写作主题六 事情告知
——发现失分短板
（天津卷改编）假如你是晨光中学的李津。你在英国游学期间曾寄宿在英国学生Chris家，他母亲Nancy通过电子邮件祝贺你顺利完成高中学业，询问你将如何安排高中最后一个假期。请你用英语回复，内容包括：
（1）表示感谢并问候；
（2）计划与家人一起做的事情；
（3）上大学打算选择哪个专业。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Nancy，
Yours，
Li Jin
——探究失分原因
1.计划要做的事情缺乏实际意义
学生对本话题很熟悉，有话可说，但是有不少学生表达计划要做的事情时很随意，缺乏现实意义。如：
My mother and I are going to a supermarket， where I can get all my favourite things.
2.对一些关键信息缺乏必要的拓展
如第三个要点是“上大学打算选择哪个专业”，无论选择哪个专业，都应该补充说明选择该专业的理由。这绝不是为了凑词数，而是非常必要的补充。如果只是一句I will choose AI as my major at university.显得很单调，加上理由就丰富充实了。当然补充和拓展要适可而止，绝非越多越好。
——规范答题架构
告知信分为两类：一是告知某人有某事将要发生；二是回复某人关于某事的询问。具体写作架构为：
——储备靓点表达
1.吸引阅卷人的开头句——说明写信目的
①Knowing that you are interested in the lecture on traditional Chinese culture held in our school， I am more than glad to share with you the detailed information.
②I’m Li Hua， chairman of the Students’ Union.I’m writing to inform you of the school’s class schedule adjustment during the coming Labor Day holiday.
③（2024·永州适应性考试）There will be a book-sharing activity and I’m writing to inform you of some relevant details.
④I can hardly wait to share with you the exciting news that a folk music festival is to be held in our city.
2.吸引阅卷人的篇中句——告知具体事项
①（2024·永州适应性考试）The activity is scheduled to be launched at the school hall on the afternoon of April 23， which is titled “Reading Is Rewarding”.
②The speech contest， whose theme is “My Motherland and I”， is intended to arouse students’ patriotic enthusiasm and sense of responsibility.
③What’s more， inspired by the activity， students will be motivated to express their love for the country as well as determination to study hard and make contributions to our motherland.
3.吸引阅卷人的结尾句——表达希望
①（2024·永州适应性考试）If you want to know detailed information/anything else，please don’t hesitate to contact me.
②You are warmly welcome to attend the lecture.
③I’d appreciate it if you could give me a reply at your earliest convenience.
——研读满分佳作
Dear Nancy，
I’d like to express my heartfelt thanks to you and your family for taking care of me during my study tour in the UK.I’m writing to inform you of my arrangements for the summer vacation.
As scheduled， my parents and I are going to travel to Beijing this summer， where I will visit the Great Wall.Moreover， I plan to pay a visit to Peking University and Tsinghua University， where I can experience academic atmosphere there.Speaking of university major， I will choose one related to AI because AI is the future trend and we must be prepared for the challenges it presents.
Best wishes to you and your family.
Yours，
Li Jin
——冲击满分作文
（2024·嘉兴模拟）假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack发来邮件说他即将来你处旅游。请你给他回复一封邮件，内容包括：
（1）表示欢迎；（2）告知你制订的旅游计划。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Jack，
Yours，
Li Hua
参考范文：
Dear Jack，
Glad to hear that you’re coming to China and staying in Zhejiang for four days.What good news！ At last you are coming to see me！
Here is my travel plan for us.On the first day， we will explore Hangzhou， the capital city of Zhejiang Province， where we will see the famous West Lake and the Qiantang River.On the second day， we will take a bus to Jiaxing and visit the South Lake， which is the birthplace of the Communist Party of China.Early the next morning， we will go to Shaoxing， where the famous writer Lu Xun was born.On the fourth day， we will visit Hengdian World Studios in Jinhua.
I’m sure you’ll have a wonderful time in Zhejiang.Looking forward to seeing you soon.
Yours，
Li Hua
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——发现失分短板
（天津卷改编）假如你是晨光中学的李津。你在英国游学期间曾寄宿在英国学生Chris家，他母亲Nancy通过电子邮件祝贺你顺利完成高中学业，询问你将如何安排高中最后一个假期。请你用英语回复，内容包括：
（1）表示感谢并问候；
（2）计划与家人一起做的事情；
（3）上大学打算选择哪个专业。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Nancy，
Yours，
Li Jin
——探究失分原因
1.计划要做的事情缺乏实际意义
学生对本话题很熟悉，有话可说，但是有不少学生表达计划要做的事情时很随意，缺乏现实意义。如：
My mother and I are going to a supermarket， where I can get all my favourite things.
2.对一些关键信息缺乏必要的拓展
如第三个要点是“上大学打算选择哪个专业”，无论选择哪个专业，都应该补充说明选择该专业的理由。这绝不是为了凑词数，而是非常必要的补充。如果只是一句I will choose AI as my major at university.显得很单调，加上理由就丰富充实了。当然补充和拓展要适可而止，绝非越多越好。
——规范答题架构
告知信分为两类：一是告知某人有某事将要发生；二是回复某人关于某事的询问。具体写作架构为：
——储备靓点表达
1.吸引阅卷人的开头句——说明写信目的
①Knowing that you are interested in the lecture on traditional Chinese culture held in our school， I am more than glad to share with you the detailed information.
②I’m Li Hua， chairman of the Students’ Union.I’m writing to inform you of the school’s class schedule adjustment during the coming Labor Day holiday.
③（2024·永州适应性考试）There will be a book-sharing activity and I’m writing to inform you of some relevant details.
④I can hardly wait to share with you the exciting news that a folk music festival is to be held in our city.
2.吸引阅卷人的篇中句——告知具体事项
①（2024·永州适应性考试）The activity is scheduled to be launched at the school hall on the afternoon of April 23， which is titled “Reading Is Rewarding”.
②The speech contest， whose theme is “My Motherland and I”， is intended to arouse students’ patriotic enthusiasm and sense of responsibility.
③What’s more， inspired by the activity， students will be motivated to express their love for the country as well as determination to study hard and make contributions to our motherland.
3.吸引阅卷人的结尾句——表达希望
①（2024·永州适应性考试）If you want to know detailed information/anything else，please don’t hesitate to contact me.
②You are warmly welcome to attend the lecture.
③I’d appreciate it if you could give me a reply at your earliest convenience.
——研读满分佳作
Dear Nancy，
I’d like to express my heartfelt thanks to you and your family for taking care of me during my study tour in the UK.I’m writing to inform you of my arrangements for the summer vacation.
As scheduled， my parents and I are going to travel to Beijing this summer， where I will visit the Great Wall.Moreover， I plan to pay a visit to Peking University and Tsinghua University， where I can experience academic atmosphere there.Speaking of university major， I will choose one related to AI because AI is the future trend and we must be prepared for the challenges it presents.
Best wishes to you and your family.
Yours，
Li Jin
——冲击满分作文
（2024·嘉兴模拟）假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack发来邮件说他即将来你处旅游。请你给他回复一封邮件，内容包括：
（1）表示欢迎；
（2）告知你制订的旅游计划。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Jack，
Yours，
Li Hua
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