人教新目标九年级英语Unit 13 We're trying to save the earth! 环保主题写作指导+高级素材+高分范文（学案）

人教新目标九年级英语Unit13环保主题写作指导+高级素材+高分范文
Part 1.书面表达
请根据以下要求和思维导图，完成短文写作。
保护环境不仅依靠科技的推动，还需要每个人的积极参与。假如你是校英语广播站的广播员李华，为配合你校正在开展的“保护环境，从我做起”主题活动，请你根据以下思维导图的提示用英文写一封倡议书，倡导同学们为环保做出自己的贡献。
作文要求：
(1)可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息。
(2)不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现真实校名、地点和考生的真实姓名。
(3)语句连贯，词数120左右。作文的开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。
Good morning, everyone I’m Li Hua.
Part 2.环保主题作文有关的高级语言素材整理
（一）高级短语
raise environmental awareness（提高环保意识）
sort garbage into categories（垃圾分类）
cut down carbon emissions（减少碳排放）
conserve natural resources（保护自然资源）
adopt eco-friendly habits（养成环保习惯）
reduce plastic use（减少塑料使用）
promote green transportation（倡导绿色出行）
recycle waste materials（回收废旧物资）
environmental protection 环境保护
take immediate action 立即采取行动
recycle waste materials 回收废旧材料
cut down on plastic use 减少塑料使用
save energy resources 节约能源
play a part in 参与
make a difference 产生影响
avoid disposable products 避免一次性用品
lead a low-carbon lifestyle 过低碳生活
attach great importance to environmental protection高度重视环境保护
deepen the understanding of green living深化对绿色生活的理解
participate in tree-planting activities参与植树活动
live in harmony with nature与自然和谐共处
join hands in environmental protection携手保护环境
（二）高级句式表达
It's of great significance to take small daily steps to protect our planet.（It's of great + n + to do sth 结构）每天采取微小的行动来保护我们的星球，这具有重要意义。
Not only can we recycle paper and bottles, but also we should reduce plastic use as much as possible.（not only 倒装 + as...as possible 结构）
Not only can we save energy by turning off unused appliances, but we also reduce pollution.（我们不仅可以通过关闭闲置电器节约能源，还能减少污染。）
What we do in daily life can make a big difference to the environment around us.（我们日常生活中的行为对我们周围的环境有着重大影响。）（主语从句）
The small habits that we ignore, like turning off lights when leaving, can save lots of energy.
Only in this way can we create a greener world for future generations.（部分倒装句）
Only by sticking to these small actions can we build a sustainable campus.（只有坚持这些微小的行动，我们才能建设可持续发展的校园。）
As students, we are supposed to cut down as much resource waste as possible .（作为学生，我们应尽可能多地减少资源浪费。）
We are supposed to develop habits that are friendly to the earth, such as reusing water bottles.（我们应养成对地球友好的习惯，比如重复使用水瓶。）（定语从句）
It is well-known that protecting the environment is everyone's responsibility.（众所周知，保护环境是每个人的责任。）
If we fail to value water, the last drop of water will be our own tears.（如果我们不珍惜水，那么最后一滴水将是我们自己的眼泪。）
Don’t let our tears be the last drop of water.(别让我们的眼泪成为最后一滴水。)
Part 3.环保主题作文有关的高级语言素材整理
（一）基础版
Good morning, everyone! I’m Li Hua. As our school is holding
the “Protect the Environment, Start with Me” activity, I’d like to call
on all of you to play a part in environmental protection.
There are easy and practical things that each of us can do.First
of all,we are supposed to sort and recycle waste like paper,bottles and cans,which helps save precious natural resources.Besides,we can
save energy by turning off lights and taps in time when we leave classrooms. Last but not least, try to walk or ride bikes to school as much as possible instead of riding in cars. It’s not only good for reducing
air pollution but also great for our health.
Every small step counts.Even the simplest actions can make our school and our planet cleaner and better.Let’s start from now on!
（二）升级版
Good morning, everyone! As the “Protect the Environment, Start with Me” activity is launched by our school, it’s essential that we
take immediate action to deal with the growing environmental problems.
Actually,there are simple and practical ways we can contribute to environmental protection.First of all, let’s develop the habit of recycling reusable
materials like paper and bottles,which greatly helps save precious natural
resources.Besides,we had better try to reduce plastic use as much as possible,such as bringing reusable bags instead of plastic ones when shopping.Furthermore, it’s advisable to choose green transportation like cycling,which not only cuts down air pollution but also benefits our physical health.Last but no least,we are supposed to spread environmental knowledge to our friends and
family,encouraging more people to join hands in protecting the environment.
Not only is protecting the environment a social commitment,but also our
personal responsibility.Only by sticking to these eco-friendly habits can we
build a greener world for us and future generations.Let’s take action without hesitation to make a real difference!
名师点评
一、基础版范文 名师点评
【总评】
本文完全符合题目要求，紧扣 “保护环境，从我做起” 主题，结构清晰、要点全面、语言简洁地道，是一篇合格且稳妥的考场作文，适合基础扎实的学生参考。全文逻辑连贯，无语法错误，能熟练运用基础句型完成写作任务，得分区间可定位为 “良好”（符合中考作文中等偏上水平）。
【亮点分析】
结构严谨，要点全覆盖：
采用 “总 — 分 — 总” 结构，开头点明活动背景并发出倡议，中间用 “First of all/Besides/Last but not least” 清晰列出垃圾分类、节约能源、绿色出行三大核心措施，结尾呼吁行动，完全匹配思维导图提示，且不遗漏关键信息。
语言准确，实用性强：
正确运用核心短语（play a part in, sort and recycle waste, save energy, turn off lights and taps）和基础句型（be supposed to do, instead of），表达简洁明了，无中式英语，符合初中生英语表达习惯。
语法规范，细节到位：
运用定语从句 “which helps save precious natural resources” 补充说明垃圾分类的意义，句式有一定变化；“as much as possible”“not only...but also...” 等结构的使用，让表达更丰富。
二、升级版范文 名师点评
【总评】
本文是一篇高分范文，在基础版的基础上实现了 “内容拓展、语言升级、逻辑深化”，完全符合中考 “优秀” 作文标准（得分区间：高分段）。全文主题鲜明，高级词汇与复杂句式运用自然，逻辑衔接紧密，不仅满足 “适当拓展” 要求，还体现了较强的语言运用能力和思维深度。
【亮点分析】
内容充实，拓展合理：
除覆盖垃圾分类、节约能源、绿色出行等基础要点外，新增 “减少塑料使用（自带环保袋）”“传播环保知识” 两大拓展内容，符合 “适当拓展” 要求；每个措施都有具体例子支撑（如 “bringing reusable bags instead of plastic ones”），内容更具说服力。
语言高级，素材运用娴熟：
密集且自然地运用了 Part 2 中的高级短语（take immediate action, reduce plastic use, green transportation, cut down air pollution, join hands in, spread environmental knowledge），无刻意堆砌感；高级句式（倒装句 “Not only is protecting the environment...but also...”、定语从句 “which greatly helps save...”、形式主语 “it’s essential that...”）的运用，提升了文章文采和语法复杂度。
逻辑连贯，思维深刻：
用 “First of all/Besides/Furthermore/Last but not least” 层层递进，衔接词更丰富；结尾升华主题，将环保从 “个人责任” 上升到 “社会使命”，体现了对主题的深刻理解，符合高分作文 “思想性” 要求。
表达地道，细节出彩：
如 “campaign is launched”“it’s advisable to...”“benefits our physical health” 等表达，符合英语书面语习惯；“encouraging more people to join hands...” 用现在分词短语作伴随状语，语法运用灵活。