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Period 5 Writing
假定你是李华,你的英国笔友马克(Mark)来信想向你了解一下重阳节,以及你的重阳节是怎样度过的。请写一封回信,内容包括:
1.简要介绍重阳节;
2.你的重阳节经历:重阳节那天和同学去了敬老院陪老人过重阳节;活动包括包饺子等;
3.你的感想。
写作一 应用文写作——介绍中国传统节日的书信
注意:1.词数80左右;
2.可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。
参考词汇:重阳节(the Double Ninth Festival)
1.我写信是想告诉你一些关于重阳节的事,它是一个中国传统节日。
I'm writing to tell you something about the Double Ninth Festival, _______________________________________.
2.它适逢农历九月初九,在我们中国文化中是老年人的节日。
It ______________________________________, and is the day for elderly in our Chinese culture.
which is a traditional Chinese festival
falls on the 9th day of the 9th lunar month
3.在那天,我和同学去了附近的敬老院。
On that day, my classmates and _______________________________.
4.我们和那里的老人一起包饺子。
We __________________________________ there.
5.我们还花了一些时间在一起唱歌和玩游戏。
We also __________________________________________________.
I paid a visit to the nearby nursing home
made dumplings with the old people
spent some time together singing and playing games
6.我们像对待自己的父母一样对待他们,这让他们很感动。
We treated them _____________________________,which made them moved.
7.当我们离开的时候,这些老人很伤心。
The old people were sad ____________.
in a way they were our parents
when we left
8.我们应该花更多的时间和这些老人在一起,给他们带来快乐。
We ________________________________________________________
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9.老人往往会感到孤独。
The old people ___________________.
should spend more time with the old people and bring them happiness
tend to feel lonely
10.【读教材原句】 (教材P8)After singing some songs, the competitors danced onto the green field, waving their arms in the air as if they were eagles.
【记句式】 as if引导方式状语从句
【学仿写】 用as if引导方式状语从句改写句6
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We treated them as if they were our parents, which made them moved.
11.【读教材原句】 (教材P8)I heard it is because children are lighter and the horses can run faster and farther.
【记句式】 because引导表语从句
【学仿写】 用because引导表语从句合并句8和句9
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We should spend more time with the old people and bring them happiness, which is because the old people tend to feel lonely.
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One possible version:
Dear Mark,
I'm writing to tell you something about the Double Ninth Festival, which is a traditional Chinese festival. It falls on the 9th day of the 9th lunar month and is the day for the elderly in our Chinese culture.
On that day, my classmates and I paid a visit to the nearby nursing home. We made dumplings with the old people there. We also spent some time together singing and playing games. We treated them as if they were our parents, which made them moved. The old people were sad when we left.
Through this activity, I learn that we should spend more time with the old people and bring them happiness, which is because the old people tend to feel lonely.
Yours,
Li Hua
假定你是李华,你的美国朋友杰克(Jack)对中国的元宵节很感兴趣,他来信询问有关情况。请你给他回信,简单介绍一下元宵节。要点如下:
1.元宵节在中国的地位;
2.元宵节的庆祝时间和庆祝活动;
3.你对元宵节的态度。
注意:1.词数80左右;
2.可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。
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One possible version:
Dear Jack,
Knowing that you are interested in the Lantern Festival, I am writing to tell you something about it.
The Lantern Festival is regarded as the most recreational among all the Chinese festivals and a day for appreciating the bright full moon and family reunion.It falls on the 15th day of the first lunar month.There is a wide range of activities people usually do on the day, including watching lanterns and fireworks, guessing lantern riddles, performing folk dances, and eating yuanxiao,etc.Of all the activities, I am interested in the Lion Dance most, which focuses on skills and is always amusing.
As far as I am concerned, the Lantern Festival is a special occasion for people to return home and gratefully reunite with family members. We should cherish this festival.
Your sincerely,
Li Hua
“冲突解决原则”“协同原则”“正能量原则”是完成读后续写的三大原则。遵循这三个原则,可以恰当地把握创造性的“度”,构建合情合理且和原文连贯一致的续写。
写作二 读后续写登峰篇——“父亲节”惊喜庆祝活动展示温暖亲情
1.冲突解决原则
跌宕起伏的情节是记叙文的一大特点,但是在续写部分,故事趋于结局,即记叙文的冲突趋于解决,而不是悬而未决。
为了遵循“冲突解决原则”,需特别注意以下两点:
(1)不增加人物。由近年高考真题可知,续写部分的故事情节发展都是由原文的人物来推进,因此,强行增加人物有可能会偏离冲突的解决。
(2)不增加旁支情节。续写题目要求“考生根据所给情节进行续写”,旨在延续原文的故事情节,即冲突解决的情节,并不是要发展新情节。
2.协同原则
读后续写要求续写部分与原文达成协同。协同效应下的续写部分应在主题、情节、衔接、情感、语言方面与原文保持高度协同。
3.正能量原则
续写部分的内容一定要遵循正能量原则,弘扬社会主义核心价值观;应该积极向上,能增长知识、见识或传播正能量。
如果遭遇不幸,最终会有人施以援手,皆大欢喜;如果遇到困难,最终一定会克服困难,获得成功;如果产生矛盾,最终一定会言归于好;如果出现负面形象,最终一定会战胜自我,实现成长。
阅读下面的材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Father's Day Surprise
[1]One day, in the living room, Ali asked his sister,“Mano, do you know when Father's Day is celebrated?”
[2]“Yes, it is going to be celebrated on June 16 this year. Yesterday my friend and I talked about it.” Mano replied.
[3]“Do you have any idea how we should celebrate this day and make it memorable for Dad?” Ali asked.
[4]“Hmm...I was thinking about it too and have some ideas.” Mano answered excitedly. “What are you kids talking about?” their mum asked, entering the living room.
[5]“Mum, we were wondering how to celebrate Father's Day.” Mano said.
[6]“Oh, I am surprised you kids remembered! Well, I am thinking of cooking some favourite dishes for your dad. You both should think of ways to decorate the house beautifully.” Mum said.
[7]“That would be great!” said Mano and Ali together. Both of them got up smiling, thinking of hundreds of ways to celebrate Father's Day. Mum went to the kitchen, and Mano and Ali started doing their homework. But soon Ali noticed Mano deep in thought, so he asked what the matter was. “Ali, I was thinking that our parents do everything for us and in return they want nothing. Isn't it bad that we never think about them and are always concerned about our needs?” Mano replied. “Sometimes we are so busy with our lives that we don't pay proper attention to our parents. We should listen to whatever they say properly and answer them. We must also study hard to get good grades.” Ali nodded.
[8]The next day, all three of them, Mano, Ali and their mum, got busy preparing their surprise celebration for Father's Day. Mano drew a family picture with her crayons; Ali bought balloons and candles and began writing a poem which he planned to read that day. In short, a lot of things were being planned and prepared.
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
Finally, when Father's Day came, both Ali and Mano came home from school early and started decorating the house._________________
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Ali and Mano cried out together, “Happy Father's Day!”____________________________________________________
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【Settings背景】
When &Where [1]One day,in _______________, Ali asked his sister,“Mano, do you know when ____________ is celebrated?”
the living room
Father's Day
【Characters角色】
Who ______;_____;Mum; Dad
Mano
Ali
【Plots情节】
What [5]“Mum, we were wondering ______________________.” Mano said.
[6]Well, I am thinking of _____________________________ for your dad. You both should think of ways _________________________________.
[8]The next day, all three of them, Mano, Ali and their mum, got busy _____________________________________________.
how to celebrate Father's Day
cooking some favourite dishes
to decorate the house beautifully
preparing their surprise celebration for Father's Day
Why [3]“Do you have any idea how we should _________ this day and make it _________ for Dad?” Ali asked.
celebrate
memorable
【Feelings情感】
How [4]“Hmm...I was thinking about it too and have some ideas.” Mano answered _________.
[7]Both of them got up ________, thinking of hundreds of ways to celebrate Father's Day.
[7]But soon Ali noticed Mano _______________ so he asked what the matter was.
excitedly
smiling
deep in thought
Theme (正能量 原则) Mono, Ali and Mum came up with some ideas to ____________________. They ___________________ for Dad, which made Dad ___________________. It was ___________ that warmed everyone.
celebrate Father's Day
prepared a surprise
delighted and moved
family love
每段三个微情节(Q&A策略):注重衔接和冲突解决原则
第一段段首句:Finally, when Father's Day came, both Ali and Mano came home from school early and started decorating the house.
[Question 1] How did Ali and Mano decorate the house
[Answer] __________________________________________________
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Ali put up the colourful balloons, lit the candles and presented the cake and Mano took out the family picture and placed it on the table.
[Question 2] What dishes did Mum prepare for Dad
[Answer] __________________________________
[Question 3] How did Ali, Mano and Mum feel while waiting for Dad
[Answer] ________________
French toast and chicken porridge.
They felt eager.
第二段段首句:Ali and Mano cried out together, “Happy Father's Day!”
[Question 1] What was Dad's reaction
[Answer] _____________________________________
[Question 2] What did the family do
[Answer] _________________________________
[Question 3] What lesson did the story convey
[Answer] ____________________________
Dad was delighted, excited and moved.
They enjoyed a big meal together.
Family love warmed everyone.
三原则:冲突解决、协同、正能量
1.嗯,我想为你们的父亲做一些他最喜欢的菜。你们俩可以想办法把房子装饰得漂亮。
Well, I am thinking of _____________________________ for your dad. You both should think of ways ________________________________.
(原文中表明妈妈为爸爸做饭,孩子们装饰房子,续写部分要与之协同)
cooking some favourite dishes
to decorate the house beautifully
2.第二天,马诺、阿里和他们的妈妈三个人,忙着为庆祝父亲节准备惊喜。
The next day, all three of them, Mano, Ali and their mum, _____________________________________________ for Father's Day.(原文冲突:如何为庆祝父亲节准备惊喜)
got busy preparing their surprise celebration
3.马诺用蜡笔画了一张全家福;阿里买了气球和蜡烛,并开始写一首诗,打算在那天朗读。
Mano _____________________ with her crayons; Ali ___________________________ and ____________________ which he planned to read that day. (原文中出现全家福、气球、蜡烛和诗,续写部分要与之协同)
drew a family picture
bought balloons and candles
began writing a poem
1.阿里迅速打扫了客厅,继续装饰:挂上五颜六色的气球、点上蜡烛、送上蛋糕。
Ali quickly cleaned the living room and ______________________________________________________________________________________ and presenting the cake. (阿里的具体动作,与原文协同,冲突解决)
continued with the decoration, putting up the colourful balloons, lighting the candles
2.同时,马诺拿出全家福,笑容满面地放在桌子上。
At the same time, Mano ___________________________ and placed it on the table __________________. (马诺的具体动作,与原文协同,冲突解决。)
3.多么美丽而甜蜜的惊喜啊!是亲情温暖了每一个人。
What _______________________________ It was family love that _______________.(正能量结尾)
took out the family picture
with a broad smile
a beautiful and sweet surprise!
warmed everyone
1.他们正要练习朗读这首诗时,厨房里传来阵阵香味。
They ____________________________________________ the delicious smell came from the kitchen.(be about to do...when...)
2.阿里和马诺站在门口,急切地等着他们的爸爸。
Ali and Mano stood beside the door, _____________________________. (v.-ing形式作状语)
were about to practice reading the poem when
waiting for their dad eagerly
3.整个房子装饰得既漂亮又优雅,爸爸很惊讶,也很感动,几乎一句话也说不出来。
The whole house _______________________________, Dad was ________________________________________________________.(独立主格结构;so...that...)
decorated beautifully and elegantly
so surprised and touched that he could hardly utter a single word
4.他忍不住尝了一口鸡肉粥,大声说这是他吃过的最好的菜。
He couldn't help tasting a bit of chicken porridge, exclaiming that it was the best dish ______________________.(定语从句)
5.全家人一起享用了这顿大餐,笑声在房间里游荡。
The whole family enjoyed the big meal together, _______________________________________.(with复合结构)
(that) he had ever had
with laughter lingering around the room
Finally, when Father's Day came, both Ali and Mano came home from school early and started decorating the house._________________
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Ali and Mano cried out together, “Happy Father's Day!”____________________________________________________
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One possible version:
Finally, when Father's Day came, both Ali and Mano came home from school early and started decorating the house. Ali quickly cleaned the living room and continued with the decoration, putting up the colourful balloons, lighting the candles and presenting the cake. At the same time, Mano took out the family picture and placed it on the table with a broad smile. They were about to practice reading the poem when the delicious smell came from the kitchen. Surely it was Mum that prepared the big meal. French toast and chicken porridge, both of which were Dad's favourite dishes, were ready. Eventually, everything was settled. Ali and Mano stood beside the door, waiting for their dad eagerly. Then Dad came in.
Ali and Mano cried out together, “Happy Father's Day!” Hearing the words, Dad laughed happily. “We have a surprise for you!” added Ali, pointing at the decorations and the well-prepared meal. The whole house decorated beautifully and elegantly, Dad was so surprised and touched that he could hardly utter a single word. When he saw the dinner, his eyes widened and twinkled with excitement. He couldn't help tasting a bit of chicken porridge, exclaiming that it was the best dish (that) he had ever had. The whole family enjoyed the big meal together, with laughter lingering around the room. What a beautiful and sweet surprise! It was family love that warmed everyone.