第二讲 润色习作的两大法宝
高考考场上，如果一篇应用文写作中的句子都采用简单句，肯定不能得高分，精彩句式的合理使用会使文章读起来抑扬顿挫。固定句式（如with复合结构、强调句等）、定语从句、分词短语等都属于较复杂的语法结构，这些结构的正确使用，可以使文章的语言充满层次感，较好地反映作者的语言运用能力。与此同时，高级词汇就像一颗颗耀眼的明珠，为作文增添光彩，从而使学生稳拿高分。
法宝一 学会运用高级词汇
求新求变
同样意义的词语，要根据语境使用最新学过的而不是小学初中学过的词汇。如果同样的意义重复出现，要使用不同的表达方式。
①We believe your presence will greatly motivate and encourage the students. Please let us know if you are free to join us on this special day. （2024·徐州打靶卷）
→We believe your presence will greatly motivate and encourage the students. Please let us know if you are available to join us on this special day.
②Known as a heaven/paradise on Earth， Hangzhou attracts millions of tourists every year.
→Known as a heaven/paradise on Earth， Hangzhou appeals to millions of tourists every year.
③We worked hard， talking and laughing happily all the time， during which our teachers took many photos for us. （2024·河南部分市质量预测）
→We worked hard， talking and laughing cheerfully all the time， during which our teachers took many photos for us.
求准求精
写作时不一定每一句都要有复杂句式，有时准确使用一个单词就会让整个句子增色。
①In conclusion，we should find a way to study online better.
→In conclusion，we should find a way to study online more efficiently.
②We are waiting for your early reply. （2024·徐州打靶卷）
→We are waiting for your reply eagerly/with eagerness.
短语优先
恰当使用短语代替单词，不但可以增加词数，而且可以提升句子的档次，使得行文更加流畅。
①However， from my point of view， what benefits students most is reading English books， for it can help students understand English better. （2022·全国乙卷）
→However， from my point of view， what benefits students most is reading English books， for it can help students gain a deeper understanding of English.
②I would appreciate it if you could consider my invitation. （2022·新高考Ⅰ卷）
→I would appreciate it if you could take my invitation into consideration.
③He tried to carry out a series of reforms to make his country prosperous. （2023·全国甲卷）
→He spared no effort to carry out a series of reforms to make his country prosperous.
法宝二 学会运用高级句式
活用非谓语结构，言简意赅
①（2024·安徽江淮联考）Representing our school， I’d like to invite you to give us a speech on your local cuisine on 25th this month.（动词-ing短语作状语）
代表我们学校，我邀请您在本月25日给我们作一个关于当地美食的演讲。
②（2024·江西部分高中联考）Our school recently conducted a publicity campaign for garbage classification， aiming to raise the awareness of environmental protection among students.（动词-ing短语作状语）
我们学校最近开展了一项垃圾分类宣传活动，旨在提高学生的环保意识。
③（2023·全国甲卷）Known as a Chinese writer and politician in the Song Dynasty，Fan Zhongyan was highly appreciated because he made great contributions to society.（过去分词短语作状语）
作为中国宋代著名的作家和政治家，范仲淹因其对社会的巨大贡献而受到高度赞赏。
巧用各种从句，写出文采
①（2024·全国甲卷）Today I’d like to focus on some major developments，which include shared bicycles， high-speed trains and new energy vehicles.（定语从句）
今天我想重点谈一些主要的发展，包括共享单车、高铁和新能源汽车。
②（2024·南昌模拟）Sometimes， the results can be different when we look at a question from a different angle.（时间状语从句）
有时候，当我们从不同的角度看问题时，结果会有所不同。
③（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）It was such an extraordinary experience that I would always keep it in my memory.（结果状语从句）
这是一次非凡的经历，我将永远铭记于心。
④（2024·泰安二轮复习检测）However， what’s the most important is that the books can help me out when I feel low or I can’t figure out how to get along with others.（主语从句）
然而，最重要的是，当我感到低落或我不知道如何与他人相处时，书本会给我提供帮助。
⑤（2024·山东实验中学针对性考试）It is a real encouragement to see your efforts paid off and I do hope （that） you can hold your passion for Chinese and further understand our splendid culture.（宾语从句）
看到你们的努力得到了回报，真是令人鼓舞，我真的希望你们能保持对汉语的热情，进一步了解我们灿烂的文化。
活用特殊句式，不落俗套
①（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）I told him that it was thanks to his kindness and timely help that everything had gone smoothly.（强调句）
我告诉他，多亏了他的好心和及时的帮助，一切进行得很顺利。
②（2024·合肥最后一卷）For example， only by reading a great number of books can we write some brilliant works. （倒装句）
例如，只有通过大量的阅读，我们才能写出一些优秀的作品。
③（2023·新课标Ⅰ卷）Should it be possible， I truly hope you can take my suggestions into consideration.（虚拟语气和倒装句）
如果可能的话，我真心希望您能考虑一下我的建议。
适时感叹，表情达意
①How delicious the breakfast was！
多么美味的早餐啊！
②What a wonderful time we had picking apples on the farm！
我们在农场摘苹果的时光多么美好啊！
不一样的it、 with、 there be句式，精彩点缀
①（2024·武汉质量检测）With our exchange program drawing to an end， I want to express our sincere gratitude to you for your kindness and generosity.（with复合结构）
在我们的交流项目即将结束之际，我想对您的友好和慷慨表示衷心的感谢。
②With so many fantastic works to be shown at the exhibition， it will surely arouse your interest in Chinese painting.（with复合结构）
有这么多了不起的作品在展览中展出，这一定会激起你对中国画的兴趣。
③With the theme-based class meeting to hold， I’m writing to ask you for some advice on it.（with复合结构）
主题班会要开了，我写信征求您的建议。
④（2023·新课标Ⅰ卷）To begin with， it would be a wise decision to pair a top student with one who is weak in English.（it作形式主语）
首先，把一个优等生和一个英语差的学生搭配是一个明智的决定。
⑤It goes without saying that Beijing is not only the political center but also the cultural center of our country.（it作形式主语）
不言而喻，北京不仅是我国的政治中心，也是我国的文化中心。
⑥There are a variety of themes we can choose from， including calligraphy， martial arts， shadow puppet plays as well as paper-cutting， etc.（there be句式）
有各种各样的主题我们可以选择，包括书法、武术、皮影戏以及剪纸等。
Ⅰ.用高级词汇替换下列句中的加黑词语
1.（2024·湖北七市调研）As planned， the activity will begin at 8：00 a.m. at the school lecture hall where the biology teacher will explain basic principles of scientific observation.
2.（2024·长沙模拟）I want to express my thanks for recommending that I read some illuminating stories of scientists.
3.（2024·长沙模拟）Therefore， it is important to strengthen international cooperation and jointly safeguard world peace.
4.（2024·安徽“江南十校”联考）Our campus is attractive with green grass， tall trees and modern buildings. The atmosphere is inviting and perfect for both studies and leisure.
5.With the wide spread of the Internet， more and more people become online learners.
Ⅱ.用高级句式升级下列句子
1.We can improve our efficiency and make our school life meaningful only in this way.
→ we can improve our efficiency and make our school life meaningful.（强调句）
2.Their father instructed them so patiently that the twins made the breakfast fast and well.
→ the twins made the breakfast fast and well.（倒装句）
3.It not only helped us cooperate better and beautify our campus， but it also raised our awareness of protecting the environment.
→ ， but it also raised our awareness of protecting the environment. （倒装句）
4.The radio program was founded in 2016. It aimed to provide a good platform for the students to share their school life.
→The radio program was founded in 2016， to share their school life.（动词-ing短语作状语）
Ⅲ.完成句子
1. is Li Bai’s Tang Poems for the reasons below.
我首先推荐的是李白的唐诗，原因如下。
2.I’m writing to invite you to go for a morning run with me， in an amazing way.
我写信是想邀请你和我一起去晨跑，这对我们俩都有很大的好处。
3. in the English poetry writing contest held by the English newspaper.
我写信是想告诉你，我在这家英文报纸举办的英语诗歌写作比赛中获得了一等奖。
5 / 5第二讲 润色习作的两大法宝
高考考场上，如果一篇应用文写作中的句子都采用简单句，肯定不能得高分，精彩句式的合理使用会使文章读起来抑扬顿挫。固定句式（如with复合结构、强调句等）、定语从句、分词短语等都属于较复杂的语法结构，这些结构的正确使用，可以使文章的语言充满层次感，较好地反映作者的语言运用能力。与此同时，高级词汇就像一颗颗耀眼的明珠，为作文增添光彩，从而使学生稳拿高分。
法宝一 学会运用高级词汇
求新求变
同样意义的词语，要根据语境使用最新学过的而不是小学初中学过的词汇。如果同样的意义重复出现，要使用不同的表达方式。
①We believe your presence will greatly motivate and encourage the students. Please let us know if you are free to join us on this special day. （2024·徐州打靶卷）
→We believe your presence will greatly motivate and encourage the students. Please let us know if you are available to join us on this special day.
②Known as a heaven/paradise on Earth， Hangzhou attracts millions of tourists every year.
→Known as a heaven/paradise on Earth， Hangzhou appeals to millions of tourists every year.
③We worked hard， talking and laughing happily all the time， during which our teachers took many photos for us. （2024·河南部分市质量预测）
→We worked hard， talking and laughing cheerfully all the time， during which our teachers took many photos for us.
求准求精
写作时不一定每一句都要有复杂句式，有时准确使用一个单词就会让整个句子增色。
①In conclusion，we should find a way to study online better.
→In conclusion，we should find a way to study online more efficiently.
②We are waiting for your early reply. （2024·徐州打靶卷）
→We are waiting for your reply eagerly/with eagerness.
短语优先
恰当使用短语代替单词，不但可以增加词数，而且可以提升句子的档次，使得行文更加流畅。
①However， from my point of view， what benefits students most is reading English books， for it can help students understand English better. （2022·全国乙卷）
→However， from my point of view， what benefits students most is reading English books， for it can help students gain a deeper understanding of English.
②I would appreciate it if you could consider my invitation. （2022·新高考Ⅰ卷）
→I would appreciate it if you could take my invitation into consideration.
③He tried to carry out a series of reforms to make his country prosperous. （2023·全国甲卷）
→He spared no effort to carry out a series of reforms to make his country prosperous.
法宝二 学会运用高级句式
活用非谓语结构，言简意赅
①（2024·安徽江淮联考）Representing our school， I’d like to invite you to give us a speech on your local cuisine on 25th this month.（动词-ing短语作状语）
代表我们学校，我邀请您在本月25日给我们作一个关于当地美食的演讲。
②（2024·江西部分高中联考）Our school recently conducted a publicity campaign for garbage classification， aiming to raise the awareness of environmental protection among students.（动词-ing短语作状语）
我们学校最近开展了一项垃圾分类宣传活动，旨在提高学生的环保意识。
③（2023·全国甲卷）Known as a Chinese writer and politician in the Song Dynasty，Fan Zhongyan was highly appreciated because he made great contributions to society.（过去分词短语作状语）
作为中国宋代著名的作家和政治家，范仲淹因其对社会的巨大贡献而受到高度赞赏。
巧用各种从句，写出文采
①（2024·全国甲卷）Today I’d like to focus on some major developments，which include shared bicycles， high-speed trains and new energy vehicles.（定语从句）
今天我想重点谈一些主要的发展，包括共享单车、高铁和新能源汽车。
②（2024·南昌模拟）Sometimes， the results can be different when we look at a question from a different angle.（时间状语从句）
有时候，当我们从不同的角度看问题时，结果会有所不同。
③（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）It was such an extraordinary experience that I would always keep it in my memory.（结果状语从句）
这是一次非凡的经历，我将永远铭记于心。
④（2024·泰安二轮复习检测）However， what’s the most important is that the books can help me out when I feel low or I can’t figure out how to get along with others.（主语从句）
然而，最重要的是，当我感到低落或我不知道如何与他人相处时，书本会给我提供帮助。
⑤（2024·山东实验中学针对性考试）It is a real encouragement to see your efforts paid off and I do hope （that） you can hold your passion for Chinese and further understand our splendid culture.（宾语从句）
看到你们的努力得到了回报，真是令人鼓舞，我真的希望你们能保持对汉语的热情，进一步了解我们灿烂的文化。
活用特殊句式，不落俗套
①（2024·新课标Ⅰ卷）I told him that it was thanks to his kindness and timely help that everything had gone smoothly.（强调句）
我告诉他，多亏了他的好心和及时的帮助，一切进行得很顺利。
②（2024·合肥最后一卷）For example， only by reading a great number of books can we write some brilliant works. （倒装句）
例如，只有通过大量的阅读，我们才能写出一些优秀的作品。
③（2023·新课标Ⅰ卷）Should it be possible， I truly hope you can take my suggestions into consideration.（虚拟语气和倒装句）
如果可能的话，我真心希望您能考虑一下我的建议。
适时感叹，表情达意
①How delicious the breakfast was！
多么美味的早餐啊！
②What a wonderful time we had picking apples on the farm！
我们在农场摘苹果的时光多么美好啊！
不一样的it、 with、 there be句式，精彩点缀
①（2024·武汉质量检测）With our exchange program drawing to an end， I want to express our sincere gratitude to you for your kindness and generosity.（with复合结构）
在我们的交流项目即将结束之际，我想对您的友好和慷慨表示衷心的感谢。
②With so many fantastic works to be shown at the exhibition， it will surely arouse your interest in Chinese painting.（with复合结构）
有这么多了不起的作品在展览中展出，这一定会激起你对中国画的兴趣。
③With the theme-based class meeting to hold， I’m writing to ask you for some advice on it.（with复合结构）
主题班会要开了，我写信征求您的建议。
④（2023·新课标Ⅰ卷）To begin with， it would be a wise decision to pair a top student with one who is weak in English.（it作形式主语）
首先，把一个优等生和一个英语差的学生搭配是一个明智的决定。
⑤It goes without saying that Beijing is not only the political center but also the cultural center of our country.（it作形式主语）
不言而喻，北京不仅是我国的政治中心，也是我国的文化中心。
⑥There are a variety of themes we can choose from， including calligraphy， martial arts， shadow puppet plays as well as paper-cutting， etc.（there be句式）
有各种各样的主题我们可以选择，包括书法、武术、皮影戏以及剪纸等。
Ⅰ.用高级词汇替换下列句中的加黑词语
1.（2024·湖北七市调研）As planned， the activity will begin at 8：00 a.m. at the school lecture hall where the biology teacher will explain basic principles of scientific observation. scheduled
2.（2024·长沙模拟）I want to express my thanks for recommending that I read some illuminating stories of scientists. convey my gratitude/appreciation
3.（2024·长沙模拟）Therefore， it is important to strengthen international cooperation and jointly safeguard world peace. crucial/vital/significant
4.（2024·安徽“江南十校”联考）Our campus is attractive with green grass， tall trees and modern buildings. The atmosphere is inviting and perfect for both studies and leisure. engaging/appealing/charming
5.With the wide spread of the Internet， more and more people become online learners. an increasing number of
Ⅱ.用高级句式升级下列句子
1.We can improve our efficiency and make our school life meaningful only in this way.
→ It is only in this way that we can improve our efficiency and make our school life meaningful.（强调句）
2.Their father instructed them so patiently that the twins made the breakfast fast and well.
→ So patiently did their father instruct them that the twins made the breakfast fast and well.（倒装句）
3.It not only helped us cooperate better and beautify our campus， but it also raised our awareness of protecting the environment.
→ Not only did it help us cooperate better and beautify our campus ， but it also raised our awareness of protecting the environment. （倒装句）
4.The radio program was founded in 2016. It aimed to provide a good platform for the students to share their school life.
→The radio program was founded in 2016， aiming to provide a good platform for the students to share their school life.（动词-ing短语作状语）
Ⅲ.完成句子
1. What comes first on my recommendation list is Li Bai’s Tang Poems for the reasons below.
我首先推荐的是李白的唐诗，原因如下。
2.I’m writing to invite you to go for a morning run with me， which may benefit both of us in an amazing way.
我写信是想邀请你和我一起去晨跑，这对我们俩都有很大的好处。
3. I am writing to inform you that I won the first prize in the English poetry writing contest held by the English newspaper.
我写信是想告诉你，我在这家英文报纸举办的英语诗歌写作比赛中获得了一等奖。
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