练7 读后续写4 珍爱生命 险境求生
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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Ava, a high-spirited 17-year-old, was thrilled when her parents gifted her a brand-new mountain bike for her birthday. The shiny bike was a symbol of freedom and adventure to her. She couldn’t wait to take it on a challenging trail (小径) in the nearby forest.
One sunny weekend, Ava packed a small backpack with a water bottle, a sandwich, and a map, then set off on her bike. The forest trail was filled with twists and turns, and the tall trees provided a cool shade. As she rode deeper into the forest, the beauty of nature around her made her feel at peace.
However, after a while, Ava realized she had taken a wrong turn. The trail she was on looked unfamiliar, and the map in her backpack seemed to be of no help. Panic started to set in as she rode back and forth, trying to find a recognizable path.
Suddenly, she heard a loud growl (咆哮) from the bushes. Her heart pounding, Ava froze in her tracks. A large, angry-looking bear emerged from the bushes, standing on its back legs and showing its sharp claws. Ava knew she was in a life-threatening situation.
She quickly remembered what she had learned about bear encounters: don’t run, make yourself look big, and back away slowly. With trembling hands, she opened her backpack and took out her water bottle, waving it in the air while shouting as loudly as she could. The bear roared again, taking a step closer.
At that moment, a thought crossed Ava’s mind. She had to protect not only herself but also her precious bike. But how could she possibly do both
Ava’s mind raced as she tried to come up with a plan. She knew she couldn’t outrun the bear, and leaving her bike behind was not an option she was willing to consider easily. Then, she noticed a large tree a short distance away. If she could lead the bear away from her bike and towards the tree, she might be able to use it to her advantage.
注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Gathering all her courage, slowly she started backing away from her bike and towards the tree.
As the loud helicopter sound on her cell-phone filled the air, the bear looked frightened.
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原文基本要素
主要人物:Ava:冒险精神:主动挑战森林小径;冷静与机智:危机中迅速利用防熊知识(remembered what she had learned),并观察环境制订计划(noticed a large tree),表现观察力与应变能力。
原文情节线:Ava收到父母的礼物——山地车→渴望挑战森林小径→进入森林骑行(享受自然)→迷路(地图没用)→恐慌(来回寻找路径失败)→熊咆哮着出现→Ava吓呆,回忆防熊知识→挥舞水瓶制造威慑(主动对抗)→熊逼近(危机升级)→需保护自己与自行车→发现大树→计划引熊远离自行车。
主题:安全意识、解决问题、人与动物
续写情节
第一段:衔接①:衔接首句“她鼓起全部勇气,慢慢从自行车旁向后退,朝着大树走去”:熊对她的动作的反应:犹豫、密切观察。过渡句:艾娃在后退过程中继续威慑熊(协同原文中的“took out her water bottle, waving it in the air while shouting as loudly as she could”):挥舞水瓶、大声喊叫→艾娃成功退到树边,迅速爬上树→(协同原文中的“她的自行车”)自行车转移了熊的注意力。衔接②:尾句衔接第二段首句中的“当手机里直升机的巨大声响在空气中回荡时”:艾娃拿出手机拨打求救电话。
第二段:衔接③:衔接首句“当手机里直升机的巨大声响在空气中回荡时,熊看起来很害怕”:巨大的噪音惊吓和迷惑了熊。过渡句:救援直升机到来搜寻艾娃→直升机巨大的噪音和强风彻底吓退了熊→艾娃如释重负→(协同原文中的“She had to protect not only herself but also her precious bike”)挥手示意机组人员救走她的山地自行车→机组成员如何施救(直升机通常是放下绳索,将人与自行车吊上直升机)→完全脱离险境,人和心爱的自行车均获救,最后她带着感激之情回望森林的过程。 尾句:场景描写+感悟升华:(协同首段中的“a symbol of freedom and adventure”)交代故事结局,点明艾娃心理成长和品质(勇敢、冒险精神)。
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Gathering all her courage, slowly she started backing away from her bike and towards the tree. The bear hesitated for a moment, watching her movements carefully. Ava kept waving the water bottle and shouting to maintain her presence while moving sideways. Her heart was racing (她的心怦怦直跳), but she forced herself to stay focused. As she reached the tree, she quickly climbed onto the lowest branch and pulled herself up. The bear, now more curious than aggressive (更多是好奇而非具有攻击性), sniffed around her bike but did not go after it immediately. From her safer position, Ava took out her phone and dialed for help, whispering as quietly as she could.
As the loud helicopter sound on her cell-phone filled the air, the bear looked frightened. It raised its head, clearly confused by the sudden noise. Within minutes, a rescue helicopter appeared above the forest, circling around to locate Ava’s position. The bear, scared by the powerful wind and noise, ran back into the bushes. Ava breathed a sigh of relief (松了一口气) and waved frantically (疯狂地挥手) at the helicopter. She pointed to her bike, signaling that she wanted it to be rescued too. The crew understood and lowered a rope. With great effort, they secured both Ava and her beloved mountain bike and lifted them safely aboard. As the helicopter flew away, Ava looked down at the forest with gratitude, knowing she had faced danger bravely—and hadn’t lost her sense of adventure (当直升机飞离时,艾娃满怀感激地俯瞰着下方的森林,她知道她勇敢地面对了危险——而且没有失去她的冒险精神).(共16张PPT)
练7 读后续写4
珍爱生命 险境求生
第四部分 写作满分练
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Ava, a high-spirited 17-year-old, was thrilled when her parents gifted her a brand-new mountain bike for her birthday. The shiny bike was a symbol of freedom and adventure to her. She couldn’t wait to take it on a challenging trail (小径) in the nearby forest.
One sunny weekend, Ava packed a small backpack with a water bottle, a sandwich, and a map, then set off on her bike. The forest trail was filled with twists and turns, and the tall trees provided a cool shade. As she rode deeper into the forest, the beauty of nature around her made her feel at peace.
However, after a while, Ava realized she had taken a wrong turn. The trail she was on looked unfamiliar, and the map in her backpack seemed to be of no help. Panic started to set in as she rode back and forth, trying to find a recognizable path.
Suddenly, she heard a loud growl (咆哮) from the bushes. Her heart pounding, Ava froze in her tracks. A large, angry-looking bear emerged from the bushes, standing on its back legs and showing its sharp claws. Ava knew she was in a life-threatening situation.
She quickly remembered what she had learned about bear encounters: don’t run, make yourself look big, and back away slowly. With trembling hands, she opened her backpack and took out her water bottle, waving it in the air while shouting as loudly as she could. The bear roared again, taking a step closer.
At that moment, a thought crossed Ava’s mind. She had to protect not only herself but also her precious bike. But how could she possibly do both
Ava’s mind raced as she tried to come up with a plan. She knew she couldn’t outrun the bear, and leaving her bike behind was not an option she was willing to consider easily. Then, she noticed a large tree a short distance away. If she could lead the bear away from her bike and towards the tree, she might be able to use it to her advantage.
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Gathering all her courage, slowly she started backing away from her bike and towards the tree.
As the loud helicopter sound on her cell-phone filled the air, the bear looked frightened.
原文基本要素
主要人物：Ava：冒险精神：主动挑战森林小径；冷静与机智：危机中迅速利用防熊知识(remembered what she had learned)，并观察环境制订计划(noticed a large tree)，表现观察力与应变能力。
答案与解析
原文情节线：Ava收到父母的礼物——山地车→渴望挑战森林小径→进入森林骑行(享受自然)→迷路(地图没用)→恐慌(来回寻找路径失败)→熊咆哮着出现→Ava吓呆，回忆防熊知识→挥舞水瓶制造威慑(主动对抗)→熊逼近(危机升级)→需保护自己与自行车→发现大树→计划引熊远离自行车。
主题：安全意识、解决问题、人与动物
答案与解析
续写情节
第一段：衔接①：衔接首句“她鼓起全部勇气，慢慢从自行车旁向后退，朝着大树走去”：熊对她的动作的反应：犹豫、密切观察。过渡句：艾娃在后退过程中继续威慑熊(协同原文中的“took out her water bottle, waving it in the air while shouting as loudly as she could”)：挥舞水瓶、大声喊叫→艾娃成功退到树边，迅速爬上树→(协同原文中的“她的自行车”)自行车转移了熊的注意力。衔接
②：尾句衔接第二段首句中的“当手机里直升机的巨大声响在空气中回荡时”：艾娃拿出手机拨打求救电话。
答案与解析
第二段：衔接③：衔接首句“当手机里直升机的巨大声响在空气中回荡时，熊看起来很害怕”：巨大的噪音惊吓和迷惑了熊。过渡句:救援直升机到来搜寻艾娃→直升机巨大的噪音和强风彻底吓退了熊→艾娃如释重负→(协同原文中的“She had to protect not only herself but also her precious bike”)挥手示意机组人员救走她的山地自行车→机组成员如何施救(直升机通常是放下绳索，将人与自行
答案与解析
车吊上直升机)→完全脱离险境，人和心爱的自行车均获救，最后她带着感激之情回望森林的过程。 尾句：场景描写+感悟升华：
(协同首段中的“a symbol of freedom and adventure”)交代故事结局，点明艾娃心理成长和品质(勇敢、冒险精神)。
答案与解析
Gathering all her courage, slowly she started backing away from her bike and towards the tree. The bear hesitated for a moment, watching her movements carefully. Ava kept waving the water bottle and shouting to maintain her presence while moving sideways. Her heart was racing (她的心怦怦直跳), but she forced herself to stay focused. As she reached the tree, she quickly climbed onto the lowest
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branch and pulled herself up. The bear, now more curious than aggressive (更多是好奇而非具有攻击性), sniffed around her bike but did not go after it immediately. From her safer position, Ava took out her phone and dialed for help, whispering as quietly as she could.
美文诵读
As the loud helicopter sound on her cell-phone filled the air, the bear looked frightened. It raised its head, clearly confused by the sudden noise. Within minutes, a rescue helicopter appeared above the forest, circling around to locate Ava’s position. The bear, scared by the powerful wind and noise, ran back into the bushes. Ava breathed a sigh of relief (松了一口气) and waved frantically (疯狂地挥手) at the helicopter. She pointed to her bike, signaling that she wanted it to
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be rescued too. The crew understood and lowered a rope. With great effort, they secured both Ava and her beloved mountain bike and lifted them safely aboard. As the helicopter flew away, Ava looked down at the forest with gratitude, knowing she had faced danger bravely—and hadn’t lost her sense of adventure (当直升机飞离时,艾娃满怀感激地俯瞰着下方的森林，她知道她勇敢地面对了危险——而且没有失去她的冒险精神).
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