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如何提炼读后续写的主题
——以个人成长类读后续写为例
归纳提炼主题的核心关注点：
1. 抓住情节线索（Grasp the plot clues）
故事是怎样发展，过程如何？结果怎样？
2. 分析主要人物（Analyse Main Character ）
主要人物有何特点？其动机、困境和成长是什么？哪些观点句揭示了内心？
3. 拆解核心冲突（Core Conflict）
故事的核心矛盾或问题是什么？这个冲突如何推动故事发展？
4. 理清情感脉络（Clarify the emotional thread）
人物的情感经历了怎样的变化（如从沮丧到希望）？
5. 解读作者意图（Interpret the author's intention）
作者想通过这个故事探讨什么（如友谊、勇气、成长）？故事传递了怎样的价值观？
以下文为例来探讨如何归纳提炼主题
(湖北部分高中高二10月考)It was 8 o'clock on Sunday. Amy still stayed in bed, listening to the radio. Her mother, Hannah, asked her to switch off the radio and finish her homework, but she didn't listen. Her mother went out of the room with anger.
Next morning, Amy went to school cursing（咒骂）everyone possible for having to go to school. Even in school, Amy had a reputation（名声）of sorts for all the wrong reasons. She slept in class and did not finish her work. In playtime, Amy had to go out and play, but she tried to find an excuse saying that she was tired when someone caught her walking away.
She came home with leftovers in her lunchbox or other complaint almost every day, and that day was also no different.
"Who can help me to change my daughter " Hannah wondered.
Hannah never believed in raising her voice or raising her arm on Amy or on anyone for that matter. She believed and wished that her love and patience would one day change Amy.
One day a new family moved into Amy's apartment. They were very friendly people. They wanted to acquaint（使…熟悉）themselves with all the neighbors, so their little girl , Mary, was sent all around the neighborhood to find friends. Soon, Mary came to Amy's home.
It didn't take much time for Mary to understand Amy. However, she was not put off by Amy's behavior. She knew that she needed to help Amy to change. She told Amy an idea that her teacher had once told the class in her previous school. "Blow a balloon whenever you're angry or upset about something or someone.”
At first Amy did not listen to Mary, but Hannah tried her best to tell her that it was fun and brought her a pack of balloons.
That day, Amy wanted to play a guessing game with her mother, but Hannah wanted to finish her chores in the kitchen first. Amy got angry. 注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右; 2, 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
She remembered what Mary told her and thought she would give it a try.
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Amy is a changed person now.
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阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Stage Key Event Amy's State
Beginning Her mother, Hannah, asked her to switch off the radio and finish her homework, but she didn't listen. Amy went to school cursing（咒骂）everyone possible for having to go to school. she tried to find an excuse saying that she was tired when someone caught her walking away. A person who loves to complain
Turning Point One day a new family moved into Amy's apartment---Mary, was sent all around the neighborhood to find friends.
Development She told Amy an idea that her teacher had once told the class in her previous school. "Blow a balloon whenever you're angry or upset about something or someone.” did not listen to Mary
Climax Amy wanted to play a guessing game with her mother, but Hannah wanted to finish her chores in the kitchen first. Amy got angry. angry
Ending and Extension She remembered what Mary told her and thought she would give it a try. begin to change
1. 抓住情节线索（Grasp the plot clues）
人物特点：
Amy
①Her mother, Hannah, asked her to switch off the radio and finish her homework, but she didn't listen.
②Next morning, Amy went to school cursing（咒骂）everyone possible for having to go to school.
③ In playtime, Amy had to go out and play, but she tried to find an excuse saying that she was tired when someone caught her walking away.
2. 分析主要人物（Analyse Main Character ）
人物特点：
Mary
①They wanted to acquaint（使…熟悉）themselves with all the neighbors, so their little girl , Mary, was sent all around the neighborhood to find friends. Soon, Mary came to Amy's home.
②However, she was not put off by Amy's behavior. She knew that she needed to help Amy to change.
③She told Amy an idea that her teacher had once told the class in her previous school. "Blow a balloon whenever you're angry or upset about something or someone.”
2. 分析主要人物（Analyse Main Character ）
动机、困境和成长：
motivation
growth
confusion
complain
moved to a new land and be sent all around the neighborhood to find friends
cannot control her emotion
why did Amy do that How would she do
not complain any more
After helping Amy change, She feel proudly
Amy
Mary
3. 拆解核心冲突（Core Conflict）
complain
Cultivating Amy to change
conflict
Amy is a changed person
Emotion
Emotion
loving complaining +anger/ sad
a changed man+active and positive/ happy
Amy的情感经历了清晰的变化过程：
4. 理清情感脉络（Clarify the emotional thread）
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了艾米总是爱发脾气、抱怨身边的一切，艾米的母亲想让自己的女儿做出改变，但拿她也束手无策。直到一个新搬来的邻居玛丽的出现才彻底改变了艾米，玛丽让艾米在生气的时候吹气球这样就能把自己的不良情绪释放出来，结果在这种的方法帮助之下艾米终于彻底改变了，变得有礼貌、体贴和充满热情。
文本分析
段落续写：
1.段落续写：由第一段首句内容“她想起了玛丽告诉她的话，想试一试。”可知，第一段可描写艾米尝试了玛丽教给她吹气球来发泄心情的办法，而且这种方法很管用，艾米成功的控制住了自己的情绪。
由第二段首句内容“艾米现在变了一个人。”可知，第二段可描写艾米不再抱怨，彻底改变了自己，她感谢生活和朋友，变得体贴、有礼貌、充满热情，同时艾米也开始行动起来帮助其他需要帮助的人。
续写线索：
冲进房间——吹气球——控制情绪——不再抱怨——彻底改变——感谢
Para 1:
She remembered what Mary told her and thought she would give it a try. Amy
dashed into her room, found the balloons and picked one out with an overwhelming
sense of anger. Thinking about her mother's refusal, Amy spared no effort to blow the
balloon. Suddenly, the balloon exploded with a bang, making her numb with shock. It
occurred to her that she should stop complaining but stay optimistic, or she would end
up exploding like the balloon one day. An overwhelming sense of shame almost
swallowed her and pushed her to make a change.
Para 2:
Amy is a changed person now. Amy changes her attitude completely. Actually,
instead of complaining about everything, she begins to appreciate her life and friends.
What set Amy apart is that she volunteers to spread the function of blowing balloon in
her community. She wants to do something for her neighborhood just like what Mary
did for her. Her anger is well controlled even without a balloon. She is willing to take
others’ suggestions into consideration, contributing to her better behavior. Instead of
losing her temper all the time, she is now a polite and thoughtful girl with contagious
enthusiasm.
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