安徽铜陵市2026届高三下学期第一次质检英语写作训练导学案（含答案）（邮件写作+读后续写之师生情）
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安徽铜陵市2026届高三下学期第一次质检英语写作训练（邮件写作+读后续写之师生情）
一、邮件写作（介绍“发现校园之美”主题活动照片）
（一）题型核心考点
本题为应用文之分享类邮件，核心考查“照片描述+个人感想”的清晰表达，兼顾自然亲切的交际语气（对笔友）。评分重点：内容完整性（照片描述+个人感想）、行文逻辑、格式规范及语法多样性。
（二）写作任务
假定你是李华，上周五英语课上老师组织“发现校园之美”主题活动，要求用照片记录校园中的美好瞬间。请给你的笔友Tom写一封信，介绍你拍摄的照片，内容包括：
1. 描述照片；2. 你的感想。
注意：1. 写作词数应为80左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear Tom,
How’s everything going ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
（三）语法亮点预判（可借鉴句式）
非谓语动词：用于补充照片细节，如“Taken by me last Friday, the photo shows a beautiful scene in our campus.”
宾语从句：表达个人感想，如“I felt that this activity helped me discover the beauty around me and cherish my school life more.”
并列结构：描述照片内容，如“In the photo, some students are reading under the big tree, and some are watering the flowers in the garden.”
（四）高分句子默写
1. 我拍的照片展示了校园的花园，阳光下，几朵鲜艳的花正盛开着，几个同学在旁边轻声交谈。________________________________________________________________
2. 这张照片是上周五英语课活动中拍的，它记录了校园里最平凡也最温暖的瞬间。________________________________________________________________
3. 这次活动让我意识到，校园之美就藏在日常的小细节里，需要我们用心去发现。________________________________________________________________
4. 我很开心能和你分享这张照片，希望你也能感受到我们校园的美好。________________________________________________________________
（五）拓展表达练习（同义替换）
描述：describe = _______ = _______
美好：beautiful = _______ = _______
意识到：realize = _______ = _______
珍惜：cherish = _______ = _______
二、读后续写（师生情主题）
（一）主题分析与续写思路
核心主题：师生之间的关爱与感恩，音乐情怀的联结，从“担忧难过”到“温暖治愈”的情感递进。
伏笔呼应：前文Mr. Adams热爱音乐、深受学生喜爱、答应帮学生制定舞会播放列表，以及他的房子被森林大火烧毁，为续写“学生用音乐和行动帮助老师”铺垫。
续写思路：
Paragraph 1（The students immediately jumped into action.）：描写学生们的反应→讨论帮助方案（结合音乐特长）→分工合作（准备礼物、调整舞会计划、录制祝福视频）→为舞会做准备，传递对老师的关心。
Paragraph 2（Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes.）：描写Mr. Adams的神态与反应→学生解释原因（节省钱帮助他）→播放祝福视频、进行音乐表演→Mr. Adams感动回应，升华师生温情与音乐的力量。
（二）写作任务
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
At a local high school in San Francisco. Mr. Adams was well-loved by his pupils. He taught music, something he was passionate about ever since he was a child.
Not all students were fond of playing musical instruments and singing, but because of Mr. Adams’ fun and easy lessons, he instantly became every pupil’s favorite teacher. He would teach them how to play instruments and have jamming sessions (即兴演奏) with them where they performed the students’ favorite songs.
“You know, the key to making the kids love your lessons is to make it relatable to them,” he told his fellow teachers. “Once you catch their attention, it’ll be easier for them to absorb what you’re trying to teach them.”
Mr. Adams taught Grade 11 and 12 high school students. Thanks to his fun nature, his students respected him as a teacher but treated him like a friend. They went to him for advice and would hang out with him outside of class to play music and exchange stories.
One day, his students scheduled a day to spend time with him to make the playlist of their upcoming prom (正式舞会). It was such a formal dance that they would spend a lot buying dresses and suits. He was glad to help them and scheduled their session for Friday that week.
However, that Friday, Mr. Adams didn’t show up to class for the first time. “I wonder if he’s okay,” one student said, worried. “He’s never been absent before!”
The students waited inside the music room patiently. After a couple of minutes, though, the school director entered the room and said that Mr. Adams would not be returning any time soon.
“I know how much you all love Mr. Adams, so I’m disclosing this information. Last night, a forest fire burned down his house, and he was shocked and upset. He worked hard to put up that house, but he couldn’t save it. He was only able to retrieve (找回) a few items, but other than that, everything he owned is gone,” she revealed. The news saddened Mr. Adams’ students. “We have to help him!” the student council president said.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150个左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The students immediately jumped into action.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
（三）高分亮点预判
细节描写：通过动作（如“gather together to discuss”“record a video”）、神态（如“eyes filled with determination”“tears of joy”）凸显情感。
语法结构：定语从句、分词作伴随状语，提升句式复杂度。
情感连贯：从“担忧”到“行动”再到“感动”，呼应前文Mr. Adams对学生的付出，升华师生温情与音乐的治愈力量。
（四）高分句子默写
描写类（场景与动作）
1. 学生们立刻聚在一起讨论，每个人都积极建言献策，眼里满是决心，想要尽自己所能帮助Adams老师。________________________________________________________________
2. 他们决定省下买礼服的钱，为老师准备一份温暖的礼物，还录制了一段祝福视频，里面满是他们对老师的感谢与鼓励。________________________________________________________________
情感类（感悟与联结）
1. 那一刻，Adams老师明白，虽然他失去了房子，但他拥有学生们最真挚的关爱，这份温暖比任何物质都珍贵。________________________________________________________________
2. 音乐不仅是Adams老师教给学生的知识，更成为了联结师生情感的纽带，治愈了所有的伤痛与遗憾。________________________________________________________________
参考答案
一、邮件写作（介绍“发现校园之美”主题活动照片）
（一）题型核心考点
本题为应用文之分享类邮件，核心考查“照片描述+个人感想”的清晰表达，兼顾自然亲切的交际语气（对笔友）。评分重点：内容完整性（照片描述+个人感想）、行文逻辑、格式规范及语法多样性。
（二）高分范文（80词）
Dear Tom,
How’s everything going Last Friday, our English teacher organized an activity “Discover the Beauty of Campus”, asking us to record beautiful moments with photos. The photo I took shows our school garden, where several bright flowers are blooming in the sun and some classmates are talking softly beside them.
This activity made me realize that the beauty of campus lies in small daily details. It also let me cherish my school life more. I’m glad to share this photo with you.
Yours,
Li Hua
（三）语法亮点解析
非谓语动词（现在分词作伴随状语）：asking us to record beautiful moments with photos. （替代简单句，简洁紧凑，提升句式复杂度。）
定语从句：where several bright flowers are blooming in the sun and some classmates are talking softly beside them. （补充照片细节，使描述更生动具体。）
宾语从句：I realized that the beauty of campus lies in small daily details. （表达个人真实感想，语气自然，符合对笔友的交际场景。）
（四）高分句子默写
1. The photo I took shows our school garden, where several bright flowers are blooming in the sun and some classmates are talking softly beside them.
2. Taken during the English class activity last Friday, this photo records the most ordinary and warm moment in our campus.
3. This activity made me realize that the beauty of campus is hidden in the small daily details and needs us to discover with our hearts.
4. I’m very happy to share this photo with you and hope you can also feel the beauty of our campus.
（五）拓展表达练习
描述：describe = depict = illustrate
美好：beautiful = wonderful = fantastic
意识到：realize = recognize = be aware of
珍惜：cherish = treasure = value
二、读后续写（师生情主题）
（一）主题分析与续写思路
核心主题：师生之间的关爱与感恩，音乐情怀的联结，从“担忧难过”到“温暖治愈”的情感递进。
伏笔呼应：前文Mr. Adams热爱音乐、深受学生喜爱、答应帮学生制定舞会播放列表，以及他的房子被森林大火烧毁，为续写“学生用音乐和行动帮助老师”铺垫。
续写思路：
Paragraph 1（The students immediately jumped into action.）：描写学生们的反应→讨论帮助方案（结合音乐特长）→分工合作（准备礼物、调整舞会计划、录制祝福视频）→为舞会做准备，传递对老师的关心。
Paragraph 2（Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes.）：描写Mr. Adams的神态与反应→学生解释原因（节省钱帮助他）→播放祝福视频、进行音乐表演→Mr. Adams感动回应，升华师生温情与音乐的力量。
（二）高分范文（148词）
The students immediately jumped into action. They gathered together to discuss a plan, deciding to help Mr. Adams through their own way. They agreed to save the money for formal clothes and buy him daily necessities. Some students recorded a video, expressing their thanks and encouragement to him, while others revised the prom playlist, adding his favorite songs. Everyone worked hard to make the prom special and warm for their beloved teacher.
Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes. The student council president explained their intention, and he watched the warm video with tears in his eyes. Then, the students played the songs he taught them, and he joined in the jamming session happily. He said he was deeply moved by their kindness, and the prom became the most unforgettable memory for him. Their friendship and love cured his pain completely.
（三）高分亮点解析
细节描写：gathered together to discuss, recorded a video, played the songs 等动作描写，以及with tears in his eyes神态描写，让场景更真实，情感更真挚。
非谓语动词：deciding to help Mr. Adams through their own way, expressing their thanks and encouragement（现在分词作伴随状语），替代简单句，提升语法层次。
伏笔呼应：描写学生们播放Mr. Adams喜欢的歌曲、进行即兴演奏，呼应前文他热爱音乐、和学生一起即兴演奏的细节，情节连贯，凸显师生温情。
主题升华：以“ Their friendship and love cured his pain completely.”总结，凸显师生之间的关爱与音乐的治愈力量，符合积极价值观导向。
（四）高分句子默写
一、描写类（场景与动作）
1. The students immediately gathered together to discuss, and everyone put forward suggestions actively, with determination in their eyes, wanting to help Mr. Adams as much as they could.
2. They decided to save the money for formal clothes to prepare a warm gift for their teacher, and also recorded a blessing video full of their thanks and encouragement to him.
二、情感类（感悟与联结）
1. At that moment, Mr. Adams realized that although he had lost his house, he had the most sincere care from his students, and this warmth was more precious than any material thing.
2. Music was not only the knowledge Mr. Adams taught his students, but also became a bond connecting the teacher and students, healing all the pain and regrets.
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一、邮件写作（介绍“发现校园之美”主题活动照片）
（一）题型核心考点
本题为应用文之分享类邮件，核心考查“照片描述+个人感想”的清晰表达，兼顾自然亲切的交际语气（对笔友）。评分重点：内容完整性（照片描述+个人感想）、行文逻辑、格式规范及语法多样性。
（二）写作任务
假定你是李华，上周五英语课上老师组织“发现校园之美”主题活动，要求用照片记录校园中的美好瞬间。请给你的笔友Tom写一封信，介绍你拍摄的照片，内容包括：
1. 描述照片；2. 你的感想。
注意：1. 写作词数应为80左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear Tom,
How’s everything going ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
（三）语法亮点预判（可借鉴句式）
非谓语动词：用于补充照片细节，如“Taken by me last Friday, the photo shows a beautiful scene in our campus.”
宾语从句：表达个人感想，如“I felt that this activity helped me discover the beauty around me and cherish my school life more.”
并列结构：描述照片内容，如“In the photo, some students are reading under the big tree, and some are watering the flowers in the garden.”
（四）高分句子默写
1. 我拍的照片展示了校园的花园，阳光下，几朵鲜艳的花正盛开着，几个同学在旁边轻声交谈。________________________________________________________________
2. 这张照片是上周五英语课活动中拍的，它记录了校园里最平凡也最温暖的瞬间。________________________________________________________________
3. 这次活动让我意识到，校园之美就藏在日常的小细节里，需要我们用心去发现。________________________________________________________________
4. 我很开心能和你分享这张照片，希望你也能感受到我们校园的美好。________________________________________________________________
（五）拓展表达练习（同义替换）
描述：describe = _______ = _______
美好：beautiful = _______ = _______
意识到：realize = _______ = _______
珍惜：cherish = _______ = _______
二、读后续写（师生情主题）
（一）主题分析与续写思路
核心主题：师生之间的关爱与感恩，音乐情怀的联结，从“担忧难过”到“温暖治愈”的情感递进。
伏笔呼应：前文Mr. Adams热爱音乐、深受学生喜爱、答应帮学生制定舞会播放列表，以及他的房子被森林大火烧毁，为续写“学生用音乐和行动帮助老师”铺垫。
续写思路：
Paragraph 1（The students immediately jumped into action.）：描写学生们的反应→讨论帮助方案（结合音乐特长）→分工合作（准备礼物、调整舞会计划、录制祝福视频）→为舞会做准备，传递对老师的关心。
Paragraph 2（Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes.）：描写Mr. Adams的神态与反应→学生解释原因（节省钱帮助他）→播放祝福视频、进行音乐表演→Mr. Adams感动回应，升华师生温情与音乐的力量。
（二）写作任务
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
At a local high school in San Francisco. Mr. Adams was well-loved by his pupils. He taught music, something he was passionate about ever since he was a child.
Not all students were fond of playing musical instruments and singing, but because of Mr. Adams’ fun and easy lessons, he instantly became every pupil’s favorite teacher. He would teach them how to play instruments and have jamming sessions (即兴演奏) with them where they performed the students’ favorite songs.
“You know, the key to making the kids love your lessons is to make it relatable to them,” he told his fellow teachers. “Once you catch their attention, it’ll be easier for them to absorb what you’re trying to teach them.”
Mr. Adams taught Grade 11 and 12 high school students. Thanks to his fun nature, his students respected him as a teacher but treated him like a friend. They went to him for advice and would hang out with him outside of class to play music and exchange stories.
One day, his students scheduled a day to spend time with him to make the playlist of their upcoming prom (正式舞会). It was such a formal dance that they would spend a lot buying dresses and suits. He was glad to help them and scheduled their session for Friday that week.
However, that Friday, Mr. Adams didn’t show up to class for the first time. “I wonder if he’s okay,” one student said, worried. “He’s never been absent before!”
The students waited inside the music room patiently. After a couple of minutes, though, the school director entered the room and said that Mr. Adams would not be returning any time soon.
“I know how much you all love Mr. Adams, so I’m disclosing this information. Last night, a forest fire burned down his house, and he was shocked and upset. He worked hard to put up that house, but he couldn’t save it. He was only able to retrieve (找回) a few items, but other than that, everything he owned is gone,” she revealed. The news saddened Mr. Adams’ students. “We have to help him!” the student council president said.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150个左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The students immediately jumped into action.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
（三）高分亮点预判
细节描写：通过动作（如“gather together to discuss”“record a video”）、神态（如“eyes filled with determination”“tears of joy”）凸显情感。
语法结构：定语从句、分词作伴随状语，提升句式复杂度。
情感连贯：从“担忧”到“行动”再到“感动”，呼应前文Mr. Adams对学生的付出，升华师生温情与音乐的治愈力量。
（四）高分句子默写
描写类（场景与动作）
1. 学生们立刻聚在一起讨论，每个人都积极建言献策，眼里满是决心，想要尽自己所能帮助Adams老师。________________________________________________________________
2. 他们决定省下买礼服的钱，为老师准备一份温暖的礼物，还录制了一段祝福视频，里面满是他们对老师的感谢与鼓励。________________________________________________________________
情感类（感悟与联结）
1. 那一刻，Adams老师明白，虽然他失去了房子，但他拥有学生们最真挚的关爱，这份温暖比任何物质都珍贵。________________________________________________________________
2. 音乐不仅是Adams老师教给学生的知识，更成为了联结师生情感的纽带，治愈了所有的伤痛与遗憾。________________________________________________________________
参考答案
一、邮件写作（介绍“发现校园之美”主题活动照片）
（一）题型核心考点
本题为应用文之分享类邮件，核心考查“照片描述+个人感想”的清晰表达，兼顾自然亲切的交际语气（对笔友）。评分重点：内容完整性（照片描述+个人感想）、行文逻辑、格式规范及语法多样性。
（二）高分范文（80词）
Dear Tom,
How’s everything going Last Friday, our English teacher organized an activity “Discover the Beauty of Campus”, asking us to record beautiful moments with photos. The photo I took shows our school garden, where several bright flowers are blooming in the sun and some classmates are talking softly beside them.
This activity made me realize that the beauty of campus lies in small daily details. It also let me cherish my school life more. I’m glad to share this photo with you.
Yours,
Li Hua
（三）语法亮点解析
非谓语动词（现在分词作伴随状语）：asking us to record beautiful moments with photos. （替代简单句，简洁紧凑，提升句式复杂度。）
定语从句：where several bright flowers are blooming in the sun and some classmates are talking softly beside them. （补充照片细节，使描述更生动具体。）
宾语从句：I realized that the beauty of campus lies in small daily details. （表达个人真实感想，语气自然，符合对笔友的交际场景。）
（四）高分句子默写
1. The photo I took shows our school garden, where several bright flowers are blooming in the sun and some classmates are talking softly beside them.
2. Taken during the English class activity last Friday, this photo records the most ordinary and warm moment in our campus.
3. This activity made me realize that the beauty of campus is hidden in the small daily details and needs us to discover with our hearts.
4. I’m very happy to share this photo with you and hope you can also feel the beauty of our campus.
（五）拓展表达练习
描述：describe = depict = illustrate
美好：beautiful = wonderful = fantastic
意识到：realize = recognize = be aware of
珍惜：cherish = treasure = value
二、读后续写（师生情主题）
（一）主题分析与续写思路
核心主题：师生之间的关爱与感恩，音乐情怀的联结，从“担忧难过”到“温暖治愈”的情感递进。
伏笔呼应：前文Mr. Adams热爱音乐、深受学生喜爱、答应帮学生制定舞会播放列表，以及他的房子被森林大火烧毁，为续写“学生用音乐和行动帮助老师”铺垫。
续写思路：
Paragraph 1（The students immediately jumped into action.）：描写学生们的反应→讨论帮助方案（结合音乐特长）→分工合作（准备礼物、调整舞会计划、录制祝福视频）→为舞会做准备，传递对老师的关心。
Paragraph 2（Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes.）：描写Mr. Adams的神态与反应→学生解释原因（节省钱帮助他）→播放祝福视频、进行音乐表演→Mr. Adams感动回应，升华师生温情与音乐的力量。
（二）高分范文（148词）
The students immediately jumped into action. They gathered together to discuss a plan, deciding to help Mr. Adams through their own way. They agreed to save the money for formal clothes and buy him daily necessities. Some students recorded a video, expressing their thanks and encouragement to him, while others revised the prom playlist, adding his favorite songs. Everyone worked hard to make the prom special and warm for their beloved teacher.
Mr. Adams was amazed to arrive at the prom and find everyone in casual wear, not formal clothes. The student council president explained their intention, and he watched the warm video with tears in his eyes. Then, the students played the songs he taught them, and he joined in the jamming session happily. He said he was deeply moved by their kindness, and the prom became the most unforgettable memory for him. Their friendship and love cured his pain completely.
（三）高分亮点解析
细节描写：gathered together to discuss, recorded a video, played the songs 等动作描写，以及with tears in his eyes神态描写，让场景更真实，情感更真挚。
非谓语动词：deciding to help Mr. Adams through their own way, expressing their thanks and encouragement（现在分词作伴随状语），替代简单句，提升语法层次。
伏笔呼应：描写学生们播放Mr. Adams喜欢的歌曲、进行即兴演奏，呼应前文他热爱音乐、和学生一起即兴演奏的细节，情节连贯，凸显师生温情。
主题升华：以“ Their friendship and love cured his pain completely.”总结，凸显师生之间的关爱与音乐的治愈力量，符合积极价值观导向。
（四）高分句子默写
一、描写类（场景与动作）
1. The students immediately gathered together to discuss, and everyone put forward suggestions actively, with determination in their eyes, wanting to help Mr. Adams as much as they could.
2. They decided to save the money for formal clothes to prepare a warm gift for their teacher, and also recorded a blessing video full of their thanks and encouragement to him.
二、情感类（感悟与联结）
1. At that moment, Mr. Adams realized that although he had lost his house, he had the most sincere care from his students, and this warmth was more precious than any material thing.
2. Music was not only the knowledge Mr. Adams taught his students, but also became a bond connecting the teacher and students, healing all the pain and regrets.
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