2007广东新题型读写任务的解题思路[上学期]
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“ 读写任务” 的解题思路
第一: 把握阅读材料的结构、思路、观点与意图
阅读材料的设计与“写作内容”的设计应该是浑然一体的。假如给的是一个说明文的短文，它反映的现象必须引发学生的共鸣，让他就此现象进行思考，假如阅读材料讲的是一个故事，这个故事应该让学生感到似曾相识，好象就发生在你我身边或身上。而且这个故事肯定蕴含着一个道理，一个让你我认可的道理。比如： 有个故事讲的是一位自卑的学生如何因老师的一句表扬而树立自信，找到了奋斗目标。相反，故事还可以讲述一位原本聪明的学生如何因老师不恰当的批评而产生厌学的情绪，最终毁了自己。“写作材料”就是要让你作为亲身经历者、目击者或其他第三者来讲述过去，反思自己或他人的行为或心态。如果是一篇议论文，应该是观点明确，论证严密而有条理。
如果是说明性或叙述性阅读材料， 你要有一个“心理预期”或猜测， 即猜测阅读之后下面会让你写什么。这种心理准备很重要， 不要“为阅读而阅读”。
现以一则“读写任务”为例来说明如何把握说明性阅读材料的结构、思路、观点与意图。
阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
1) Almost every student has days when they don’t feel like going to school.
2) It is not unusual for some of them sometimes to pretend to be feeling ill and get their poor parents fooled, who may call the school, asking their kids to be allowed to stay at home for a day or two, but sometimes these students make plans to meet friends or go somewhere alone for the day.
3) Still some other students make a show of going to school as usual, or their parents think they do.
4) Then when they are alone on the way they go off to some other places by himself or with a friend.
5) Schools call this truancy (旷课,逃避).
6) Kids call it ‘wagging school’, ‘skiving off’(回避,躲开工作), and
all sorts of other names.
7) What do you call it where you live
8) No matter what you may call it, most students never do it and a lot of schools nowadays have very strict rules to stop truancy in order to keep kids safe and help them to make the most of their chance to learn at school.
可以看出阅读材料反映的是逃学这一现象,但是并没有明显的观点。
(1) 是说明厌学情绪的普遍性“almost every student”。
（2）---（4）是逃学现象的具体体现
（5）---（6）指出这一现象学校与学生各有其叫法，
（7）---（8）则是要你引起注意，同时表明校方的态度。
如果给的阅读材料是议论性短文，可以用2007年广东省高考英语试题改革方案中所给“所给的 “读写任务”为例做个说明：短文具有完整而缜密的论证过程：论点、论据、结论具备。其中（1）为论点， （2）-- （11）为论证部分， （12）-- （13） 为结论
第二： 概括阅读材料
如果给的阅读材料是一个故事，应该用最简练的语言来说明故事讲述了什么，不能拖泥带水，而且最好讲述该故事给你的启示或其中的一个道理。如：
This story tells how a teacher’s word saved a shy and unconfident child and helped him find himself and hold on to his dreams. It tells us that teachers’ words can make difference to a child’s life.
如果是说明性或描述性短文,你就必须用概括的文字来说明某种现象。如：
This article points out the common phenomenon --- playing truancy (逃学 ) --- among students. It also gives us a picture of the forms truancy takes. Finally, it tells the attitude on the part of the schools.
如果是议论文的阅读短文,则要尽可能客观简要地转述阅读材料的观点。还是以2007年广东省高考英语试题改革方案样题为例：
概括对方观点首先要转换视角，即以“第三人称”或“无人称”来概括。本材料的观点是（1）Let children learn to judge their own work. 如果换成第三人称就是The writer of this article thinks that children should learn to judge their own work/ correct their own mistakes. 或者你认为本材料的观点代表一些人的思想, 就可以说Some people think students’ mistakes should be corrected by themselves and it is wrong for the teachers to do it for them too often in school. It will make the children dependent on the teachers. 还可以从中立的角度或用 “无人称”的方式来说 The article gives the view that teachers should stop correcting students’ mistakes for them. Students are able to correct their own mistakes and teachers’ frequent correction will make children unable to judge their own work.
如果这一部分要求用30个左右的词来概括,上述概括就是点到为止的高度概括。如果是用60左右的词来概括,我们就必须对阅读材料的整个说理过程做出概括, 即概括其论点论证过程和结论。
下面试概括作者的说理过程：
阅读材料的观点是Let children learn to judge their own work.
可以概括为 Some people think that teachers should not correct students’ mistakes for them.
阅读材料的正面论据是 (2) A child learning to talk does not learn by being corrected all the time; if corrected too much, he will stop talking. (3) He notices a thousand times a day the difference between his language and others’ language. (4) Bit by bit, he makes the right changes to make his language like other people’s. (5) In the same way, children learn to do all the other things. (6)They learn to talk, run, climb, ride a bicycle by comparing their own behaviors with those of more skilled people, and slowly make the needed changes.
可以概括为Children learn by comparing his behaviors, including language, with those of more skilled people.
阅读材料的反面论据是(7) But in school teachers never give a child a chance to find out his mistakes for himself, even fewer chances for him to correct himself. (8)They do it all for him. (9) Teachers act as if the student would never notice a mistake if they did not point out it to him. (10) They act as if the student would never correct it unless he was made to. (11)Soon he becomes dependent on the teacher.
可以概括为Teachers’ frequent correct of students’ mistakes makes students unable to judge their own work.
阅读材料的结论为 (12) Let the student do it himself. (13) Let him work out, with the help of other children if he wants it, what this word means and what the answer is to that problem.
可以概括为So children should learn by correcting their own mistakes and helping each other instead of having their mistakes corrected by their teachers.
第一部分整理如下:
Some people think that teachers should not correct students’ mistakes for them.
(2) Children learn by comparing his behaviors, including language, with those of more skilled people.
(3) Teachers’ frequent correct of students’ mistakes makes students unable to judge their own work.
(4) So children should learn by correcting their own mistakes and helping each other instead of having their mistakes corrected by their teachers.
至此, 概括阅读材料的任务就算完成了。
第三： 在“写作内容”框架的引导下完成写作。
这一部分同学们应该有较大的自由空间。如果是就某一现象要你表态，理想的设计是先问这种现象是否在你的身边多身上发生过，当初为什么你要那样做，当初有何感想，现在反思有有何体会。比如说写作内容会问你/ 你的朋友是否有逃学的经历，简单叙述一下经历，说说当初的动机、事情的结果，谈谈现在的感受与态度。这样的结合经历讲问题应该不难，因为同学们每个人都有话可说。
试以“逃学”( playing truancy)为例, 说明如何在 “写作内容” 的引导下完成写作过程
引导一: “你有过逃学吗 ” 你可以说 I must say that sometimes I cut school. 注意: 这里不是提出观点,而是承认一种事实。
引导二：简单讲述一次逃学的经历。
Only last Friday, I missed two English classes on purpose and got home. As my parents are at their work places at noon, I enjoyed myself watching TV.
引导三: 当时的感受
It felt really cool to think that I was alone having a free time while the other poor children were learning the boring English.
引导四: 逃学的原因:
Why play truancy School work sometimes is really two much and you want to get it off your mind.
引导五: 有何担忧
Of course, I’m afraid when teachers and my parents find out, I will be in trouble.
引导六: 有何反思
Maybe I should kick off this habit soon.
这一部分整和为：I must admit that I do cut school once in a while. Only last Friend, I missed two English classes on purpose and went home without telling anyone. With my parents away， I enjoyed myself watching TV. It felt really cool having a free time alone while the other poor children were learning the boring English classes. Why play truancy School work sometimes is really two much and you want to get it off your mind. Besides，that English teacher of ours is really too hard on us and hardly any of us likes his class. Of course, when my teachers and my parents find out, I will be in trouble. I’m worried about my school work, too. Maybe I should kick off this habit soon.
此部分与前文整和后就是一篇完整的短文:
Why Cut School
This article points out a common phenomenon --- playing truancy --- among students. It also gives us a picture of the forms truancy takes. Finally, it tells the attitude on the part of the schools. ( 33 words)
I must admit that I do cut school once in a while. Only last Friday, I missed two English classes on purpose and went home without telling anyone. With my parents away， I enjoyed myself watching TV. It felt really cool having a free time alone while the other poor children were learning the boring English classes. Why play truancy School work sometimes is really two much and you want to get it off your mind. Besides，that English teacher of ours is really too hard on us and hardly any of us likes his class. Of course, when my teachers and my parents find out, I will be in trouble. I’m worried about my school work, too. Maybe I should kick off this habit soon. (121 words)
如果阅读材料是议论文, 你该如何应对呢
其一、如果你的观点与阅读材料的观点完全一致，你应该表态，如I can’t agree with the author more. 或者 I share this opinion 或者 This is just what I want to say 或者 I think the author is complete right in saying that 等等。
如果你不完全同意阅读材料的观点 ，你可以说 This opinion is only partly right. 或者There is truth in this opinion but I think… 或者While it is right to say that… it is wrong to say that…或者 This author is right in saying that… but he is wrong in saying that…或者 To be fair, the author is right in that… but he just goes too far in saying that… 等等.
如果你完全不同意阅读材料的观点, 就说 I cannot disagree with the author more here. 或者This is the last opinion that I want to accept. 或者 This idea is just unacceptable. 或者 This idea is too ridiculous 或者Have you ever heard a more unacceptable idea 或者 I bet you will never buy this idea. 或者 I doubt anyone will listen to such an unrealistic idea.等等。
还是以2007年广东省高考英语试题改革方案所给的 “读写任务” 为例
针对阅读材料的观点 Let children learn to judge their own work 你可以说 This idea sounds right but is actually unpractical. 或者Reasonable as this idea may sound, it is unrealistic. 或者There is truth in this idea but it is wrong. 或者 For little truth in it, the idea is actually ridiculous. 记住这只是对阅读材料所给观点作出了评判。你必须进一步从正面亮出自己的观点。而你的观点必须针对阅读材料所给的观点或论证过程的漏洞。
仔细阅读可以看出，所给短文尽管看上去论证很严密，实际上其论据之间存在着明显的不一致性。我们知道，儿童学习说话、跑步、攀爬、骑自行车与其在学校接受正规教育相去甚远，缺乏可比性。前者可以通过学习者的观察、对比与模仿而完成，而后者是在老师的指导下进行的，由于其复杂性、系统性与间接性，往往需要教师反复指出学生的错误。论据的不一致正是反驳或否定所给材料观点的最佳突破口。据此，我们可用（5）This opinion sounds right but is hardly practical或者This idea， though it may touch you， is unrealistic。对其观点加以否定。另外，这句话使上下段落自然过渡，一气呵成，体现了篇章衔接的技巧。
仅否定对方的观点不等于提出了自己的正确观点。紧接着，要针锋相对地提出自己的观点：Students’ mistakes should be corrected by their teachers. 并以此为全文的标题。作为文章第二部分应先拟出它的主题句：（6）In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, without teachers’ correction all the way, beginners will repeat their mistakes without realizing it. 这个段落主题句刚好与前面的标题相呼应，并自然而然地引出论据的写作。
接下来，必然要对自己的观点进行论证。按命题的要求，至少要包括a)b)c)d)四个内容要点（见题）。之所以要以英语学习为例，目的是要用亲身经历的事实证明自己的观点是正确的。而且主要是为了让所有的同学都有话可说。同学们知道，对于自己的语言错误学生自然是想自己能意识到并自己纠正了，而实际上他们是在不知不觉中犯错误，而且是屡犯难改，无能为力。教师自然希望、提倡学生自己找出错误并自己纠正。但实际上，没有教师的指正，学生往往连自己的错误都注意不到，所以对于学生的语言错误，教师一般都是有错必纠，而学生的成绩会因为教师经常纠正错误而迅速提高。这样，绝大多数学生自然是希望老师尽量指正自己的错误了。
试把第二部分的思路勾勒如下：
1.提出观点（5）（6）
2.论证 （7）“我”在学习英语的过程中经常出现的错误
（8）“我”对自身错误的认识或“无知”
（9）老师是如何对待“我”的错误的
3.结论 （10）“我”如何看待老师的做法。理由？让事实说话。
（11）；老师纠错应受鼓励
根据以上思路及 “写作内容 ”的提示第二部分可以按以下步骤一一展开：
观点：This opinion sounds right but is hardly practical. In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, without teachers’ correction all the way, beginners will repeat their mistakes without realizing it.
论证: (7) “ 我” 在学习英语的过程中经常出现的错误论证: I, for example, liked to use words ( that are ) too formal for a student’s composition.
(8) “我” 对自身错误的认识或 “无知” I never realized it.
(9) 老师是如何对待 “我”的错误的 My teachers repeatedly replaced the big words in my writing with simple ones.
结论: (10) – (11) “我”如何看待老师的做法 I’m thankful to my teachers
理由 事实已经说明问题I’m unable to write in simple and natural English.
重申观点(11) So teachers should be encouraged to correct their students’ mistakes as soon as possible.
经过整和、加工即得到符合要求的第二部分：
(5)This opinion sounds right but is hardly practical.
(6)In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, without teachers’ correction all the way, beginners will repeat their mistakes without realizing it.
(7)I, for example, liked to use words (that are) too formal for a student’s composition.
(8)But I never realized it until my teachers repeatedly replaced them with simple words.
(9)Now, I can write naturally in simple English.
(10)So teachers should be encouraged to correct their students’ mistakes as soon as possible.
至此两部分的写作均已完成。还有一个问题，整个短文应该有一个题目以便总领全文。前面已经提到可以用Students’ Mistakes Should Be Corrected by Their Teachers / Let Teachers Correct Our Mistakes作为全文的题目。
二部分合并后即得到完整的一篇短文。
Some people think that teachers are correcting students’ mistakes too much. Students, learning everything by copying their betters, can correct their own mistakes and teachers’ frequent correct will make children unable to judge their own work. ( 35 words)
This opinion appeals to many people, but in fact in it unrealistic. In real learning situations, In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, it is really hard, if not impossible, for the students to make good progress without teachers’ constantly pointing out and correcting their mistakes. Learning English is more complex and difficult than learning other things. I, for example, liked to use words too formal for a student’s composition. But I never realized it until my teachers repeatedly replaced them with simple words. I owe thanks to him as I’m able to write in simple and beautiful English. So teachers should be encouraged to correct their students’ mistakes as soon as possible. （123 words）
第一: 把握阅读材料的结构、思路、观点与意图
阅读材料的设计与“写作内容”的设计应该是浑然一体的。假如给的是一个说明文的短文，它反映的现象必须引发学生的共鸣，让他就此现象进行思考，假如阅读材料讲的是一个故事，这个故事应该让学生感到似曾相识，好象就发生在你我身边或身上。而且这个故事肯定蕴含着一个道理，一个让你我认可的道理。比如： 有个故事讲的是一位自卑的学生如何因老师的一句表扬而树立自信，找到了奋斗目标。相反，故事还可以讲述一位原本聪明的学生如何因老师不恰当的批评而产生厌学的情绪，最终毁了自己。“写作材料”就是要让你作为亲身经历者、目击者或其他第三者来讲述过去，反思自己或他人的行为或心态。如果是一篇议论文，应该是观点明确，论证严密而有条理。
如果是说明性或叙述性阅读材料， 你要有一个“心理预期”或猜测， 即猜测阅读之后下面会让你写什么。这种心理准备很重要， 不要“为阅读而阅读”。
现以一则“读写任务”为例来说明如何把握说明性阅读材料的结构、思路、观点与意图。
阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
1) Almost every student has days when they don’t feel like going to school.
2) It is not unusual for some of them sometimes to pretend to be feeling ill and get their poor parents fooled, who may call the school, asking their kids to be allowed to stay at home for a day or two, but sometimes these students make plans to meet friends or go somewhere alone for the day.
3) Still some other students make a show of going to school as usual, or their parents think they do.
4) Then when they are alone on the way they go off to some other places by himself or with a friend.
5) Schools call this truancy (旷课,逃避).
6) Kids call it ‘wagging school’, ‘skiving off’(回避,躲开工作), and
all sorts of other names.
7) What do you call it where you live
8) No matter what you may call it, most students never do it and a lot of schools nowadays have very strict rules to stop truancy in order to keep kids safe and help them to make the most of their chance to learn at school.
可以看出阅读材料反映的是逃学这一现象,但是并没有明显的观点。
(1) 是说明厌学情绪的普遍性“almost every student”。
（2）---（4）是逃学现象的具体体现
（5）---（6）指出这一现象学校与学生各有其叫法，
（7）---（8）则是要你引起注意，同时表明校方的态度。
如果给的阅读材料是议论性短文，可以用2007年广东省高考英语试题改革方案中所给“所给的 “读写任务”为例做个说明：短文具有完整而缜密的论证过程：论点、论据、结论具备。其中（1）为论点， （2）-- （11）为论证部分， （12）-- （13） 为结论
第二： 概括阅读材料
如果给的阅读材料是一个故事，应该用最简练的语言来说明故事讲述了什么，不能拖泥带水，而且最好讲述该故事给你的启示或其中的一个道理。如：
This story tells how a teacher’s word saved a shy and unconfident child and helped him find himself and hold on to his dreams. It tells us that teachers’ words can make difference to a child’s life.
如果是说明性或描述性短文,你就必须用概括的文字来说明某种现象。如：
This article points out the common phenomenon --- playing truancy (逃学 ) --- among students. It also gives us a picture of the forms truancy takes. Finally, it tells the attitude on the part of the schools.
如果是议论文的阅读短文,则要尽可能客观简要地转述阅读材料的观点。还是以2007年广东省高考英语试题改革方案样题为例：
概括对方观点首先要转换视角，即以“第三人称”或“无人称”来概括。本材料的观点是（1）Let children learn to judge their own work. 如果换成第三人称就是The writer of this article thinks that children should learn to judge their own work/ correct their own mistakes. 或者你认为本材料的观点代表一些人的思想, 就可以说Some people think students’ mistakes should be corrected by themselves and it is wrong for the teachers to do it for them too often in school. It will make the children dependent on the teachers. 还可以从中立的角度或用 “无人称”的方式来说 The article gives the view that teachers should stop correcting students’ mistakes for them. Students are able to correct their own mistakes and teachers’ frequent correction will make children unable to judge their own work.
如果这一部分要求用30个左右的词来概括,上述概括就是点到为止的高度概括。如果是用60左右的词来概括,我们就必须对阅读材料的整个说理过程做出概括, 即概括其论点论证过程和结论。
下面试概括作者的说理过程：
阅读材料的观点是Let children learn to judge their own work.
可以概括为 Some people think that teachers should not correct students’ mistakes for them.
阅读材料的正面论据是 (2) A child learning to talk does not learn by being corrected all the time; if corrected too much, he will stop talking. (3) He notices a thousand times a day the difference between his language and others’ language. (4) Bit by bit, he makes the right changes to make his language like other people’s. (5) In the same way, children learn to do all the other things. (6)They learn to talk, run, climb, ride a bicycle by comparing their own behaviors with those of more skilled people, and slowly make the needed changes.
可以概括为Children learn by comparing his behaviors, including language, with those of more skilled people.
阅读材料的反面论据是(7) But in school teachers never give a child a chance to find out his mistakes for himself, even fewer chances for him to correct himself. (8)They do it all for him. (9) Teachers act as if the student would never notice a mistake if they did not point out it to him. (10) They act as if the student would never correct it unless he was made to. (11)Soon he becomes dependent on the teacher.
可以概括为Teachers’ frequent correct of students’ mistakes makes students unable to judge their own work.
阅读材料的结论为 (12) Let the student do it himself. (13) Let him work out, with the help of other children if he wants it, what this word means and what the answer is to that problem.
可以概括为So children should learn by correcting their own mistakes and helping each other instead of having their mistakes corrected by their teachers.
第一部分整理如下:
Some people think that teachers should not correct students’ mistakes for them.
(2) Children learn by comparing his behaviors, including language, with those of more skilled people.
(3) Teachers’ frequent correct of students’ mistakes makes students unable to judge their own work.
(4) So children should learn by correcting their own mistakes and helping each other instead of having their mistakes corrected by their teachers.
至此, 概括阅读材料的任务就算完成了。
第三： 在“写作内容”框架的引导下完成写作。
这一部分同学们应该有较大的自由空间。如果是就某一现象要你表态，理想的设计是先问这种现象是否在你的身边多身上发生过，当初为什么你要那样做，当初有何感想，现在反思有有何体会。比如说写作内容会问你/ 你的朋友是否有逃学的经历，简单叙述一下经历，说说当初的动机、事情的结果，谈谈现在的感受与态度。这样的结合经历讲问题应该不难，因为同学们每个人都有话可说。
试以“逃学”( playing truancy)为例, 说明如何在 “写作内容” 的引导下完成写作过程
引导一: “你有过逃学吗 ” 你可以说 I must say that sometimes I cut school. 注意: 这里不是提出观点,而是承认一种事实。
引导二：简单讲述一次逃学的经历。
Only last Friday, I missed two English classes on purpose and got home. As my parents are at their work places at noon, I enjoyed myself watching TV.
引导三: 当时的感受
It felt really cool to think that I was alone having a free time while the other poor children were learning the boring English.
引导四: 逃学的原因:
Why play truancy School work sometimes is really two much and you want to get it off your mind.
引导五: 有何担忧
Of course, I’m afraid when teachers and my parents find out, I will be in trouble.
引导六: 有何反思
Maybe I should kick off this habit soon.
这一部分整和为：I must admit that I do cut school once in a while. Only last Friend, I missed two English classes on purpose and went home without telling anyone. With my parents away， I enjoyed myself watching TV. It felt really cool having a free time alone while the other poor children were learning the boring English classes. Why play truancy School work sometimes is really two much and you want to get it off your mind. Besides，that English teacher of ours is really too hard on us and hardly any of us likes his class. Of course, when my teachers and my parents find out, I will be in trouble. I’m worried about my school work, too. Maybe I should kick off this habit soon.
此部分与前文整和后就是一篇完整的短文:
Why Cut School
This article points out a common phenomenon --- playing truancy --- among students. It also gives us a picture of the forms truancy takes. Finally, it tells the attitude on the part of the schools. ( 33 words)
I must admit that I do cut school once in a while. Only last Friday, I missed two English classes on purpose and went home without telling anyone. With my parents away， I enjoyed myself watching TV. It felt really cool having a free time alone while the other poor children were learning the boring English classes. Why play truancy School work sometimes is really two much and you want to get it off your mind. Besides，that English teacher of ours is really too hard on us and hardly any of us likes his class. Of course, when my teachers and my parents find out, I will be in trouble. I’m worried about my school work, too. Maybe I should kick off this habit soon. (121 words)
如果阅读材料是议论文, 你该如何应对呢
其一、如果你的观点与阅读材料的观点完全一致，你应该表态，如I can’t agree with the author more. 或者 I share this opinion 或者 This is just what I want to say 或者 I think the author is complete right in saying that 等等。
如果你不完全同意阅读材料的观点 ，你可以说 This opinion is only partly right. 或者There is truth in this opinion but I think… 或者While it is right to say that… it is wrong to say that…或者 This author is right in saying that… but he is wrong in saying that…或者 To be fair, the author is right in that… but he just goes too far in saying that… 等等.
如果你完全不同意阅读材料的观点, 就说 I cannot disagree with the author more here. 或者This is the last opinion that I want to accept. 或者 This idea is just unacceptable. 或者 This idea is too ridiculous 或者Have you ever heard a more unacceptable idea 或者 I bet you will never buy this idea. 或者 I doubt anyone will listen to such an unrealistic idea.等等。
还是以2007年广东省高考英语试题改革方案所给的 “读写任务” 为例
针对阅读材料的观点 Let children learn to judge their own work 你可以说 This idea sounds right but is actually unpractical. 或者Reasonable as this idea may sound, it is unrealistic. 或者There is truth in this idea but it is wrong. 或者 For little truth in it, the idea is actually ridiculous. 记住这只是对阅读材料所给观点作出了评判。你必须进一步从正面亮出自己的观点。而你的观点必须针对阅读材料所给的观点或论证过程的漏洞。
仔细阅读可以看出，所给短文尽管看上去论证很严密，实际上其论据之间存在着明显的不一致性。我们知道，儿童学习说话、跑步、攀爬、骑自行车与其在学校接受正规教育相去甚远，缺乏可比性。前者可以通过学习者的观察、对比与模仿而完成，而后者是在老师的指导下进行的，由于其复杂性、系统性与间接性，往往需要教师反复指出学生的错误。论据的不一致正是反驳或否定所给材料观点的最佳突破口。据此，我们可用（5）This opinion sounds right but is hardly practical或者This idea， though it may touch you， is unrealistic。对其观点加以否定。另外，这句话使上下段落自然过渡，一气呵成，体现了篇章衔接的技巧。
仅否定对方的观点不等于提出了自己的正确观点。紧接着，要针锋相对地提出自己的观点：Students’ mistakes should be corrected by their teachers. 并以此为全文的标题。作为文章第二部分应先拟出它的主题句：（6）In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, without teachers’ correction all the way, beginners will repeat their mistakes without realizing it. 这个段落主题句刚好与前面的标题相呼应，并自然而然地引出论据的写作。
接下来，必然要对自己的观点进行论证。按命题的要求，至少要包括a)b)c)d)四个内容要点（见题）。之所以要以英语学习为例，目的是要用亲身经历的事实证明自己的观点是正确的。而且主要是为了让所有的同学都有话可说。同学们知道，对于自己的语言错误学生自然是想自己能意识到并自己纠正了，而实际上他们是在不知不觉中犯错误，而且是屡犯难改，无能为力。教师自然希望、提倡学生自己找出错误并自己纠正。但实际上，没有教师的指正，学生往往连自己的错误都注意不到，所以对于学生的语言错误，教师一般都是有错必纠，而学生的成绩会因为教师经常纠正错误而迅速提高。这样，绝大多数学生自然是希望老师尽量指正自己的错误了。
试把第二部分的思路勾勒如下：
1.提出观点（5）（6）
2.论证 （7）“我”在学习英语的过程中经常出现的错误
（8）“我”对自身错误的认识或“无知”
（9）老师是如何对待“我”的错误的
3.结论 （10）“我”如何看待老师的做法。理由？让事实说话。
（11）；老师纠错应受鼓励
根据以上思路及 “写作内容 ”的提示第二部分可以按以下步骤一一展开：
观点：This opinion sounds right but is hardly practical. In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, without teachers’ correction all the way, beginners will repeat their mistakes without realizing it.
论证: (7) “ 我” 在学习英语的过程中经常出现的错误论证: I, for example, liked to use words ( that are ) too formal for a student’s composition.
(8) “我” 对自身错误的认识或 “无知” I never realized it.
(9) 老师是如何对待 “我”的错误的 My teachers repeatedly replaced the big words in my writing with simple ones.
结论: (10) – (11) “我”如何看待老师的做法 I’m thankful to my teachers
理由 事实已经说明问题I’m unable to write in simple and natural English.
重申观点(11) So teachers should be encouraged to correct their students’ mistakes as soon as possible.
经过整和、加工即得到符合要求的第二部分：
(5)This opinion sounds right but is hardly practical.
(6)In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, without teachers’ correction all the way, beginners will repeat their mistakes without realizing it.
(7)I, for example, liked to use words (that are) too formal for a student’s composition.
(8)But I never realized it until my teachers repeatedly replaced them with simple words.
(9)Now, I can write naturally in simple English.
(10)So teachers should be encouraged to correct their students’ mistakes as soon as possible.
至此两部分的写作均已完成。还有一个问题，整个短文应该有一个题目以便总领全文。前面已经提到可以用Students’ Mistakes Should Be Corrected by Their Teachers / Let Teachers Correct Our Mistakes作为全文的题目。
二部分合并后即得到完整的一篇短文。
Some people think that teachers are correcting students’ mistakes too much. Students, learning everything by copying their betters, can correct their own mistakes and teachers’ frequent correct will make children unable to judge their own work. ( 35 words)
This opinion appeals to many people, but in fact in it unrealistic. In real learning situations, In real school learning situations, especially in learning a foreign language like English, it is really hard, if not impossible, for the students to make good progress without teachers’ constantly pointing out and correcting their mistakes. Learning English is more complex and difficult than learning other things. I, for example, liked to use words too formal for a student’s composition. But I never realized it until my teachers repeatedly replaced them with simple words. I owe thanks to him as I’m able to write in simple and beautiful English. So teachers should be encouraged to correct their students’ mistakes as soon as possible. （123 words）