第三讲 理线索——3处关联，构思续写情节
构思续写情节时，学生需要再次快速读原文，通过关键词句把握原文段落大意，推测续写情节。同时，结合对原文情节线和情感线的把握，以及两段所给首句中的已知信息进行推测，合理构建续写微框架。
一、聚焦段落：总结段落大意，推断续写段落主旨
通过关键词句总结原文段落大意，结合文章要素、线索、主旨意图和段首语思考续写部分的段落大意，从宏观方面把握续写段落的内容、方向，避免出现脱离原文现象。
二、聚焦伏笔：识别原文伏笔，预测续写微情景
常见的情节安排技巧包括悬念、伏笔、衬托、呼应、铺垫等。续写时需要关注故事的情节安排，故事中留下的悬念在续写中需要得到解答，伏笔需要有呼应。学生阅读时可以画出原文中的伏笔，这些伏笔会给学生提供续写思路；学生在续写的过程中可以有意识地复现它们，以提醒自己写作时围绕主旨展开。如何确定哪些是伏笔呢？学生可通过主旨词、复现词或阅读时让人灵感乍现的词汇，以及描写主人公前后情感变化的相关句子来确定。
三、聚焦首句：构思故事情节，构建续写故事框架
学生在了解了原文的情节之后，应根据要求将续写的两段的首句进行合理衔接，预测故事发展的走向。在续写时，我们应主要思考如何围绕段落大意和文章主题展开叙述，解决前文的矛盾冲突，完成由高潮到结局的故事叙述。
（2023·1月浙江卷）I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention， so I entered it. It was a hummingbird （蜂鸟）， desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs （蛛网） and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand， I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside， closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand， the bird did not fly away； she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still， she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired？ Or too thirsty？
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle， she began to move. I stopped， and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering （悬停）， she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment， this tiny creature looked into my eyes， turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout， I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing， my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes， then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment， all were speechless. Then someone said，“She must have come to say good-bye.”
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式作答。
A few weeks later， I went to the farm again.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
1.总结段落大意，推断续写段落主旨
（1）找出每段的关键句
第一段 She was covered in spider-webs and was barely able to move her wings.
第二段 I stuffed ... took her outside， closing the door securely behind me.
第三段 Perhaps she ... and was too tired？ Or too thirsty？
第四段 For a very long moment， this tiny creature looked into my eyes， turning her head from side to side.
第五段 Then someone said，“She must have come to say good-bye.”
（2）总结原文段落大意
第一段：农场赴宴，蜂鸟遇困。
第二段：心怀关爱，救出蜂鸟。
第三段：蜂鸟不飞，探寻原因。
第四段：深情凝望，依依不舍。
第五段：感恩相救，飞回告别。
（3）推断续写段落主旨
初读原文可知，本文的主要角色是作者和一只蜂鸟。原文以“拟人”的写作手法讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐，救助了一只蜂鸟，但是这只蜂鸟却迟迟不肯飞走的故事，突出了蜂鸟对作者深深的感激之情。基于文章要素、线索与主旨意图，结合原文段落大意和续写段首句可推测出续写段落的段意：
第六段（续写第一段）：重回农场，思念蜂鸟。
第七段（续写第二段）：再遇蜂鸟，珍惜回忆。
2.识别原文伏笔，预测续写微情景
伏笔 预测情节
Still， she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired？ Or too thirsty？ 续写第一段，作者思念蜂鸟时，根据伏笔应该续写作者的内心想到蜂鸟现在的状况如何
During the cookout， I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident.They promised to fix the window. 续写第一段，作者回到农场，思念蜂鸟时应该续写作者来到蜂鸟遇困的地方，查看朋友是否已修复那扇破旧的窗户
She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes， then let out a squeaking call and was gone. 续写第二段，作者再遇蜂鸟，续写部分应该用“拟人”的手法呈现蜂鸟对作者表达感激之情的画面
3.构思故事情节，构建续写故事框架
根据续写第二段开头I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.去衔接第一段的结尾处，结合推断出的段意和第一段开头内容A few weeks later， I went to the farm again.可以提出的“四问”如下：
Q1：What did I think of？ （主要人物所想）
Q2：What did I do？ （主要人物所做）
Q3：What did I feel？（主要人物所感）
Q4：What was I wondering about the hummingbird？（主要人物内心冲突，此处转换场景）
结合段意和第二段首句，续写第二段的“四问”，以问题的圆满解决、正能量的传递为宗旨，具体为：
Q1：How did the hummingbird appear？ （第二角色出场方式）
Q2：What did the hummingbird do？ （第二角色所做）
Q3：What did I feel？ （主要人物所感，矛盾得到解决）
Q4：How did the story end up？ What did the author hope to convey in the story？ （采用自然结尾式、主旨靓句式、首尾呼应式、真情流露式或情景衬托式等常见的结尾方式）
A few weeks later， I went to the farm again. I still remembered my friends’ promise so I went past the abandoned milking house to see if they had fixed the broken window. To my satisfaction， no other tiny creatures would meet this trouble any more. As I approached the farm， I was greeted by a spicy smell of the barbecue， urging me to walk faster. We were totally immersed in the peaceful atmosphere， enjoying the delicate cuisines， talking about our interesting experiences and singing songs till the sunset. With the evening glow spreading across the farm， it was time for us to say goodbye and we went to the parking lot together.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. With a squeaking call， she dived towards me and hovered before my face， looking at me with her bright eyes. Then she stopped on my left shoulder. I patted her on the back which was covered by colourful feathers. And I took out my water bottle， trying to give her some water. Content and joyful， she flew about 2 meters above the ground， turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again. At that moment， happiness and the feeling of being moved mingled， welling up into my heart， tears rolling down my cheeks.
4 / 4第三讲 理线索——3处关联，构思续写情节
构思续写情节时，学生需要再次快速读原文，通过关键词句把握原文段落大意，推测续写情节。同时，结合对原文情节线和情感线的把握，以及两段所给首句中的已知信息进行推测，合理构建续写微框架。
一、聚焦段落：总结段落大意，推断续写段落主旨
通过关键词句总结原文段落大意，结合文章要素、线索、主旨意图和段首语思考续写部分的段落大意，从宏观方面把握续写段落的内容、方向，避免出现脱离原文现象。
二、聚焦伏笔：识别原文伏笔，预测续写微情景
常见的情节安排技巧包括悬念、伏笔、衬托、呼应、铺垫等。续写时需要关注故事的情节安排，故事中留下的悬念在续写中需要得到解答，伏笔需要有呼应。学生阅读时可以画出原文中的伏笔，这些伏笔会给学生提供续写思路；学生在续写的过程中可以有意识地复现它们，以提醒自己写作时围绕主旨展开。如何确定哪些是伏笔呢？学生可通过主旨词、复现词或阅读时让人灵感乍现的词汇，以及描写主人公前后情感变化的相关句子来确定。
三、聚焦首句：构思故事情节，构建续写故事框架
学生在了解了原文的情节之后，应根据要求将续写的两段的首句进行合理衔接，预测故事发展的走向。在续写时，我们应主要思考如何围绕段落大意和文章主题展开叙述，解决前文的矛盾冲突，完成由高潮到结局的故事叙述。
（2023·1月浙江卷）I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention， so I entered it. It was a hummingbird （蜂鸟）， desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs （蛛网） and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand， I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside， closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand， the bird did not fly away； she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still， she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired？ Or too thirsty？
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle， she began to move. I stopped， and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering （悬停）， she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment， this tiny creature looked into my eyes， turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout， I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing， my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes， then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment， all were speechless. Then someone said，“She must have come to say good-bye.”
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式作答。
A few weeks later， I went to the farm again.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
1.总结段落大意，推断续写段落主旨
（1）找出每段的关键句
第一段 She was covered in spider-webs and was barely able to move her wings.
第二段 I stuffed ... took her outside， closing the door securely behind me.
第三段 Perhaps she ... and was too tired？ Or too thirsty？
第四段 For a very long moment， this tiny creature looked into my eyes， turning her head from side to side.
第五段 Then someone said，“She must have come to say good-bye.”
（2）总结原文段落大意
第一段：农场赴宴，蜂鸟遇困。
第二段：心怀关爱，救出蜂鸟。
第三段：蜂鸟不飞，探寻原因。
第四段：深情凝望，依依不舍。
第五段：感恩相救，飞回告别。
（3）推断续写段落主旨
初读原文可知，本文的主要角色是作者和一只蜂鸟。原文以“拟人”的写作手法讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐，救助了一只蜂鸟，但是这只蜂鸟却迟迟不肯飞走的故事，突出了蜂鸟对作者深深的感激之情。基于文章要素、线索与主旨意图，结合原文段落大意和续写段首句可推测出续写段落的段意：
第六段（续写第一段）：重回农场，思念蜂鸟。
第七段（续写第二段）：再遇蜂鸟，珍惜回忆。
2.识别原文伏笔，预测续写微情景
伏笔 预测情节
Still， she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired？ Or too thirsty？ 续写第一段，作者思念蜂鸟时，根据伏笔应该续写作者的内心想到蜂鸟现在的状况如何
During the cookout， I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident.They promised to fix the window. 续写第一段，作者回到农场，思念蜂鸟时应该续写作者来到蜂鸟遇困的地方，查看朋友是否已修复那扇破旧的窗户
She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes， then let out a squeaking call and was gone. 续写第二段，作者再遇蜂鸟，续写部分应该用“拟人”的手法呈现蜂鸟对作者表达感激之情的画面
3.构思故事情节，构建续写故事框架
根据续写第二段开头I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.去衔接第一段的结尾处，结合推断出的段意和第一段开头内容A few weeks later， I went to the farm again.可以提出的“四问”如下：
Q1：What did I think of？ （主要人物所想）
Q2：What did I do？ （主要人物所做）
Q3：What did I feel？（主要人物所感）
Q4：What was I wondering about the hummingbird？（主要人物内心冲突，此处转换场景）
结合段意和第二段首句，续写第二段的“四问”，以问题的圆满解决、正能量的传递为宗旨，具体为：
Q1：How did the hummingbird appear？ （第二角色出场方式）
Q2：What did the hummingbird do？ （第二角色所做）
Q3：What did I feel？ （主要人物所感，矛盾得到解决）
Q4：How did the story end up？ What did the author hope to convey in the story？ （采用自然结尾式、主旨靓句式、首尾呼应式、真情流露式或情景衬托式等常见的结尾方式）
A few weeks later， I went to the farm again. I still remembered my friends’ promise so I went past the abandoned milking house to see if they had fixed the broken window. To my satisfaction， no other tiny creatures would meet this trouble any more. As I approached the farm， I was greeted by a spicy smell of the barbecue， urging me to walk faster. We were totally immersed in the peaceful atmosphere， enjoying the delicate cuisines， talking about our interesting experiences and singing songs till the sunset. With the evening glow spreading across the farm， it was time for us to say goodbye and we went to the parking lot together.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. With a squeaking call， she dived towards me and hovered before my face， looking at me with her bright eyes. Then she stopped on my left shoulder. I patted her on the back which was covered by colourful feathers. And I took out my water bottle， trying to give her some water. Content and joyful， she flew about 2 meters above the ground， turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again. At that moment， happiness and the feeling of being moved mingled， welling up into my heart， tears rolling down my cheeks.
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