2026届高考英语二轮复习：读后续写：Bear 冰湖救援 Mike 课件(共21张PPT)
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Bear was not a bear. She was a big dog on the Perkinses' family farm,a woolly creature with floppy ears and paws like bedroom slippers. She protected the ducks and chickens from being eaten by foxes and raccoons（浣熊）.
She guarded the children as well, watching over them as closely as she did the chickens and ducks. In winter the dog ran alongside the children as they sledded (划雪橇) down snowy hills. In summer she swam with them in a nearby river.
Bear belonged to a breed (品种) that had long been used by Atlantic fishermen to help with their work, and it had a keen instinct for water rescue. When the children were in the river, the dog would swim in circles around them,barking when she felt they went out too far. She was the perfect farm dog—companion, guardian, protector.
The dog's favorite among the three children was three-year-old little Mike. They often curled up together.Sometimes Bear would doze while Mike pretended to read to her. Often both were sound asleep, a tangle of dark fur,blond hair, small hands and huge paws. At bedtime, Mike saved his last hug for Bear, his"best friend"
On a cold winter day, when their parents went out to send a parcel, eight-year-old Martha, seven-year-old Sara and Mike, went to slide on the frozen pond of their farm. Shouting happily, they slid back and forth, their boots gliding easily across the ice. They laughed as they watched Bear's attempts to stop suddenly, which would instead send her skidding beyond them. Then, tired, the three sat down on the ice, with Bear beside them. Suddenly the ice gave way under their combined weight.
As Bear jumped for shore, the three children fell into the freezing cold water. Screaming, Martha and Sarah struggled to find footing on rocks underwater. Branches from a tree nearby provided handholds, and using every bit of their strength, the two girls pulled themselves to shore.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置做答。
Looking back, they saw little Mike holding on to a broken chunk(大块) of ice, unable to crawl onto it.
Seeing that,Bear let out a series of woofs and jumped into the water，heading straight for Mike.
一、 新课标与高考评分标准解读
新课标核心素养：强调语言的综合运用能力，在续写中体现在：
1. 逻辑性：情节发展合理，与原文无缝衔接。
2. 丰富性：细节描写生动，人物情感饱满。
3. 创造性：在给定框架内进行合理的想象和发挥。
二、 双线分析法：情节线与情感线
高分作文就像一部微小说，情节是骨架，情感是血肉。两者必须交织进行。
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
1.危机爆发 描绘险境，渲染紧张气氛 女孩们惊慌失措，发出惊恐的尖叫。
她们的心狂跳不止，盯着Mike， 担心最坏的事情发生。
Mike 剧烈地颤抖着，虚弱地呼救。
Panic-stricken, the girls let out shrieks of horror.
Their hearts pounding wildly, they stared at Mike,
fearing the worst.
Mike, shivering violently, cried for help weakly.
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
2.英雄出击 描述救援者果断的行动 Bear毫不犹豫地跳进冰冷的水中。
在保护本能的驱使下，她冲向挣扎的男孩。
一连串坚定的吠叫声打破了紧张的气氛。
Without a second thought/hesitation, Bear leaped into the icy water.
Driven by her instinct to protect, she dashed towards the struggling boy.
A series of determined barks broke the tense air.
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
3.救援过程 详细、有层次地描写救援动作（得分关键） 动作细节：
环境阻力：
时间感：
用尽全力游动
轻轻咬住他的衣服
用鼻子推着他前进
对抗刺骨的冷水
对抗急流
swam with all her might
nipping at his clothes gently
pushing him forward with her nose
against the biting cold water
fighting the strong current
仿佛过了永恒之后
每一秒都像一个小时那么漫长
After what seemed like an eternity
Every second felt like an hour.
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
4.成功团聚 描写成功上岸及后续的温馨场面
最终他们安全到达岸边。
精疲力尽但安然无恙，Mike瘫倒在地， 咳出呛入的水。
Finally， they reached the safety of the shore.
Exhausted but safe, Mike collapsed onto the ground, coughing up water.
女孩们冲过去， 脸色因恐惧而苍白，但眼中闪烁着宽慰的光芒。
The girls rushed over, their faces pale with fear but eyes shining with relief.
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情感阶段 任务情感 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
危机时 女孩们： 一阵恐惧席卷了他们
吓呆了
Mike： 吓得说不出话
冻得麻木
Bear： 焦虑的呜咽，
双眼担忧地紧盯着Mike
a wave of horror washed over them
too terrified to utter a word
2. 情感线分析：情感的起伏与变化
情感线要随着情节线自然流动，并通过人物的动作、神态、内心独白（间接）和环境衬托来体现。
恐惧、无助、绝望
冰冷、恐惧、虚弱
警觉、焦急
frozen with fear
numb with cold
whimpered anxiously
her eyes fixed on Mike with worry
情感阶段 任务情感 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
救援中 女孩们： 她们屏住呼吸，默默祈祷。
Bear： 带着坚定的决心， 她……
They held their breath, praying silently.
2. 情感线分析：情感的起伏与变化
情感线要随着情节线自然流动，并通过人物的动作、神态、内心独白（间接）和环境衬托来体现。
希望、紧张、祈祷
坚定、努力
With unwavering determination, she…
情感阶段 任务情感 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
团聚后 全员：
喜极而泣
2. 情感线分析：情感的起伏与变化
情感线要随着情节线自然流动，并通过人物的动作、神态、内心独白（间接）和环境衬托来体现。
hugged each other tightly
宽慰、狂喜、感激、后怕
动作神态
burst into tears of joy
紧紧相拥
某人涌起一阵强烈的感激之情
a sense of overwhelming gratitude surged through sb.
升华情感
在那一刻，他们知道Bear 不仅仅是宠物，更是家人。
At that moment, they knew Bear was more than a pet; she was family.
建议：第一段结尾以Mike的持续险境结尾
这种方式最能体现救援的紧迫性和Bear行动的原因。
三、如何实现无缝衔接
第二段开头的seeing that （让that 有物可指）
Unfortunately, Mike’s strength was failing and he was about to be swallowed by the icy water.
四、写作素材
词汇
1.Bear's rescue attempt
plunge into（跳入） paddle frantically（拼命划水）
grab with one’s teeth（用牙齿咬住） fight against the current（与水流搏斗）
2.Mike's rescue
cling to（紧紧抓住） pull to safety（拉到安全地带）
wrap around（缠绕） gasp for air（喘气）
3. Reaching safety
drag onto shore（拖上岸） collapse exhausted（筋疲力尽地倒下）
shiver uncontrollably（不受控制地发抖） huddle together（挤在一起）
4. Lesson learned
appreciate one's loyalty（感激某人的忠诚）
not just a pet but a guardian angel(不是宠物而是守护天使)
句式
1.Bear's rescue attempt
动作：Without hesitation, Bear plunged into the icy water, her powerful legs paddling frantically toward Mike.(Bear毫不犹豫地跳入冰冷的水中，用她强壮的腿拼命向Mike划去。）
动作：Using her strong jaws, she grabbed Mike's coat with her teeth and began pulling him toward the shore.（她用强壮的颚部咬住Mike的外套，开始把他往岸边拉。）
心理: Fear gripped Bear's heart as she fought against the strong current, but her determination to save Mike was stronger.（恐惧攫住了Bear的心，但她救Mike的决心更强大。）
2.Mike's rescue
动作：: Mike clung to Bear's fur with all his might as the dog struggled to keep them both afloat.（Mike用尽全力抓住Bear的毛，而狗则努力让他们俩都浮在水面上。）
人物&动作：Bear's tail worked like a rudder, steering them through the freezing water toward safety.（Bear的尾巴像舵一样工作，引导他们穿过冰冷的水域到达安全地带。）
心理：Terrified but safe, Mike wrapped his arms around Bear's neck. （虽然害怕但安全，Mike用手臂环抱住Bear的脖子。）
3.Reaching safety
动作: With one final mighty effort, Bear dragged Mike onto the shore, then collapsed beside him,panting heavily.
（Bear用最后的力气把Mike拖上岸，然后倒在他旁边，大口喘气。）
环境：The girls rushed to wrap their little brother and Bear in their coats, their teeth chattering from both cold and fear.
（女孩们冲过去用外套裹住弟弟和Bear，他们的牙齿因寒冷和恐惧而打颤。）
人物：All three children huddled around Bear, their hero, as they waited for help to arrive.
（三个孩子都挤在他们的英雄Bear周围，等待帮助到来。）
Looking back, they saw little Mike holding on to a broken chunk of ice, unable to crawl onto it.Panic-stricken, Martha and Sarah screamed for help, their voices echoing across the desolate （荒凉的）pond. (高分词汇：panic-stricken, desolate 渲染气氛). Mike, his lips turning blue and his body shivering uncontrollably, could only whimper（呜咽）, his small hands gripping the slippery ice desperately. (细节描写，画面感强). Just as despair began to choke the sisters, Bear, who had been barking frantically on the shore, stopped for a moment as if assessing the situation. (合理想象，体现狗的智慧)Suddenly，Mike's strength was failing and he was about to be swallowed by the icy water.(实现与第二段的衔接)
Possible Version 1
五、下水作文
Seeing that, Bear let out a series of woofs and jumped into the water; heading straight for Mike.Fighting against the biting cold, she swam with all her might toward her little master. (现在分词作状语，生动描绘阻力与努力). Upon reaching him, she gently nipped （咬）the collar of his coat and began to tug（拽） him backward. (动作描写精准、温柔). It was a slow and arduous（艰巨的） process, but Bear's determination never wavered（动摇）. (使用评价性形容词，升华精神). Finally, after what felt like an eternity（永恒）, they reached the bank. Martha and Sarah, with tears streaming down their faces, immediately pulled Mike into a tight embrace, their hearts flooded with indescribable relief and gratitude. (比喻手法，情感描写细腻). Standing beside them, Bear shook the water off her fur vigorously, her tail wagging happily, as if sharing in the family's overwhelming joy（难以抑制的喜悦）. (结尾点睛之笔，用Bear的动作完美收束故事，体现情感).
Looking back, they saw little Mike holding on to a broken chunk of ice, unable to crawl onto it.A wave of horror washed over Martha and Sarah as they witnessed Mike's small, numb fingers slipping desperately on the treacherous（危险的） ice. (衔接与升级危机)His face was pale as a ghost, and his weak, gasping cries for help were swallowed by the cruel wind. (多感官细节渲染)On the bank, Bear was a picture of frantic anxiety. She paced back and forth, letting out sharp, high-pitched whines, her eyes locked on the struggling boy. Every fiber of her being was screaming to act. (核心：描写Bear的预备状态，而非行动) Meanwhile，Mike's little body was giving out, and he was on the verge of sinking into the frigid depths. (实现与第二段的衔接)
Possible Version 2
Seeing that, Bear let out a series of woofs and jumped into the water; heading straight for Mike.Fighting against the paralyzing cold（刺骨的寒冷） that seized her muscles, the brave dog powered through the water with powerful strokes born of her breeding.（源于其血统的强大划水） (高分词汇与背景呼应) Within seconds, she reached him. Gently but swiftly, she clamped her jaws onto the collar of his coat（咬住衣领）, turned, and began the arduous （艰巨的）task of towing (拖)her precious cargo back to safety. (精准的动作描写)"Hold on, Mike! Hold on!" the sisters cried from the shore, their voices a tangled mix of terror and burgeoning hope（恐惧与渐生希望的交织体), their fists clenched so tightly that their nails dug into their palms. (侧面烘托与细节)Finally, after what felt like an eternity, Bear's paws scraped the muddy bottom of the shore（碰到泥泞的底部）. With one last monumental heave（巨大的推力）, she pushed Mike onto the solid ground before collapsing beside him, panting heavily. (高潮与解脱)The girls rushed over, wrapping their shivering brother in a tight, warm hug, their tears of fear now mingling with tears of immense relief. Bear, exhausted but vigilant(警觉), nuzzled Mike's cold cheek with her warm nose—a silent, loving touch that spoke louder than any bark. They were safe. They were together. (情感升华与点题)
遵循黄金法则
1. 尊重给定开头：第二段的首句是“神圣不可侵犯”的剧本。第一段的情节发展必须在它之前停下，为它留出完整的展开空间。
2. 制造悬崖时刻：第一段的结尾应是危机达到顶峰、人物做出决定、行动即将开始的“临界点”。就像是电影里的悬念镜头，在英雄起跳的前一秒切画面。
3. 逻辑大于一切：确保你的续写前后连贯，不自相矛盾。动笔前，在心里像过电影一样把两段情节顺一遍。
六、总结：
Thanks!
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Bear was not a bear. She was a big dog on the Perkinses' family farm,a woolly creature with floppy ears and paws like bedroom slippers. She protected the ducks and chickens from being eaten by foxes and raccoons（浣熊）.
She guarded the children as well, watching over them as closely as she did the chickens and ducks. In winter the dog ran alongside the children as they sledded (划雪橇) down snowy hills. In summer she swam with them in a nearby river.
Bear belonged to a breed (品种) that had long been used by Atlantic fishermen to help with their work, and it had a keen instinct for water rescue. When the children were in the river, the dog would swim in circles around them,barking when she felt they went out too far. She was the perfect farm dog—companion, guardian, protector.
The dog's favorite among the three children was three-year-old little Mike. They often curled up together.Sometimes Bear would doze while Mike pretended to read to her. Often both were sound asleep, a tangle of dark fur,blond hair, small hands and huge paws. At bedtime, Mike saved his last hug for Bear, his"best friend"
On a cold winter day, when their parents went out to send a parcel, eight-year-old Martha, seven-year-old Sara and Mike, went to slide on the frozen pond of their farm. Shouting happily, they slid back and forth, their boots gliding easily across the ice. They laughed as they watched Bear's attempts to stop suddenly, which would instead send her skidding beyond them. Then, tired, the three sat down on the ice, with Bear beside them. Suddenly the ice gave way under their combined weight.
As Bear jumped for shore, the three children fell into the freezing cold water. Screaming, Martha and Sarah struggled to find footing on rocks underwater. Branches from a tree nearby provided handholds, and using every bit of their strength, the two girls pulled themselves to shore.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置做答。
Looking back, they saw little Mike holding on to a broken chunk(大块) of ice, unable to crawl onto it.
Seeing that,Bear let out a series of woofs and jumped into the water，heading straight for Mike.
一、 新课标与高考评分标准解读
新课标核心素养：强调语言的综合运用能力，在续写中体现在：
1. 逻辑性：情节发展合理，与原文无缝衔接。
2. 丰富性：细节描写生动，人物情感饱满。
3. 创造性：在给定框架内进行合理的想象和发挥。
二、 双线分析法：情节线与情感线
高分作文就像一部微小说，情节是骨架，情感是血肉。两者必须交织进行。
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
1.危机爆发 描绘险境，渲染紧张气氛 女孩们惊慌失措，发出惊恐的尖叫。
她们的心狂跳不止，盯着Mike， 担心最坏的事情发生。
Mike 剧烈地颤抖着，虚弱地呼救。
Panic-stricken, the girls let out shrieks of horror.
Their hearts pounding wildly, they stared at Mike,
fearing the worst.
Mike, shivering violently, cried for help weakly.
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
2.英雄出击 描述救援者果断的行动 Bear毫不犹豫地跳进冰冷的水中。
在保护本能的驱使下，她冲向挣扎的男孩。
一连串坚定的吠叫声打破了紧张的气氛。
Without a second thought/hesitation, Bear leaped into the icy water.
Driven by her instinct to protect, she dashed towards the struggling boy.
A series of determined barks broke the tense air.
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
3.救援过程 详细、有层次地描写救援动作（得分关键） 动作细节：
环境阻力：
时间感：
用尽全力游动
轻轻咬住他的衣服
用鼻子推着他前进
对抗刺骨的冷水
对抗急流
swam with all her might
nipping at his clothes gently
pushing him forward with her nose
against the biting cold water
fighting the strong current
仿佛过了永恒之后
每一秒都像一个小时那么漫长
After what seemed like an eternity
Every second felt like an hour.
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情节阶段 核心任务 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
4.成功团聚 描写成功上岸及后续的温馨场面
最终他们安全到达岸边。
精疲力尽但安然无恙，Mike瘫倒在地， 咳出呛入的水。
Finally， they reached the safety of the shore.
Exhausted but safe, Mike collapsed onto the ground, coughing up water.
女孩们冲过去， 脸色因恐惧而苍白，但眼中闪烁着宽慰的光芒。
The girls rushed over, their faces pale with fear but eyes shining with relief.
1. 情节线分析：救援行动的四步法
情感阶段 任务情感 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
危机时 女孩们： 一阵恐惧席卷了他们
吓呆了
Mike： 吓得说不出话
冻得麻木
Bear： 焦虑的呜咽，
双眼担忧地紧盯着Mike
a wave of horror washed over them
too terrified to utter a word
2. 情感线分析：情感的起伏与变化
情感线要随着情节线自然流动，并通过人物的动作、神态、内心独白（间接）和环境衬托来体现。
恐惧、无助、绝望
冰冷、恐惧、虚弱
警觉、焦急
frozen with fear
numb with cold
whimpered anxiously
her eyes fixed on Mike with worry
情感阶段 任务情感 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
救援中 女孩们： 她们屏住呼吸，默默祈祷。
Bear： 带着坚定的决心， 她……
They held their breath, praying silently.
2. 情感线分析：情感的起伏与变化
情感线要随着情节线自然流动，并通过人物的动作、神态、内心独白（间接）和环境衬托来体现。
希望、紧张、祈祷
坚定、努力
With unwavering determination, she…
情感阶段 任务情感 可用的高分表达（语言之架）
团聚后 全员：
喜极而泣
2. 情感线分析：情感的起伏与变化
情感线要随着情节线自然流动，并通过人物的动作、神态、内心独白（间接）和环境衬托来体现。
hugged each other tightly
宽慰、狂喜、感激、后怕
动作神态
burst into tears of joy
紧紧相拥
某人涌起一阵强烈的感激之情
a sense of overwhelming gratitude surged through sb.
升华情感
在那一刻，他们知道Bear 不仅仅是宠物，更是家人。
At that moment, they knew Bear was more than a pet; she was family.
建议：第一段结尾以Mike的持续险境结尾
这种方式最能体现救援的紧迫性和Bear行动的原因。
三、如何实现无缝衔接
第二段开头的seeing that （让that 有物可指）
Unfortunately, Mike’s strength was failing and he was about to be swallowed by the icy water.
四、写作素材
词汇
1.Bear's rescue attempt
plunge into（跳入） paddle frantically（拼命划水）
grab with one’s teeth（用牙齿咬住） fight against the current（与水流搏斗）
2.Mike's rescue
cling to（紧紧抓住） pull to safety（拉到安全地带）
wrap around（缠绕） gasp for air（喘气）
3. Reaching safety
drag onto shore（拖上岸） collapse exhausted（筋疲力尽地倒下）
shiver uncontrollably（不受控制地发抖） huddle together（挤在一起）
4. Lesson learned
appreciate one's loyalty（感激某人的忠诚）
not just a pet but a guardian angel(不是宠物而是守护天使)
句式
1.Bear's rescue attempt
动作：Without hesitation, Bear plunged into the icy water, her powerful legs paddling frantically toward Mike.(Bear毫不犹豫地跳入冰冷的水中，用她强壮的腿拼命向Mike划去。）
动作：Using her strong jaws, she grabbed Mike's coat with her teeth and began pulling him toward the shore.（她用强壮的颚部咬住Mike的外套，开始把他往岸边拉。）
心理: Fear gripped Bear's heart as she fought against the strong current, but her determination to save Mike was stronger.（恐惧攫住了Bear的心，但她救Mike的决心更强大。）
2.Mike's rescue
动作：: Mike clung to Bear's fur with all his might as the dog struggled to keep them both afloat.（Mike用尽全力抓住Bear的毛，而狗则努力让他们俩都浮在水面上。）
人物&动作：Bear's tail worked like a rudder, steering them through the freezing water toward safety.（Bear的尾巴像舵一样工作，引导他们穿过冰冷的水域到达安全地带。）
心理：Terrified but safe, Mike wrapped his arms around Bear's neck. （虽然害怕但安全，Mike用手臂环抱住Bear的脖子。）
3.Reaching safety
动作: With one final mighty effort, Bear dragged Mike onto the shore, then collapsed beside him,panting heavily.
（Bear用最后的力气把Mike拖上岸，然后倒在他旁边，大口喘气。）
环境：The girls rushed to wrap their little brother and Bear in their coats, their teeth chattering from both cold and fear.
（女孩们冲过去用外套裹住弟弟和Bear，他们的牙齿因寒冷和恐惧而打颤。）
人物：All three children huddled around Bear, their hero, as they waited for help to arrive.
（三个孩子都挤在他们的英雄Bear周围，等待帮助到来。）
Looking back, they saw little Mike holding on to a broken chunk of ice, unable to crawl onto it.Panic-stricken, Martha and Sarah screamed for help, their voices echoing across the desolate （荒凉的）pond. (高分词汇：panic-stricken, desolate 渲染气氛). Mike, his lips turning blue and his body shivering uncontrollably, could only whimper（呜咽）, his small hands gripping the slippery ice desperately. (细节描写，画面感强). Just as despair began to choke the sisters, Bear, who had been barking frantically on the shore, stopped for a moment as if assessing the situation. (合理想象，体现狗的智慧)Suddenly，Mike's strength was failing and he was about to be swallowed by the icy water.(实现与第二段的衔接)
Possible Version 1
五、下水作文
Seeing that, Bear let out a series of woofs and jumped into the water; heading straight for Mike.Fighting against the biting cold, she swam with all her might toward her little master. (现在分词作状语，生动描绘阻力与努力). Upon reaching him, she gently nipped （咬）the collar of his coat and began to tug（拽） him backward. (动作描写精准、温柔). It was a slow and arduous（艰巨的） process, but Bear's determination never wavered（动摇）. (使用评价性形容词，升华精神). Finally, after what felt like an eternity（永恒）, they reached the bank. Martha and Sarah, with tears streaming down their faces, immediately pulled Mike into a tight embrace, their hearts flooded with indescribable relief and gratitude. (比喻手法，情感描写细腻). Standing beside them, Bear shook the water off her fur vigorously, her tail wagging happily, as if sharing in the family's overwhelming joy（难以抑制的喜悦）. (结尾点睛之笔，用Bear的动作完美收束故事，体现情感).
Looking back, they saw little Mike holding on to a broken chunk of ice, unable to crawl onto it.A wave of horror washed over Martha and Sarah as they witnessed Mike's small, numb fingers slipping desperately on the treacherous（危险的） ice. (衔接与升级危机)His face was pale as a ghost, and his weak, gasping cries for help were swallowed by the cruel wind. (多感官细节渲染)On the bank, Bear was a picture of frantic anxiety. She paced back and forth, letting out sharp, high-pitched whines, her eyes locked on the struggling boy. Every fiber of her being was screaming to act. (核心：描写Bear的预备状态，而非行动) Meanwhile，Mike's little body was giving out, and he was on the verge of sinking into the frigid depths. (实现与第二段的衔接)
Possible Version 2
Seeing that, Bear let out a series of woofs and jumped into the water; heading straight for Mike.Fighting against the paralyzing cold（刺骨的寒冷） that seized her muscles, the brave dog powered through the water with powerful strokes born of her breeding.（源于其血统的强大划水） (高分词汇与背景呼应) Within seconds, she reached him. Gently but swiftly, she clamped her jaws onto the collar of his coat（咬住衣领）, turned, and began the arduous （艰巨的）task of towing (拖)her precious cargo back to safety. (精准的动作描写)"Hold on, Mike! Hold on!" the sisters cried from the shore, their voices a tangled mix of terror and burgeoning hope（恐惧与渐生希望的交织体), their fists clenched so tightly that their nails dug into their palms. (侧面烘托与细节)Finally, after what felt like an eternity, Bear's paws scraped the muddy bottom of the shore（碰到泥泞的底部）. With one last monumental heave（巨大的推力）, she pushed Mike onto the solid ground before collapsing beside him, panting heavily. (高潮与解脱)The girls rushed over, wrapping their shivering brother in a tight, warm hug, their tears of fear now mingling with tears of immense relief. Bear, exhausted but vigilant(警觉), nuzzled Mike's cold cheek with her warm nose—a silent, loving touch that spoke louder than any bark. They were safe. They were together. (情感升华与点题)
遵循黄金法则
1. 尊重给定开头：第二段的首句是“神圣不可侵犯”的剧本。第一段的情节发展必须在它之前停下，为它留出完整的展开空间。
2. 制造悬崖时刻：第一段的结尾应是危机达到顶峰、人物做出决定、行动即将开始的“临界点”。就像是电影里的悬念镜头，在英雄起跳的前一秒切画面。
3. 逻辑大于一切：确保你的续写前后连贯，不自相矛盾。动笔前，在心里像过电影一样把两段情节顺一遍。
六、总结：
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