提分策略四 重顺承——开头结尾，无缝衔接原文
记叙文的写作讲究“起承转合”，读后续写的两段在整篇文章架构中承担着“转”与“合”的功能，续写的开头和结尾要与原文做好顺承，写出来的文章才能融洽度高。
一、如何写好第一段段首、段尾和第二段段首
俗话说：“良好的开端是成功的一半 （Well begun is half done!）。”由此可见，写好续写部分段首开头是多么重要。那么如何写出靓丽的开头呢？我们可以从写作涉及的内容和语法手段来具体设计故事的段首开端。
写作内容
——两关注，解决“写什么”的问题
1.关注段首三点
段首三点指的是与段首句相关的三个点，即紧接两段段首句之后的两个点和第一段结尾的一个点。
点①：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接原文和续写第一段段首语；
点②：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接续写第二段段首语；
点③：位于续写第二段段首，流畅衔接续写第二段段首语。
通过关注这三点可以保证整体故事的连贯性。第一点要限定情节走向，同时为下文的展开留出足够的写作空间；第二点要达成两段之间的衔接，过渡不能突兀；第三点不仅要衔接第二段段首语，还要考虑如何完美结束故事。在写作过程中，要培养衔接意识和整体意识。
2.关注故事背景与人物动作描写
在开头时，适度的环境描写可以渲染气氛、烘托人物，给人物的出场造势；同样，运用一连串的行为动词对人物动作加以描写，可以让人物活灵活现、动感十足，人物特征跃然纸上。所以，对背景和动作的细节描写也是常见的一类开头方式。
①（2025 全国一卷） The front yard， once lively and full of life， now felt abandoned.Dead leaves crunched beneath my feet as I approached， like whispers of the strained relationship between my brother and me.
（通过“视觉＋环境描写＋拟人＋比喻”的写作手法，成功地使读者有身临其境之感）
②（2024 1月浙江卷）Staring at the towering teaching building， Eva came up with a good idea， with a smile blooming across her face.（通过行为动作描绘出生动的场景，引人入胜）
【典例】 （2025 1月浙江卷）
Kevin was pretty bored.His mother was at work， and his father had been away on business.Therefore， he was left in the care of Mrs Hill， an old lady who lived next door.His parents had raised the 12－year－old to be a good boy.He never got into trouble， though sometimes he wanted to do risky things.Mrs Hill was asleep.Kevin sighed （叹息） and hoped something exciting would happen.Suddenly， a movement outside caught his eye.
Mrs Hill’s front window faced Mr and Mrs Green’s house across the street.The couple had both gone to work， so it was strange that someone was over there.Kevin stared at the man at their front door.Suddenly， the man jumped through an open window into the house.With his heart in his mouth， Kevin grabbed Mrs Hill’s home phone and called the police.
Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted before the police arrived， Kevin decided to do something.He rushed out of Mrs Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly.Grabbing a branch from a cut－down tree， he jumped in through the window.“Stop right there! You must leave right now!” he called out， holding the branch with both hands.
The man froze for a second， but when he saw the skinny boy he breathed a sigh of relief.“Hey， kid， put that down.It was my home.My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here，” he explained， trying to lift a floorboard.
At that moment， the sounds of a police car echoed （回响） in the air.The man stood up in a panic， then ran through the house toward the window and jumped out.Kevin followed out and told the arriving police officers what had happened.They pursued and arrested the man.
Kevin went back to Mrs Hill’s house.Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing.“What if he has told the truth？” he thought to himself.The man’s words sounded pretty convincing.
注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
When Mr and Mrs Green got home， Kevin went to talk to them.
Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police station.
1.关注段首三点
（1）第一段开头与原文的流畅衔接
原文以凯文对自己行为的怀疑收尾，内心充满不安。范文首句“went to talk”的动作直击其求证心理，通过“explained ...arrested”延续报警情节，以格林夫妇“惊讶与感激”的表情反差，为“误会澄清”的反转预留叙事空间。
（2）第一段结尾与第二段开头的逻辑衔接
首段以“弟弟身份揭秘”制造悬念，次段首句用“took the watch to ...”的动作衔接“取表”背景，以“手表”道具串联两段，既化解矛盾又自然过渡到警局和解场景，避免情节突兀。
（3）第二段段首语与故事结局衔接
第二段以“手表传家宝”的背景补充推动警局情节，结尾借凯文的反思呼应前文疑虑，以“核实事实与助人”的感悟实现情节收束与主题升华的双重闭环。
2.故事背景与人物动作描写分析
（1）环境与气氛烘托：原文“邻居熟睡、夫妇上班”的空寂场景，既合理化凯文“求刺激”的心理动机，又通过“陌生人破窗”的反差强化紧张感。
（2）动作细节刻画：
①凯文“沟通解释”的行为展现责任感；
②Mr Green的“asked”“describe”“revealed”等一连串行为，既表现他冷静处理问题的能力，又推动情节反转；
③结尾处“handed over”“pat”“agreed”等动作，生动呈现兄弟和解、关系缓和的场景，使人物形象鲜活立体，同时服务于 “和解与成长” 的核心主题。
通过上述分析可见，范文通过“段首三点”保障情节连贯，以环境与动作描写增强故事感染力，最终实现逻辑与表达的双重流畅。
【范文示例】
When Mr and Mrs Green got home， Kevin went to talk to them.He explained how he had witnessed the strange man entering their house and how he was arrested.Mr and Mrs Green listened attentively， with a mixture of surprise and gratitude on their faces.Mrs Green hugged Kevin， thanking him for his bravery.Mr Green， however， looked thoughtful.He asked Kevin to describe the man in detail and then revealed that the man was indeed his younger brother， who had come to get a watch back their father had left behind.Kevin’s eyes widened in shock.
Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police station.On the way， Mr Green explained that the watch was a family heirloom， passed down from generation to generation.At the police station， they explained the situation to the officers， who were surprised but understanding.The man， who had been released after his identity was verified， was waiting outside.He smiled weakly at Kevin， who felt a mix of embarrassment and relief.Mr Green handed over the watch to his brother with a pat on the back， and they all agreed to keep in touch.Kevin learned an important lesson that day： always verify the facts before taking action， but never hesitate to help those in need.
语法手段
——三巧用，解决“怎样写”的问题
1.巧用形容词/副词（短语）
①（2025 1月浙江卷）The setting sun cast long shadows across the lawn as he nervously approached.（该句通过“副词＋动作”的组合，结合环境描写，从细节刻画、氛围渲染、情感表达三个维度增强了画面感和感染力）
②（2024 1月浙江卷）Breathless and exhausted， she realized that overcoming seemingly the toughest challenges just needed a smart strategy like her mind trick.（两个并列形容词作状语）
2.巧用分词（短语）
①（2025 全国一卷）I stood in the backyard， looking at the now－empty space where Toby had once run around.（将失落情绪具象化）
②（2024 新课标Ⅰ卷）Sensing my frustration， Gunter patted me on the shoulder， grinning，“It is okay.Forget about the fare and go catch your bus.” （使表达具有动态画面感）
3.巧用高级句式或特殊句式
①（2025 全国一卷） His palms were sweaty as he recounted the entire incident， his voice trembling slightly.（独立主格）
②（2024 新课标Ⅰ卷）A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.（无灵主语句）
③（2025 全国一卷） With a heavy sigh， I stood up， squared my shoulders， and decided to swallow my pride.（动作链）
④（2024 新课标Ⅰ卷）I told him that it was thanks to his kindness and timely help that everything had gone smoothly.（强调句）
二、如何写好第二段段尾
在读后续写中，结尾发挥着非常重要的作用，精彩的结尾好似画龙点睛，让人回味无穷。常见的结尾方式有景物描写结尾、哲理性语言结尾、自然结尾等。我们应该根据文章的主题，借助丰富的句式来打造完美结尾。下面简要介绍几种常用的读后续写的结尾方法。
1.首尾照应法
结尾回到文章开头阐明的中心思想或主题句上，深化主题，起到画龙点睛的效果。但需要注意的是，不要照搬开头的句子，要变化句式或者用词来表达相同的主题。请看以下范例：
开头：I had an interesting childhood.It was filled with surprises and amusements， all because of my mom — loving， sweet， yet absent－minded and forgetful.One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
结尾：Despite mom’s being absent－minded and forgetful， she is still a kind and nice mom.
2.主旨升华法
在读后续写的最后，可以采用主旨升华法结尾，激发读者思考，让读者产生情感上的共鸣。通常我们可以通过表达人生感悟或生活哲理来达到结尾部分的主旨升华。
①（2025 全国一卷）From then on， I learned that in family relationships， understanding and tolerance are the keys to keeping our bond strong and warm.
从那以后，我明白了在家庭关系中，理解与包容是维系我们紧密而温暖关系的关键。
②（2024 新课标Ⅰ卷）It is love that makes the world go round；just as a saying goes，“The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose.” 是爱使世界转动，正如一句谚语所说：“赠人玫瑰，手留余香。”
③（2024 1月浙江卷）It dawned on her that goals are easier to achieve in small steps.
她渐渐明白了，小步前进更容易实现目标。
④（2023 新课标Ⅰ卷）Only then did I realize that it was bravery and determination that could conquer all the difficulties.Hard work paid off eventually.
那时我才明白，勇敢和决心可以战胜一切困难。努力最终会得到回报。
3.情景交融法
有时候我们可以借助景物描写来烘托故事中人物的心情，增加故事的感染力。
①With a shadow of a happy family cast on the window， I felt my little sister was the best gift I’d ever got.
一个幸福家庭的影子投射在窗户上，我觉得我的小妹妹是我得到的最好的礼物。
②No matter how cold the winter was， all that they could feel now was the surpassing warmth.无论冬天多么寒冷，他们现在感受到的都是无与伦比的温暖。
4.对话式结尾
对话式结尾指文章以对话结束，有时伴有相应的动作，有时意味深长；曲虽终，但余音绕梁，留有空间让读者思考与感悟。
①（2025 全国一卷）“Come in，” he said， and I knew we were on the road to mending our relationship.
“进来吧。” 他说道，我知道我们正在修复关系的路上。
②（2022 新高考Ⅰ卷）I ran towards David and gave him a bear hug， saying “You made it!” excitedly.His eyes twinkled with delight， saying，“Thank you.It was you who made me realize that I can be the master of my destiny.”
我跑向大卫，给了他一个熊抱， 兴奋地说 “你成功了!”。 他的眼睛闪烁着喜悦的光芒，说：“谢谢你。是你让我意识到我可以成为自己命运的主人。”
5.自然式结尾
自然式结尾是顺着文中所叙述之事的自然发展，以它的必然结果作为结尾。这样的结尾虽然简洁明了、朴实无华，但令人回味无穷，给读者留有思考的空间。
①（2025 全国一卷）The warmth of family， which we had hoped to share from the start， was restored， and I knew that from this moment on， our relationships would be even more cherished and stronger.
我们从一开始就希望分享的家庭的温暖又恢复了，我知道从这一刻起，我们的关系会更加珍惜和牢固。
②（2024 1月浙江卷）With the mind trick， her life ahead opened a new chapter， unfolding with the satisfaction of overcoming obstacles and achieving her goals.
运用了这个心理技巧之后，她未来的生活翻开了崭新的一页，拥有了克服困难、实现目标的满足感。
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提分策略四
重顺承——开头结尾，无缝衔接原文
目录
NO.1 写作内容——两关注，解决“写什么”的问题
NO.2 语法手段——三巧用，解决“怎样写”的问题
NO.1 写作内容
——两关注，解决“写什么”的问题
记叙文的写作讲究“起承转合”，读后续写的两段在整篇文章架
构中承担着“转”与“合”的功能，续写的开头和结尾要与原文做好
顺承，写出来的文章才能融洽度高。
一、如何写好第一段段首、段尾和第二段段首
俗话说：“良好的开端是成功的一半 （Well begun is half
done！）。”由此可见，写好续写部分段首开头是多么重要。那么如
何写出靓丽的开头呢？我们可以从写作涉及的内容和语法手段来具体
设计故事的段首开端。
1. 关注段首三点
段首三点指的是与段首句相关的三个点，即紧接两段段首句之后的两
个点和第一段结尾的一个点。
点①：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接原文和续写第一段段首语；
点②：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接续写第二段段首语；
点③：位于续写第二段段首，流畅衔接续写第二段段首语。
通过关注这三点可以保证整体故事的连贯性。第一点要限定情节走
向，同时为下文的展开留出足够的写作空间；第二点要达成两段之间
的衔接，过渡不能突兀；第三点不仅要衔接第二段段首语，还要考虑
如何完美结束故事。在写作过程中，要培养衔接意识和整体意识。
2. 关注故事背景与人物动作描写
在开头时，适度的环境描写可以渲染气氛、烘托人物，给人物的出场
造势；同样，运用一连串的行为动词对人物动作加以描写，可以让人
物活灵活现、动感十足，人物特征跃然纸上。所以，对背景和动作的
细节描写也是常见的一类开头方式。
①（2025·全国一卷） The front yard， once lively and full of life，
now felt abandoned.Dead leaves crunched beneath my feet as I
approached， like whispers of the strained relationship between my
brother and me.
（通过“视觉＋环境描写＋拟人＋比喻”的写作手法，成功地使读者
有身临其境之感）
②（2024·1月浙江卷）Staring at the towering teaching building， Eva
came up with a good idea， with a smile blooming across her face.（通
过行为动作描绘出生动的场景，引人入胜）
【典例】 （2025·1月浙江卷）
Kevin was pretty bored.His mother was at work， and his father had
been away on business.Therefore， he was left in the care of Mrs Hill，
an old lady who lived next door.His parents had raised the 12-year-old to
be a good boy.He never got into trouble， though sometimes he wanted to do risky things.Mrs Hill was asleep.Kevin sighed （叹息） and hoped
something exciting would happen.Suddenly， a movement outside caught
his eye.
Mrs Hill’s front window faced Mr and Mrs Green’s house across
the street.The couple had both gone to work， so it was strange that
someone was over there.Kevin stared at the man at their front door.
Suddenly， the man jumped through an open window into the house.With his heart in his mouth， Kevin grabbed Mrs Hill’s home phone and called the police.
Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted
before the police arrived， Kevin decided to do something.He rushed out
of Mrs Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly.Grabbing a branch
from a cut-down tree， he jumped in through the window.“Stop right
there！ You must leave right now！” he called out， holding the branch
with both hands.
The man froze for a second， but when he saw the skinny boy he
breathed a sigh of relief.“Hey， kid， put that down.It was my
home.My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here，”
he explained， trying to lift a floorboard.
At that moment， the sounds of a police car echoed （回响） in the
air.The man stood up in a panic， then ran through the house toward the
window and jumped out.Kevin followed out and told the arriving police
officers what had happened.They pursued and arrested the man.
Kevin went back to Mrs Hill’s house.Somehow he wasn’t sure he
had done the right thing.“What if he has told the truth？” he thought to
himself.The man’s words sounded pretty convincing.
注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
When Mr and Mrs Green got home， Kevin went to talk to
them.
Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police
station.
1. 关注段首三点
（1）第一段开头与原文的流畅衔接
原文以凯文对自己行为的怀疑收尾，内心充满不安。范文首句“went
to talk”的动作直击其求证心理，通过“explained ...arrested”延续
报警情节，以格林夫妇“惊讶与感激”的表情反差，为“误会澄清”
的反转预留叙事空间。
（2）第一段结尾与第二段开头的逻辑衔接
首段以“弟弟身份揭秘”制造悬念，次段首句用“took the watch
to ...”的动作衔接“取表”背景，以“手表”道具串联两段，既化
解矛盾又自然过渡到警局和解场景，避免情节突兀。
（3）第二段段首语与故事结局衔接
第二段以“手表传家宝”的背景补充推动警局情节，结尾借凯文的反
思呼应前文疑虑，以“核实事实与助人”的感悟实现情节收束与主题
升华的双重闭环。
2. 故事背景与人物动作描写分析
（1）环境与气氛烘托：原文“邻居熟睡、夫妇上班”的空寂场景，
既合理化凯文“求刺激”的心理动机，又通过“陌生人破窗”的反差
强化紧张感。
（2）动作细节刻画：
①凯文“沟通解释”的行为展现责任感；
②Mr Green的“asked”“describe”“revealed”等一连串行为，既表
现他冷静处理问题的能力，又推动情节反转；
③结尾处“handed over”“pat”“agreed”等动作，生动呈现兄弟和
解、关系缓和的场景，使人物形象鲜活立体，同时服务于 “和解与成
长” 的核心主题。
通过上述分析可见，范文通过“段首三点”保障情节连贯，以环境与
动作描写增强故事感染力，最终实现逻辑与表达的双重流畅。
【范文示例】
When Mr and Mrs Green got home， Kevin went to talk to them.He
explained how he had witnessed the strange man entering their house and
how he was arrested.Mr and Mrs Green listened attentively， with a
mixture of surprise and gratitude on their faces.Mrs Green hugged
Kevin， thanking him for his bravery.Mr Green， however， looked
thoughtful.He asked Kevin to describe the man in detail and then revealed
that the man was indeed his younger brother， who had come to get a
watch back their father had left behind.Kevin’s eyes widened in shock.
Kevin and Mr Green took the watch they had found to the police
station.On the way， Mr Green explained that the watch was a family
heirloom， passed down from generation to generation.At the police
station， they explained the situation to the officers， who were surprised
but understanding.The man， who had been released after his identity was verified， was waiting outside.He smiled weakly at Kevin， who felt a mix of embarrassment and relief.Mr Green handed over the watch to his
brother with a pat on the back， and they all agreed to keep in touch.
Kevin learned an important lesson that day： always verify the facts
before taking action， but never hesitate to help those in need.
NO.2 语法手段
——三巧用，解决“怎样写”的问题
1. 巧用形容词/副词（短语）
①（2025·1月浙江卷）The setting sun cast long shadows across the
lawn as he nervously approached.（该句通过“副词＋动作”的组
合，结合环境描写，从细节刻画、氛围渲染、情感表达三个维度增强
了画面感和感染力）
②（2024·1月浙江卷）Breathless and exhausted， she realized that
overcoming seemingly the toughest challenges just needed a smart strategy
like her mind trick.（两个并列形容词作状语）
2. 巧用分词（短语）
①（2025·全国一卷）I stood in the backyard， looking at the now-
empty space where Toby had once run around.（将失落情绪具象化）
②（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）Sensing my frustration， Gunter patted me on
the shoulder， grinning，“It is okay.Forget about the fare and go catch
your bus.” （使表达具有动态画面感）
3. 巧用高级句式或特殊句式
①（2025·全国一卷） His palms were sweaty as he recounted the entire
incident， his voice trembling slightly.（独立主格）
②（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I
saw the bus queue thinning out.（无灵主语句）
③（2025·全国一卷） With a heavy sigh， I stood up， squared my
shoulders， and decided to swallow my pride.（动作链）
④（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）I told him that it was thanks to his kindness and
timely help that everything had gone smoothly.（强调句）
二、如何写好第二段段尾
在读后续写中，结尾发挥着非常重要的作用，精彩的结尾好似画
龙点睛，让人回味无穷。常见的结尾方式有景物描写结尾、哲理性语
言结尾、自然结尾等。我们应该根据文章的主题，借助丰富的句式来
打造完美结尾。下面简要介绍几种常用的读后续写的结尾方法。
1. 首尾照应法
结尾回到文章开头阐明的中心思想或主题句上，深化主题，起到画龙
点睛的效果。但需要注意的是，不要照搬开头的句子，要变化句式或
者用词来表达相同的主题。请看以下范例：
开头：I had an interesting childhood.It was filled with surprises and
amusements， all because of my mom — loving， sweet， yet absent-
minded and forgetful.One strange family trip we took when I was eleven
tells a lot about her.
结尾：Despite mom’s being absent-minded and forgetful， she is still
a kind and nice mom.
2. 主旨升华法
在读后续写的最后，可以采用主旨升华法结尾，激发读者思考，让读
者产生情感上的共鸣。通常我们可以通过表达人生感悟或生活哲理来
达到结尾部分的主旨升华。
①（2025·全国一卷）From then on， I learned that in family
relationships， understanding and tolerance are the keys to keeping our
bond strong and warm.
从那以后，我明白了在家庭关系中，理解与包容是维系我们紧密而温
暖关系的关键。
②（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）It is love that makes the world go round；just as
a saying goes，“The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the
rose.”
是爱使世界转动，正如一句谚语所说：“赠人玫瑰，手留余香。”
③（2024·1月浙江卷）It dawned on her that goals are easier to
achieve in small steps.
她渐渐明白了，小步前进更容易实现目标。
④（2023·新课标Ⅰ卷）Only then did I realize that it was bravery and
determination that could conquer all the difficulties.Hard work paid
off eventually.
那时我才明白，勇敢和决心可以战胜一切困难。努力最终会得到
回报。
3. 情景交融法
有时候我们可以借助景物描写来烘托故事中人物的心情，增加故事的
感染力。
①With a shadow of a happy family cast on the window， I felt my little
sister was the best gift I’d ever got.
一个幸福家庭的影子投射在窗户上，我觉得我的小妹妹是我得到的最
好的礼物。
②No matter how cold the winter was， all that they could feel now was
the surpassing warmth.无论冬天多么寒冷，他们现在感受到的都是无
与伦比的温暖。
4. 对话式结尾
对话式结尾指文章以对话结束，有时伴有相应的动作，有时意味深
长；曲虽终，但余音绕梁，留有空间让读者思考与感悟。
①（2025·全国一卷）“Come in，” he said， and I knew we were on
the road to mending our relationship.
“进来吧。” 他说道，我知道我们正在修复关系的路上。
②（2022·新高考Ⅰ卷）I ran towards David and gave him a bear hug，
saying “You made it！” excitedly.His eyes twinkled with delight，
saying，“Thank you.It was you who made me realize that I can be the
master of my destiny.”
我跑向大卫，给了他一个熊抱， 兴奋地说 “你成功了！”。 他的眼
睛闪烁着喜悦的光芒，说：“谢谢你。是你让我意识到我可以成为自
己命运的主人。”
5. 自然式结尾
自然式结尾是顺着文中所叙述之事的自然发展，以它的必然结果作为
结尾。这样的结尾虽然简洁明了、朴实无华，但令人回味无穷，给读
者留有思考的空间。
①（2025·全国一卷）The warmth of family， which we had hoped to
share from the start， was restored， and I knew that from this moment
on， our relationships would be even more cherished and stronger.
我们从一开始就希望分享的家庭的温暖又恢复了，我知道从这一刻
起，我们的关系会更加珍惜和牢固。
②（2024·1月浙江卷）With the mind trick， her life ahead opened a
new chapter， unfolding with the satisfaction of overcoming obstacles and
achieving her goals.
运用了这个心理技巧之后，她未来的生活翻开了崭新的一页，拥有了
克服困难、实现目标的满足感。
THANKS
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