第三讲 美文定标—高分作文需达到的“三美”标准
应用文写作虽以“实用”为核心，但“实用”不等于“平淡”。在准确传达信息、符合格式规范的基础上，通过语言的锤炼、情感的融入和细节的打磨，能让应用文既达意又动人，实现“规范”与“美感”的统一。本讲将从“语言之美” “得体之美” “结构之美”三个维度，解析让应用文焕发美感的关键技法，结合典例说明如何在实用框架中注入灵动表达。
一、语言之美：让文字凝练生动传意准
不同于文学创作的铺陈渲染，应用文的语言之美，在于用最精准、最凝练的文字承载最丰富的信息——既要摒弃冗余模糊的表达，让每个词都 “各司其职”，又要通过鲜活的措辞、灵动的句式，让抽象的意图变得可感可触。以下从具体技法入手，解析如何让应用文的语言既达意又动人。
高分技法(一) 摒弃笼统表达，精准用词显张力
避免使用“good” “very” “many” 等模糊词汇，选择能精准传递程度、状态或情感的词语，让表达更具体可感。
|基|础|表|达|
The park is very beautiful, and many people like it.
问题：笼统模糊，未体现“美”的细节和“人多”的状态。
|优|化|表|达|
The park, with blooming roses and a crystal clear lake, is extremely charming — visitors crowd here every weekend, lingering to enjoy the peace.
改进：“blooming roses”(盛开的玫瑰) “crystal clear lake”(清澈如水晶的湖)具象化“美”；“crowd” “lingering”精准描述人流状态；“extremely charming” “enjoy the peace”增强画面感。
★常见的笼统词及与其对应的具体词总结
笼统词 具体词
good amazing/breathtaking 惊人的 awesome 令人惊叹的brilliant 绝妙的fantastic 极好的impressive 给人深刻印象的splendid 壮丽的remarkable/extraordinary 非凡的
important crucial/vital/essential 至关重要的fundamental 根本的primary 首要的significant 有重大意义的
difficult complicated/complex 复杂的challenging 具有挑战性的puzzling 令人迷惑不解的
very absolutely/extremely 极其awfully/badly/especially/highly/terribly 非常
have enjoy 享有hold 持有(信念、意见)possess/own 拥有be in possession of 拥有
give award 授予contribute/donate 捐赠offer 主动提供provide 提供supply 供给
see/look examine (仔细地)检查glance 瞥一眼notice 注意到observe 观察stare 凝视spot 发现browse 浏览witness 目击catch sight of 看见check out 察看look around 环顾look through 浏览
like/love/enjoy admire 欣赏appreciate 赏识cherish 珍爱prefer 更喜欢treasure 珍视，珍爱be crazy/mad about 对……着迷be enthusiastic about 热衷于……be passionate about 酷爱……have a taste for/in 对……感兴趣show (a) great interest in 对……表现出极大的兴趣
高分技法(二) 短语优先，升级表达显地道
用介词短语、分词短语等替代简单句，使语言更紧凑流畅，同时提升表达的丰富度。恰当地选用一些高级表达，尤其是短语，能充分彰显自己的语言功底。
|基|础|表|达|
We walked along the street. We saw an old man who was selling handmade toys.
问题：两个简单句衔接生硬，saw表达不够高级，定语从句使语言冗长。
|优|化|表|达|
Walking along the street, we caught sight of an old man selling handmade toys.
改进：用分词短语“Walking along”表伴随；“caught sight of”替代“saw”表达更高级；用分词短语“selling handmade toys”简化定语从句，更简洁地道。
★高频话题由普通表达到高级表达的系统整理
1．保护环境
①affect→have an effect on
②harm→be harmful to
③reduce→cut down on
④damage→cause damage to
⑤cause→result in
⑥look after→attend to
⑦realise→be aware of
⑧face→be faced with
2．科学与技术
①be able to→be capable of
②access→have access to
③benefit→be beneficial to
④risky→at risk
⑤innovate→introduce breakthroughs to
⑥use→make the best of
3．人际交往
①disappoint→let sb. down
②listen to→lend an ear to
③cooperate→team up
④resolve→smooth over
⑤think about others→put oneself in one's shoes
4．优秀品行与人生意义
①thank→be grateful to
②understand→gain insight into
③responsible→a sense of responsibility
④practise (moral rules)→live up to (moral rules)
5．旅游出行
①plan→map out ②many→a variety of
③attract→appeal to
④amazing→take sb.'s breath away
⑤value→attach great importance to
⑥experience (local cultures)→be immersed in(local cultures)
6．学校生活
①join in→participate in
②balance→strike a balance between
③try to do sth.→strive to do sth.
④help sb.→do sb. a favor
⑤be busy with→be occupied with
7．跨文化交际
①respect→show respect for
②work together→make a joint effort to do sth.
③understand (diverse values) better→have a better understanding of (diverse values)
④more and more→an increasing number of
8．体育
①keep→stick to ②strengthen→build up
③win a game→claim victory in a sports competition
④lose a match→suffer defeat in an athletic contest
⑤gain sports benefits→reap the rewards of athletic engagement
9．历史与传统文化
①be famous for→be renowned for
②study→thoroughly delve into
③inherit→pass down from generation to generation
④begin to realise→raise one's awareness of
⑤continue→keep ...alive ⑥dig→unearth
⑦revive (traditions)→breathe new life into (traditions)
10．文学与艺术
①about→in terms of
②touch→strike a chord with
③easy to read→accessible to the general public
④make ...lively→bring ...to life
⑤vivid→capture the spirit with remarkable accuracy
⑥very beautiful→be of exceptional beauty
⑦develop creativity→nurture creativity
高分技法(三) 句式多变，长短交错显节奏
交替使用简单句、复合句、倒装句等，避免句式单调，通过节奏变化增强语言的韵律感。
|基|础|表|达|
We need to protect the environment. We can start with small things. We can save water. We can reduce waste.
问题：四个简单句并列，略显平淡。
|优|化|表|达|
Protecting the environment starts with small actions: saving every drop of water, reducing daily waste — these seemingly trivial efforts, when accumulated, can make a huge difference.
改进：用动名词短语开头，冒号引出具体做法，破折号衔接递进，长短句结合，节奏更灵动。
★高考写作中的典型句式赏析
1．2025年全国Ⅰ卷
典句 I strongly recommend the“Fun at my school” column, which can vividly showcase the joys of campus life.
赏析 (1)使用副词 strongly, vividly 增强情绪感染力。(2)which引导的定语从句修饰 “column”，丰富了句子结构，说明推荐该栏目的原因。
2.2025年浙江1月卷
典句 ①Many students are so engrossed in filming that they miss important announcements and lessons.②Obsessed with filming short videos, some students even lose track of their class schedules.
赏析 ①运用“so ...that ...”引导结果状语从句，突出学生过度拍摄短视频导致的不良后果。②过去分词短语“Obsessed ...”作原因状语，相当于“Because they are obsessed ...”， 精简句式的同时，突出学生的沉迷状态，增强演讲的警示性。
3.2025年全国Ⅱ卷
典句 I wonder ①if you could finish the article before the deadline, ②as the publication time is approaching.
赏析 ①if引导宾语从句，委婉地询问外教文章的写作进度，体现礼貌。②as引导原因状语从句，使催稿理由表述清晰。
4.2025年天津卷
典句 What an amazing idea it is to record Chinese ancient poems on the CD and send them into space！
赏析 运用感叹句结构，强烈表达了对把中国古诗发送到太空这一想法的赞叹，富有感染力。
5.2024年天津卷
典句 It is each of us that can make a real difference in creating a low carbon campus.
赏析 此句运用强调句型，强调 “each of us”， 突出每个人在创建低碳校园中的关键作用，增强了表达的力度和情感，呼吁大家积极参与。
6.2024年新高考Ⅰ卷
典句 While painting in the park, I was deeply attracted by the beautiful scenery around me.
赏析 while 引导的时间状语从句的省略，完整形式应为 “While I was painting in the park”，省略主语和 be 动词，使表达更简洁，突出在公园绘画时被景色吸引这一动作的同步性。
7.2023年浙江1月卷
典句 ①Not only did we get close to nature, but the activity also aroused our love of nature.②Modest as the activity was, it enabled us to uncover the intricate beauty of nature in our vicinity.
赏析 ①使用 “Not only ...but also ...” 倒装句式，强调活动带来的双重好处，突出活动意义，使句子更具表现力，也体现了对活动收获的深刻感悟。②使用“as” 引导的让步状语从句，倒装结构强调活动的 “小” 与意义的 “大”，对比鲜明，增强了表达力度。
8.2023年全国乙卷
典句 Had I not learned cooking during the vacation, I wouldn't have experienced the joy of creating delicious dishes.
赏析 这是省略if的虚拟句，将 had 提前，对过去情况进行虚拟假设，突出学习新技能给自己带来的独特体验和收获，加强了语气和情感表达。
9.2022年全国甲卷
典句 With the oceans covering more than 70% of the earth's surface, they are crucial to the survival of all life forms.
赏析 使用 with 复合结构，简洁明了地描述了海洋的覆盖范围，为后面阐述海洋重要性做铺垫，使句子结构紧凑，逻辑连贯。
二、得体之美：让语言精准匹配“场景与对象”
同一内容，用对语气比说清意思更重要，得体的语言能让对方感受亲切、舒服、被尊重，这是“美”的基础，因此考生写作时要根据对方身份(长辈/同辈/陌生人)、沟通目的(请求/感谢/道歉)，调整语言的“正式度”与“亲密度”，避免“万能模板”的生硬感。
关键技法.“三问校准法”
1．问对象：“对方与我是什么关系？”(决定“亲疏度”)
2．问场景：“是正式场合还是日常交流？”(决定“正式度”)
3．问目的：“我想让对方感受到什么？”(决定“情感倾向”) 以2022年新高考Ⅰ卷“校广播站英语节目‘Talk and Talk’的负责人李华，给外教Caroline写邮件邀请她做一次访谈”为例。
1．问对象：亲疏度的精准拿捏
基础表达 Caroline, I'm Li Hua. Our school has a radio English program “Talk and Talk”. We want you to come to our interview.问题：称呼直接用“Caroline”缺礼貌，“want you to come” 像指令，未体现学生对外教的尊重，亲疏关系错位。
优化表达 Dear Caroline, I'm Li Hua, head of our school radio English program“Talk and Talk”. We'd be delighted to invite you for an interview.改进：用“Dear”显尊重，“head of”清晰定位身份，“delighted to invite”传递谦逊态度，既保持距离感又显友好，贴合“学生对师长”的关系。
2．问场景：正式度的恰当匹配
基础表达 The program is for students to speak English. We'll talk about your life here. Next Friday 4 pm, okay 问题：“speak English” “okay”过于口语化，像闲聊而非正式邀请，与“邮件沟通＋邀请外教”的严肃场景脱节。
优化表达 The program focuses on English practice and cultural exchange, with lively talks to engage students. We plan to discuss your experiences in China, and wonder if 4 pm next Friday fits your schedule.改进：用“focuses on”“cultural exchange”“wonder if”等书面语，结构规整，既说明节目价值，又以委婉的语气询问时间，契合邮件的正式场景。
3．问目的：情感倾向的精准传递
基础表达 We need your help for the show. Just share some things. You have to come then.问题：“need your help” “have to” 带强制感，情感偏向索取，违背“真诚邀请”的目的，易让对方感觉不适。
优化表达 Your stories will surely enrich our program and inspire students deeply. If the timing works for you, we'll prepare thoughtful questions to make the talk wonderful. Please let me know your thoughts!改进：用“enrich” “inspire”肯定对方的价值；“thoughtful questions” 显用心；“Please let me know ”留足余地，全程传递“重视与期待”的积极情感，精准达成邀请目的。
三、结构之美：让内在逻辑与外在框架和谐统一
结构之美不仅是“外在的清晰”，更源于“内在的逻辑严密”——让每一部分内容都围绕核心目的展开，段落间有自然的因果、递进或对比关系，同时通过清晰的框架让逻辑可视化。
高分技法(一) 核心目的锚定法：让每句话 “不跑偏”
写作前明确核心目的(如“请求帮助” “推荐方案” “解释原因”)，所有内容都需服务于这一目的，删除无关信息。
|反|例|
(目的：向老师申请延期交作业)：The weather is great this week. My classmates and I went hiking. The homework is hard, and I can't finish it. So I want to delay submission.
问题：天气好、爬山与“申请延期”无关，逻辑断裂。
|正|例|
Due to a bad cold and fever this week, I haven't been able to finish my math homework on time. Since this assignment involves difficult function problems, I need extra time to sort out my ideas. Could you kindly allow me to hand it in two days later I promise to ensure its quality.
改进：每句都围绕 “因生病和难度需延期” 展开，紧扣核心目的。
高分技法(二) 逻辑链搭建法：用“关系词”串起内在联系
用“because” “first ...second ...finally ...” “although ...yet ...”等逻辑词，明确段落内、段落间的因果、递进、转折等关系。
|反|例|
(主题：推荐阅读《小王子》)：The Little Prince is very famous. It's a fairy tale. Many adults like reading it too.
问题：未说明“有名”与“适合推荐”的关系，“童话”与“大人喜欢”的矛盾未解释。
|正|例|
Although The Little Prince tells stories in the form of a fairy tale, yet it contains profound life philosophy — and that's exactly why it's worth recommending. First, its simple language makes it suitable for beginners; second, its exploration of “love and loneliness” can resonate with readers; finally, both children and adults can find their own insights in it.
改进：用“although ...yet ...”解释反差，“first ...second ...finally ...”串联推荐理由，逻辑链清晰。
高分技法(三) “观点＋支撑”模块法：让段落内容“立得住”
每个段落遵循“核心观点＋具体支撑(事例/细节/数据)”结构，避免空洞论述，让逻辑落地。
|反|例|
(主题：运动对学习的帮助)：Exercise can help with study. Everyone should do more exercise.
问题：观点无支撑，缺乏说服力。
|正|例|
Regular exercise can effectively improve learning efficiency. Scientific research shows that 30 minutes of aerobic exercise every day can increase oxygen supply to the brain by 20%, enhancing memory and concentration. Take my classmate Lucy as an example: after keeping up morning runs, she wandered in class less often, and her homework speed has increased by nearly a third. Therefore, arranging reasonable exercise time is highly beneficial to study.
改进：观点明确，用 “科学研究” 和 “身边事例” 双重支撑，逻辑清晰，论述有理有据。
★常用的衔接词总结
段落起始 generally speaking, to begin/start with, first of all, in the first place, as we know, as is known to all, as is shown in ...等
结尾总结 to sum up, in conclusion, in a word, in summary, all in all等
表示顺序 firstly, secondly, thirdly, (soon) afterwards, meanwhile, finally, at first, in the beginning, subse quently, at last, in the end, eventually等
表示空间 on one side ... on the other side, on the opposite side, in front of, in the center of, in the distance, in the middle of, at the back of, on/to the left/right, close to, next to, nearby, beyond等
解释说明 in fact, as a matter of fact, in other words, namely, to put it differently等
表示因果 considering that, owing to, due to, because (of), therefore, as a result, consequently, thereby, thus, so等
表示强调 definitely, absolutely, certainly, indeed, above all, surely, to tell (you) the truth等
表示递进或补充 in addition, furthermore, what's more, moreover, also, besides, to make matters worse, worse still, more/most importantly, last but not least, additionally等
举例或列举 for example, for instance, such as, be as follows等
表示让步或转折 even if/though, but, however, although, though, yet等
表示比较或对比 like, unlike, in the same way, similarly, in contrast, whereas, instead, instead of, while等
表示观点 personally (speaking), from my perspective/point of view, in my opinion/view, I'm fully convinced that ... as I see it, as far as I'm concerned等
(2025·烟台三模)假定你是李华，你校英文报发起以“Green Actions, Creative Solutions”为主题的校园环保创意征集活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：
(1)介绍你的创意；
(2)预期产生的影响。
注意：(1)写作词数应为80个左右；
(2)请按如下格式作答。
Green Actions, Creative Solutions
1 / 12(共53张PPT)
第三讲 美文定标—高分
作文需达到的“三美”标准
应用文写作虽以“实用”为核心，但“实用”不等于“平淡”。在准确传达信息、符合格式规范的基础上，通过语言的锤炼、情感的融入和细节的打磨，能让应用文既达意又动人，实现“规范”与“美感”的统一。本讲将从“语言之美” “得体之美” “结构之美”三个维度，解析让应用文焕发美感的关键技法，结合典例说明如何在实用框架中注入灵动表达。
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一、语言之美：让文字凝练生动传意准
不同于文学创作的铺陈渲染，应用文的语言之美，在于用最精准、最凝练的文字承载最丰富的信息——既要摒弃冗余模糊的表达，让每个词都 “各司其职”，又要通过鲜活的措辞、灵动的句式，让抽象的意图变得可感可触。以下从具体技法入手，解析如何让应用文的语言既达意又动人。
高分技法(一) 摒弃笼统表达，精准用词显张力
避免使用“good” “very” “many” 等模糊词汇，选择能精准传递程度、状态或情感的词语，让表达更具体可感。
|基|础|表|达|
The park is very beautiful, and many people like it.
问题：笼统模糊，未体现“美”的细节和“人多”的状态。
|优|化|表|达|
The park, with blooming roses and a crystal-clear lake, is extremely charming — visitors crowd here every weekend, lingering to enjoy the peace.
改进：“blooming roses”(盛开的玫瑰) “crystal-clear lake”(清澈如水晶的湖)具象化“美”；“crowd” “lingering”精准描述人流状态；“extremely charming” “enjoy the peace”增强画面感。
★常见的笼统词及与其对应的具体词总结
笼统词 具体词
good amazing/breathtaking 惊人的
awesome 令人惊叹的
brilliant 绝妙的
fantastic 极好的
impressive 给人深刻印象的
splendid 壮丽的
remarkable/extraordinary 非凡的
续表
important crucial/vital/essential 至关重要的
fundamental 根本的
primary 首要的
significant 有重大意义的
difficult complicated/complex 复杂的
challenging 具有挑战性的
puzzling 令人迷惑不解的
very absolutely/extremely 极其
awfully/badly/especially/highly/terribly 非常
续表
have enjoy 享有
hold 持有(信念、意见)
possess/own 拥有
be in possession of 拥有
give award 授予
contribute/donate 捐赠
offer 主动提供
provide 提供
supply 供给
续表
see/look examine (仔细地)检查
glance 瞥一眼
notice 注意到
observe 观察
stare 凝视
spot 发现
browse 浏览
witness 目击
catch sight of 看见
check out 察看
look around 环顾
look through 浏览
续表
like/love/ enjoy admire 欣赏
appreciate 赏识
cherish 珍爱
prefer 更喜欢
treasure 珍视，珍爱
be crazy/mad about 对……着迷
be enthusiastic about 热衷于……
be passionate about 酷爱……
have a taste for/in 对……感兴趣
show (a) great interest in 对……表现出极大的兴趣
高分技法(二) 短语优先，升级表达显地道
用介词短语、分词短语等替代简单句，使语言更紧凑流畅，同时提升表达的丰富度。恰当地选用一些高级表达，尤其是短语，能充分彰显自己的语言功底。
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We walked along the street. We saw an old man who was selling handmade toys.
问题：两个简单句衔接生硬，saw表达不够高级，定语从句使语言冗长。
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Walking along the street, we caught sight of an old man selling handmade toys.
改进：用分词短语“Walking along”表伴随；“caught sight of”替代“saw”表达更高级；用分词短语“selling handmade toys”简化定语从句，更简洁地道。
★高频话题由普通表达到高级表达的系统整理
1．保护环境
①affect→have an effect on ②harm→be harmful to
③reduce→cut down on ④damage→cause damage to
⑤cause→result in ⑥look after→attend to
⑦realise→be aware of ⑧face→be faced with
2．科学与技术
①be able to→be capable of ②access→have access to
③benefit→be beneficial to ④risky→at risk
⑤innovate→introduce breakthroughs to ⑥use→make the best of
3．人际交往
①disappoint→let sb. down ②listen to→lend an ear to
③cooperate→team up ④resolve→smooth over
⑤think about others→put oneself in one's shoes
4．优秀品行与人生意义
①thank→be grateful to
②understand→gain insight into
③responsible→a sense of responsibility
④practise (moral rules)→live up to (moral rules)
5．旅游出行
①plan→map out ②many→a variety of
③attract→appeal to ④amazing→take sb.'s breath away
⑤value→attach great importance to
⑥experience (local cultures)→be immersed in (local cultures)
6．学校生活
①join in→participate in
②balance→strike a balance between
③try to do sth.→strive to do sth.
④help sb.→do sb. a favor
⑤be busy with→be occupied with
7．跨文化交际
①respect→show respect for
②work together→make a joint effort to do sth.
③understand (diverse values) better→have a better understanding of (diverse values)
④more and more→an increasing number of
8．体育
①keep→stick to ②strengthen→build up
③win a game→claim victory in a sports competition
④lose a match→suffer defeat in an athletic contest
⑤gain sports benefits→reap the rewards of athletic engagement
9．历史与传统文化
①be famous for→be renowned for
②study→thoroughly delve into
③inherit→pass down from generation to generation
④begin to realise→raise one's awareness of
⑤continue→keep ... alive ⑥dig→unearth
⑦revive (traditions)→breathe new life into (traditions)
10．文学与艺术
①about→in terms of
②touch→strike a chord with
③easy to read→accessible to the general public
④make ...lively→bring ...to life
⑤vivid→capture the spirit with remarkable accuracy
⑥very beautiful→be of exceptional beauty
⑦develop creativity→nurture creativity
高分技法(三) 句式多变，长短交错显节奏
交替使用简单句、复合句、倒装句等，避免句式单调，通过节奏变化增强语言的韵律感。
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We need to protect the environment. We can start with small things. We can save water. We can reduce waste.
问题：四个简单句并列，略显平淡。
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Protecting the environment starts with small actions: saving every drop of water, reducing daily waste — these seemingly trivial efforts, when accumulated, can make a huge difference.
改进：用动名词短语开头，冒号引出具体做法，破折号衔接递进，长短句结合，节奏更灵动。
★高考写作中的典型句式赏析
1．2025年全国Ⅰ卷
典句 I strongly recommend the“Fun at my school” column, which can vividly showcase the joys of campus life.
赏析 (1)使用副词 strongly, vividly 增强情绪感染力。
(2)which引导的定语从句修饰 “column”，丰富了句子结构，说明推荐该栏目的原因。
2．2025年浙江1月卷
典句 ①Many students are so engrossed in filming that they miss important announcements and lessons.
②Obsessed with filming short videos, some students even lose track of their class schedules.
赏析 ①运用“so ...that ...”引导结果状语从句，突出学生过度拍摄短视频导致的不良后果。
②过去分词短语“Obsessed ...”作原因状语，相当于“Because they are obsessed ...”， 精简句式的同时，突出学生的沉迷状态，增强演讲的警示性。
3．2025年全国Ⅱ卷
典句 I wonder ①if you could finish the article before the deadline, ②as the publication time is approaching.
赏析 ①if引导宾语从句，委婉地询问外教文章的写作进度，体现礼貌。
②as引导原因状语从句，使催稿理由表述清晰。
4．2025年天津卷
典句 What an amazing idea it is to record Chinese ancient poems on the CD and send them into space！
赏析 运用感叹句结构，强烈表达了对把中国古诗发送到太空这一想法的赞叹，富有感染力。
5．2024年天津卷
典句 It is each of us that can make a real difference in creating a low-carbon campus.
赏析 此句运用强调句型，强调 “each of us”， 突出每个人在创建低碳校园中的关键作用，增强了表达的力度和情感，呼吁大家积极参与。
6.2024年新高考Ⅰ卷
典句 While painting in the park, I was deeply attracted by the beautiful scenery around me.
赏析 while 引导的时间状语从句的省略，完整形式应为 “While I was painting in the park”，省略主语和 be 动词，使表达更简洁，突出在公园绘画时被景色吸引这一动作的同步性。
7．2023年浙江1月卷
典句 ①Not only did we get close to nature, but the activity also aroused our love of nature.
②Modest as the activity was, it enabled us to uncover the intricate beauty of nature in our vicinity.
赏析 ①使用 “Not only ...but also ...” 倒装句式，强调活动带来的双重好处，突出活动意义，使句子更具表现力，也体现了对活动收获的深刻感悟。
②使用“as” 引导的让步状语从句，倒装结构强调活动的 “小” 与意义的 “大”，对比鲜明，增强了表达力度。
8．2023年全国乙卷
典句 Had I not learned cooking during the vacation, I wouldn't have experienced the joy of creating delicious dishes.
赏析 这是省略if的虚拟句，将 had 提前，对过去情况进行虚拟假设，突出学习新技能给自己带来的独特体验和收获，加强了语气和情感表达。
9．2022年全国甲卷
典句 With the oceans covering more than 70% of the earth's surface, they are crucial to the survival of all life forms.
赏析 使用 with 复合结构，简洁明了地描述了海洋的覆盖范围，为后面阐述海洋重要性做铺垫，使句子结构紧凑，逻辑连贯。
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二、得体之美：让语言精准匹配“场景与对象”
同一内容，用对语气比说清意思更重要，得体的语言能让对方感受亲切、舒服、被尊重，这是“美”的基础，因此考生写作时要根据对方身份(长辈/同辈/陌生人)、沟通目的(请求/感谢/道歉)，调整语言的“正式度”与“亲密度”，避免“万能模板”的生硬感。
[关键技法·“三问校准法”]
1．问对象：“对方与我是什么关系？”(决定“亲疏度”)
2．问场景：“是正式场合还是日常交流？”(决定“正式度”)
3．问目的：“我想让对方感受到什么？”(决定“情感倾向”)
以2022年新高考Ⅰ卷“校广播站英语节目‘Talk and Talk’的负责人李华，给外教Caroline写邮件邀请她做一次访谈”为例。
1．问对象：亲疏度的精准拿捏
基础表达 Caroline, I'm Li Hua. Our school has a radio English program “Talk and Talk”. We want you to come to our interview.
问题：称呼直接用“Caroline”缺礼貌，“want you to come” 像指令，未体现学生对外教的尊重，亲疏关系错位。
续表
优化表达 Dear Caroline, I'm Li Hua, head of our school radio English program“Talk and Talk”. We'd be delighted to invite you for an interview.
改进：用“Dear”显尊重，“head of”清晰定位身份，“delighted to invite”传递谦逊态度，既保持距离感又显友好，贴合“学生对师长”的关系。
2．问场景：正式度的恰当匹配
基础表达 The program is for students to speak English. We'll talk about your life here. Next Friday 4 pm, okay
问题：“speak English” “okay”过于口语化，像闲聊而非正式邀请，与“邮件沟通＋邀请外教”的严肃场景脱节。
优化表达 The program focuses on English practice and cultural exchange, with lively talks to engage students. We plan to discuss your experiences in China, and wonder if 4 pm next Friday fits your schedule.
改进：用“focuses on”“cultural exchange”“wonder if”等书面语，结构规整，既说明节目价值，又以委婉的语气询问时间，契合邮件的正式场景。
3．问目的：情感倾向的精准传递
基础表达 We need your help for the show. Just share some things. You have to come then.
问题：“need your help” “have to” 带强制感，情感偏向索取，违背“真诚邀请”的目的，易让对方感觉不适。
优化表达 Your stories will surely enrich our program and inspire students deeply. If the timing works for you, we'll prepare thoughtful questions to make the talk wonderful. Please let me know your thoughts!
改进：用“enrich” “inspire”肯定对方的价值；“thoughtful questions” 显用心；“Please let me know ”留足余地，全程传递“重视与期待”的积极情感，精准达成邀请目的。
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三、结构之美：让内在逻辑与外在框架和谐统一
结构之美不仅是“外在的清晰”，更源于“内在的逻辑严密”——让每一部分内容都围绕核心目的展开，段落间有自然的因果、递进或对比关系，同时通过清晰的框架让逻辑可视化。
高分技法(一) 核心目的锚定法：让每句话 “不跑偏”
写作前明确核心目的(如“请求帮助” “推荐方案” “解释原因”)，所有内容都需服务于这一目的，删除无关信息。
|反|例| (目的：向老师申请延期交作业)：The weather is great this week. My classmates and I went hiking. The homework is hard, and I can't finish it. So I want to delay submission.
问题：天气好、爬山与“申请延期”无关，逻辑断裂。
|正|例| Due to a bad cold and fever this week, I haven't been able to finish my math homework on time. Since this assignment involves difficult function problems, I need extra time to sort out my ideas. Could you kindly allow me to hand it in two days later I promise to ensure its quality.
改进：每句都围绕 “因生病和难度需延期” 展开，紧扣核心目的。
高分技法(二) 逻辑链搭建法：用“关系词”串起内在联系
用“because” “first ... second ... finally ...” “although ... yet ...”等逻辑词，明确段落内、段落间的因果、递进、转折等关系。
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(主题：推荐阅读《小王子》)：The Little Prince is very famous. It's a fairy tale. Many adults like reading it too.
问题：未说明“有名”与“适合推荐”的关系，“童话”与“大人喜欢”的矛盾未解释。
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Although The Little Prince tells stories in the form of a fairy tale, yet it contains profound life philosophy — and that's exactly why it's worth recommending. First, its simple language makes it suitable for beginners; second, its exploration of “love and loneliness” can resonate with readers; finally, both children and adults can find their own insights in it.
改进：用“although ...yet ...”解释反差，“first ... second ... finally ...”串联推荐理由，逻辑链清晰。
高分技法(三) “观点＋支撑”模块法：让段落内容“立得住”
每个段落遵循“核心观点＋具体支撑(事例/细节/数据)”结构，避免空洞论述，让逻辑落地。
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(主题：运动对学习的帮助)：Exercise can help with study. Everyone should do more exercise.
问题：观点无支撑，缺乏说服力。
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Regular exercise can effectively improve learning efficiency. Scientific research shows that 30 minutes of aerobic exercise every day can increase oxygen supply to the brain by 20%, enhancing memory and concentration. Take my classmate Lucy as an example: after keeping up morning runs, she wandered in class less often, and her homework speed has increased by nearly a third. Therefore, arranging reasonable exercise time is highly beneficial to study.
改进：观点明确，用 “科学研究” 和 “身边事例” 双重支撑，逻辑清晰，论述有理有据。
★常用的衔接词总结
段落 起始 generally speaking, to begin/start with, first of all, in the first place, as we know, as is known to all, as is shown in ...等
结尾 总结 to sum up, in conclusion, in a word, in summary, all in all等
表示 顺序 firstly, secondly, thirdly, (soon) afterwards, meanwhile, finally, at first, in the beginning, subse-quently, at last, in the end, eventually等
续表
表示 空间 on one side ... on the other side, on the opposite side, in front of, in the center of, in the distance, in the middle of, at the back of, on/to the left/right, close to, next to, nearby, beyond等
解释 说明 in fact, as a matter of fact, in other words, namely, to put it differently等
表示 因果 considering that, owing to, due to, because (of), therefore, as a result, consequently, thereby, thus, so等
表示 强调 definitely, absolutely, certainly, indeed, above all, surely, to tell (you) the truth等
续表
表示递进 或补充 in addition, furthermore, what's more, moreover, also, besides, to make matters worse, worse still, more/most importantly, last but not least, additionally等
举例或 列举 for example, for instance, such as, be as follows等
表示让步 或转折 even if/though, but, however, although, though, yet等
表示比较 或对比 like, unlike, in the same way, similarly, in contrast, whereas, instead, instead of, while等
表示 观点 personally (speaking), from my perspective/point of view, in my opinion/view, I'm fully convinced that ... as I see it, as far as I'm concerned等
(2025·烟台三模)假定你是李华，你校英文报发起以“Green Actions, Creative Solutions”为主题的校园环保创意征集活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：
(1)介绍你的创意； (2)预期产生的影响。
注意：(1)写作词数应为80个左右；
(2)请按如下格式作答。
随堂训练·应用体验
Green Actions, Creative Solutions
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Green Actions, Creative Solutions
To promote sustainability, I propose the Book Recycling Program, a project designed to transform waste into wonder!
As part of my program, I will place attractively decorated bins on campus to facilitate the collection of used books. Reusable books can go to our free book corner while damaged books can become materials for artworks, which will be exhibited monthly to highlight creativity.
We can save piles of books through this simple solution yearly while raising students' eco-awareness. By giving damaged books new life, we'll build a greener and more creative campus. Join me in turning trash into treasure!
