练4 读后续写1 DIY展示 挑战自我
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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Do-It-Yourself Disaster
“Time for the demonstration and we’ll vote for the entries for the Science Fair. Who wants to show your project first ” Mrs. Williams asked. For this project, we were allowed to do anything, as long as we did it ourselves. I buried my head in my sweater, just like my turtle buried his head in his shell to avoid notice.
The first volunteer was Ava. Unlike me, Ava just loved talking in front of people. She skipped to the front and showed us how to wire potatoes to produce electricity. It was cool, and I told her so when she passed my desk. My buddy Jayce got called on next. He demonstrated the Unpoppable Bubble. It was really good. I gave him a thumbs-up. “You did it,” I mouthed.
“Michael, please.” Michael. That was me. I guessed I forgot to keep my head buried. I walked to the front on shaking legs and set my birdhouse on the table. I swallowed the baseball-sized lump in my throat and started. “This is how to build a birdhouse. I looked online for plans and went to the woodyard with my dad, since I’m not old enough to drive.” My classmates laughed and I could tell they appreciated my humor. Having gained some confidence, I went on with my words. “Someone there cut four pieces for the walls, and made the hole.”
Luka’s hand shot up. “So what did you do ” he asked. I swallowed. The lump in my throat was now the size of a basketball. “I came up with the idea and I figured out how to hinge (加铰链) the roof so I can clean out the house after the birds leave.” I lifted the roof to show everyone. Some kids stood up to see.
“Then I nailed all the walls together.” I picked up the heavy hammer (锤子) borrowed from my dad: I had left one of the nails sticking out a little so I could demonstrate. As I gave the nail a mighty blow, the hammer came down on the roof instead of the nail. Smash!
注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
The roof caved in and the birdhouse fell apart.
As the thunderous applause faded, Mrs. Williams announced the start of the voting.
练4
原文基本要素
主要人物:I (Michael)
①缺乏自信:埋头避免被注意,不敢主动展示;②有创造力:构思鸟屋、设计铰链连接鸟屋屋顶的实用功能,并(试图)自己动手组装(钉钉子);③幽默:尽管紧张,能用自嘲(not old enough to drive)化解尴尬,赢得笑声;④关注他人:注意到同学对他幽默的反应(appreciated my humor),鼓励朋友(“You did it,” I mouthed, thumbs-up)。
Ava:自信外向有能力 (loved talking in front of people,成功演示项目);Jayce:有能力(成功演示项目);Luka;Mrs. Williams
原文情节线:科学展览演示和投票环节开始,“我”埋头避免被注意→艾娃(Ava)成功演示了土豆发电项目、朋友杰斯(Jayce)成功演示了“永不破灭的泡泡”→“我”被叫到,硬着头皮上台→“我”开始介绍自己的鸟屋项目→(冲突)同学卢卡(Luka)质疑了项目是否“DIY”→“我”解释了自己的贡献→(高潮) “我”动手演示DIY动作,但锤子失误砸在了鸟屋的屋顶上→(结果)鸟屋坍塌。
主题:挑战自我、校园活动、人际关系与合作、科学创新与实践
续写情节
第一段:衔接①:衔接首句“屋顶塌了,鸟屋散架了”:“我”的反应:呆若木鸡,极度尴尬,确信自己成了笑柄。过渡句:(协同原文提到的两个展示自己项目的朋友)朋友相助:同学艾娃(Ava)立刻上前帮忙解围,朋友杰斯(Jayce)立刻跟进→“我”受到朋友的鼓励,开始讲解鸟屋的设计特点。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句中的“雷鸣般的掌声渐渐平息后”:同学们开始认真倾听,最后鼓掌。
第二段:衔接③:衔接首句“雷鸣般的掌声渐渐平息后, Williams老师宣布开始投票”:“我”紧张地等待宣布结果。过渡句:老师宣布“我”的项目获胜→Williams老师的评价:获胜原因并非项目本身完美无缺,而是其体现的科学精神(协同原文首段中的the Science Fair)——创造力、从失败中学习的意愿和面对挫折仍勇于分享的勇气→全班同学鼓掌欢呼。尾句:感悟升华:意外成就胜利。
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The roof caved in and the birdhouse fell apart. I stood there, rooted to the spot, my face flushing hot with embarrassment (我僵在原地,动弹不得,脸上火辣辣的,羞得无地自容). I was sure that I was the laughingstock (笑柄) of the class. However, Ava quickly came to my rescue.“Look at this interesting roof structure!” she said, picking up a piece. Jayce chimed in (插嘴), “Yeah, and those side panels are so well-designed.” Encouraged by their kind words, I began to talk about the features I’d planned, like the special entrance size for small birds and the sloped roof to prevent rainwater buildup. The class listened with attention, and clapped loudly as I finished.
As the thunderous applause faded (雷鸣般的掌声渐渐平息), Mrs. Williams announced the start of the voting. My heart was in my mouth (我的心都提到了嗓子眼儿). When she finally revealed that my project had won, I couldn’t believe my ears (我简直不敢相信自己的耳朵). “Michael’s project,” Mrs. Williams remarked, “reminds us that science is about creativity and the willingness to learn from failures. His courage to share, even after the setback, is what makes this project special.” The whole class cheered for me. I sat down, feeling a sense of pride well up inside me, understanding that sometimes, unexpected turns can lead to the sweetest victories (我坐回座位,一股自豪感油然而生,终于明白:有时候,意外的转折反而能带来最甜美的胜利).(共15张PPT)
练4 读后续写1
DIY展示 挑战自我
第四部分 写作满分练
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Do-It-Yourself Disaster
“Time for the demonstration and we’ll vote for the entries for the Science Fair. Who wants to show your project first ” Mrs. Williams asked. For this project, we were allowed to do anything, as long as we did it ourselves. I buried my head in my sweater, just like my turtle buried his head in his shell to avoid notice.
The first volunteer was Ava. Unlike me, Ava just loved talking in front of people. She skipped to the front and showed us how to wire potatoes to produce electricity. It was cool, and I told her so when she passed my desk. My buddy Jayce got called on next. He demonstrated the Unpoppable Bubble. It was really good. I gave him a thumbs-up. “You did it，” I mouthed.
“Michael, please.” Michael. That was me. I
guessed I forgot to keep my head buried. I walked to
the front on shaking legs and set my birdhouse on the
table. I swallowed the baseball-sized lump in my throat
and started. “This is how to build a birdhouse. I looked
online for plans and went to the woodyard with my dad, since I’m not old enough to drive.” My classmates laughed and I could tell they appreciated my humor. Having gained some confidence, I went on with my words. “Someone there cut four pieces for the walls, and made the hole.”
Luka’s hand shot up. “So what did you do ” he asked. I swallowed. The lump in my throat was now the size of a basketball. “I came up with the idea and I figured out how to hinge (加铰链) the roof so I can clean out the house after the birds leave.” I lifted the roof to show everyone. Some kids stood up to see.
“Then I nailed all the walls together.” I picked up the heavy hammer (锤子) borrowed from my dad： I had left one of the nails sticking out a little so I could demonstrate. As I gave the nail a mighty blow, the hammer came down on the roof instead of the nail. Smash!
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
The roof caved in and the birdhouse fell apart.
As the thunderous applause faded, Mrs. Williams announced the start of the voting.
原文基本要素
主要人物：I (Michael)
①缺乏自信：埋头避免被注意，不敢主动展示；②有创造力：构思鸟屋、设计铰链连接鸟屋屋顶的实用功能，并(试图)自己动手组装(钉钉子)；③幽默：尽管紧张，能用自嘲(not old enough to drive)化解尴尬，赢得笑声；④关注他人：注意到同学对他幽默的反应(appreciated my humor)，鼓励朋友(“You did it，” I mouthed, thumbs-up)。
答案与解析
Ava：自信外向有能力 (loved talking in front of people，成功演示项目)；Jayce：有能力(成功演示项目)；Luka；Mrs. Williams
原文情节线：科学展览演示和投票环节开始，“我”埋头避免被注意→艾娃(Ava)成功演示了土豆发电项目、朋友杰斯(Jayce)成功演示了“永不破灭的泡泡”→“我”被叫到，硬着头皮上台→“我”开始介绍自己的鸟屋项目→(冲突)同学卢卡(Luka)质疑了项目是否“DIY”→“我”解释了自己的贡献→(高潮) “我”动手演示DIY动作，但锤子失误砸在了鸟屋的屋顶上→(结果)鸟屋坍塌。
答案与解析
主题：挑战自我、校园活动、人际关系与合作、科学创新与实践
续写情节
第一段：衔接①：衔接首句“屋顶塌了，鸟屋散架了”：“我”的反应：呆若木鸡，极度尴尬，确信自己成了笑柄。过渡句：(协同原文提到的两个展示自己项目的朋友)朋友相助：同学艾娃(Ava)立刻上前帮忙解围，朋友杰斯(Jayce)立刻跟进→“我”受到朋友的鼓励,开始讲解鸟屋的设计特点。衔接②：尾句衔接第二段首句中的“雷鸣般的掌声渐渐平息后”：同学们开始认真倾听，最后鼓掌。
答案与解析
第二段：衔接③：衔接首句“雷鸣般的掌声渐渐平息后, Williams老师宣布开始投票”：“我”紧张地等待宣布结果。过渡句：老师宣布“我”的项目获胜→Williams老师的评价：获胜原因并非项目本身完美无缺，而是其体现的科学精神(协同原文首段中的the Science Fair)——创造力、从失败中学习的意愿和面对挫折仍勇于分享的勇气→全班同学鼓掌欢呼。尾句：感悟升华：意外成就胜利。
答案与解析
The roof caved in and the birdhouse fell apart. I stood there, rooted to the spot, my face flushing hot with embarrassment (我僵在原地，动弹不得，脸上火辣辣的，羞得无地自容). I was sure that I was the laughingstock (笑柄) of the class. However, Ava quickly came to my rescue.“Look at this interesting roof structure!” she said, picking up a piece. Jayce chimed in (插嘴), “Yeah, and those side
美文诵读
panels are so well-designed.” Encouraged by their kind words, I began to talk about the features I’d planned, like the special entrance size for small birds and the sloped roof to prevent rainwater buildup. The class listened with attention, and clapped loudly as I finished.
美文诵读
As the thunderous applause faded (雷鸣般的掌声渐渐平息), Mrs. Williams announced the start of the voting. My heart was in my mouth (我的心都提到了嗓子眼儿). When she finally revealed that my project had won, I couldn’t believe my ears (我简直不敢相信自己的耳朵). “Michael’s project，” Mrs. Williams remarked, “reminds us that science is about creativity and the willingness to learn from
美文诵读
failures. His courage to share, even after the setback, is what makes this project special.” The whole class cheered for me. I sat down, feeling a sense of pride well up inside me, understanding that sometimes, unexpected turns can lead to the sweetest victories (我坐回座位，一股自豪感油然而生，终于明白：有时候，意外的转折反而能带来最甜美的胜利).
美文诵读
