(共34张PPT)
——写一篇科幻短篇故事
学语言 学结构
1.比喻描写
[教材原句] Night came as if a lamp was being turned out, and in another moment came the day.
[分析] 用“灯被熄灭”比喻黑夜降临,形象生动。学生写作时可使用比喻句,增强语言表现力与形象化表达,如“Her smile faded like a candle blown out.” 1.本文采用线性叙事,分为三部分:
(1)开端(时间机器启动):主人公推动控制杆,实验室看似未变,但时钟显示时间跳跃,暗示旅行成功。
学语言 学结构
2.动作链描写
[教材原句] I drew a breath, gripped the lever and pushed it forwards.
[分析] 连续动词(drew—gripped—pushed)紧凑,传递紧张感。读后续写中可用类似结构,如“Boys rushed to the lake excitedly,took off their clothes and jumped into the water.” (2)发展(时间旅行体验):通过感官描写(昼夜飞逝、草木速生速朽)和比喻(如“蜿蜒疾驰”),展现高速穿越时空的奇幻与不适。
学语言 学结构
3.对比突出变化
[教材原句] A moment before, it was a minute or so past ten;now it was nearly half past three!
[分析] 时间对比制造反差。应用文中可仿写:“The classroom was chaotic a second ago;now it fell into complete silence.”
(3)高潮与结局:冒险停止时间机器导致侧翻,主人公狼狈抵达未来,以幽默自嘲收尾。全文通过第一人称视角和科学逻辑,将科幻想象与真实感结合。
学语言 学结构
4.拟人修辞
[教材原句] The sun and moon looked as if they were being thrown across the sky.
[分析] 赋予天体“被抛掷”的拟人动作。续写中可写:“The wind was whispering in the trees, and birds in the trees were singing a beautiful song.”
5.夸张强化体验
[教材原句] I calculated that I was being pushed through time at hundreds of years a minute.
[分析] 夸张时间速度突出奇幻感。学生可模仿:“Her heart raced, beating a thousand times per second.” 2.文章按照时间顺序详细描述了作者时间旅行的经历。在表达中使用了then、now、but、and等过渡词,使文章表达条理清晰。
3.语篇在选材和叙述手法上深入浅出,注重激发读者的情感共鸣。
1.Future life is waiting for us to imagine and explore.
未来生活等待着我们去想象和探索。
2.How I wish to fly into the future world with the Time Machine!
我多么想通过时间机器飞到未来的世界!
3.Have you ever thought about the life with robots in the next 50 years
你有没有想过未来50年有机器人的生活?
4.Robots will play an important role in our future lives.
机器人将在我们未来的生活中扮演重要的角色。
5.Robots may be everything except humans in the future.
在未来,机器人可能成为除了人类之外的一切。
6.It is hard to predict what exactly the future will be like,but to express imaginary ideas in our minds is another thing.
很难预测未来究竟会是什么样子,但在我们的头脑中表达想象的想法是另一回事。
7.As we move into the future,technological advancements will continue to shape our daily lives.
随着我们走向未来,科技进步将继续塑造我们的日常生活。
8.The cities of the future will be greener, more sustainable, and more responsive to the needs of their residents.
未来的城市将更加绿色、更加可持续,并且对他们居民的需求更加反应迅速。
9.In the future,artificial intelligence will play an even larger role in our personal and professional lives.
在未来,人工智能将在我们的个人和职业生活中发挥更大的作用。
10.The future will not only bring new challenges but also new opportunities for growth and discovery.
未来不仅会带来新的挑战,也会带来新的成长和发现机会。
某英文报社正在举行英文幻想故事大赛,请你根据所给出的故事的开头(不计入总词数),续写一篇80词左右的幻想小故事参赛。
Once upon a time,a young man was walking through a wood when he saw a shining ring lying on the ground.He just stood,wondering and then the ring said,“Young man,a kind girl is trapped by a witch in the castle ahead.If you are brave enough to rescue her,you will gain happiness.Put on me and I will help you.”
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[审题谋篇]
第一部分:介绍故事的开始。
第二部分:讲述故事发展的过程。
第三部分:叙述故事的结局及意义。
[遣词造句]
1.年轻人毫不犹豫地戴上了那枚戒指。(hesitate,put on)
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2.他吃惊地发现自己消失了,其他人都看不见他。(surprisingly,discover,disappear,invisible)
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The young man didn't hesitate to put the ring on his finger.
Surprisingly,he discovered that he disappeared and was invisible to other people.
3.一靠近城堡,他就戴上了戒指,进入了城堡。(approach,castle,enter,as soon as)
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4.在戒指的帮助下,他在一个金盒中找到了魔棒,并成功地将其毁掉,解除了女巫对女孩施的魔咒。(with the help of,the magical stick,remove the magic spell,witch)
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As soon as he approached the castle,he put on the ring,and entered the castle.
With the help of the ring,he found the magical stick in a golden box,destroyed it successfully,and thus removed the magic spell put on the girl by the witch.
[句式升级]
5.用含有动词-ing形式作状语、形容词短语作状语的句子合并句1和句2。
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6.用“on+动词-ing形式”改写句3。
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7.用动词-ing形式作状语改写句4。
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The young man didn't hesitate to put the ring on his finger,surprisingly discovering that he disappeared,invisible to other people.
On approaching the castle,he put on the ring,and entered the castle.
With the help of the ring,he found the magical stick in a golden box,and destroyed it successfully,thus removing the magic spell put on the girl by the witch.
[连句成篇]
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[参考范文]
The young man didn't hesitate to put the ring on his finger,surprisingly discovering that he disappeared,invisible to other people.On approaching the castle,he put on the ring,and entered the castle.He learned that the girl couldn't move forever unless someone destroyed the witch's magical stick.With the help of the ring,he found the magical stick in a golden box,and destroyed it successfully,thus removing the magic spell put on the girl by the witch.
The young man,together with the girl,defeated the witch,and they lived a happy life together.
1.未来的家庭
单词 smart adj.聪明的,智能的;artificial adj.人工的,人造的;robot n.机器人;control v.& n.控制,掌控;Internet n.互联网;security n.安全,保安;sustainable adj.可持续的,持续的;power vt.为……提供能源;self-driving adj.自动驾驶的;telemedicine n.远程医疗
词块 scientific breakthrough科学突破;artificial intelligence (AI)人工智能;robot assistant机器人助手;voice control语音控制;Internet of Things (IoT)物联网;smart appliances智能家电;smart mirrors智能镜子;biometric scans生物识别
句型 ①The smart kitchen of the future will be able to automatically order groceries and prepare meals,making it easier for busy families to eat healthy.
未来的智能厨房将能够自动订购食品并准备饭菜,使忙碌的家庭更容易吃得健康。
② In future homes,artificial intelligence will play an important role in helping with everyday tasks,such as setting the temperature or controlling home security systems.
在未来的家中,人工智能将在帮助日常任务中发挥重要作用,例如调节温度或控制家庭安保系统。
③I safely forecast that our future life will be better and more convenient.
我肯定地预测,我们未来的生活将会更好、更方便。
2.未来的工作
单词 remote adj.远程的;telecommuting n.远程办公;robotics n.机器人技术;scientific adj.科学的;cybersecurity n.网络安全;workplace n.职场;digital adj.数码的;AI-powered adj.基于人工智能的;flexible adj.灵活的
词块 work from anywhere随时随地工作;achieve a better work-life balance在工作和生活之间获得更好的平衡;save money on transport costs节省交通方面的开支;real-time data analysis实时数据分析;a digital transformation数字化转型;digital skills development数字技能的发展;tech-enabled work environment科技支持的工作环境;help improve productivity帮助提高生产力
句型 ①Our office is filled with high-tech devices.
我们的办公室中充满了高科技设备。
②In the future,people will work from home using smart devices and the Internet.
未来,人们将通过智能设备和互联网在家工作。
③Robots will help with many tasks,like cleaning and organizing,in the office.
机器人将在办公室帮助完成许多任务,比如清洁和整理。
1.未来的家庭生活(想象→未来家庭智能化场景→生活变得更轻松、更安全且更绿色)
Imagine a home where everything is smart.①__________________ (人工智能) controls lights,temperature,and even ②__________________ (你的机器人助手).With voice control,you can ③________________________________________ (让智能家电播放音乐或煮咖啡).The home security system uses ④_____________ (生物识别) like fingerprints to keep you safe.Sustainable energy powers self-driving cars and ⑤_____ ______(智能镜子) that check your health.Through ⑥__________________ (物联网),doctors can ⑦______________________________________ (用远程医疗为你诊断治疗) at home.Life becomes easier,safer,and greener ⑧______________________________
(有了这些科学突破).
Artificial intelligence
your robot assistant
ask smart appliances to play music or make coffee
biometric scans
smart
mirrors
the Internet of Things
diagnose and treat you through telemedicine
with these scientific breakthroughs
2.未来工作的故事(工作的新形态→职场的数字化转型→工作场所创新)
In the future,people will be able to ①__________________ (随时随地工作),thanks to technology.With flexible work hours,employees will ②___________________
__________ (实现在工作和生活之间更好的平衡),spending more time with their families.They will also ③____________________________ (节省交通方面的开支),as commuting will no longer be necessary.
The workplace will undergo ④___________________ (数字化转型).With smart office solutions and ⑤____________________ (实时数据分析),workers will be able to make faster decisions.⑥________________________ (数字技能的发展) will be key for everyone to keep up with this change.
work from anywhere
achieve a better work-
life balance
save money on transport costs
a digital transformation
real-time data analysis
Digital skills development
Machine learning applications in the workplace will ⑦_____________________ (帮助提高生产力).Technology will drive workplace innovation,⑧__________________ _________________(创造一个科技支持的工作环境).As a result,work will become more efficient and flexible.
help improve productivity
creating a tech-enabled
work environment
Ⅰ.应用文写作(满分15分)
假定你是李华,某英文杂志正在举行主题为“Life in the future”的征文活动,请你写一篇短文参赛。内容主要包括未来的生活、工作及学习中的至少两方面。
注意:写作词数应为80个左右。
Life in the future
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[参考范文]
Life in the future
It would not be surprising if we find life more comfortable and more convenient in the future.We'll benefit a lot from the scientific advancements in a variety of aspects.
In our daily life,we will be looked after by robots,which are more like humans.The devices in the smart houses will give us warnings about the potential dangers.In addition,students will just stay at home and study in a virtual-reality school.When they put on their 3D helmets,they will feel as though they are actually in classrooms interacting with virtual teachers and classmates.
In the future,I have a strong desire to spend more time on creating,thinking and “being human”.
Ⅱ.读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Ollie Simmons was good at maths,but Ruby Riley wasn't.Well,Ruby didn't think she was.She sat next to Ollie and so she just copied him.This was the best way she had found to do maths and she didn't have to think at all.
One day the teacher said,“We will be having a maths test after lunch.” Ruby felt there were butterflies in the stomach.“Can I copy off you?” she whispered to Ollie.Ollie thought for a minute.“What will you give me?” he whispered back.Ruby showed Ollie a stone she had.It was round and smooth and the colour of the sea.“OK!” he said,“Give me the stone,and then you can copy my answers.” Ollie got full marks in the maths test and so did Ruby.Their names went on the top of the maths champion chart.
Every week there was a maths test and every week Ollie and Ruby got full marks together.Ollie had to share the top place with Ruby,but it was worth it.He had a torch,a key chain,a golf ball and a gift box!
One day,there was a maths test again.This time,Ruby picked a watch,thinking everything would go as usual—Ollie would let her copy and they would be on the top of the chart together again.But she was wrong.The headmaster came into Ruby's class.“I want to see Ollie Simmons,” she said.Ollie was gone for a long time.Then the door opened.It was the headmaster again.“Ruby Riley,” she said,“Come with me,please.” Ruby felt like a bird in a cage—there was no way to escape.The headmaster told Ruby that every lunchtime for five weeks she had to do maths.“You have to learn to think for yourself,” she said.“And Ollie has to learn a lesson,too.He's going to teach you.”
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
Hanging her head down,Ruby felt so regretful for getting Ollie into trouble._______
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Ollie proved to be a good teacher for Ruby.__________________________________
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[前文大意] 本文以人物为线索展开,鲁比·莱利不擅长数学,但她坐在擅长数学的奥利·西蒙斯旁边,所以她就抄袭他的答案。一次数学测试后,两人都得了满分,名字都上了数学冠军榜。随后的每周数学测试中,鲁比都用各种小礼物换取奥利让她抄写的机会,两人一直并列榜首。然而,一次数学测试中,校长进入教室并叫走了奥利。后来,鲁比也被叫去见校长,校长告诉她接下来的五周每个午餐时间都要学习数学,她需要学会自己思考。同时,奥利也将学到一个教训——他将成为鲁比的老师。
[续写思路]
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“Ruby低着头,很后悔给Ollie惹了麻烦。”可知,第一段可描写Ruby道歉以及决心弥补。
②由第二段首句内容“Ollie是Ruby的好老师。”可知,第二段可描写Ruby在Ollie的帮助下,数学取得进步,最后两人都得了满分。
2.续写线索:
Ruby后悔——Ruby羞愧——Ruby决心改变——Ollie帮助Ruby——两人获得满分——感悟
[参考范文]
Hanging her head down,Ruby felt so regretful for getting Ollie into trouble.She realized it was her fault that put them into such a shameful situation.“I am so sorry that I'd like to make a sincere apology to you,” Ruby said to Ollie with tears rolling down her cheeks.Hearing this,Ollie felt ashamed with his cheeks burning and said,“I should also take the responsibility for the matter.To make up for this fault,I will try my best to help you.” Ruby wiped her tears and was determined to spare no effort to learn maths with Ollie.
Ollie proved to be a good teacher for Ruby.He was always ready to help whenever Ruby met with difficulties.As time went by,with the assistance of Ollie,Ruby gradually made great progress in maths.Eventually,they both got full marks in the final examination once again.The headmaster praised them for the progress they had made.It was at the moment that they really felt proud of themselves.What an unforgettable and meaningful experience,which taught them a lesson of honesty and true friendship.