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Unit 11
Sad movies make me cry.
人教新目标版 九年级上
Section B3a-Selfcheck
写作优质公开课课件
Learning objectives
1. 能够理解并掌握描述情感的丰富词汇，区分不同情感程度的表达差异。能够识别记叙文的基本要素（时间、地点、人物、事件起因、经过、结果）和结构特点，理解"感受-原因-启示"的写作逻辑框架，并通过范例文本分析掌握使役结构在情感表达中的运用。
2.能够运用所学情感词汇和记叙文写作要点，完成一篇结构完整的个人经历叙述。在写作中能够按照事件发展顺序组织内容，准确使用"make+宾语+形容词"等结构描述情感变化，并通过具体细节展现情感产生的原因。
3.能够将所学写作方法和情感管理理念应用到实际生活中，通过书写经历培养积极看待事物的习惯，成为自己情绪的主人。
What kinds of feelings can you find
Warming-up
nervous/worried
cheerful/comfortable
proud/satisfied
interested
scared/afraid
angry/unsatisfied
What kinds of feelings can you find
Warming-up
what we see
what we hear
what we experience(经历)
give us different feelings.
What positive or negative words can help you to express your feelings
Positive
Negative
sleepy
angry
happy
comfortable
excited
embarrassed
No matter how you feel, happy or sad, excited or nervous, your experiences are precious (珍贵的). We alwasy can learn something from them.
3a
Think of some experiences that made you feel very happy or sad. Tell your partner about them. Use the following ideas to help you.
winning/losing a competition
getting good/bad grades on an exam
performing something well/badly in front of a big group of people
getting into a fight with your best friend
your first trip outside your hometown
Which experiences gave you positive or negative feelings
Peter’s father gave him advice.
Do you remember the story—The Winning Team
Peter missed a goal.
Peter realized that he was worried for no reason.
Peter talked to his teammates.
3
How did it make you feel
experience
4
and why
1
What happened
5
What did you learn from the experience
2
When & Where did it happen
How to talk about experiences
本单元的话题是“Feelings(情感)”.
谈论人或事物或经历给人们的生活和情感带来的影响。
写作时，要求能针对日常生活中的一些人或事物或经历，描述事物经历以及自己或他人的感受。
语篇结构通常是记叙文。主要说明事件的时间、背景、起因、过程及结果，即5W1H( what, who, when, where, why)和(how)。
人称应是________人称，时态应是_________。
话题分析(Topic Analysis)
第一
过去时
Make an outline
outline
Beginning
Body
Ending
开篇点题
事件及经历
总结感受
When/where
What I learned...
What/who/how/why
3b
Write a story similar to the one in 2b using your notes in 3a.
In your story, try to explain the following:
What happened
When did it happen
Where did it happen
How did it make you feel Why
What did you learn from the experience
初中三年的校园生活精彩纷呈, 总有一些经历是令你难以忘怀的。学校英语报 English Learning 正在以 “My Unforgettable Experience” 为主题向应届毕业生征文。
请写一篇80—100词的英语短文，叙述你的一次难忘的经历，并谈谈你在其中的感悟和收获。
Sample writing
How to write
Step 1---审
内容：谈论初中三年难忘的事情
文体：记叙文(narration)
人称：以第一人称和第三人称(first/third person)为主
时态：以一般过去时(simple past tense)为主
逻辑顺序：事情的发展顺序
审清题目
Step 2---列
My Unforgettable Experience
What happened
用过去时写出发生的事
When did it happen
last month/year/term,
时间段+ago,
in+过去的年份
Where did it happen
at home/school
on the school soccer field
How did it make you feel Why
1)It made me feel.../I felt/was...
2) Because+从句，because of+sth, as a result of
What did you learn from the experience
From the experience, I know/realize that______.
It's important/necessary to _____.
We should do sth. rather than do sth.
介绍经历
表达感受
经历对自己的影响
What happened
When did it happen
Where did it happen
How did it make you feel Why？
What did you learn from
the experience
经
历
与
感
受
How did it happen
5 “W” 1 “H”
Step 3 ---构
开篇点题，交代过去某个难忘的经历。
然后具体描述事情发生的时间、地点、人物、经过、结果、感受等等
总结观点，谈论收获。
I will never forget the days when I…
It was a Monday morning. On my way to school… I felt upset.
I was worried about…
I think I can succeed if I try my best to do everything.......
My Unforgettable
Experience
Writing outline
Step 4 ---连
连句子
Beginning (1)My unforgettable experience was arguing with my best friend Li Hua(我难忘的一次经历是和我最好的朋友李华发生争吵).
Body 时间及地点 One Saturday last term, Li Hua and I were studying together at his home.
Step 4 ---连
连句子
Body 起因及经过 (2)________________________________________________
(李华和我对一道数学题有不同的看法).
The little thing caused an argument(争论) between Li Hua and I.
Li Hua and I didn’t talk to each other.
(3)_________________________(我知道那是我的错), but I refused to say sorry to him because I didn’t want to lose face(丢脸).
(4)_____________________________________________(我没有意识到我们不会再见面) until I heard that Li Hua would move to another city with his parents.
Li Hua and I had different opinions about a math problem.
I knew that it was my fault
I didn’t realize we wouldn’t see each other anymore
Step 4 ---连
写句子
Body 结果 I said sorry to Li Hua.
Li Hua and I became friends again.
(5)____________________________________________ (这使得我如释重负/开心).
Ending (启示） Everyone makes mistakes.
(6)__________________________________________
(我们不应该害怕犯错).
When we realize our mistakes, we should correct them at once.
This made me feel a sense of relief/This made me feel happy.
We shouldn’t be afraid of making mistakes
Step 5 ---添
记叙难忘经历发生的起因、经过及结果时，可以使用表示时间的词语from then on和two days before / on the day he left with his family/ two days later...来连接上下文，这样文章的脉络会更清晰。
添连词
添佳句
No one is perfect and everyone makes mistakes. (人无完人,每个人都会犯错)
Who has experienced much,who knows much. (谁经历得多，谁知道得多)
The best way to escape your problem is to solve it.(逃避你的问题最好的方法就是解决它。)
My Unforgettable Experience
My unforgettable experience was arguing with my best friend Li Hua.
One Saturday last term, Li Hua and I were studying together at his home. We had different opinions about a math problem. The little thing caused an argument between us. From then on, we didn’t talk to each other. I knew that it was my fault, but I refused to say sorry to him because I didn’t want to lose face.
时间
地点
连词
My Unforgettable Experience
I didn’t realize we wouldn’t see each other anymore until I heard that Li Hua would move to another city with his
parents. Two days before he left with his family, I said sorry to Li Hua. We became friends again. This made me feel a sense of relief.
No one is perfect. Everyone makes mistakes. We shouldn’t be afraid of making mistakes. When we realize our mistakes, we should correct them at once.What an unforgettable thing it is in my life!
连词
启示
Step 6 ---查
Rich content and complete frame(内容丰富结构完整)）
Content and frame
Correct tense (时态）
Spelling words （单词拼写）
Punctuation （标点符号）
Correct grammar
Clean and neat （干净整洁）
Content and frame
实
战
演
练
每个人都有幸运和不幸运的时候，在你的记忆中，
你所经历的最开心或最糟糕的一天是什么样子？
写出你的经历和感受。
不少于80词。
01
02
03
04
05
Peer
-editing
Good Structure
Correct grammar/spelling
Good sentences
Linking words
Beautiful writing
Exchange your articles, help each other correct them.
Free talk
Mountain climbing
Have a big meal.
How to deal with your feelings
How to deal with your feelings
......
share... with best friend.
Reach out for help
Be the master of the emotion.
Discussion
1. Put the words in the appropriate place in the chart.
nervous unhappy uncomfortable worried comfortable relaxed angry awful happy uneasy Positive Negative
comfortable
relaxed
happy
nervous
unhappy
uncomfortable
worried
angry
awful
uneasy
2. Write sentences using the words given.
1. sad movies/ cry
Sad movies make me cry.
2. speaking in front of many people/ nervous
Speaking in front of many people makes me nervous.
3. money and fame/ not always happy
4. soft piano music/ relaxed
5. rainy days/ stay at home and watch TV
Soft piano music makes me relaxed.
Rainy days make me want to stay at home and watch TV.
Money and fame don’t always make you happy.
3. Number the things [1–6] (1 = least important, 6 = most important). Write a reason for each choice.
____ fame (名誉) ____ power (权力) ____ friendship (友谊) ____ wealth (财富) ____ health (健康) ____ family (家庭)
1
2
5
3
4
6
e.g. Fame is not very important. It can make me nervous if too many people follow me around.
Power is not important to me. I don’t want to control others.
Wealth is not very important. I prefer to live a simple life.
Friendship is important. Spending time with friends makes me happy.
Health is very important. A healthy body makes it possible for me to do many things in life.
Family is the most important to me. My family makes me feel comfortable and contented.
基础作业：
Polish your articles.Make it perfect.
提高作业：
Write another event which has the different feeling from what you write today.
Homework
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