皱眉瞥向”“轻步走近”“避开目光” 等动作，凸显 Dayna “外冷内热” 的性格；用 “脸发烫”“握紧巧克力” 等细节，体现 Isaac 的窘迫与感激，符合人物设定。
情感真挚：用 “无需犹豫递巧克力”“真心鼓掌”“主动道歉” 等情节，传递 “友谊比输赢重要” 的主题；结尾 “友谊如纸杯蛋糕般愈发甜蜜” 的隐喻，避免直白说教，余味悠长。
时态准确：全程使用一般过去时（如 “paused”“furrowed”“walked”“held”“stared”“said”），符合原文时态要求，无语法错误。
