第三讲 优化3个关键环节(2)—合理构思情节
攻克“不会构思”的困境，需紧扣四个核心要点：首先要锚定两段段首句，以此为起点展开具体情节，确保续写不偏离方向；其次要重视伏笔照应，尤其不能遗漏文章尾句的暗示，让前后内容形成呼应，增强故事的完整性；再者情节推进需有明确的发展和自然转场，避免平铺直叙，让故事有起伏、有层次；最后要做好段落衔接，使第一段尾句与第二段首句紧密相连，保证整体叙事流畅连贯。
[典例·示法]
(2025·全国Ⅱ卷)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“What is your name？” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time.But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland.
The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English.For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce.My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them.Every time I gave a self introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did.
Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates.I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter.I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me.After all, I did care about how others would think of me.I realized that if I didn't stop, the entire lecture would be ruined.“It's okay, professor，” I shrugged (耸肩)．The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter.I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further.
After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly.This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over explain.However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity.
注意：(1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式作答。
In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name.
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Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class.
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技法演示
1．两段段首句定位瞄点法
—锚定核心场景，延续情感主线
续写首段以“In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name.”开头，核心动作是“解释名字含义”，情感基调是“从紧张到从容”。
续写首段应紧扣“课堂场景”与“名字的文化内涵”，通过“深呼吸” “描述秋田、枫叶、雨丝”等细节，锚定“名字承载的诗意与文化”，与首句“explain the meaning”精准呼应。第二段以“Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class.”开头，锚定“课后互动”场景，承接续写第一段“同学好奇的眼神”“教授的肯定”，自然延续“名字引发文化兴趣”的主线，从“课堂讲解”过渡到“深入交流”，逻辑连贯。
2．伏笔照应，反问追溯法
—勾连前文尾句，闭环情感逻辑
续写第一段“Standing before the class, I took a deep breath and began”——这个“深呼吸”的动作，暗合前文尾段“不愿解释”的状态。曾经的退缩与此刻的尝试，形成“从逃避到面对”的对比；同学“tried pronouncing‘Qiuyu’ correctly”与“laughter filled every corner”——这些积极反馈，恰好回应了前文尾段对“错失分享机会”的担忧。事实证明，当“我”主动解释后，不仅没有隔阂，反而收获了共鸣，用结果推翻了前文的顾虑； 续写第二段尾句“whenever someone mispronounces ‘Qiuyu’， I no longer hesitate; instead, I smile and say, ‘Let me tell you the story behind it’”——这是对前文尾段“不愿解释”的直接反转，形成“遗憾—尝试—释然”的情感闭环。
3．情节推进，三阶设计法—分层递进，深化主题
(1)首段三阶：
起点：被邀请解释名字，紧张但开始尝试(“took a deep breath and began”)；
中点：具体阐释“秋”与“雨”的意象，融入家乡记忆(“images of misty autumn mornings”)，让解释从字面意义深入到情感联结；
终点：获得正面反馈(“classroom fell silent, my classmates' eyes sparkling”“professor nodded warmly”)，初步体现“名字的感染力”。
(2)第二段三阶：
起点：同学课后围拢，表达兴趣(“came up to me”“Can you tell me more”)；
中点：互动升级，从“听故事”到“学发音”“写汉字”(“tried pronouncing ‘Qiuyu’ correctly”“wrote my classmates' names in Chinese characters”)；
终点：情感升华，意识到“名字是桥梁而非障碍”(“realized my name was never a barrier but a bridge”)，完成从“事件”到“感悟”的跨越。
4．段落衔接，钩子预埋法—细节勾连，自然过渡
首段结尾通过“氛围＋反应”预埋钩子，衔接第二段：首段尾句“The professor nodded warmly and said, ‘What a beautiful image your name arouses！’”用教授的肯定和上一句中同学“sparkling with curiosity”的反应，作为“钩子”——正是这份明确的积极反馈，直接推动了第二段中“classmates got interested and came up to me”的情节，让课后互动显得顺理成章，而非突兀的转折。同时，首段中“autumn rain whispering through falling leaves”的诗意描述，与第二段中“wrote my classmates' names in Chinese characters”形成“从抽象的意象到具体行动”的衔接，让文化交流从“语言讲解”落地为“书写互动”，层次更丰富。
[参考范文]
In a class discussion，I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. Standing before the class, I took a deep breath and began, “‘Qiu’ means autumn in Chinese, a season of golden rice fields and red maple leaves, symbolizing harvest and poetic beauty.‘Yu’ refers to rain — gentle drops that nurture life.” As I spoke, images of misty autumn mornings in my hometown flashed through my mind.“Together, they paint a scene of autumn rain whispering through falling leaves.” The classroom fell silent, my classmates' eyes sparkling with curiosity.The professor nodded warmly and said, “What a beautiful image your name arouses！”
Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. “Can you tell me more about Chinese names？” one girl asked.A boy smiled and added, “I tried pronouncing ‘Qiuyu’ correctly after your explanation — it feels more meaningful now.”I shared how Chinese names often carry parental expectations or cultural references, and even wrote my classmates' names in Chinese characters on the blackboard. Laughter filled every corner of the classroom.That day, I realized my name was never a barrier but a bridge.Now, whenever someone mispronounces “Qiuyu”， I no longer hesitate; instead, I smile and say, “Let me tell you the story behind it.”
(2025·青岛一模)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Johnny, a 17 year old from Whitehorse, had been competing in Cross Country Skiing for five years. For many young athletes like him in Whitehorse, Yukon, the Yukon Cross Country Ski Championships were more than just a competition. It was their dream. A year ago, Johnny qualified for the Championships and successfully won a medal.
After the competition, Johnny was eager to share his experience with Hayden, his teammate and best friend. Hayden had narrowly missed qualifying for the Championships. Johnny had watched his friend train tirelessly, push himself to the limit, and always keep his big smile. Johnny knew how much the Championships meant to Hayden.
Johnny handed Hayden some colorful pins. “These are pins I traded with athletes from all over Yukon，” Johnny said with a smile, “I want you to have them, so you can feel a part of the event too.”
Hayden was touched, “Thanks, Johnny. This means a lot.”
“Next time，” Johnny continued, “I hope you can also experience the event. I know you'll make it.”
Hayden nodded, “I'll work even harder for that.”
This year's Yukon Cross Country Ski Championships would be held in a month. Coach Nick guided the team through daily tough training and the team made significant progress in their skating, cornering, and downhill techniques. Meanwhile, they enhanced their endurance and balance. Both Johnny and Hayden met the Championship standards. Given Johnny's rich competitive experience, coach Nick once again qualified Johnny for this year's event and Hayden was selected as an alternate (替补)．
The qualification for the competition excited Johnny, but there was always an idea staying in his mind. Johnny knew his friend had been wanting to go to the Championships for several years. This was the last chance for both of them to attend the Championships, as they would age out of the competition after this year. The thought became clear in his mind, strong and steady.
注意：(1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式作答。
The next day, Johnny went to see the coach.
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Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships.
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第三讲 优化3个关键环节(2)
参考范文：
The next day, Johnny went to see the coach. He told the coach that he wanted to give his qualification to Hayden. Johnny explained that this was the last chance for both of them to attend
the Championships, and that Hayden had been longing for it for years. He believed Hayden deserved this opportunity as he had trained so hard. The coach was moved by Johnny's selfless act. After considering Johnny's request carefully, the coach agreed to let Hayden take Johnny's place.
Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships. He was extremely grateful to Johnny. He knew this was a once in a lifetime opportunity, and he didn't want to let Johnny down. In the following days, Hayden trained even harder. When the Championships finally arrived, he gave it his all. Although the competition was tough, Hayden's determination and hard work paid off. He performed well and achieved a great result, making both Johnny and himself proud.
1 / 4(共23张PPT)
第三讲 优化3个关键环节(2)
—合理构思情节
攻克“不会构思”的困境，需紧扣四个核心要点：首先要锚定两段段首句，以此为起点展开具体情节，确保续写不偏离方向；其次要重视伏笔照应，尤其不能遗漏文章尾句的暗示，让前后内容形成呼应，增强故事的完整性；再者情节推进需有明确的发展和自然转场，避免平铺直叙，让故事有起伏、有层次；最后要做好段落衔接，使第一段尾句与第二段首句紧密相连，保证整体叙事流畅连贯。
[典例·示法]
(2025·全国Ⅱ卷)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“What is your name？” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time.But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland.
The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English.For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce.My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them.Every time I gave a self-introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did.
Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates.I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter.I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me.After all, I did care about how others would think of me.I realized that if I didn't stop, the entire lecture would be ruined.“It's okay, professor，” I shrugged (耸肩)．The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter.I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further.
After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly.This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over-explain.
However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity.
注意：(1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式作答。
In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. _______________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________
Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________
技法演示
1．两段段首句定位瞄点法—锚定核心场景，延续情感主线
续写首段以“In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name.”开头，核心动作是“解释名字含义”，情感基调是“从紧张到从容”。
续写首段应紧扣“课堂场景”与“名字的文化内涵”，通过“深呼吸” “描述秋田、枫叶、雨丝”等细节，锚定“名字承载的诗意与文化”，与首句“explain the meaning”精准呼应。第二段以“Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class.”开头，锚定“课后互动”场景，承接续写第一段“同学好奇的眼神”“教授的肯定”，自然延续“名字引发文化兴趣”的主线，从“课堂讲解”过渡到“深入交流”，逻辑连贯。
2．伏笔照应，反问追溯法—勾连前文尾句，闭环情感逻辑
续写第一段“Standing before the class, I took a deep breath and began”——这个“深呼吸”的动作，暗合前文尾段“不愿解释”的状态。曾经的退缩与此刻的尝试，形成“从逃避到面对”的对比；同学“tried pronouncing‘Qiuyu’ correctly”与“laughter filled every corner”——这些积极反馈，恰好回应了前文尾段对“错失分享机会”的担忧。事实证明，当“我”主动解释后，不仅没有隔阂，反而收获了共鸣，用结果推翻了前文的顾虑； 续写第二段尾句“whenever someone mispronounces ‘Qiuyu’， I no longer hesitate; instead, I smile and say, ‘Let me tell you the story behind it’”——这是对前文尾段“不愿解释”的直接反转，形成“遗憾—尝试—释然”的情感闭环。
3．情节推进，三阶设计法—分层递进，深化主题
(1)首段三阶：
起点：被邀请解释名字，紧张但开始尝试(“took a deep breath and began”)；
中点：具体阐释“秋”与“雨”的意象，融入家乡记忆(“images of misty autumn mornings”)，让解释从字面意义深入到情感联结；
终点：获得正面反馈(“classroom fell silent, my classmates' eyes sparkling”“professor nodded warmly”)，初步体现“名字的感染力”。
(2)第二段三阶：
起点：同学课后围拢，表达兴趣(“came up to me”“Can you tell me more”)；
中点：互动升级，从“听故事”到“学发音”“写汉字”(“tried pronouncing ‘Qiuyu’ correctly”“wrote my classmates' names in Chinese characters”)；
终点：情感升华，意识到“名字是桥梁而非障碍”(“realized my name was never a barrier but a bridge”)，完成从“事件”到“感悟”的跨越。
4．段落衔接，钩子预埋法—细节勾连，自然过渡
首段结尾通过“氛围＋反应”预埋钩子，衔接第二段：首段尾句“The professor nodded warmly and said, ‘What a beautiful image your name arouses！’”用教授的肯定和上一句中同学“sparkling with curiosity”的反应，作为“钩子”——正是这份明确的积极反馈，直接推动了第二段中“classmates got interested and came up to me”的情节，让课后互动显得顺理成章，而非突兀的转折。同时，首段中“autumn rain whispering through falling leaves”的诗意描述，与第二段中“wrote my classmates' names in Chinese characters”形成“从抽象的意象到具体行动”的衔接，让文化交流从“语言讲解”落地为“书写互动”，层次更丰富。
[参考范文]
In a class discussion，I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. Standing before the class, I took a deep breath and began, “‘Qiu’ means autumn in Chinese, a season of golden rice fields and red maple leaves, symbolizing harvest and poetic beauty.‘Yu’ refers to rain — gentle drops that nurture life.” As I spoke, images of misty autumn mornings in my hometown flashed through my mind.“Together, they paint a scene of autumn rain whispering through falling leaves.” The classroom fell silent, my classmates' eyes sparkling with curiosity.The professor nodded warmly and said, “What a beautiful image your name arouses！”
Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class.“Can you tell me more about Chinese names？” one girl asked.A boy smiled and added, “I tried pronouncing ‘Qiuyu’ correctly after your explanation — it feels more meaningful now.”I shared how Chinese names often carry parental expectations or cultural references, and even wrote my classmates' names in Chinese characters on the blackboard. Laughter filled every corner of the classroom.That day, I realized my name was never a barrier but a bridge.Now, whenever someone mispronounces “Qiuyu”， I no longer hesitate; instead, I smile and say, “Let me tell you the story behind it.”
(2025·青岛一模)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Johnny, a 17-year-old from Whitehorse, had been competing in Cross-Country Skiing for five years. For many young athletes like him in Whitehorse, Yukon, the Yukon Cross-Country Ski Championships were more than just a competition. It was their dream. A year ago, Johnny qualified for the Championships and successfully won a medal.
随堂训练·应用体验
After the competition, Johnny was eager to share his experience with Hayden, his teammate and best friend. Hayden had narrowly missed qualifying for the Championships. Johnny had watched his friend train tirelessly, push himself to the limit, and always keep his big smile. Johnny knew how much the Championships meant to Hayden.
Johnny handed Hayden some colorful pins. “These are pins I traded with athletes from all over Yukon，” Johnny said with a smile, “I want you to have them, so you can feel a part of the event too.”
Hayden was touched, “Thanks, Johnny. This means a lot.”
“Next time，” Johnny continued, “I hope you can also experience the event. I know you'll make it.”
Hayden nodded, “I'll work even harder for that.”
This year's Yukon Cross-Country Ski Championships would be held in a month. Coach Nick guided the team through daily tough training and the team made significant progress in their skating, cornering, and downhill techniques. Meanwhile, they enhanced their endurance and balance. Both Johnny and Hayden met the Championship standards. Given Johnny's rich competitive experience, coach Nick once again qualified Johnny for this year's event and Hayden was selected as an alternate (替补)．
The qualification for the competition excited Johnny, but there was always an idea staying in his mind. Johnny knew his friend had been wanting to go to the Championships for several years. This was the last chance for both of them to attend the Championships, as they would age out of the competition after this year. The thought became clear in his mind, strong and steady.
注意：(1)续写词数应为150个左右；
(2)请按如下格式作答。
The next day, Johnny went to see the coach.____________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________
Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships._______________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________
参考范文：
The next day, Johnny went to see the coach. He told the coach that he wanted to give his qualification to Hayden. Johnny explained that this was the last chance for both of them to attend the Championships, and that Hayden had been longing for it for years. He believed Hayden deserved this opportunity as he had trained so hard. The coach was moved by Johnny's selfless act. After considering Johnny's request carefully, the coach agreed to let Hayden take Johnny's place.
Hayden accepted the precious chance to compete in the Championships. He was extremely grateful to Johnny. He knew this was a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity, and he didn't want to let Johnny down. In the following days, Hayden trained even harder. When the Championships finally arrived, he gave it his all. Although the competition was tough, Hayden's determination and hard work paid off. He performed well and achieved a great result, making both Johnny and himself proud.
