写作主题三 申请自荐
——发现失分短板
（2024·杭州模拟）假定你是光明中学的李华，某国际夏令营将在暑假举办。请你给其负责人Henry先生写一封邮件申请参加，内容包括：
（1）自我介绍并提出申请；
（2）个人优势；
（3）表达希望。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Henry，
Best regards，
Li Hua
——探究失分原因
1.重点不突出，详略不得当
虽然本篇写作包含三个要点，但是重点应该突出第二个——个人优势。其他两个要点可以一带而过，简化处理。
2.遣词造句时句式使用过于单一
由于本文属于自我介绍性质，所以很多同学的绝大部分句子都是以I开头，如：I am from ...； I’m good at ...；I’m fond of ...；I usually ... in my spare time等，这样的句式既单调枯燥又平淡乏味。正确的做法是句子开头可以多样化，比如副词（most importantly）、介词短语（with an outgoing and cheerful personality）和固定表达（what’s more）等。
——规范答题架构
申请信有求职申请、加入某组织或参加某活动的申请以及留学申请等。申请信的目的在于让对方了解自己的能力、资历以及愿望等，所以对个人情况的介绍应该是申请信的核心内容。具体写作架构为：
——储备靓点表达
1.吸引阅卷人的开头句——提出申请
①I am Li Hua， a Chinese student in London now.Having learned that a Chinese painting exhibition will be held in this city， I am writing to apply to be a volunteer.
②I am writing to apply for a volunteer position in our community library during the summer break.
③Learning the school basketball team is recruiting new members， I’m excited to apply to be one of them.
2.吸引阅卷人的篇中句——个人优势
①To begin with， as a Chinese high school student， I have a good command of English， making it easy for me to communicate with foreign guests.
②Besides， having a good knowledge of Chinese paintings， I can get the visitors to know more about them.
③With all these advantages， I hold the firm belief that I will be very qualified to be a volunteer.
3.吸引阅卷人的结尾句——表达希望
①I’d appreciate it if you could take my application into consideration and I’m looking forward to your early reply.
②I would be very grateful if you could offer me a chance to be a volunteer.
③If accepted， I would spare no effort to offer my best service.
——研读满分佳作
Dear Henry，
My name is Li Hua.I’m an 18-year-old boy from Guangming Middle School in East China’s Zhejiang Province.I’m writing to win a chance to take part in the coming summer camp.
I do believe I’m an ideal candidate for you.With an outgoing and cheerful personality， I can get along very well with people around me.What’s more， having learned English for over ten years， I have a good command of English and I can communicate freely with foreigners.Most importantly， I’m thirsty for understanding Western cultures and spreading Chinese culture.
I sincerely hope I will get such a good chance and I’m sure I will make a positive difference in the camp.Looking forward to your reply.
Best regards，
Li Hua
——冲击满分作文
（2024·安徽五校联考）假定你是李华，你校下周将与某国际学校开展线上文化交流会，现公开招募英文主持人。请你用英文给负责人Mr White写一封申请信，内容包括：
（1）提出申请；（2）个人优势；（3）期盼回复。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Mr White，
Yours，
Li Hua
3 / 3写作主题三 申请自荐
——发现失分短板
（2024·杭州模拟）假定你是光明中学的李华，某国际夏令营将在暑假举办。请你给其负责人Henry先生写一封邮件申请参加，内容包括：
（1）自我介绍并提出申请；
（2）个人优势；
（3）表达希望。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Henry，
Best regards，
Li Hua
——探究失分原因
1.重点不突出，详略不得当
虽然本篇写作包含三个要点，但是重点应该突出第二个——个人优势。其他两个要点可以一带而过，简化处理。
2.遣词造句时句式使用过于单一
由于本文属于自我介绍性质，所以很多同学的绝大部分句子都是以I开头，如：I am from ...； I’m good at ...；I’m fond of ...；I usually ... in my spare time等，这样的句式既单调枯燥又平淡乏味。正确的做法是句子开头可以多样化，比如副词（most importantly）、介词短语（with an outgoing and cheerful personality）和固定表达（what’s more）等。
——规范答题架构
申请信有求职申请、加入某组织或参加某活动的申请以及留学申请等。申请信的目的在于让对方了解自己的能力、资历以及愿望等，所以对个人情况的介绍应该是申请信的核心内容。具体写作架构为：
——储备靓点表达
1.吸引阅卷人的开头句——提出申请
①I am Li Hua， a Chinese student in London now.Having learned that a Chinese painting exhibition will be held in this city， I am writing to apply to be a volunteer.
②I am writing to apply for a volunteer position in our community library during the summer break.
③Learning the school basketball team is recruiting new members， I’m excited to apply to be one of them.
2.吸引阅卷人的篇中句——个人优势
①To begin with， as a Chinese high school student， I have a good command of English， making it easy for me to communicate with foreign guests.
②Besides， having a good knowledge of Chinese paintings， I can get the visitors to know more about them.
③With all these advantages， I hold the firm belief that I will be very qualified to be a volunteer.
3.吸引阅卷人的结尾句——表达希望
①I’d appreciate it if you could take my application into consideration and I’m looking forward to your early reply.
②I would be very grateful if you could offer me a chance to be a volunteer.
③If accepted， I would spare no effort to offer my best service.
——研读满分佳作
Dear Henry，
My name is Li Hua.I’m an 18-year-old boy from Guangming Middle School in East China’s Zhejiang Province.I’m writing to win a chance to take part in the coming summer camp.
I do believe I’m an ideal candidate for you.With an outgoing and cheerful personality， I can get along very well with people around me.What’s more， having learned English for over ten years， I have a good command of English and I can communicate freely with foreigners.Most importantly， I’m thirsty for understanding Western cultures and spreading Chinese culture.
I sincerely hope I will get such a good chance and I’m sure I will make a positive difference in the camp.Looking forward to your reply.
Best regards，
Li Hua
——冲击满分作文
（2024·安徽五校联考）假定你是李华，你校下周将与某国际学校开展线上文化交流会，现公开招募英文主持人。请你用英文给负责人Mr White写一封申请信，内容包括：
（1）提出申请；
（2）个人优势；
（3）期盼回复。
注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；
（2）请按如下格式作答。
Dear Mr White，
Yours，
Li Hua
参考范文：
Dear Mr White，
I am writing to apply for the position of English host for the online cultural exchange event between our school and the international school.
To begin with， I have a good command of English.I can speak English fluently and communicate with native speakers without any difficulty.Moreover， I have hosted various school events and competitions， which have improved my presentation and public speaking skills.Last but not least， I am eager to contribute to the success of the event and learn from students of different cultural backgrounds.
I’d appreciate it if you could take my application into consideration and I’m looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua
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