提分策略一 明方向——宏观把握，感知读后续写
读后续写要求学生能有效把握文章的写作意图和人物的情感态度，读懂所给材料的故事情节和行文结构，紧紧围绕所给材料的故事主题，遵循所给材料的故事情节和作者的情感态度，对故事的发展和结局进行合情合理的想象和创作。该题型的命题特点如下：
1.读后续写所选材料以记叙文为主，具有一定的故事性、趣味性和延展性。
2.文章连贯性较强，语言难度适中，便于学生感知和品读。
3.给出续写段落首句，对续写故事的发展有提示、衔接、引导和一定程度的限制作用，防止想象漫无边际。
4.续写部分多是故事发展、高潮或结局，情节不唯一，可根据自己对文本的理解并结合生活常识合理地作出推测，并适当增加细节，使续写部分具有完整性和可读性。
规范写作——续写应遵循的三步解题流程
（2025 全国一卷）My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer.She had prepared lots of snacks， while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play.There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on： My brother chose to bring his dog Toby， a 50－pound ball of fire.Though friendly， he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six－month－old granddaughter.So， when my brother showed up， I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine.Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room.Unexpectedly， after supper， the weather changed.It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment.I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house， and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog.Eventually， my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed， and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother.I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again.His reply came as a surprise — a shock， actually：“Not a chance.” Clearly， he was unhappy over the way we had parted.After all， I had left him little choice.Well， he’ll get over it， I reasoned.
Two months passed.My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother， but I resisted， thinking he should call first.However， my conscience （良心） kept bothering me.I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes.He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty－five years had passed away a few months earlier.Toby was his constant companion， the one who kept him going.
注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
With the biscuits my wife had made， I arrived at my brother’s door.
一、精读原文，获取关键信息
1.确定文章主题
文章围绕家庭聚会中因哥哥的狗Toby引发的矛盾，展现兄弟关系从产生隔阂到反思修复的过程，体现亲情中理解、包容与和解的重要性，契合 “人与社会” 主题语境下家庭关系的价值取向。
2.提取故事要素
Who “I”、my wife、my brother、my brother’s dog named Toby
When during the early summer family gathering and in the two months that followed
Why A conflict arose between my brother and me due to the accommodation of Toby.
What A conflict broke out between my brother and me because of Toby.My brother left angrily， and our relationship became terrible.Gradually， I realized my mistake under my wife’s persuasion.
3.掌握两条线索
布局 情节 情感
开端 “我”和妻子举办家庭聚会，哥哥带Toby参加 对Toby可能会造成的危险担忧
发展 天气突变，Toby的安置问题引发矛盾，哥哥离开 矛盾冲突产生，关系紧张
高潮 兄弟俩僵持两个月，“我”意识到自己的错误 内心愧疚，开始反思
结局 ？ ？
4.把握语言特征
（1）品语言，保持语言风格一致：原文语言以平实自然、简洁明快为核心风格，通过简单句与生活化词汇构建叙事基调。原文“hadn’t counted on”“working out just fine” 等表达贴近生活，通俗易懂。原文多采用简单句与短句组合，如 “So， when my brother showed up， I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.” 结构清晰。因此，续写可用 “My heart pounded fast ...” 替代复合句，既能生动刻画紧张心情，又延续原文简洁明快的叙事节奏。
（2）品动作，增加语言生动性：原文通过 “asked him to watch Toby”“stared at me” 等动作描写推动情节、塑造人物，续写可运用更多细腻的动作、神态描写，增强画面感。
二、利用信息，构思续写情节
1.寻找伏笔，找到切口
原文中 “哥哥面临健康问题且妻子离世，Toby 是他的 constant companion” 是关键伏笔，暗示哥哥对 Toby 的深厚情感，为 “我” 道歉和解提供情感逻辑；“晚饭后，天气变化，众人被迫进屋” 的环境描写，是矛盾激化的关键伏笔。续写虽未延续雨天，但可借环境对比（和解时阳光明媚）烘托氛围，推动故事发展，延续矛盾解决的叙事脉络。
2.研读首句，确定方向
第一段：由首句“I realized it was me who was at fault.”可知，第一段可描写“我”意识到错误后的心理活动，以及决定去道歉的具体行动，如准备礼物、设想见面场景等。
第二段：由首句“With the biscuits my wife had made， I arrived at my brother’s door”可知，第二段可围绕“我”到达哥哥家后的情景展开，包括与哥哥见面的对话、和解过程，以及兄弟俩关系缓和后的互动。
3.细节构思，搭建框架
续写段 情节 情感
续写 第一段 I reflected on my mistake. I made up my mind to make an apology to my brother. guilty， determined
续写 第二段 I arrived at my brother’s house and apologized to him. My brother accepted my apology and we made up. relieved， sweet
4.设计精彩，合理结尾：文章主题语境为“人与社会”中的家庭关系，主题涉及人际交往与情感沟通。结尾可点明主旨，如“From then on， I learned that in family relationships， understanding and tolerance are the keys to keeping our bond strong and warm.”，强调理解和包容对维系亲情的重要性。
三、遣词造句，打磨精彩语篇
I realized it was me who was at fault.Thinking of my brother’s sad face and Toby’s innocent eyes， I couldn’t shake off the feeling of guilt.Every time I recalled all the hardships my brother had suffered recently — his health issues， the loss of his beloved wife — I felt a sharp pain in my heart.My wife， seeing my inner struggle， gently took my hand and said， “Family is too precious to be torn apart by such a silly matter.” With her encouraging words， I decided to take the first step and visit my brother with the delicious biscuits she had baked.
With the biscuits my wife had made， I arrived at my brother’s door.My heart pounded as I knocked.When he opened the door and saw me， his eyes widened in surprise.Before he could say anything， I uttered， “I’m really sorry.I should have been more understanding.” He stared at me for a moment， then a smile slowly spread across his face.He hugged me tightly.Toby jumped around us， wagging his tail happily.We sat down， shared the biscuits， and talked for hours.From then on， I learned that in family relationships， understanding and tolerance are the keys to keeping our bond strong and warm.
○亮点分析
1.第一段尾句与第二段首句呼应， 过渡自然。
2.最后一句“From then on， I learned that in family relationships， understanding and tolerance are the keys to keeping our bond strong and warm.”直接点明文章主旨，呼应开头家庭聚会矛盾引发的思考，强调理解与包容对家庭关系的重要性，使文章主题得到升华，结构完整且立意深刻。
3.第二段通过 “pounded”“widened”“stared”“spread”“hugged” 等一系列生动的动作、神态描写，将 “我” 道歉时的紧张和哥哥从惊讶到感动接受的过程鲜活地呈现出来，增强了故事的画面感和感染力。
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提分策略一
明方向——宏观把握，感知读后续写
目录
策略指导
典例示法
策略指导
读后续写要求学生能有效把握文章的写作意图和人物的情感态
度，读懂所给材料的故事情节和行文结构，紧紧围绕所给材料的故事
主题，遵循所给材料的故事情节和作者的情感态度，对故事的发展和
结局进行合情合理的想象和创作。该题型的命题特点如下：
1. 读后续写所选材料以记叙文为主，具有一定的故事性、趣味性
和延展性。
2. 文章连贯性较强，语言难度适中，便于学生感知和品读。
3. 给出续写段落首句，对续写故事的发展有提示、衔接、引导和
一定程度的限制作用，防止想象漫无边际。
4. 续写部分多是故事发展、高潮或结局，情节不唯一，可根据自
己对文本的理解并结合生活常识合理地作出推测，并适当增加细节，
使续写部分具有完整性和可读性。
规范写作——续写应遵循的三步解题流程
典例示法
（2025·全国一卷）My wife and I wanted to share our new home
with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early
summer.She had prepared lots of snacks， while my job was to have the
backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play.There was just
one thing I hadn’t counted on： My brother chose to bring his dog
Toby， a 50-pound ball of fire.Though friendly， he could easily knock
over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter.So，
when my brother showed up， I asked him to watch Toby and keep him
outside.
My plan was working out just fine.Toby was using up his energy by
running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of
room.Unexpectedly， after supper， the weather changed.It started to
rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment.I didn’t want Toby to be running around
in the house， and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a
wet dog.Eventually， my brother decided to leave rather than force the
issue.
A few days passed， and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother.I
texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again.His reply
came as a surprise — a shock， actually：“Not a chance.” Clearly，
he was unhappy over the way we had parted.After all， I had left him
little choice.Well， he’ll get over it， I reasoned.
Two months passed.My wife suggested I get in touch with my
brother， but I resisted， thinking he should call first.However， my
conscience （良心） kept bothering me.I tried to put myself in my
brother’s shoes.He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five
years had passed away a few months earlier.Toby was his constant
companion， the one who kept him going.
注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
With the biscuits my wife had made， I arrived at my brother’s
door.
一、精读原文，获取关键信息
1. 确定文章主题
文章围绕家庭聚会中因哥哥的狗Toby引发的矛盾，展现兄弟关系从产
生隔阂到反思修复的过程，体现亲情中理解、包容与和解的重要性，
契合 “人与社会” 主题语境下家庭关系的价值取向。
2. 提取故事要素
Who “I”、my wife、my brother、my brother’s dog named Toby
When during the early summer family gathering and in the two months that followed
Why A conflict arose between my brother and me due to the
accommodation of Toby.
What A conflict broke out between my brother and me because of Toby.My brother left angrily， and our relationship became
terrible.Gradually， I realized my mistake under my wife’s
persuasion.
3. 掌握两条线索
布局 情节 情感
开端 “我”和妻子举办家庭聚会，哥哥带Toby参加 对Toby可能会造成的危险担忧
发展 天气突变，Toby的安置问题引发矛盾，哥哥离开 矛盾冲突产生，关系紧张
高潮 兄弟俩僵持两个月，“我”意识到自己的错误 内心愧疚，开始反思
结局 ？ ？
4. 把握语言特征
（1）品语言，保持语言风格一致：原文语言以平实自然、简洁明快
为核心风格，通过简单句与生活化词汇构建叙事基调。原文“hadn’t
counted on”“working out just fine” 等表达贴近生活，通俗易懂。原
文多采用简单句与短句组合，如 “So， when my brother showed up，
I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.” 结构清晰。因此，续
写可用 “My heart pounded fast ...” 替代复合句，既能生动刻画紧张
心情，又延续原文简洁明快的叙事节奏。
（2）品动作，增加语言生动性：原文通过 “asked him to watch
Toby”“stared at me” 等动作描写推动情节、塑造人物，续写可运用
更多细腻的动作、神态描写，增强画面感。
二、利用信息，构思续写情节
1. 寻找伏笔，找到切口
原文中 “哥哥面临健康问题且妻子离世，Toby 是他的 constant
companion” 是关键伏笔，暗示哥哥对 Toby 的深厚情感，为 “我”
道歉和解提供情感逻辑；“晚饭后，天气变化，众人被迫进屋” 的环
境描写，是矛盾激化的关键伏笔。续写虽未延续雨天，但可借环境对
比（和解时阳光明媚）烘托氛围，推动故事发展，延续矛盾解决的叙
事脉络。
2. 研读首句，确定方向
第一段：由首句“I realized it was me who was at fault.”可知，第一段
可描写“我”意识到错误后的心理活动，以及决定去道歉的具体行
动，如准备礼物、设想见面场景等。
第二段：由首句“With the biscuits my wife had made， I arrived
at my brother’s door”可知，第二段可围绕“我”到达哥哥家后
的情景展开，包括与哥哥见面的对话、和解过程，以及兄弟俩关
系缓和后的互动。
3. 细节构思，搭建框架
续写段 情节 情感
续写第一段 I reflected on my mistake. I made up my mind to make an apology to my brother. guilty， determined
续写第二段 I arrived at my brother’s house and apologized to him. My brother accepted my apology and we made up. relieved，sweet
4. 设计精彩，合理结尾：文章主题语境为“人与社会”中的家庭关
系，主题涉及人际交往与情感沟通。结尾可点明主旨，如“From then
on， I learned that in family relationships， understanding and tolerance
are the keys to keeping our bond strong and warm.”，强调理解和包容
对维系亲情的重要性。
三、遣词造句，打磨精彩语篇
I realized it was me who was at fault.Thinking of my brother’s sad
face and Toby’s innocent eyes， I couldn’t shake off the feeling of
guilt.Every time I recalled all the hardships my brother had suffered
recently — his health issues， the loss of his beloved wife — I felt a sharp
pain in my heart.My wife， seeing my inner struggle， gently took my
hand and said， “Family is too precious to be torn apart by such a silly
matter.” With her encouraging words， I decided to take the first step
and visit my brother with the delicious biscuits she had baked.
With the biscuits my wife had made， I arrived at my brother’s
door.My heart pounded as I knocked.When he opened the door and saw
me， his eyes widened in surprise.Before he could say anything， I
uttered， “I’m really sorry.I should have been more understanding.”
He stared at me for a moment， then a smile slowly spread across his
face.He hugged me tightly.Toby jumped around us， wagging his tail
happily.We sat down， shared the biscuits， and talked for hours.From
then on， I learned that in family relationships， understanding and
tolerance are the keys to keeping our bond strong and warm.
○亮点分析
1. 第一段尾句与第二段首句呼应， 过渡自然。
2. 最后一句“From then on， I learned that in family relationships，
understanding and tolerance are the keys to keeping our bond strong and
warm.”直接点明文章主旨，呼应开头家庭聚会矛盾引发的思考，强
调理解与包容对家庭关系的重要性，使文章主题得到升华，结构完整
且立意深刻。
3. 第二段通过
“pounded”“widened”“stared”“spread”“hugged” 等一系列生
动的动作、神态描写，将 “我” 道歉时的紧张和哥哥从惊讶到感动
接受的过程鲜活地呈现出来，增强了故事的画面感和感染力。
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