第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整短文。
It was our twenty-fifth wedding anniversary. To celebrate, my husband George and I took a short trip to the nearby mountains. We loved the peace of nature, and the autumn colors—golden leaves, crisp air, and quiet trails—made the journey special. Packing a small picnic, we set off along a forest path covered with fallen leaves, laughing as we remembered our early years together.
Halfway up, I slipped on a wet, mossy rock. I cried out, and George quickly caught me before I fell hard. “Are you okay ” he asked, holding me tightly. I tried to stand, but a sharp pain shot through my left ankle. “Just a twist,” I said, not wanting to ruin our day. “I can manage.” But by morning, the pain had worsened. Even with help, I could barely walk. We decided to return home early.
At the hospital, the doctor examined my ankle and ordered an X-ray. While waiting, the silence felt heavy. I thought of my mother’s long illness—how a small issue had led to months of worry. George sat beside me, quietly holding my hand. His calm presence steadied me, though I saw concern in his eyes.
Later, the doctor returned with a serious look. “The X-ray shows something unusual near the joint. We need more tests to understand it fully.” My heart sank. That night, I was admitted for observation. Lying in the pale blue hospital bed, I stared at the ceiling, fear creeping in with the darkness.
Then, through the thin wall, I heard a soft voice from the next room—broken with pain and fear. “I just want to get better…” It was a young woman, barely whispering. In that moment, my own worries quieted. I remembered what I always told my students: We can’t control what happens, but we can choose how we respond. Taking a deep breath, I made a quiet promise: no matter the result, I would face it with courage, not fear. A sense of calm slowly replaced the anxiety. I realized that strength isn’t the absence of fear, but the choice to move forward. Lying in the bed, I heard every tick of the clock echo my thoughts about the upcoming results.
注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1
The morning sun was shining when the doctor came in.
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Paragraph 2
Three months after my successful surgery, I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students.
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内容解析：解题过程中最重要的是读懂原文，找出所有的人物以及人物之间的关系，找到文章的主要内容，并理清文章给出的主线。
第一步：首先, 原文段落内容 分析：
第一段：人物 Gorge和我，结婚纪念日，情绪为开心-----celebrate loved laughing
第二段：事故发生，扭伤但不能继续游玩 关键词：
slipped a sharp pain worsened
第三段：等待检查结果的过程中，丈夫很关心。
While waiting, the silence felt heavy.， my mother’s long illness， led to months of worry，concern in his eyes情绪渲染很突出了。
第四段：等待再次的检查结果的不安心态。with a serious look something unusual need more tests sank was admitted for observation. fear creeping in with the darkness.
第五段：作者的心理状态的改变过程。We can’t control what happens, but we can choose how we respond. 这句话表明了作者的心理开始变得坚强起来。
第二步；重点理解文章的结尾，对于结尾段做到全理解。就本文来说，最后一短的全文翻译为：
随后，透过那层薄薄的墙壁，我听到了隔壁房间传来的一个轻柔的声音——带着痛苦和恐惧的颤抖。“我只是想好起来……”那是一位年轻女子，声音几乎是在低语。就在那一刻，我自己的忧虑也渐渐平息了。我想起了总是对学生们说的话：我们无法控制发生的事情，但我们可以选择如何应对。深吸一口气后，我默默地许下了一个承诺：无论结果如何，我都会以勇气而非恐惧去面对。一种平静的感觉慢慢取代了焦虑。我意识到，力量并非是没有恐惧的状态，而是选择前行的选择。躺在床上，我听到时钟的每一声滴答声都与我对即将到来的结果的思考相呼应。
最后一段的主要内容是后半段，作者回忆起自己对学生的要求“我们无法控制发生的事情，但我们可以选择如何应对。”从而心理平静了，下决心要面对任何结果。
第三步，读懂给出的第一段的段首句和第二段的段首句，从第二段的段首句来决定自己的写作中第一段的结局。Three months after my successful surgery, I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students中的successful surgery说明作者是通过手术后才康复的，因此可以断定第一段的内容为：第二情节：需要手术，倒着推断，第一情节：医生通知检查结果，为第一段的主要内容;但我们在设置自己的情节时需要跟原文结合，文章的最后一段中提到了作者自己放松下来后听到了隔壁病室的一个年轻女子的情况，同作者一样在恐惧即将发生的事情。所以在第一段需要我们描写一下作者对年轻女人的关注，所以设置一个情节很有必要---第三情节：了解年轻女人的情况并给与基本的支持，内容就是作者的思想，勇敢去面对一切，恐惧是没必要的。因此第一段的内容完全展示了出来。同样的方法去组织第二段的情节，关键信息在第二段的段首句中； I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students. 说明这一段的主要内容发生在教室里，主要内容分为两部分，第一部分是分享自己在医院里和女孩子之间的互相支持（一句带过），第二部分是思想的升华，决定我们人生的不是困难而是我们面对困难时候的智慧和态度。
第四步，在成文写作中需要添加一些描写，移情于景，寓景于情。
第五步，语言的加工和润色，续写评分标准建立在不跑题的基础上，尽量只用高级句型和高级词汇，连贯作用的词或者短语要运用得当。
第六步：最后形成文章，书写干净整洁。尽量拿到一切可以得到的分数。
下面我们一起来欣赏一篇例文
One possible version:
Paragraph 1:
The morning sun was shining when the doctor came in. "Good news," the doctor announced, "It's a slight bony growth. A minor surgery will resolve it completely." A wave of relief washed over me. George squeezed my hand, his eyes glistening with tears. At that moment, the sun seemed to dance across the pale blue walls, chasing away the worries. Remembering my nighttime resolve, I inquired about the girl next door. Upon learning she was a student facing surgery alone and terrified, I asked George to bring my favorite book of poems from home—the same collection I often turned to in my classroom to offer comfort and perspective.
Paragraph 2:
Three months after my successful surgery, I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students. " I told them what had happened to me and described how I had visited the girl next door after my surgery, reading poems to her as she recovered. We became friends, supporting each other through recovery. "Life will have its slippery paths," I said, looking at their bright faces, "but what defines us isn't the fall - it's how we choose to get up, and whether we extend a hand to others along the way." Outside, snow-covered branches glistened in the sunlight, reminding us that even in the coldest seasons, there's warmth to be found in connection.
Para1
情节1 "Good news," the doctor announced, "It's a slight bony growth. A minor surgery will resolve it completely."
描写1 A wave of relief washed over me. George squeezed my hand, his eyes glistening with tears. At that moment, the sun seemed to dance across the pale blue walls, chasing away the worries.
从三个角度进行了情绪渲染，第一 ， 轻松 ； 第二 丈夫眼里放着光；第三，寓景于情，阳光舞蹈，驱散了一切的忧心
情节2 Remembering my nighttime resolve, I inquired about the girl next door. Upon learning she was a student facing surgery alone and terrified, I asked George to bring my favorite book of poems from home—the same collection I often turned to in my classroom to offer comfort and perspective 。
此处与原文内容结合紧密，完成了内容的连贯。
Para2 情节1 I told them what had happened to me and described how I had visited the girl next door after my surgery, reading poems to her as she recovered. We became friends, supporting each other through recovery.
完成内容的连贯：讲述了医院的故事。
情节2 "Life will have its slippery paths," I said, looking at their bright faces, "but what defines us isn't the fall - it's how we choose to get up, and whether we extend a hand to others along the way."
内容的升华。生活有它自己的道路，但决定我们生活的不是跌倒，而是我们选择站起来的方式和我们是否伸出手去帮助他人。
句子以及词汇解析：
词汇激活 resolve
squeeze
chase away
inquire about
perspective
wash over sb
upon doing
comfort
extend a hand to others
情绪类 glisten with tears
bright faces
点睛：
高分句
1 A wave of relief washed over me .
情绪的高级表达方式，用情绪名词做主语代替某人做主语，让句子含义表达更鲜活。
2 At that moment, the sun seemed to dance across the pale blue walls, chasing away the worries.
分词做状语，用环境描写渲染情绪，突出了开心的心情
Remembering my nighttime resolve, I inquired about the girl next door.
分词做状语运用了分词这个高级结构
We became friends, supporting each other through recovery.
分词做状语
3 Upon learning she was a student facing surgery alone and terrified, I asked George to...
高级句子结构on+doing表达一......就......
4 I told them what had happened to me and described how I had visited the girl next door after my surgery, ......。
what引导的宾语从句和how引导的宾语从句
5 ...what defines us isn't the fall - it's how we choose to get up, and whether we extend a hand to others along the way
what 引导的主语从句以及how和whether引导的表达从句走属于高级句型句式。
练习一（2024年12月山东师大附中高三阶段性检测试题）
第二节 （满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Mother’s Heartfelt Note of Love
Everything seemed to change for me when I entered high school. In my freshman class, I never saw a single person I knew from middle school. At home I was just as lonely. My older brother was a senior, consumed with future decisions about college or military life. My little brother didn’t want anything to do with me, “a girl.” My older sister was outgoing and never without her friends. They all fit in, I thought. Why can’t I
Mom was there waiting for me. “Karole, your bedroom’s a disaster. Why can’t you keep it clean ” The last thing I needed was criticism from my mother. Clean your room. Finish your dinner. Clean the dishes. What had happened to the mother who used to snuggle with me on the couch, reading to me, loving me with complete acceptance I didn’t bother trying to explain my misery. It was easier to sit with my tight-lipped moodiness, holed up in my bedroom.
I sat down at my desk and pulled out my math textbook. I turned to a fresh page in my notebook and started working out the first problem. Almost immediately, I saw I’d made a mistake. I tore the paper out of my notebook, balled it up in my fist and threw it at the wastepaper basket. By the time I finished my homework, the floor was littered with crumpled (起皱的) paper. Every time I looked at those crumpled balls, I reminded myself what a failure I was. But my unhappiness stayed hidden away, just like those mistakes.
One day, I came home to an empty house. It was a relief not to be met with Mom’s latest complaint. I went up to my bedroom as usual. When I opened the door, I froze. It was neat as a pin. Mom had obviously decided to clean it herself. All the crumpled papers had disappeared. Except one single sheet. I picked up the sheet and turned it over.
I recognized Mom’s perfect handwriting at once: “Dear Karole, I have noticed your unhappiness these days and I am sorry for being so critical of you lately. I will always love you and side with you when you need my support. I expect you to be the same, sweet self. Love, Mom.”
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
(
I sat down at my desk and read the note
again
.
When she got home, I let down my guard and talked to her
.
)
I sat down at my desk and read the note again.
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When she got home, I let down my guard and talked to her.
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练习二（2024~2025第一学期江苏省泰州中学高三年级模拟一考试）
77. 阅读材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My friend invited me to a trapeze (高空秋千) class. I was doubtful because of a lack of courage and a short of self-confidence, but her enthusiasm and assurances of strict safety rules won me over.
I had been fearful of heights since elementary school and avoiding my fear of heights became second nature. But here I was, at age twenty-six, facing my fear of heights in a rather extreme way. I had come around to the idea of trying trapeze. I figured it wasn’t much different from swinging (舞动) on the monkey bars as a kid. One difficulty I didn’t expect was the ladder (梯子). In order to reach the trapeze, I had to climb up a twenty-two-foot ladder.
I could hear one of my classmates expressing her impatience with my slow climb up the ladder. “If she’s afraid of heights, why did she sign up for a trapeze class ” However, my friend was at the top of the ladder, trying to encourage me. Besides, his distraction techniques helped to take my mind off my dangerous task. I found a rhythm(节奏) and kept going. With a slow and steady pace, I made it to the top. The cheers from my classmates rang out below.
An instructor told me to step to the edge of the platform. He reminded me of the safety rules, including the net below that would catch me at the bottom. He also asked me to listen to the directions while in the air, so I could perform a trick.
As the instructor counted down, I took a deep breath and pushed off the platform, swinging back and forth. At that moment, I lost awareness of time and space. Fortunately, the instructor’s voice came over the loudspeaker, giving me step-by-step instructions for performing a trick. Instead of doubting my inability to perform the trick, I took his directions one step at a time.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
During my flight on the trapeze, my fear didn’t completely leave me.
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This experience opened up a new way of seeing myself and approaching other challenges.
___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整短文。
It was our twenty-fifth wedding anniversary. To celebrate, my husband George and I took a short trip to the nearby mountains. We loved the peace of nature, and the autumn colors—golden leaves, crisp air, and quiet trails—made the journey special. Packing a small picnic, we set off along a forest path covered with fallen leaves, laughing as we remembered our early years together.
Halfway up, I slipped on a wet, mossy rock. I cried out, and George quickly caught me before I fell hard. “Are you okay ” he asked, holding me tightly. I tried to stand, but a sharp pain shot through my left ankle. “Just a twist,” I said, not wanting to ruin our day. “I can manage.” But by morning, the pain had worsened. Even with help, I could barely walk. We decided to return home early.
At the hospital, the doctor examined my ankle and ordered an X-ray. While waiting, the silence felt heavy. I thought of my mother’s long illness—how a small issue had led to months of worry. George sat beside me, quietly holding my hand. His calm presence steadied me, though I saw concern in his eyes.
Later, the doctor returned with a serious look. “The X-ray shows something unusual near the joint. We need more tests to understand it fully.” My heart sank. That night, I was admitted for observation. Lying in the pale blue hospital bed, I stared at the ceiling, fear creeping in with the darkness.
Then, through the thin wall, I heard a soft voice from the next room—broken with pain and fear. “I just want to get better…” It was a young woman, barely whispering. In that moment, my own worries quieted. I remembered what I always told my students: We can’t control what happens, but we can choose how we respond. Taking a deep breath, I made a quiet promise: no matter the result, I would face it with courage, not fear. A sense of calm slowly replaced the anxiety. I realized that strength isn’t the absence of fear, but the choice to move forward. Lying in the bed, I heard every tick of the clock echo my thoughts about the upcoming results.
注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1
The morning sun was shining when the doctor came in.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2
Three months after my successful surgery, I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
内容解析：解题过程中最重要的是读懂原文，找出所有的人物以及人物之间的关系，找到文章的主要内容，并理清文章给出的主线。
第一步：首先, 原文段落内容 分析：
第一段：人物 Gorge和我，结婚纪念日，情绪为开心-----celebrate loved laughing
第二段：事故发生，扭伤但不能继续游玩 关键词：
slipped a sharp pain worsened
第三段：等待检查结果的过程中，丈夫很关心。
While waiting, the silence felt heavy.， my mother’s long illness， led to months of worry，concern in his eyes情绪渲染很突出了。
第四段：等待再次的检查结果的不安心态。with a serious look something unusual need more tests sank was admitted for observation. fear creeping in with the darkness.
第五段：作者的心理状态的改变过程。We can’t control what happens, but we can choose how we respond. 这句话表明了作者的心理开始变得坚强起来。
第二步；重点理解文章的结尾，对于结尾段做到全理解。就本文来说，最后一短的全文翻译为：
随后，透过那层薄薄的墙壁，我听到了隔壁房间传来的一个轻柔的声音——带着痛苦和恐惧的颤抖。“我只是想好起来……”那是一位年轻女子，声音几乎是在低语。就在那一刻，我自己的忧虑也渐渐平息了。我想起了总是对学生们说的话：我们无法控制发生的事情，但我们可以选择如何应对。深吸一口气后，我默默地许下了一个承诺：无论结果如何，我都会以勇气而非恐惧去面对。一种平静的感觉慢慢取代了焦虑。我意识到，力量并非是没有恐惧的状态，而是选择前行的选择。躺在床上，我听到时钟的每一声滴答声都与我对即将到来的结果的思考相呼应。
最后一段的主要内容是后半段，作者回忆起自己对学生的要求“我们无法控制发生的事情，但我们可以选择如何应对。”从而心理平静了，下决心要面对任何结果。
第三步，读懂给出的第一段的段首句和第二段的段首句，从第二段的段首句来决定自己的写作中第一段的结局。Three months after my successful surgery, I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students中的successful surgery说明作者是通过手术后才康复的，因此可以断定第一段的内容为：第二情节：需要手术，倒着推断，第一情节：医生通知检查结果，为第一段的主要内容;但我们在设置自己的情节时需要跟原文结合，文章的最后一段中提到了作者自己放松下来后听到了隔壁病室的一个年轻女子的情况，同作者一样在恐惧即将发生的事情。所以在第一段需要我们描写一下作者对年轻女人的关注，所以设置一个情节很有必要---第三情节：了解年轻女人的情况并给与基本的支持，内容就是作者的思想，勇敢去面对一切，恐惧是没必要的。因此第一段的内容完全展示了出来。同样的方法去组织第二段的情节，关键信息在第二段的段首句中； I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students. 说明这一段的主要内容发生在教室里，主要内容分为两部分，第一部分是分享自己在医院里和女孩子之间的互相支持（一句带过），第二部分是思想的升华，决定我们人生的不是困难而是我们面对困难时候的智慧和态度。
第四步，在成文写作中需要添加一些描写，移情于景，寓景于情。
第五步，语言的加工和润色，续写评分标准建立在不跑题的基础上，尽量只用高级句型和高级词汇，连贯作用的词或者短语要运用得当。
第六步：最后形成文章，书写干净整洁。尽量拿到一切可以得到的分数。
下面我们一起来欣赏一篇例文
One possible version:
Paragraph 1:
The morning sun was shining when the doctor came in. "Good news," the doctor announced, "It's a slight bony growth. A minor surgery will resolve it completely." A wave of relief washed over me. George squeezed my hand, his eyes glistening with tears. At that moment, the sun seemed to dance across the pale blue walls, chasing away the worries. Remembering my nighttime resolve, I inquired about the girl next door. Upon learning she was a student facing surgery alone and terrified, I asked George to bring my favorite book of poems from home—the same collection I often turned to in my classroom to offer comfort and perspective.
Paragraph 2:
Three months after my successful surgery, I stood in my classroom, sharing my experience with curious students. " I told them what had happened to me and described how I had visited the girl next door after my surgery, reading poems to her as she recovered. We became friends, supporting each other through recovery. "Life will have its slippery paths," I said, looking at their bright faces, "but what defines us isn't the fall - it's how we choose to get up, and whether we extend a hand to others along the way." Outside, snow-covered branches glistened in the sunlight, reminding us that even in the coldest seasons, there's warmth to be found in connection.
Para1
情节1 "Good news," the doctor announced, "It's a slight bony growth. A minor surgery will resolve it completely."
描写1 A wave of relief washed over me. George squeezed my hand, his eyes glistening with tears. At that moment, the sun seemed to dance across the pale blue walls, chasing away the worries.
从三个角度进行了情绪渲染，第一 ， 轻松 ； 第二 丈夫眼里放着光；第三，寓景于情，阳光舞蹈，驱散了一切的忧心
情节2 Remembering my nighttime resolve, I inquired about the girl next door. Upon learning she was a student facing surgery alone and terrified, I asked George to bring my favorite book of poems from home—the same collection I often turned to in my classroom to offer comfort and perspective 。
此处与原文内容结合紧密，完成了内容的连贯。
Para2 情节1 I told them what had happened to me and described how I had visited the girl next door after my surgery, reading poems to her as she recovered. We became friends, supporting each other through recovery.
完成内容的连贯：讲述了医院的故事。
情节2 "Life will have its slippery paths," I said, looking at their bright faces, "but what defines us isn't the fall - it's how we choose to get up, and whether we extend a hand to others along the way."
内容的升华。生活有它自己的道路，但决定我们生活的不是跌倒，而是我们选择站起来的方式和我们是否伸出手去帮助他人。
句子以及词汇解析：
词汇激活 resolve
squeeze
chase away
inquire about
perspective
wash over sb
upon doing
comfort
extend a hand to others
情绪类 glisten with tears
bright faces
点睛：
高分句
1 A wave of relief washed over me .
情绪的高级表达方式，用情绪名词做主语代替某人做主语，让句子含义表达更鲜活。
2 At that moment, the sun seemed to dance across the pale blue walls, chasing away the worries.
分词做状语，用环境描写渲染情绪，突出了开心的心情
Remembering my nighttime resolve, I inquired about the girl next door.
分词做状语运用了分词这个高级结构
We became friends, supporting each other through recovery.
分词做状语
3 Upon learning she was a student facing surgery alone and terrified, I asked George to...
高级句子结构on+doing表达一......就......
4 I told them what had happened to me and described how I had visited the girl next door after my surgery, ......。
what引导的宾语从句和how引导的宾语从句
5 ...what defines us isn't the fall - it's how we choose to get up, and whether we extend a hand to others along the way
what 引导的主语从句以及how和whether引导的表达从句走属于高级句型句式。
练习一（2024年12月山东师大附中高三阶段性检测试题）
第二节 （满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Mother’s Heartfelt Note of Love
Everything seemed to change for me when I entered high school. In my freshman class, I never saw a single person I knew from middle school. At home I was just as lonely. My older brother was a senior, consumed with future decisions about college or military life. My little brother didn’t want anything to do with me, “a girl.” My older sister was outgoing and never without her friends. They all fit in, I thought. Why can’t I
Mom was there waiting for me. “Karole, your bedroom’s a disaster. Why can’t you keep it clean ” The last thing I needed was criticism from my mother. Clean your room. Finish your dinner. Clean the dishes. What had happened to the mother who used to snuggle with me on the couch, reading to me, loving me with complete acceptance I didn’t bother trying to explain my misery. It was easier to sit with my tight-lipped moodiness, holed up in my bedroom.
I sat down at my desk and pulled out my math textbook. I turned to a fresh page in my notebook and started working out the first problem. Almost immediately, I saw I’d made a mistake. I tore the paper out of my notebook, balled it up in my fist and threw it at the wastepaper basket. By the time I finished my homework, the floor was littered with crumpled (起皱的) paper. Every time I looked at those crumpled balls, I reminded myself what a failure I was. But my unhappiness stayed hidden away, just like those mistakes.
One day, I came home to an empty house. It was a relief not to be met with Mom’s latest complaint. I went up to my bedroom as usual. When I opened the door, I froze. It was neat as a pin. Mom had obviously decided to clean it herself. All the crumpled papers had disappeared. Except one single sheet. I picked up the sheet and turned it over.
I recognized Mom’s perfect handwriting at once: “Dear Karole, I have noticed your unhappiness these days and I am sorry for being so critical of you lately. I will always love you and side with you when you need my support. I expect you to be the same, sweet self. Love, Mom.”
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
(
I sat down at my desk and read the note
again
.
When she got home, I let down my guard and talked to her
.
)
内容解析：人物：哥哥（读大学还是参军）
弟弟（与我没有任何共同之处）
姐姐（活泼开朗永不孤独）
妈妈（唠叨）
Para1 进入高中学习后所有的变化，突出了作者的孤独
Para2 妈妈的变化：现在的唠叨和以前对我的爱对比，更加突出了作者的孤独感的强烈。让作者认为蜗居在自己的卧室更轻松
Para3 做数学作业中反复出错，作者用这样的描写把不开心跟做数学作业中的一个个被作者团成纸团的错误一样隐藏起来。
Para4 有一天转机的到来。妈妈打扫了作者的房间，作者收到了一个便条。
Para5 妈妈的留言，表达了妈妈的担心，关心和爱。妈妈给作者伸出了援助之手。更表达了妈妈希望作者开心的自己。
文章的结尾段全翻译：
我立刻就认出了妈妈那工整的笔迹：“亲爱的卡罗尔，我注意到你最近情绪不太好，对此我感到很抱歉，因为我最近对你过于苛责了。我会永远爱你，并在你需要我的支持时站在你这边。我也希望你能保持现在的样子，那个可爱的你自己。妈妈。”该段内容表达了妈妈的道歉和愿意给作者提供帮助。
第一段段首句：I sat down at my desk and read the note again ,第二段段首句为When she got home, I let down my guard and talked to her.说明第一段内容应该是表达作者的心理变化，从对妈妈的不耐烦和防护转变到了愿意对妈妈敞开心扉。因此第一段的主要情节设置为：
1妈妈的便条让我得到了心情上的放松
2回忆以前对作者的爱
3意识到了目前的不愉快都是自己把自己封闭起来而不是跟妈寻求建议
4明白了自己的问题。
第二段的段首句为When she got home, I let down my guard and talked to her。因此第二段的内容应该为：
1作者改变态度，不是妈妈变的不愿意搭理他了而是妈妈的爱依旧存在依旧是作者的倾听者
2只是改变了表达方式，但爱依旧在并一直在
3升华：有了妈妈的支持和爱，华我的青春我要勇敢面对开启自己的新的人生之旅。
例文赏析：
I sat down at my desk and read the note again. A weight seemed to lift from me. It was replaced by something as soft and comforting as an angel’s wing, as reassuring as Mom reading to me on the couch. I recalled how she would cheer me up when I was down, taking care of everything with all her heart. I saw that Mom still loved me the same way, and she wanted me to love myself too. But for the past weeks, I had chosen to shut myself instead of pouring out my emotions to seek advice. Mom had been honest with me, and I owed her the same.
When she got home, I let down my guard and talked to her. She and my father teamed up to offer some solutions that might help, like joining after-school clubs. They reminded me of things I was good at. Most of all, they listened to all I had bottled up inside. It seemed like everything changed in high school, not the least of which was me. But one heartfelt note set the stage for the rest of my teenage years. My mother had found a way to tell me—and for me to hear—that she still loved me, no matter what. With the support, I gathered up more courage and set out on a new journey.
情节分析：Para1
情节1 A weight seemed to lift from me. It was replaced by something as soft and comforting as an angel’s wing, as reassuring as Mom reading to me on the couch.
心头的重担离开，被温柔和安慰替代。
情节2 I recalled how she would cheer me up when I was down, taking care of everything with all her heart.
回忆妈妈的鼓励和照顾（与原文第二段的What had happened to the mother who used to snuggle with me on the couch, reading to me, loving me with complete acceptance 相呼应）
情节3 I saw that Mom still loved me the same way, and she wanted me to love myself too.
妈妈依旧爱我，并依旧希望我也爱我自己。（.与原文最后结尾处形成了呼应 I expect you to be the same, sweet self. Love, Mom.”）
情节4 But for the past weeks, I had chosen to shut myself instead of pouring out my emotions to seek advice. Mom had been honest with me, and I owed her the same.
意识到了我的这种孤独完全是因为我封闭了自己忘记了跟妈妈寻求建议。
情节分析 Para2
情节1 She and my father teamed up to offer some solutions that might help, like joining after-school clubs. They reminded me of things I was good at. Most of all, they listened to all I had bottled up inside.（回忆）
情节2 It seemed like everything changed in high school, not the least of which was me.
与目前的现实也就是原文内容结合
情节 3 But one heartfelt note set the stage for the rest of my teenage years. My mother had found a way to tell me—and for me to hear—that she still loved me, no matter what.
聊天变成了便条聊天
情节4 With the support, I gathered up more courage and set out on a new journey.
主题升华：有妈妈的支持和爱护，我决心勇敢面对我自己的人生新旅程
词句赏析
高级词汇：reassure
replace
recall
instead of
pour out
set the stage for
heartfelt
高级句型句式：
1 A weight seemed to lift from me.用物做主语表达心情，给人新鲜活泼感
2 It was replaced by something as soft and comforting as an angel’s wing, as reassuring as Mom reading to me on the couch.（两个as...as 的连续使用提升了表达的层次）
3 I recalled how she would cheer me up when I was down, taking care of everything with all her heart.运用了how 引导的宾语从句和when引导的时间状语从句，同时还运用了句子，+doing结构。
4 They reminded me of things I was good at。其中的 I was good at为定语从句。
例文段落等次分明，与原文十分吻合，做到了续写的基本要求。
评分原则：
总分25分；按5档给分；
评分时，先根据所给短文的内容和语言初步确定所属档次，然后以该档次要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分；
词数少于130词，总分扣除2分；
主要从以下4个方面考虑：
与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
内容丰富性
语法结构及词汇的丰富性和准确性；、
上下文连贯性。
拼写与标点符号准确性也是评分的一个重要方面；
(6)若书写较差，分数降低一档。
仔细阅读评分细则，得出属于自己的高分作文要有一下几个有点：
第一就是续写内容与原文内容高度吻合，不能跑题或者是偏题。第二就是词汇量要做到高级词汇的运用恰当正确，拼写不出现错误。
第三就是句式结构要多样化，简单句，复合句，强调句，倒装句和分词做到运用灵活无误，主动句和被动句的结合使用。
第四就是适当的运用物做主语表达心情和情绪，给阅读者一种新鲜感。让自己写出来的句子灵动形象。
第五就是段落层级结构分明，叫人一目明了情节的设置。
第六就是要段落内容连贯一体。最后就是书写要干净整洁，卷面有美感。
练习二（2024~2025第一学期江苏省泰州中学高三年级模拟一考试）
77. 阅读材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My friend invited me to a trapeze (高空秋千) class. I was doubtful because of a lack of courage and a short of self-confidence, but her enthusiasm and assurances of strict safety rules won me over.
I had been fearful of heights since elementary school and avoiding my fear of heights became second nature. But here I was, at age twenty-six, facing my fear of heights in a rather extreme way. I had come around to the idea of trying trapeze. I figured it wasn’t much different from swinging (舞动) on the monkey bars as a kid. One difficulty I didn’t expect was the ladder (梯子). In order to reach the trapeze, I had to climb up a twenty-two-foot ladder.
I could hear one of my classmates expressing her impatience with my slow climb up the ladder. “If she’s afraid of heights, why did she sign up for a trapeze class ” However, my friend was at the top of the ladder, trying to encourage me. Besides, his distraction techniques helped to take my mind off my dangerous task. I found a rhythm(节奏) and kept going. With a slow and steady pace, I made it to the top. The cheers from my classmates rang out below.
An instructor told me to step to the edge of the platform. He reminded me of the safety rules, including the net below that would catch me at the bottom. He also asked me to listen to the directions while in the air, so I could perform a trick.
As the instructor counted down, I took a deep breath and pushed off the platform, swinging back and forth. At that moment, I lost awareness of time and space. Fortunately, the instructor’s voice came over the loudspeaker, giving me step-by-step instructions for performing a trick. Instead of doubting my inability to perform the trick, I took his directions one step at a time.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150个左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
During my flight on the trapeze, my fear didn’t completely leave me.
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This experience opened up a new way of seeing myself and approaching other challenges. __________________________________________________
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One possible version
读后续写
During my flight on the trapeze. my fear didn’t completely leave me. My palms were clammy, my heart was racing, and my mouth was dry. But I turned down the dial of my fear so I could be present in the experience. I focused my thoughts on the instructor’s voice instead of my internal dialogue about what could go wrong. In the end, I successfully completed the task. I couldn’t believe I had actually done it!
This experience opened up a new way of seeing myself and approaching other challenges. I became more capable of overcoming my fear and learned to believe in myself. I became more open to try new things. After my trapeze flight, I took a boxing class, went on my first journey of high diving, and hiked along a 200-foot cliff in Nova Scotia. While these experiences made my heart pound, I completed them, one step at a time. Whether my steps were small or big on the ground or in midair, I wanted to keep stepping out of my comfort zone.
