2026届高考英语二轮复习：AI赋能读后续写（拯救受伤的小鸟）课件(共19张PPT)

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读后续写步骤
分析续写两段段首句
研读文本
分析情节，把握主题
构思续写布局
找关键词
提前预测情节走向
段落大意
5W1H:when,where,why,who,what
语言文本特点：adj/adv/v/句型
故事情节发展
人物情感变化
确定故事主题
人称
时态
续写情节
高三英语读后续写复习课
主题：宠物情缘与危机解决）
（第12期周报）
1.能识别读后续写文本的主题类型，掌握人物情感描写、动作描写的常用词汇和句式，理解故事续写的逻辑连贯性。
2.能自主修改续写内容，运用恰当的时态和词汇完成续写，提升叙事能力和语言表达能力。
3.能体会人与动物之间的情感联结，感受关爱与责任的重要性。
【学习目标】
I've desired to raise a dog for years. One week ago, my family and I visited a place filled with beautiful adult dogs) As soon as we arrived, eight dogs came running towards us. Among them, one cute brown dog immediately caught our attention.He climbed onto our laps, showering us with affectionate licks. They say the dog will pick you,and I really felt that was the case. It truly felt like the dog had chosen us.
We took the dog home and in no time at all we were interested in it. We gave him a new name Rufus. After only two days, our bond with Rufus grew deeper. It would greet us with an excited wagging tail every time we returned home, its eyes beaming with joy. We spent hours playing pick-up ball in the backyard, and it would run with all its might, bringing back the ball with pride. On lazy evenings, it would lie beside us on the couch,providing a warm and comforting presence. We shared walks, during which it explored the world with curiosity, while we enjoyed the simple pleasure of its company. It listened attentively when we talked, as if understanding every word.
The day before yesterday, full of hope for a nice outing, we decided to take our Rufus to a park we had never been to before. We thought this park would be a great place to relax and enjoy the beauty,of nature. As soon as we got there, Rufus, excited and full of energy, ran quickly after a colourful butterfly flying among the flowers. We watched him with big smiles, happy to see him having so much fun.But suddenly,to Our great horror he disappeared behind a thick bush. Panic filled us right away. We rushed to the bush and shouted his name as loudly as we could, our voices full of worry. After searching everywhere around in a hurry, we still couldn't find him. We were extremely scared, our hearts pounding hard in our throats.
第一段: Just when we were on the point of despair, we heard a familiar bark.
描写 “听到叫声” 后的动作与心理（如：立刻循声而去、内心的希望燃起）。
交代 Rufus 的状态（是否安全、为何走失）。
描写 “我们”将受伤的小鸟带回家之后的做法（如：清洗、包扎）。
总结这次经历的感悟（如：更珍惜彼此、责任感）。
Step 1 分析续写两段段首句
第二段: With tender hearts, we carefully took the injured bird home.
（有人）noun
（E情）adj./adv.>v.>n.
（M动）verb
（O物）noun
该文本属于 “人与动物”主题下的“宠物情缘与克服困难”类型。文本围绕 “我” 与新宠物狗 Rufus 的相处展开，从温馨的日常互动到公园走失的危机，核心是人与动物的情感联结以及面对困难（宠物走失）时的行动与成长。
Step 2 文本类别分析
Step 3 分析情节，把握主题
1. 情节发展：
2. 人物情感变化：
3. 关键元素：
喜爱→亲密→快乐→恐慌→绝望→（续写需体现快乐与希望）。
渴望养狗→领养 Rufus→日常温馨互动→公园游玩→Rufus 走失→焦急寻找。→（续写：听到叫声→发现并解决）
Rufus 的性格（活泼、好奇）、“我们” 的情感（关爱、担忧）、场景（公园、灌木丛）。
姓名 内容 :续写内容与原文情境的融洽度、完整性 语法:词汇语法的准确性 衔接：语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰紧凑，意义连贯。
夏春香 1.可以增加更多细节描写使故事更生。 2. 角色心理活动描写略显简单 1. 时态与动词形式错误：3处 2. 冠词与名词错误：2处 3. 表达不准确：2处
· 可以增加更多样化的衔接手段
· 部分句子间过渡稍显生硬
彭钰玲 1. 部分情节逻辑不够合理："举办盛宴庆祝"与救助小鸟的温馨氛围不太协调 2. 时间线索混乱："A few weeks ago"与上下文时态矛盾 3. 结尾略显仓促，缺乏深度 1.拼写错误：7处 2.时态错误：4处 3.句子结构错误：5处 4.用词不当：3处
.段落内部逻辑跳跃较大
· 缺乏有效的过渡词连接动作序列
· 部分句子间联系不够紧密
杨晓 "shouting loudly"形容狗不够准确； "词义不明，影响理解；可以增加更多心理活动和细节描写 1. 用词与搭配错误：4处 2. 拼写与表达问题：3处 3. 冠词缺失：2处 · 可以增加更多样化的衔接手段
· 部分句子间联系可以更紧密
续写中出现的问题
姓名 内容 :续写内容与原文情境的融洽度、完整性 语法:词汇语法的准确性 衔接：语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰紧凑，意义连贯。
凌志 1. 情节转折略显突兀 - Rufus突然带回受伤小鸟的原因缺乏铺垫。 2. 细节描写不够丰富——救助过程、情感变化等可以更具体 3. 角色互动可以更深入—— 家庭成员的反应描写不足 · 时态错误：3处 · 词性错误：2处 · 拼写错误：2处 · 句子结构问题：2处 1. 连接词使用单一，缺乏however, meanwhile, consequently等过渡词
2. 部分句子间逻辑连接不够紧密
3. 可以增加更多指代和照应手段
贺晓晓 1. 情节逻辑不合理："小鸟在Rufus背上"不符合常理 2. 人称混乱：从"our"突然切换到"your" 3. 角色名称不一致："Rufus"和"Rufi"混用 4. 结尾表达抽象，与故事衔接不够自然 1. 词汇选择错误5处 2. 语法结构错误3处 3. 严重语法错误：5处 · 段落内部逻辑跳跃较大
· 人称混乱严重影响连贯性
· 缺乏有效的过渡词
· 情节发展不够自然流畅
朱奥星 1. 细节描写不够丰富，可以增加更多动作和心理描写 2. 情感表达可以更加细腻 3. "新增家庭成员"的表述略显突兀 1. 拼写与用词错误：5处 2.时态与语法错误：4处 3.句子结构问题：5处 · 句子间衔接可以更加紧密
· 可以增加更多过渡词使行文更流畅
姓名 内容 :续写内容与原文情境的融洽度、完整性 语法:词汇语法的准确性 衔接：语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰紧凑，意义连贯。
陈杨 1. 情节逻辑不够清晰：Rufus为何变得"calm"缺乏解释 2. 细节描写混乱："pushed my leg"、"cleaning place"等表达意思模糊 3. 结尾突兀："never seen this one through"与前后文衔接不畅 1.时态错误：4处 2.拼写错误：6处 3.词性错误：3处 4.句子结构问题：5处 ·段落间逻辑跳跃较大
· 指代不明："he"有时指狗有时指鸟，造成混淆
· 缺乏有效的过渡词连接事件发展
陈嗣航 部分情节转折略显生硬，如直接决定去宠物医院 · 结尾略显仓促，可以更充分地展开 · "Dog is a truly kindness animal"表述过于笼统 1. 时态与动词形式错误：4 2. 表达与用词错误：4处 3. 句子结构问题：6处 ·部分句子间衔接不够紧密
· 可以增加更多样化的衔接手段
· "And Rufus's eyes..."开头的句子衔接略显生硬
蔡丽娜 . 多处表达令人费解，严重影响理解 2. 情节逻辑混乱："Rufus asked help for me"语义不清 3. 意象使用不当："free butterfly"与上下文关联性弱 4. 结尾突兀且含义不明 1. 基础词汇错误：3处 2. 令人费解的表达：7处 ·逻辑跳跃严重，段落内部连贯性差
· 缺乏有效的过渡手段
· 情节发展不自然，多处断档
激动与兴奋：
1.excied/thrilled兴奋的、激动的
2.move/touch vt.使感动
3.shed tears of gratitude流下感激的泪水
4.be deeply moved/touched by...被……深深感动
惊讶：
1.open-mouthed adj.惊愕得张大嘴的；目瞪口呆的
2.surprise/amaze/astonish vt.使吃惊，使惊讶
3.much to one's shock/astonishment/surprise/amazement令某人很震惊/吃惊/惊讶/惊奇的是
4.in disbelief难以置信地
5.eyes widen in surprise/astonishment惊讶地睁大眼睛
开心：
happy(happiness)/delighted/joyful/cheerful
Step 4 词汇与句式积累
情绪类单词、短语
1.冲过去：dash towards，race over，run over，charge towards
2.蹲下来：kneel down，bend down,
3.仔细检查：examine carefully,inspect/inspection,have a thorough examination.
4.敷药：apply medicine to...,put on some medicine
5.摇尾巴：wag tail
动作类单词、短语
可运用的高级句型之：with的复合结构 /独立主格结构
→With our hearts swelling with excitement, we quickly ran towards the direction where the sound came from.
1.我们内心激动万分，迅速朝声音传来的方向跑去。
→Great excitement in our heart,We quickly ran towards the direction where the sound came from.
Just behind the thick bush lay Rufus, guarding the injured bird.
可运用的高级句型之：部分倒装与完全倒装
So delighted were we that we quickly rushed to him as soon as we saw him.
2.一见到他，我们便欣喜若狂地飞快冲了过去。
3.就在那丛厚厚的灌木后面，躺着Rufus，守护着那只受伤的小鸟。
4.Rufus紧紧跟在我们身后，尾巴缓缓地摇动着，当我们靠近这个小生物的时候，他仿佛明白我们的任务。
可运用的高级句型之：状从与动词的联动
After arriving home, we showered it with gentle care, applied medicine to the wound, and fed it.
Rufus followed closely, his tail wagging slowly, as if understanding our mission, as we carefully approached the tiny creature.
5.到家后，我们悉心呵护它，为它敷药、喂食。
6.几天后，小鸟的伤口愈合了，我们决定一起将它放生到野外。
Over the next days, the little bird regained its vitality. Rufus seemed happier, having a wonderful time playing with the bird .
6.接下来的几天，小鸟恢复了生机。Rufus似乎更开心了，与小鸟一起愉快的玩耍起来。
可运用的高级句型之：非谓语
A few days later, the bird healed. We decided to release it back into the wild together.
Thanks to Rufus, it was he that made us discovered the bird in time, resulting in saving a new life.
可运用的高级句型之：强调句型与定从
He has taught us the meaning of responsibility and unconditional love, which are of great significance in our life.
7.多亏了Rufus,正是它让我们及时地发现了这只鸟，完成了一次生命的拯救。
8.他教会了我们责任与无条件的爱的意义，这对我们的生活是非常重要的。
范文赏析
Just when we were on the point of despair, we heard a familiar bark. With our hearts swelling with excitement, we quickly ran towards the direction where the sound came from. So delighted were we that we quickly rushed to him as soon as we saw him. Just behind the thick bush lay Rufus, guarding the injured bird. He wasn't lost; he had stumbled upon a fragile life needing help and stood protectively over it. His intelligent eyes looked up at us, filled with a mix of concern and quiet pride, as if urging us to assist his discovery. Rufus followed closely, his tail wagging slowly, as if understanding our mission, as we carefully approached the tiny creature.
With tender hearts, we carefully took the injured bird home. After arriving home, we showered it with gentle care, applied medicine to the wound, and fed it. Rufus remained a calm and watchful guardian, often lying near the box where the bird rested. A few days later, the bird healed. We decided to release it back into the wild together. Thanks to Rufus, it was he that made us discover the bird in time, resulting in saving a new life. This unforgettable experience bonded us even more deeply with Rufus. He has taught us the meaning of responsibility and unconditional love, which are of great significance in our life.
Step 5 自主纠错