Underline the mistakes in the following compositions and correct them.
(1)
Saturday Mar3,2005 Sunny
Today is Saturday. I get up at 6:45 this morning. I had a quickly breakfast
and then went to school in a hurry, but we no classes on Saturday. Then I
telephoned some classmate and ask them to have a picnic. They were very
pleasing. We were got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in
the afternoon, we by bus to home. I am too tired, but I’ll go to bed early.
(2)
Bicycle are still popular on the streets in Beijing. It’s easy to by bike go to school
or go to work. Now more and more people plans to buy cars instead of bike. But
I think that running cars make air dirty. It was harmful to our healthy. Riding
bicycles can help people keep healthy, but energy can be save. Because ride
bikes will always make we happy, so I prefer to go to school by bike.
请给中国环境保护杂志的李编辑写封信,谈谈你家乡的环境污染,并谈谈你的建议。（８０个字左右）
参考词汇: problem,environment, pollution, pour…into, die, rubbish, vehicles(交通工具) ,noise, smell(气味),hope, stop, protect, make a contribution to
Dear Mr Li,
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G. Z. M. S Huang Qunyan
Saturday Mar3,2005 Sunny
Today is Saturday. I get up at 6:45 this morning. I had a quickly breakfast and then went to school in a hurry, but we no classes on Saturday. Then I telephoned some classmate and ask them to have a picnic. They were very pleasing. We were got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in the afternoon, we by bus to home. I am too tired, but I’ll go to bed early.
请你当老师
How to correct English compositions
一、名词的单复数问题：
1. We study Chinese, maths, English and other subject.
2.The water was so clear that they could see all kinds of fish.
3.Many place are very dry.
The water was so clear that they could see all kinds of fishes.
Many places are very dry.
We study Chinese, maths, English and other subjects.
二、主谓一致问题
1. And now many rivers becomes very dirty.
2. Everything are going very well.
3. David with his little brother go to the park every Sunday.
4. There are a man teacher and two women teachers in the office.
And now many rivers become very dirty.
Everything is going very well.
David with his little brother goes to the park every Sunday
There is a man teacher and two women teachers in the office.
三、时态和语态问题
1. Her mother jumped into the lake and swimed to Joy.
2. Tom’s mother jumped into the water. She saves her daughter at last.
3. On Tree Planting Day,many trees planted in Danghu Park.
Her mother jumped into the lake and swam to Joy.
On Tree Planting Day,many trees were planted in Danghu Park.
Tom’s mother jumped into the water. She saved her daughter at last.
4.The 29th Olympic Games will hold in China.
The 29th Olympic Games will be held in China.
四、Chinglish 现象
1. Last Sunday,Ann with her mother and brother went to a park. The park with a beautiful lake.
2. I and my classmates by bus to Dayang Foreign Language School.
Last Sunday,Ann went to a park with her mother and brother. There was a beautiful lake in the park.
My classmates and I took a bus to Dayang Foreign Language School.
I took a bus to Dayang Foreign Language School with my classamates.
五、行文的逻辑性问题
1. At once, she jumped into the water to save her daughter with her mother’s help.
2. But she wasn’t careful, so that she fell into the river.
At once, she jumped into the water to save her daughter.
She wasn’t careful, and she fell into the river.
As she wasn’t careful, she fell into the river.
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六、词类错用
1.When I was sadly, I played with it. When I was happily, I played with it.
2. All of us are excited in it. Because it can make we happy and healthy.
When I was sad, I played with it.
When I was happy, I played with it.
All of us are excited about it. Because it can make us
happy and healthy.
典型病例
名词的单复数问题
主谓一致问题
时态和语态问题
Chinglish 现象
行文的逻辑性问题
词类错用
Saturday Mar3,2005 Sunny
Today is Saturday. I get up at 6:45 this morning. I had a quickly breakfast and then went to school in a hurry, but we no classes on Saturday. Then I telephoned some classmate and ask them to have a picnic. They were very pleasing. We were got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in the afternoon, we by bus to home. I am too tired, but I’ll go to bed early.
Can you find the mistakes in the composition
Saturday Mar3,2005 Sunny
Today is Saturday. I got up at 6:45 this morning. I had a quick breakfast and then went to school in a hurry, but we don’t have classes on Saturday. Then I telephoned some classmates and asked them to have a picnic. They were very pleased. We got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in the afternoon, we went home by bus. I am too tired, so I’ll go to bed early.
Bicycle are still popular on the streets in Beijing. It’s easy to by bike go to school or go to work. Now more and more people plans to buy cars instead of bike. But I think that running cars make air dirty. It was harmful to our healthy. Riding bicycles can help people keep healthy, but energy can be save. Because ride bikes will always make we happy, so I prefer to go to school by bike.
Find the mistakes as soon as quickly.
Bicycles are still popular on the streets in Beijing. It’s easy to go to school or go to work by bike. Now more and more people plan to buy cars instead of bikes. But I think that running cars makes air dirty. It is harmful to our health. Riding bicycles can help people keep healthy, and energy can be saved. Because riding bikes will always make me happy, I prefer to go to school by bike.
Writing skills (写作技巧)：
正确区分名词的单复数
保持主谓一致
正确使用时态和语态
避免Chinglish 现象
行文要符合逻辑性
词类的准确使用
作文得高分之秘诀:
要使文章言之有物、有血有肉
积累一些优秀的句、段或篇，经常翻阅或背诵，并多加模仿运用，使文章增色不少
善于运用平时所学知识，如从句、非谓语动词和 比较等句式，关键时刻用上一两个，就会起到鹤立鸡群的效果
对高级词汇的使用也可以显示出文章的文采
如very important较平常，但用 essential 就显得高出一筹；关联词如 not…but, the more…the more, not only…but also 等的使用，会使文章逻辑结构紧密，层次鲜明，条理清楚，就更加显示出你的英文功底。
请给中国环境保护杂志的李编辑写封信,谈谈你家乡的环境污染,并谈谈你的建议。（８０个字左右）
参考词汇: problem,environment, pollution, pour…into, die, rubbish, vehicles(交通工具) ,noise, smell(气味),hope, stop, protect, make a contribution to
Dear Mr Li,
I’m from Pinghu … _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________
Yours sincerely,
Zhang Xiaoming
Do not be afraid of writing English compositions.
After you finish one composition, please remember to correct it.
Homework
1.Finish writing this letter to Mr Li.
2.Exchange your compositions and
correct them.
Write a composition：
A letter to Mrs Huang
今天，广陈中学的黄老师给你们上了一堂英语作文课，她和你们一起讨论,发现错误并修改错误，教给你们写好作文的技巧(Writing technique)，如果她的课对你们写作能力有帮助,请你给她写一封英文信。(hqy0516@)
Homework
参考词汇:problem,environment, pollution, pour…into, die, rubbish, vehicles(交通工具) ,noise, smell,hope, stop, protect, make a contribution to
Dear Mr Li,
I’m from Pinghu. I’ve been in Pinghu for 15 years. I like Pinghu very much, but there is a great problem here, do you know That’s the environment pollution.The factories pour dirty water into the rivers or lakes. A lot of fish have died. Some people throw about rubbish here and there. Some rubbish gives out bad smell. All the vehicles make much noise.
We know Pinghu is a beautiful city. And I hope it will be more beautiful. I hope you can write a report to stop the people from polluting the environment. Pinghu is our hometown. All of us should make a contribution to protecting the environment. Thanks!
Yours sincerely,
Zhang XiaomingHow to correct Junior English compositions
G. Z. M. S Huang Qunyan
1. Give a composition that has many mistakes a score. (The full mark is 10.)
2. If the composition is written by you, what shall we do with the composition before it is handed in
( The title : correct the compositions)
3. Present some wrong sentences, and correct them with the whole class.
Sum up six kinds of wrong sentences and remind students to pay attention to them when they write the English composition.
4. Let me try. Let you try. Let us try.
Correct the composition that has been presented together.
5. Present another composition that has many mistakes in it .
Have a competition and see which group uses the shortest time to find the mistakes and correct them.
6. How to write a good composition
7. Give students a title. After they finish it ,they can exchange their compositions and correct them.
