专题六 读后续写-2026年高考英语总复习课件

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专题六 读后续写
近三年新课标全国卷全方位分析表
试卷 类别 试卷 年份 考点 话题 考查的核心能力
新 课 标 Ⅰ 卷 2025 人与社会 闹别扭的 兄弟和解 创新思维:段首句提供较大的想象空间,要求情节新颖合理。
情感描写:细腻刻画人物的内心挣扎和情感变化。
批判性思维:对事件进行反思并做出价值判断。
新 课 标 Ⅰ 卷 2024 人与社会 诚信回报 陌生司机 相助 逻辑构建:分析情节、人物性格和情感线索,设计合理发展。
细节描写:通过动作、对话等展现人物的诚信与理解。
综合运用:考查“读+写”技能的协同能力。
2023 人与自我 写作比赛 逆袭获奖 阅读理解:把握故事线索和人物情感。
创造性思维:合理构思比赛过程和结果。
语言协同:模仿原文语言风格进行连贯表达。
新 课 标 Ⅱ 卷 2025 人与自我 学生因名 字意识到 文化身份 跨文化表达:用英语准确、生动地阐释中国文化内涵。
逻辑衔接:确保续写部分与原文及段首句紧密衔接。
主题升华:结尾自然提升到文化认同与交流的高度。
新 课 标 Ⅱ 卷 2024 人与社会 诚信回报 陌生司机 相助 逻辑构建:分析情节、人物性格和情感线索,设计合理发展。
细节描写:通过动作、对话等展现人物的诚信与理解。
综合运用:考查“读+写”技能的协同能力。
2023 人与自我 写作比赛 逆袭获奖 阅读理解:把握故事线索和人物情感。
创造性思维:合理构思比赛过程和结果。
语言协同:模仿原文语言风格进行连贯表达。
　　高考英语读后续写是新高考英语试卷的核心主观题型之一,主要考查学生基于给定语篇进行逻辑续写和语言表达的综合能力,分值为 25 分。读后续写要求考生阅读一段约 350 词的不完整的记叙文(开头和中间部分),然后根据所给的两个段首句,续写两段内容,最终形成一个完整、连贯且逻辑合理的故事。它的特点有三:一是综合性,读后续写完美结合了阅读理解和写作表达,是对语言综合应用能力的终极检验;二是创造性,读后续写要求在给定的框架内进行创造性构思,考查想象力和逻辑思维;三是互动性,读后续写需要考生与原文进行“对话”,理解其风格、情感和情节走向,并做出协同回应。
类型一
成长感悟类
成长感悟类故事的核心在于主人公通过某个事件,在认知、情感或能力上发生积极转变。解题需紧扣 “情感变化” 与 “逻辑递进” 双线索,具体步骤如下:
原文核心要素
人物:“我”(热爱写作但缺乏自信的高中生)、语文老师张老师
困境:“我” 的作文常被同学嘲笑 “太幼稚”,不敢参加市级写作比赛
触发点:张老师发现 “我” 的随笔本,鼓励 “我” 参赛,还给了“我”一本批注过的《散文选刊》
段首句:
Paragraph 1: When I got home and opened the prose selection, I found a note from Miss Zhang.
Paragraph 2: The day of the competition finally came.
【技法运用】
1.要素提炼与脉络梳理
成长起点:因他人评价产生写作自卑(情感:胆怯→犹豫);
成长动机:张老师的鼓励与《散文选刊》(潜在线索:批注、笔记本)。
情感线需从 “犹豫” 过渡到 “坚定”,再到 “释然成长”。
2.段首解码与情节设计
第一段(顺承关系):围绕 “便签内容” 展开——便签写着 “你的文字有生活的温度,这是最珍贵的”(复用 “老师” 关键人物),触发 “我” 翻看随笔本,看到曾记录的 “奶奶的菜园故事”(复用 “随笔本” 线索),决定以 “菜园里的时光” 为主题写作(突破动作)。
细节填充:“指尖抚过老师圈画的句子,突然想起奶奶摘番茄时说的‘菜要慢慢长,字要真心写’,眼泪滴在随笔本的墨迹上。”
第二段(因果关系):衔接 “比赛当天”——候场时紧张到攥紧随笔本(心理+动作),看到观众席上的张老师点头示意(关键人物呼应),演讲时从 “忘词” 到 “想起奶奶的笑容”(线索复现),最终获 “最佳真情奖”(结果)。
升华结尾:“张老师拥抱了我并说道:‘你的温度打动了所有人’。我忽然明白,成长不是变成别人认可的样子,而是勇敢地守住自己的光芒。”
3.线索复用与主题强化
全程紧扣 “随笔本”“《散文选刊》”“张老师”“奶奶的菜园” 四大原文线索,通过 “便签—回忆—写作—获奖” 的逻辑链,将 “自信成长” 主题具象化,避免空泛抒情。
【参考范文】
When I got home and opened the prose selection, I found a note from Miss Zhang. Her handwriting was warm and neat, which read, “Your essays are filled with the warmth of daily life—like the way you described your grandma picking tomatoes in the garden. Don’t hide that light because of others’ words; the competition is just a chance to let more people see it.” Holding the note, I walked to my desk and pulled out my old notebook—the one full of my unshared stories. Flipping through the pages, I stopped at the entry about grandma’s garden: “Every tomato grows slowly, but it’s sweet because it soaks up the sun and rain.” Suddenly, I realized—my writing wasn’t “childish”; it was my true voice. That night, I sat by the desk lamp, reworking the garden story into my competition essay, with Miss Zhang’s note taped beside me.
The day of the competition finally came. My hands shook as I held my essay folder, and my heart pounded so hard that I could feel it in my ears. When my name was called, I walked onto the stage, my legs feeling like jelly. But as I looked up, I saw Miss Zhang in the audience—she smiled and gave me a thumbs-up, just like she did when she returned my notebook. Taking a deep breath, I started reading. When I mentioned “grandma’s hands covered in soil,” I paused for a second, worried I’d forget the next line. But then I thought of the note: “Your warmth is precious.” I kept going, my voice getting steadier with each word. When I finished, the audience erupted in applause. Later, when I got the “Best True Feelings Award,” Miss Zhang hugged me and said, “See Your light did shine.” Standing there with the certificate, I smiled—I finally understood that growth isn’t about being perfect. It’s about daring to be yourself, even when you’re scared.
　　 情感断层:范文通过 “读便签时的触动→翻随笔本的回忆→比赛时的鼓励” 三个过渡,避免 “突然自信” 的断层,如 “worried I’d forget the next line” 体现中途紧张,再用 “thought of the note” 实现情绪转折,符合 “犹豫→尝试→受挫→再坚持” 的阶梯。
线索断裂:范文每段均复用原文线索,如第一段 “taped the note beside me”、第二段 “looked up and saw Miss Zhang”,未忽略原文细节,确保线索连贯。
　　 逻辑失真:范文中 “reworking the garden story into my competition essay”(提前修改)、“voice getting steadier with each word”(逐渐熟练),符合 “成长渐进性”,避免 “突然痊愈”“瞬间学会” 的不合理情节。
主题偏移:结尾升华紧扣 “突破自我怀疑” 的原文内核,未跑偏到 “帮助他人”,且用具体感悟替代 “Never give up” 的万能句,主题精准。
表达干瘪:范文没有“我很努力”“我很开心” 的抽象表述,而是用 “sat by the desk lamp reworking the story”(努力的动作)、“audience erupted in applause”“hugged me”(开心的场景),通过 “细节套餐” 实现生动表达。
(2024·广东茂名高三模考)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Linda, a high school girl, was feeling depressed after she had failed her mid-term exams. She didn’t answer her teachers’ questions actively in class like she used to. Instead, she began to lower her head and got absent-minded easily. Her friends and classmates were worried about her, but she didn’t feel like talking about it with them. Mrs. Green, her English teacher, noticed her changes and decided to do something before it got worse.
One day, Mrs. Green entered the classroom and asked her students to prepare for a surprise test. They waited anxiously at their desks for the test to begin. Mrs. Green handed out the question papers, with the text facing down as usual. After she handed them all out, she asked her students to turn the page and begin. To everyone’s surprise, there were no questions, just a black dot in the center of the page. Mrs. Green, seeing the expression on everyone’s face, told them the following:
“I want you to write what you see there.”
The students, confused, got started on the task.
At the end of the class, Mrs. Green collected all the answer papers and started reading them aloud in front of all the students. Just as Mrs. Green had expected, with no exception, all of them described the black dot, trying to explain its position in the middle of the sheet, etc. Mrs. Green then picked out Linda’s paper and added,
“Linda, I like your idea. Would you please follow me to the office and talk about it ”
“Er... Yes, madam!” Linda was puzzled because she thought her idea was no better than anyone else’s. Like others, she also described the black dot only and ignored the white part of the paper.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.每段的开头语已为你写好。
【语篇概述】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了琳达是一名高中女生,期中考试不及格后,她感到很沮丧。她不像以前那样在课堂上积极回答老师的问题。相反,她开始低着头,很容易就心不在焉了。最终,在格林太太的教育下,琳达认识到了不应该只关注一次失败的经历。
Feeling nervous, Linda went into Mrs. Green’s office._____________
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Mrs. Green invited her to share her ideas. After that, Mrs. Green smiled, “Have you ever noticed the white part of the paper ” Linda shook her head confused because it never occurred to her. Mrs. Green continued, “The black dot is just like the failure in life, only a small part. If we focus only on it, we might easily overlook the happiness of life, the bigger part.” Suddenly, Linda understood it. With tears welling up her eyes, she expressed gratitude to Mrs. Green before leaving the office.
“Mrs. Green is right. I should focus more on the white part of the paper!” Linda got refreshed.______________________________________
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Only then did she realize that she had a lot of admirable teachers, beloved families and friendly classmates. The failure of the exams was just a small part. From then on, Linda became active in the class again. She made steady progress in study and eventually got the best grades in the final exams. After this experience, Linda deeply realised that sometimes life can be hard, but we should always be positive and look at the bright side.
类型二
亲情友情类
亲情友情类常见的文本核心是 “矛盾 / 误解—理解 / 守护—情感升华” 的关系演进线,解题需紧扣 “情感细节” 与 “关系变化” 双核心,具体步骤如下:
2025·新课标Ⅰ卷
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
段首句:Paragraph 1:I realized it was me who was at fault.
Paragraph 2:With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
【技法运用】
1.试题解读
本材料围绕 “我” 与哥哥因狗 Toby 产生的矛盾展开:“我” 为保障家庭聚会秩序,要求哥哥看管 Toby 并最终导致哥哥提前离开,此后两个月双方无有效沟通。核心冲突在于 “我” 的疏忽(未体谅哥哥失去妻子、依赖 Toby 的处境)与哥哥的委屈(珍视 Toby 却未被理解),续写需围绕 “我” 的醒悟与主动和解,凸显亲情的温暖与包容这一主题。段首句 “我意识到是自己的错” 和 “带着妻子做的饼干,我来到哥哥家门口” 分别标志 “内心转变” 与 “行动实践”,为情节推进指明方向。
2.要素提炼、定位情感起点
人物:“我”(从自我中心到体谅他人)、哥哥(孤独脆弱,依赖 Toby)、Toby(哥哥的精神寄托,矛盾导火索)、妻子(理性提醒者,推动和解)。
情感矛盾:“我” 对聚会秩序的重视 vs 哥哥对 Toby 的珍视;“我” 的拖延沟通 vs 哥哥的持续委屈。
主题:亲情需要换位思考与主动付出,理解是化解矛盾的关键。
情感起点:“我” 的愧疚(意识到自己忽略哥哥的艰难处境),哥哥的孤独与怨怼(失去妻子后,唯一陪伴他的 Toby 未被尊重),为后续和解奠定情感基调。
3.脉络梳理、绘制图谱
关系动态:和谐 → 冲突(驱逐托比 / 哥哥) → 冷战僵局 → “我”的醒悟 → 主动和解 → 关系修复
冲突根源: “我”在处理托比问题时,只考虑了聚会的便利,却忽略了哥哥正在经历丧妻之痛,托比是他最重要的情感寄托。
4.段首解码(精准把握情节方向)
第一段首句 “I realized it was me who was at fault”:
解码关键:聚焦 “我” 的内心反思,需补充 “醒悟的具体内容” 与 “和解的初步计划”,承接前文 “换位思考哥哥处境” 的铺垫。
情节设计:先细化愧疚心理(如 “想到哥哥失去妻子后,Toby 是他唯一的慰藉,我却只想着自己的聚会,羞愧感涌上心头”),再写与妻子的沟通(妻子支持 “我” 主动道歉,并提议带饼干,体现家庭支持),最后明确行动目标(“我必须亲自去向哥哥道歉,修复我们的关系”),为第二段的拜访做铺垫。
第二段首句 “With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door”:
解码关键:聚焦 “和解的实践过程”,需包含 “见面场景”“坦诚沟通”“矛盾化解” 三个层次,突出亲情的温暖。
情节设计:先描写见面细节(哥哥开门时的惊讶,Toby 热情迎接,缓解紧张氛围),再通过对话还原矛盾(“我” 主动道歉,解释自己未体谅他的处境,哥哥倾诉委屈),最后以温馨场景收尾(共同喂 Toby 饼干,约定下次家庭聚会,Toby 也能参与),完成亲情修复。
5. 细节填充(增强情感真实感)
心理细节:第一段中 “我” 的愧疚(“每想到哥哥独自在家,只有 Toby 陪伴的场景,我就坐立难安”),第二段中哥哥的感动(“听到我的道歉,哥哥眼眶泛红,声音也有些哽咽”),让情感变化更细腻。
动作细节:“我” 递饼干时的 “双手紧握袋子,紧张得指尖发白”,哥哥接过饼干时 “轻轻拍了拍我的肩膀”,通过小动作传递人物情绪。
环境细节:哥哥家 “客厅茶几上放着他和妻子的合影,旁边摆着 Toby 的小窝”,暗示哥哥对妻子的思念与对 Toby 的珍视,呼应前文背景,让场景更真实。
【参考范文】
I realized it was me who was at fault. My focus on a perfect party had blinded me to my brother’s pain. He had just lost his life partner, and Toby was his sole comfort, yet I treated the dog as a mere inconvenience. A wave of shame washed over me. I couldn’t let pride ruin our bond any longer. I immediately told my wife about my decision to apologize, and she, with her usual kindness, quickly packed a box of his favorite homemade biscuits, a perfect peace offering.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. My heart pounded as I rang the bell. When he opened the door, his expression was a mix of surprise and lingering hurt. Before he could speak, I handed him the biscuits and said, “I’m truly sorry. I was selfish and didn’t consider what you’re going through. You are family, and so is Toby.” Seeing Toby wagging his tail beside him, I added, “Next gathering, he’s the guest of honor.” My brother’s stern expression finally softened. He took the biscuits, a slight smile touching his lips, and invited me in. The door to reconciliation was open, wider than ever before.
陷阱1:偏离情感核心。
陷阱2:道歉流于表面。
陷阱3:和解过于仓促。
陷阱4:忽略关键角色。
陷阱5:时态与人称混乱。
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On a Sunday afternoon, Kiana French was having fun fishing with her father and younger sister, not knowing the next minute, they would struggle not to sink in the freezing water. Their 12-foot boat was taking in water little by little, and the wind was picking up. Her father, Gary French, hurried to operate the engine, while Kiana,16, was in the middle with Cierrah, her sister, frightened but still able to keep calm.
Kiana asked Cierrah to take off one of her cowboy boots, with which she got some of the water out. Hard as she tried, that little effort would not help stop the boat sinking. Moments later, the unthinkable happened. The boat was full of water and then it flipped over. Kiana and her sister were dumped in the water. Their father, who had had a surgery six months ago, managed not to be thrown into the water but seemed to have great pain in the chest due to the sudden change.
Kiana quickly put on her life jacket and saw Cierrah’s and her father’s life jackets floating away. She reacted quickly to get them back and held her sister onto the boat. They were so far out in the middle of the lake that they could not see the shore clearly. What’s worse.it was getting harder to stay above the waves. Their father swam over and hugged his two girls. Cierrah crying silently. Kiana heard her beloved sister murmur, “I can’t feel my feet.”
Kiana knew the only thing to do was to get to shore herself and find help. She looked up at her father, exchanging a concerned glance, turned round and swam as hard as she could towards the shore.
Fighting against the strong currents and cold wind, she screamed for help at the top of her lungs every three minutes or so. A strong wind blew, and she looked back only to see her sister’s and father’s heads bobbing(浮动)in the water. She burst into tears, thinking her sister and dad were dead, because she was taking too long.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
【语篇概述】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了一个周日的下午,16岁的Kiana French和她的父亲和妹妹乘船在湖心钓鱼,不料船居然进水并翻了;考虑到父亲6个月前做过手术,妹妹还小,Kiana决定自己游回岸边去寻求帮助;在她以为妹妹和父亲都被淹死了而绝望的时候,她发现了一艘来船,对方救了他们一家三口,三人被送往医院,是Kiana对家人的爱,使一家人得以生还。
With desperate tears, she suddenly spotted a boat with a figure walking on it.___________________________________________________
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She waved and cried for help with all her strength. It seemed like a century later when she heard someone yelling back to her. As the boat was approaching, Kiana pointed to her father and sister and someone screamed, “They are in the water! Help!” She was soon picked up and taken towards where her father and sister were. Fortunately, they didn’t drown but her father seemed to be giving out, with one hand holding tight to the boat, the other holding Cierrah.
Once rescued, they were rushed to shore, where a concerned group waited for their arrival. __________________________________________
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They gave clothes and blankets to the three poor people, and then the ambulance arrived. Kiana, her sister and her father were checked on the spot and finally sent to the nearest hospital. Later, when asked what gave her the strength and perseverance to continue both in the cold water and in great fear, Kiana thought it had to do with family. “I just wanted to save my family, and I didn’t want anything bad to happen to them. So I couldn’t spare a second to worry or fear.” she said.
类型三
助人为乐类
助人为乐类文本的核心是 “发现困境—主动帮助—克服阻碍—获得反馈—升华善意” 的完整链条,解题需聚焦 “行动细节” 与 “情感共鸣”,具体步骤如下:
原文核心要素
人物:“我”(高中生李华,周末在图书馆看书)、张奶奶(70 多岁的老人,第一次独自来图书馆找孙子,迷路且手机没电)
困境:张奶奶记不清孙子的具体位置,只知道孙子在图书馆三楼看书,由于手机没电无法联系,在一楼大厅焦急徘徊
触发点:“我” 看到张奶奶反复看手机黑屏,额头冒汗,主动上前询问
段首句:
Paragraph 1: I offered to help Grandma Zhang look for her grandson.
Paragraph 2: When I found Grandma Zhang’s grandson, he was busy reading a book.
【技法运用】
1.要素提炼与脉络梳理:精准抓住 “张奶奶迷路”(困境)、“图书馆三楼”(线索)、“手机没电”(阻碍),情感线从 “张奶奶焦急 / 李华同情”→“张奶奶信任 / 李华耐心”→“张奶奶感激 / 李华温暖”,符合 “善意传递链” 逻辑。
2.段首解码与情节设计:第一段承接 “主动帮助”,通过 “陪张奶奶上楼→分工寻找(张奶奶等待,李华查房间)→发现 Xiaoming” 的情节,体现 “克服阻碍(多间阅览室)”;第二段衔接 “找到孙子”,以 “Xiaoming 惊喜拥抱→张奶奶赠糖→李华感悟” 完成 “结果反馈与主题升华”。
3.细节填充:用 “grabbed my hand tightly”“palms warm and a little sweaty”(动作+触觉细节)、“夕阳透过图书馆窗户,洒在书架上”(环境细节)、“Grandma, you wait here by the window. I’ll go check each room quickly”(语言细节),让帮助过程更真实可感,避免空泛叙述。
4.主题升华:结尾以 “helping others isn’t about doing big things... spending a little time can make someone’s day brighter” 的感悟句,紧扣 “微小善意的力量” 内核,且呼应 “赠糖” 的细节,不脱离文本,避免说教感。
【参考范文】
I offered to help Grandma Zhang look for her grandson. She grabbed my hand tightly, her palms warm and a little sweaty, and said, “Thank you, dear. His name is Xiaoming—he said he’d be on the third floor.” I smiled and said, “Let’s go up together. We can check the reading areas one by one.” As we walked up the stairs, Grandma Zhang told me she’d never been to this library before. “Xiaoming wanted me to bring him his favorite snacks,” she said, patting the cloth bag in her hand. When we got to the third floor, I noticed there were three reading rooms. I didn’t want Grandma Zhang to get more worried, so I said, “Grandma, you wait here by the window. I’ll go check each room quickly—if I see Xiaoming, I’ll wave to you.” She nodded, her eyes full of trust. With Grandma Zhangs description of her grandson in mind, I set out to look for him.
When I found Grandma Zhang’s grandson, he was busy reading a book. I tapped his shoulder gently, and he looked up in surprise. “Your grandma is waiting for you by the window,” I said. His eyes widened, and he quickly put down his book and followed me. When Xiaoming saw Grandma Zhang, he ran over and hugged her, “Grandma, I’m sorry I didn’t check my phone—I was so focused on the book!” Grandma Zhang touched his hair, her eyes wet, “It’s okay, dear. This little friend helped me find you.” She turned to me and took out a handful of candies from her bag, “Take these, please—they’re Xiaoming’s favorite, but I want you to have them.” I refused politely, but she insisted, saying, “It’s a thank-you for being so kind.” As I walked back to the reading room, I put a candy in my mouth—it was sweet, just like the feeling in my heart. I suddenly realized that helping others wasn’t about doing big things. Sometimes, just stopping to ask “Do you need help ” and spending a little time can make someone’s day brighter.
陷阱1:帮助过程空洞,缺乏 “克服阻碍” 的细节。
陷阱2:情感反馈单向,忽视困境主体的互动。
陷阱3:线索物闲置,脱离原文逻辑。
陷阱4:主题升华跑偏,脱离 “善意” 核心。
陷阱5:人物行为不符身份,细节失真。
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Another disappointing day was passing, and he was driving his beat-up old car home. He was out all day looking for a job. It was getting dark and light snow was coming down, so he almost didn’t see the old lady standing on the side of the road. It was clear that she needed help. He pulled up in front of her obviously brand new and expensive car and got out.
While nobody had stopped to help for the last hour and there was a smile on his face, she was worried when he approached her. He didn’t look safe. He looked poor and hungry.
He could see she was frightened, standing out there in the cold. He said, “I’m here to help you, ma’am. Why don’t you wait in your car to keep warm My name is Bryan.”
A tire was flat. Bryan fetched tools from his own car to change the tire. But he had to get dirty and his hands hurt. As he was tightening her car’s nuts, she rolled down the window, said thanks and asked him how much she owed him. Any amount would have been all right with her. She had already imagined all the awful things that could have happened without his help.
Bryan never thought twice about the money. He told her that if she really wanted to pay him back, the next time she saw someone who needed help, she could give that person the assistance they needed. He waited until she started her car and drove off. It had been a cold and depressing day, but he felt good as he headed for home.
Soon the lady saw a small restaurant. She went in to grab a bite to eat and warm up before she made the last leg of her trip home. The waitress came over with a sweet smile and brought a clean towel to wipe her wet hair. The lady noticed the waitress was nearly eight months pregnant(怀孕的). Although the waitress looked tired and walked painfully due to the pregnancy, she still served the lady.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.每段的开头语已为你写好。
【语篇概述】根据文章内容可知,布莱恩帮助了一位女士,但他不求回报,只希望女士将爱传递下去。女士走后去餐馆吃饭,根据第一段的提示内容“那位女士用完餐后,她付了一百美元”可以推测出本段是讲述女士用她的方式把爱传递给了孕妇服务员;根据第二段的提示内容“那天晚上,当女服务员下班回家时,她在想那笔钱和那位女士写的东西”可知,本段应是讲述服务员回家后告诉家人所发生的事,可以设想一下戏剧性的结局,比如女服务员的丈夫就是布莱恩。
After the lady finished her meal, she paid with a one-hundred-dollar bill. ___________________________________________________________
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The waitress quickly went to get change for her hundred-dollar bill, but the lady had driven off. She was gone by the time the waitress came back. The waitress wondered why the lady did so. Then she noticed something written on a napkin. There were tears in her eyes when she read what the lady wrote, “You don’t owe me anything. I have been there too. Somebody once helped me out the way I’m helping you. If you really want to pay me back, here is what you do: Do not let this chain of love end with you.” Under the napkin were four more hundred-dollar bills.
That night when the waitress got home from work, she was thinking about the money and what the lady had written. _____________________
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She wondered how the lady knew she and her husband were in need. With the baby to be born next month, life was going to be hard. She knew how worried her husband was, and now everything was going to be all right. Knowing what had happened, her husband, Bryan, shed tears of joy and gratitude.
类型四
生活趣事类
生活趣事类文本核心是“日常场景—意外发生—化解过程—欢乐氛围—生活感悟” 的完整链条,解题需聚焦 “幽默细节” 与 “情感共鸣”,具体步骤如下:
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
段首句:Paragraph 1:As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
Paragraph 2:The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
【技法运用】
1.要素提炼,定位趣味与情感起点
场景背景:母亲节当天,双胞胎 Jenna 和 Jeff 为妈妈准备 “床上早餐”(法式吐司+鸡肉粥),在厨房操作时接连出错。
核心人物:Jenna(相对细心,会调整火候)、Jeff(稍显慌张,触碰到热炉具)、爸爸(潜在的帮助者)、妈妈(惊喜的接收者)。
潜在冲突与趣味点:冲突——吐司烤焦、粥溢出熄火、Jeff 手被烫伤,早餐制作陷入混乱;趣味点——双胞胎笨拙却用心的操作,爸爸介入后的温馨化解,最终让 “失败的尝试” 变成温暖的惊喜。
情感基调:从 “兴奋期待” 到 “失望慌张”,再到 “被帮助后的安心”,最终升华为 “亲情的温暖”。
2.脉络梳理,绘制 “惊喜逻辑链” 图谱
情节发展线 原文已发生(计划惊喜→早起煮粥烤吐司→接连出错:吐司焦、粥溢出、Jeff 烫伤)→待推进环节(爸爸介入帮助→修复 “失败品” 或重新制作→完成早餐)→预期结果(给妈妈送早餐,妈妈感受惊喜与爱意)
情感变化线 初始(兴奋→顺利时的安心)→过程(出错后的慌张、失望→爸爸出现后的安心)→最终(送早餐时的期待→妈妈感动后的温暖、幸福)
3.段首解码,搭建情节支架
第一段(爸爸出现):聚焦 “化解混乱”——结合 “爸爸” 这一关键人物,设计爸爸的幽默反应与实际帮助(如不指责反而调侃,教双胞胎用简单方法补救),体现 “趣味化解”。
第二段(送早餐):侧重 “惊喜与情感反馈”——描写妈妈看到早餐时的反应(先笑后感动),加入细节互动(妈妈尝一口 “迷你吐司杯”,夸 “这是我吃过的最可爱的早餐”),结尾升华 “用心比完美更重要” 的主题,呼应母亲节 “爱意” 核心。
4.细节填充,具象 “混乱与温暖”
动作细节:刻画爸爸的帮助——“爸爸从橱柜里拿出新的吐司片,用指尖捏着吐司边轻轻折成小杯子,动作温柔又熟练”;妈妈的反应——“妈妈坐起身,手指轻轻碰了碰吐司杯的边缘,眼里慢慢泛起泪光”。
语言细节:用爸爸的调侃 “Failed toast and overflowing porridge That’s the sign of a heartfelt surprise!” 替代生硬的安慰;用妈妈的话 “I don’t need perfect breakfast—your messy but loving try is the best gift” 体现情感共鸣。
环境细节:描写送早餐时 “阳光透过窗帘缝隙照在托盘上,吐司杯里的蛋黄像小太阳,散发出淡淡的香味”,烘托温暖氛围。
5.主题升华,紧扣 “亲情与用心”
结尾通过场景呼应+感悟句收束,如 “看着妈妈小口吃着早餐,Jeff 小声说‘我们搞砸了好多次’,妈妈笑着摸了摸他的头:‘但你们的用心,比任何完美的早餐都珍贵’。那一刻,Jenna 和 Jeff 明白了,母亲节的惊喜,从来不是精致的食物,而是藏在笨拙尝试里的爱。”
【参考范文】
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. He leaned against the kitchen door, holding back a smile as he glanced at the burnt bread in the sink, the sticky porridge on the stove, and Jeff’s red hand wrapped in a wet towel. “Wow, you two are really going all out for Mother’s Day—this looks like a ‘chef adventure’!” he said. Jenna and Jeff lowered their heads, but Dad walked over and patted their shoulders. “Don’t worry. Let’s fix this together.” He first helped Jeff put some cooling cream on his hand, then took out fresh bread and eggs. “Instead of French toast, let’s make ‘egg cups’—they’re easier and cuter,” he said. The twins watched as Dad showed them how to press bread into muffin tins, crack eggs inside, and sprinkle a little cheese on top. Soon, the kitchen filled with a delicious smell, and the burnt mess was cleaned up.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Mom rubbed her eyes and sat up in surprise when she saw the tray—two golden egg cups, a small bowl of reheated porridge (with a cherry on top), and a drawing of the twins holding hands with her. “Did you make this ” she asked, her voice soft. Jenna nodded nervously,“We messed up the toast and porridge at first...and Jeff burned his hand.” Mom reached out to hold Jeff’s hand gently, then took a bite of the egg cup. Her eyes lit up and she said,“This is amazing! It’s my favorite Mother’s Day gift ever.” She pulled both twins into a hug, and the room was filled with laughter. As they ate together, Mom said, “The best part isn’t the food—it’s knowing you two tried so hard for me.” The twins smiled—they finally understood that love doesn’t need to be perfect; it just needs to be real.
陷阱1:忽视 “趣味化解”,情节过于沉重。
陷阱2:脱离原文线索,新增无关情节。
陷阱3:情感反馈单一,缺乏家人互动。
陷阱4:主题升华跑偏,聚焦 “成功与否”。
陷阱5:人物行为不符身份,细节失真。
It all began when my younger brother, Chris, and I went over to Uncle Howard’s for Thanksgiving. When we finally got to my uncle’s, Chris and I went outside to see if Uncle Howard needed help with anything. Since Chris was only nine, he got the easier job of cleaning up the watering cans. I was twelve, old enough to help load the wheelbarrow (手推车). But we still found time to ask Uncle Howard a lot of questions about turkeys. He must have been impressed, because when we were finished, he winked at my dad and handed me one turkey egg.
“You kids put this under a hatching hen,” he said, “and in twenty-five days, you’ll have a fine turkey!” Chris was so excited that he nearly dropped the egg on the way home. Dad put the egg under an old hen, and every day Chris and I would check to see if it had hatched yet. Twenty-five days seemed like forever. Finally, on the twenty-sixth day, Chris and I walked into the coop (鸡舍) after school to find the old hen scratching on the floor. Behind her was one ball of fluff (绒毛), falling over its feet and looking sort of confusion. When it got older, we could tell that it was a tom. We named it Timothy.
Timothy grew and grew, dashing towards the feed we threw out. He liked to wander in the woods and find tasty berriesand weed seeds. Mom kept telling us not to get too attached to Timothy, because we were going to have him for Thanksgiving. But we never paid too much attention to what that really meant.
Then, one day toward the end of October, Dad gave Chris and me instructions. “I want you to start giving him corn (玉米) along with his regular feed,” he said. “We want a nice, thick-fleshed bird for Thanksgiving.” After Dad turned and walked away, Chris’s face began to wrinkle, just as it does before he starts to cry.
注意:
1.续写词数为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
【语篇概述】本文以时间为线索展开,讲述了作者和弟弟Chris从叔叔那里得到了一枚火鸡蛋,他们把蛋带回家,让一只母鸡把小火鸡孵了出来。小火鸡Timothy非常可爱,作者和弟弟都很喜欢它。感恩节快要到来的时候,爸爸告诉他们要用Timothy做感恩节火鸡。作者和弟弟不希望这样,于是他们想办法把Timothy藏了起来,让它躲过了一劫。父母知道真相后非但没有责备他们,反而让他们继续照顾Timothy。
I comforted Chris, saying we could hide Timothy where people couldn’t find him. _______________________________________________
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It was not easy to sneak him out of his coop without catching the attention of our parents, though. For several days, we worked on an escape plan, and finally decided that we would build a small shack in the woods and keep Timothy there. One day, when Chris begged our parents to drive him to the mall, I took Timothy to the shack we had built and left enough water and food for him. When they came back, I told my parents, while sobbing, that a fox must have got Timothy because he was nowhere to be found.
With Timothy gone, Uncle Howard provided the turkey on Thanksgiving. __________________________________________________
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My brother and I both felt very proud of ourselves after Thanksgiving. Had we done nothing, Timothy would have spent the holiday in our bellies. But at the same time, a sense of guilt came over us. We decided to be honest with our parents. After listening to our story, to our great surprise, Dad wasn’t angry. Instead, he seemed to know that kids do crazy things as they grow up. Not only were we not punished, but also we were given the responsibility to take care of Timothy from that day on.
类型五
比赛收获类
比赛收获类的文本核心是“报名参赛(目标驱动)—备赛挑战(能力不足 / 心态波动)—赛场突破(应对突发 / 超越自我)—结果揭晓(获奖 / 未获奖)—深度收获(技能提升 / 心态成熟 / 认知转变)” 的完整链条,解题需聚焦 “备赛细节”“赛场冲突” 与 “价值感悟”,具体步骤如下:
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
17-year-old Lily had never joined any public speaking competitions before. When her English teacher encouraged her to sign up for the city’s “Youth Speech Contest” (theme: “My Hero”), she hesitated—she was shy, and the thought of standing on a big stage in front of hundreds of people made her hands sweat. However, her teacher patted her shoulder and said, “Courage isn’t the absence of fear, but acting despite it. You’ll gain more than you think.”
With her teacher’s encouragement, Lily decided to try. She spent every evening after school practicing her speech, which was about her grandma—a doctor who had worked on the frontline of fighting illnesses. But on the day of the contest, as she waited backstage, her heart raced. She kept repeating her lines, but suddenly, she forgot the next sentence.
段首句:
Paragraph 1: Just then, a girl with a bright smile walked up to her.
Paragraph 2: When the host announced Lily’s name, she took a deep breath and walked onto the stage.
【技法运用】
1. 要素提炼与脉络梳理
核心要素:
主角(Lily):从 “害羞胆怯” 到 “勇敢自信” 的成长,收获勇气与友谊;
关键人物(微笑女孩):比赛中的温暖支持者,推动 Lily 克服紧张;
触发事件(忘词 + 女孩鼓励):成长转折点,让 Lily 从 “慌乱” 转向 “坚定”;
主题(比赛收获):比赛的意义不仅在于输赢,更在于突破自我、收获温暖与成长。
脉络梳理:
矛盾(Lily 的胆怯 vs 比赛的挑战)→ 危机(赛前忘词)→ 转机(女孩鼓励)→ 行动(勇敢登台,完成演讲)→ 收获(突破自我,赢得认可与友谊)。
2. 段首解码与情节设计
(1)Paragraph 1 段首解码:“Just then, a girl with a bright smile walked up to her”
设计思路:聚焦 “危机中的温暖支持”,为 Lily 的勇敢突破埋下伏笔,体现 “收获友谊” 的主题。
情节细节:
① 女孩的主动关怀:看出 Lily 的紧张,分享 “自己也曾忘词,深呼吸能缓解” 的经验(如 “The girl noticed Lily’s shaky hands and said, ‘I forgot my lines last year too—try taking three slow breaths; it works!’”);
② 女孩的暖心举动:递上一瓶温水,轻声重复 Lily 演讲的关键句(“She even whispered the first line of Lily’s next paragraph, helping her recall the rest”);
③ Lily 的心理变化:从 “慌乱焦虑” 到 “逐渐平静”,内心生出 “不能放弃” 的决心(“Her kindness made Lily realize—she wasn’t here just to win, but to challenge herself”)。
(2)Paragraph 2 段首解码:“When the host announced Lily’s name, she took a deep breath and walked onto the stage”
设计思路:聚焦 “自我突破的实践”,通过演讲过程与结果,呈现 Lily 的成长与收获,强化主题。
情节细节:
① 演讲中的小细节:看到台下女孩与老师的微笑,紧张感消散,自然融入情感(“When Lily looked at the girl and her teacher, who were smiling at her, her voice stopped shaking—she talked about grandma’s stories like she was chatting with friends”);
② 比赛结果:虽未获一等奖,但赢得 “最具感染力奖”,台下掌声热烈(“She didn’t get first place, but the ‘Most Inspiring Speaker’ award felt even more precious”);
③ 赛后收获:这次比赛不仅让Lily收获了奖励,更收获了做自己的勇气(this contest didn’t just give her a prize—it gave her the courage to be herself),点明 “比赛收获远超奖项” 的主题。
3. 细节填充
(1)心理细节:Paragraph 1 中 Lily“指尖冰凉,反复攥紧衣角” 的紧张,到 “接过温水时,指尖传来的暖意让心跳慢了下来” 的平静;Paragraph 2 中 “看到熟悉的微笑,喉咙里的紧张感像被风吹走” 的放松,让情感变化更细腻。
(2)动作细节:女孩 “轻轻拍了拍 Lily 的胳膊”“用手指在手心写‘加油’”,Lily 登台后 “双手自然垂在身侧,不再紧紧握拳”,通过小动作传递温暖与自信。
(3)环境细节:后台 “嘈杂的人声中,女孩的声音像一阵清风”,舞台 “聚光灯下,台下观众的脸庞模糊却充满期待”,用环境烘托情绪,让场景更真实。
4. 主题升华(紧扣 “比赛收获”)
(1)浅层收获:完成演讲,获得奖项,收获新朋友;
(2)深层收获:突破自我胆怯,理解 “勇气是带着恐惧前行” 的含义,明白 “比赛的价值在于过程中的成长,而非单纯的输赢”;
(3)升华方式:通过 Lily 的内心独白或老师的评价,直接点出主题,让 “比赛收获” 更有深度。
【参考范文】
Just then, a girl with a bright smile walked up to her. “You look nervous—are you in the speech contest too ” she asked, her voice soft. Lily nodded, her fingers cold as she twisted the corner of her dress. “I forgot my lines,” she whispered, eyes downcast. The girl sat next to her and handed her a bottle of warm water. “I get it—I froze on stage last year!” she laughed. “Try this: take three slow breaths, and think about why you’re here. For me, it’s my mom, who always tells me to be brave.” She then leaned in and whispered the first line of Lily’s next paragraph. As Lily repeated it, the blurry words in her mind suddenly became clear. “Thank you,” Lily said, feeling the warmth from the water spread to her chest.
When the host announced Lily’s name, she took a deep breath and walked onto the stage. The bright lights made her blink, but she quickly spotted the girl and her teacher in the crowd—both were grinning and giving her thumbs-up. Lily took the microphone, and instead of rushing into her lines, she paused and smiled. “Today, I want to talk about my grandma, a doctor who fought illnesses to protect others,” she said, her voice steady. She told stories of grandma staying up late to help patients, and how grandma once said “kindness and courage go hand in hand.” When she finished, the audience cheered loudly. Later, she got the “Most Inspiring Speaker” award. The girl ran over to hug her,“You were amazing!” As Lily looked at her award and the girl’s smile, she thought that this contest didn’t just give her a prize—it gave her the courage to be herself.
陷阱1:偏离 “比赛收获” 主题。
陷阱2:情节逻辑不连贯。
陷阱3:主题升华生硬。
(2024·广东广州部分中学高三联考)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Outside the Box
The Harvestfest contest was falling on Friday and everyone in school was talking about it. All the students would show up in their self-made costumes and a winner would be chosen by the principal.
“Do you have your costume for the Harvestfest contest ” Alice asked. “I’m going as a chocolate bar. My mom and I have been working on it all week.”
“Yeah, I have a costume,” said Jordan Eastman, popping up the two front wheels of his wheelchair as he waited for his dad to pick him up. “But it’s boring.”
“Why What is it ” Alice asked.
“MaxMag the superhero, but Danny, Tom and Izzy are all going as MaxMag too.” Jordan shook his head. “That’s too many to stand a chance at winning the contest.” He waved to his dad, who had just pulled up in front of the school.
Jordan rolled his wheelchair toward his dad, and Alice walked with him to the minivan.
“Maybe you should go as something else.”
“The contest is Friday night.” Jordan sighed. “It’s too late to change costumes.”
“Jordan, you have to think outside the box. Look around your house and see what you have. There’s hidden potential in everyday items.” She took a sip of her drink, and told Jordan that her chocolate-bar costume was made from old fabric her mom had lying around and recycled plastics.
On his way home, Jordan was quiet. He kept thinking about Alice’s words:Think outside the box. There’s hidden potential in everyday items. When he got home, he found his mom handling with some wooden pieces. She was putting a new desk together. On top of the desk was the huge empty cardboard box the pieces had come in. Mom smiled at Jordan, pointing at the desk, “What do you think ”
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【语篇概述】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了收获节比赛将在下周五举行,学校里的每个人都在谈论它。所有的学生都会穿着自制的服装出现,获胜者将由校长选出。Jordan在Alice的启发下,用纸板装饰了自己的轮椅。
Jordan’s eyes fell on the box and he smiled, “It’s perfect...with my wheelchair.” ____________________________________________________
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Realizing Mom was confused, he quickly added, “That’s a cool desk, Mom. But can I have the big box for the Harvestfest contest ” He then explained excitedly how to turn it into a mobile refrigerator. “Brilliant! You will definitely be the superhero of the party, serving people their favourite drinks,” Mom exclaimed with a broad smile. In the following days, his priority after school was designing and making the new costume, fixing it to his wheelchair and carefully crafting a door. Finally, he even prepared some soft drinks to surprise his friends.
Soon it was Friday night, and Jordan couldn’t wait to show his costume. _________________________________________________________________
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When he wheeled himself in as a mobile refrigerator, he heard admiring exclamations, guessing about who it would be. Jordan felt an increasing sense of pride and satisfaction. When he spotted a chocolate bar, he quickly moved towards it, stopped just several inches in front and quickly opened the door. “Jordan, it’s you!” Alice cried out. Jordan passed her favourite drink to her. “Thank you, Alice. That’s an idea outside the box.” That night, although he didn’t win the best costume award from the principal, Jordan felt like the real MaxMag: his body and soul were no longer confined to the wheelchair. And he came to realize, there is hidden potential in everyday items, and so it is with every individual.
类型六
人与自然类
人与自然类文本核心是 “接触自然(观察 / 救助 / 共生)—互动深化(陪伴 / 守护 / 适应)—情感共鸣(感动 / 敬畏 / 成长)—自然启示(生命意义 / 生态价值)” 的完整链条,解题需聚焦 “自然细节”“情感互动” 与 “价值升华”,具体步骤如下:
原文核心要素
人物:小学生 Tom、妹妹 Lucy、妈妈。
自然载体:一群迷路的小鸭子(鸭妈妈不见了,小鸭子在公园池塘边团团转,其中一只腿有点跛)。
互动背景:周末下午,Tom 和 Lucy 在公园玩耍,妈妈在不远处看书,天色渐暗,小鸭子还在原地鸣叫。
核心矛盾 / 联结点:矛盾——小鸭子迷路找不到妈妈,天色暗下来有安全隐患,Tom 想带它们回家,妈妈担心 “鸭妈妈会回来找孩子”;联结点——Tom 决定留在公园帮小鸭子找妈妈。
段首句:
Paragraph 1: Tom thought of a way to help the little ducks.
Paragraph 2: Just as Tom was about to give up, he heard a familiar quacking sound.
【技法运用】
1.要素提炼与脉络梳理:精准抓住 “迷路的小鸭子”(自然载体)、“Tom 用红围巾引导小鸭子找妈妈”(连接点)、“天色渐暗”(背景)、“妈妈从旁观到支持”(矛盾化解),情感线从 “Tom 的焦急”→“兄妹协作的专注”→“看到母子团聚的感动与成长”,符合 “自然联结链”。
2.段首解码与情节设计:第一段承接“Tom 想到帮助方法”,通过 “借红围巾→引导鸭子→妹妹撒面包→妈妈打手电筒” 的细节,体现 “克服阻碍(天色暗、小鸭子胆怯),建立深度联结”;第二段衔接 “听到熟悉的叫声”,以 “鸭妈妈出现→母子团聚→回家路上的感悟” 完成 “联结结果与启示”。
3.细节填充:用 “waved the scarf gently”“limped along”(动作细节)、“sun setting, painting the sky pink”“stars”(环境细节)、“Mom said, ‘They just needed a little help’”(语言细节)、“Tom’s hands got tired but slowed down”(情感细节),让人与自然的互动更真实可感,避免空泛叙述。
主题升华:结尾以 “Nature is like a big family—we need to look out for each other” 的感悟句,紧扣 “人与自然相互守护” 的主题,且呼应 “红围巾”“面包屑”“手电筒” 等原文线索,自然不生硬,同时传递了朴素的环保与生命尊重意识。
【参考范文】
Tom thought of a way to help the little ducks. He ran to his mom and said, “Mom, can we use your red scarf The ducks might follow a bright color!” Mom smiled and handed him the scarf. Tom tied it to a stick and waved it gently in front of the ducks. The injured little duck hesitated at first, but when the others waddled toward the scarf, it limped along too. Lucy followed behind, holding a bag of bread crumbs she’d saved from lunch, and scattered a few on the ground to encourage them. They walked slowly—Tom waved the scarf step by step, Lucy kept dropping crumbs, and the ducks quacked softly as they followed. The sun was setting, painting the sky pink, and Mom walked beside them, holding a flashlight to light the path. Tom’s hands got tired from holding the stick, but when he saw the crippled duck struggling to keep up, he slowed down even more.
Just as Tom was about to give up, he heard a familiar quacking sound. It was loud and urgent, coming from the other side of the pond. Tom waved the red scarf faster, and the little ducks suddenly perked up, quacking back. Soon, a brown duck flew over and landed in front of them—it was the mother duck! The little ducks rushed to her, and the mother duck nuzzled each of them, especially the injured one. Tom and Lucy stepped back, watching them huddle together. Mom put her arm around the kids, “See They just needed a little help to find their way.” On the walk home, Lucy said, “I hope the little duck gets better.” Tom nodded, “Next time we come, we can bring more bread—and check if they’re okay.” Looking up at the stars, Tom thought, “Helping the ducks wasn’t hard, but it made me feel like I did something important. Nature is like a big family—we need to look out for each other.”
陷阱1:互动细节空洞,缺乏 “真实联结”。
陷阱2:情感变化断层,忽视 “双向成长”。
陷阱3:脱离原文逻辑,新增 “奇幻情节”。
陷阱4:主题升华跑偏,脱离 “自然启示”。
陷阱5:人物行为不符逻辑,忽视 “自然规律”。
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A Midnight Rescue
It was not uncommon to carry out tasks at night as rescuers. Harry and David were informed of their task when it was nearly midnight. It was urgent so there was no time to hesitate. They headed into the forest.
The forest was black and silent. A little way into it they reached a fork in the earth path. Harry and David took the left path. They walked in silence, their eyes on the ground, watching out for the traps like big pits(坑)set by the illegal hunters. Every now and then a ray of moonlight through the branches above lit a spot of scarlet(猩红的)blood on the fallen leaves.
David saw that Harry looked very worried, asking, “Could Unicorn be hurt that badly ” Harry answered, “If we can’t find it as soon as possible, it doesn’t stand much chance to survive.” Of course, Unicorn was not the animal in fairy tales but the nickname of a 3-year-old elephant, the last wild elephant in this forest. The nickname was given by the biodiversity rescuers who were protecting every member in this forest. They knew Unicorn was obedient and not afraid of human beings and that sometimes put it in danger. “Without it, the forest was not complete. Those illegal hunters should be thrown into prison.” Harry thought, carrying his first aid kit(急救箱)on his back and walking forward with his flashlight.
It seemed that thick fog would come at any time, which would increase the danger. Harry hurried into the heart of the forest with David. They walked for nearly half an hour, deeper and deeper. There were blood splashes(血迹)on the roots of a tree, as though the poor creature had been struggling around in pain close by. “We must hurry up”, said Harry.
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【语篇概述】本文以时间为线索展开,讲述了两位生物多样性救援人员哈利和大卫在半夜接到任务前去搜寻并营救森林里唯一的一头野生大象的故事。
However, it was really not easy for them to find it.________________
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That’s because thick fog came, covering almost everything. They had to bend down to search for clues like blood splashes or footprints, which made them walk more slowly, their ears sharper than usual. Suddenly, the rescuers heard painful roars and in front of them lay the young elephant. “Look! Unicorn!” Harry rushed forward, crying excitedly. It looked exhausted because a wound on its left front leg was bleeding badly.
Without delay, Harry knelt down to do first aid on its wound with David holding the flashlight. ______________________________________
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Fortunately, everything needed was available in the first aid kit. Calmly and skillfully, Harry began treating Unicorn immediately, and it seemed more obedient than before. As an experienced rescuer, it didn’t take much time for Harry to stop the bleeding. And after a while, Unicorn was able to stand up and walk away. It was rescued! Waving goodbye to it, Harry and David felt relieved. At this moment, the whole forest woke up—the moonlight fading while the winds sang a welcome to the dawn.
类型七
误会冲突类
误会冲突类文本的核心是“信息偏差引发误会—矛盾激化 / 情感疏离—关键线索浮现—真相澄清—关系修复与情感升华” 的完整链条,解题需紧扣 “细节铺垫”“情感转折” 与 “逻辑闭环”,具体步骤如下:
原文核心要素
人物:高中生 Mia(成绩中等,渴望提升英语)、同桌 Alex(英语学霸,平时沉默寡言,最近常躲着 Mia 看笔记)
误会触发:Mia 发现 Alex 每次英语课后都会把笔记本藏进书包,一次偶然看到笔记本上写着 “Mia 易错点”,却没看清下文,误以为 Alex 在偷偷记录自己的错误嘲笑,从此不再主动问 Alex 题目。
潜在线索:Alex 曾问过 Mia 的英语错题本,最近放学后常留在教室,书包里有本崭新的英语语法书。
段首句:
Paragraph 1: One afternoon, Mia forgot her English textbook in the classroom and had to go back for it.
Paragraph 2: When Alex turned around and saw Mia, he froze for a second, then quickly closed the notebook.
【技法运用】
1.要素提炼与脉络梳理:精准抓住 “Mia 误以为 Alex 嘲笑自己”(误会核心)、“笔记本上的‘Mia 易错点’”(触发事件)、“个性化笔记与语法书”(潜在线索),情感线从 “Mia 的愤怒疏离”→“看到笔记后的疑惑动摇”→“真相后的愧疚温暖”,符合 “误会化解链”。
2.段首解码与情节设计:第一段承接 “Mia 回教室拿课本”,通过 “看到 Alex 写笔记→偷听自语→偷看笔记发现真相” 的情节,完成 “线索浮现与误会动摇”;第二段衔接 “Alex 发现 Mia”,以 “Mia 道歉→Alex 解释→赠送礼物→共同学习” 完成 “真相澄清与关系修复”,严格遵循 “化解三阶” 设计。
3.细节填充:用 “heart sank”“eyes widened”(心理细节)、“pen scratching paper”“sun setting”(环境细节)、“stammered, his ears turning red”(动作神态细节)、“I noticed you’ve been struggling...”(语言细节),让误会的产生与化解更真实可感,避免空泛叙述。
4.主题升华:结尾以 “sometimes, what we see is just a part of the truth—and jumping to conclusions can make us miss the kindness around us” 的感悟句,紧扣 “沟通与避免主观臆断” 的核心,且呼应 “笔记本”“语法书” 等原文线索,自然不生硬。
【参考范文】
One afternoon, Mia forgot her English textbook in the classroom and had to go back for it. The sun was setting, and the classroom was quiet except for the sound of a pen scratching paper. As she walked toward her desk, she saw Alex sitting in her seat, bent over a notebook—his “secret” notebook. Her heart sank: he was still writing about her mistakes. She was about to leave quietly when she heard Alex mutter to himself, “Let me add this grammar point—Mia got confused about it last week.” Curiosity got the better of her, so she peeked over his shoulder. To her surprise, the notebook was filled with clear notes, “Mia’s weak area: past perfect tense” followed by examples, and “Useful tips for Mia: how to remember vocabulary”. There was even a sticky note with “Ask Mia if she needs help tomorrow” written on it. Mia’s eyes widened—she had been so wrong about Alex.
When Alex turned around and saw Mia, he froze for a second, then quickly closed the notebook. “I...I was just...” he stammered, his ears turning red. Mia walked over and sat down beside him, her voice soft,“Alex, I’m so sorry. I thought you were laughing at my mistakes, but you’ve been...helping me.” Alex scratched his head and opened the notebook again, “I noticed you’ve been struggling with English, so I wanted to make a personalized note for you. I was going to give it to you after the test.” He then pulled out the new grammar book from his bag, “This is for you too—it has all the points you find hard.” Mia took the book and the notebook, her eyes wet. “Thank you,” she said. From that day on, they studied English together every afternoon. Mia learned that sometimes, what we see is just a part of the truth—and jumping to conclusions can make us miss the kindness around us.
陷阱1:误会化解空洞,缺乏 “关键线索”。
陷阱2:情感转折突兀,忽视 “心理过渡”。
陷阱3:脱离原文线索,新增 “无关情节”。
陷阱4:主题升华跑偏,脱离 “误会本质”。
陷阱5:人物行为不符逻辑,细节失真。
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was one of those sunny mornings when merely breathing seemed to be an event worth celebrating. I was in a particularly good mood as my mother had just given me RM400(马来西亚币)for my daily expenses during the week that she would be away with my father in China to visit her sick grandaunt. I was wondering if I survived on bread and butter the whole week, I would have RM300 to buy the latest computer games! It was certainly a great way to begin the day.
As I neared the classroom,I heard a loud noise coming from it and quickly rushed in. My classmates were gathered around Tommy’s table as he searched through some personal items. Tommy had always been a popular boy in class. Not only was he bright and well-mannered, but he also came from a wealthy family that provided him with all he could ask for.
My classmates told me that Tommy had lost the money that he had brought as a donation to the welfare home that we were supposed to visit that afternoon. Understanding the situation, I suggested that we organize a search around the classroom and inform the class teacher as soon as possible. In no time, Miss Soh rushed to the classroom. She decided to run a search through everyone’s bag. We quickly stood by our tables and emptied the contents of our bags onto the table. When it came to my turn, I took out all my possessions. As Miss Soh took out the RM400 from my wallet, the class fell into a shock.
Up till then, I had no idea that the amount lost was exactly RM400. Everyone stared at me in horror. Miss Soh was pleased that her efforts had borne fruit. In a loud voice, she demanded to know where the money had come from. I told her the truth, but she appeared not to have heard anything that I had said. She claimed loudly that I was the thief, because my family was poor and could not possibly afford to give me RM400.
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2.请按如下格式作答。
【语篇概述】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者的父母外出远行,给作者留下了RM400当生活费,但是同学Tommy丢了钱,恰好是RM400,于是Soh认为是作者拿了Tommy的钱的故事。
Her cruel words cut me deeply.________________________________
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Never before in my life had I been so overwhelmed with such grievance and helplessness that I stood there motionless. All my classmates were shaking their heads at me, totally convinced of the teacher’s claims.Driven by a strong inner voice protesting my innocence, I made the last attempt, declaring firmly, “I am not the thief!” Unsurprisingly, it didn’t work. Feeling dizzy on the spot, I grabbed my bag, dashed out of the classroom and headed home with tears in my eyes. The entire week was spent in a state of confusion, I kept to myself a lot, choosing not to talk to anyone.
A week later, when taking Miss Soh’s class, Tommy suddenly found the neatly folded RM400 slip out of his notebook.__________________________
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Seeing the money, he froze in puzzlement. He picked it up immediately, lost in thought. After a while, Tommy put up his hand, signaling to say something urgent. Miss Soh stepped off the platform and came up to Tommy. “What’s the matter, Tommy ” she asked with concern. “Miss Soh, here is my RM400,” he murmured. On hearing that, all my classmates were shocked, breaking into whispers. I, who had been wronged by the teacher, sat still in the chair, anticipating something. Then both Miss Soh and Tommy approached me to say “SORRY”. It was their sincere apology and Miss Soh’s tender embrace that erased the shadow enveloping me all those days.
类型八
励志梦想类
励志梦想类文本核心是 “确立梦想—遭遇现实冲击(能力短板 / 外界否定 / 资源匮乏)—主动坚守(积累 / 调整 / 突破)—梦想落地(阶段性实现 / 方向明晰)—感悟梦想意义” 的完整链条,解题需聚焦 “梦想细节”“行动轨迹” 与 “精神升华”,具体步骤如下:
原文核心要素
人物:“我”(初中生陈明,热爱足球,梦想加入市青少年足球队)、爸爸(曾是足球运动员,因伤退役,对陈明的梦想既支持又担忧)。
核心梦想:通过市青少年足球队选拔,未来成为职业足球运动员。
现实阻碍:陈明在一次训练中拉伤膝盖,医生建议暂停训练一个月,而选拔仅剩两周;爸爸担心他再次受伤,劝他 “梦想可以换条路”。
支撑力量:爸爸珍藏的旧足球(上面有退役队友的签名)、爸爸曾教的 “控球技巧”、陈明的训练日记(记录每次训练的进步)。
段首句:
Paragraph 1: I stared at the o