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课件40张PPT。The opinions are divided.
Most of the students think that music should be played.As we know, music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Besides,after hard study, music can bring us relaxation, which reduces the tiredness. This can help us make full preparations for the next class. Listening to music also makes us feel happy.
On the other hand, some students don’t think so. In their opinion, they can’t get expected effect from playing music, for the class break time is too short. What is needed most during the class break is peace instead of noise produced by music.
In my opinion, it is good to play some soft and peaceful music instead of loud music during the class break. In this way, students can enjoy music as well as have a good rest.
Besides, I suggest choosing some music that is suitable for middle school students.会考书面表达讲与析
(writing)会考书面表达题型命题方式题材正、反观点+自己观点 书信, 短文图画 短文, 稿件 文字/提纲 书信, 短文, 通知, 日记书面表达(满分15分)
上周末外籍教师Helen和Michael邀请你和你的
同学去他们的公寓(apartment),你们一起举办了
一个聚会.大家一起唱歌、交谈、拍照,玩得很开
心.现在他们已经回国,你给他们写一封致谢信,重
温一起度过的美好时光,并把照片寄给他们,同时
简单介绍自己的情况.
存在的问题(一).语言错误1.单词、短语invite(邀请)invent (发明)chatportypartycheat2.语法Thank you for invite us to you apartment.invitingyour(代词,V-ing)We all have a good time.had时态I writing to you to…am writingWe sing, chat and taking photos together. sang, chatted and tookIt gave us so much happy. happiness.词性In recently days… recentLet me tell you that the photos have
developed. have been语态 you are returned…. have returnedThough you have returned to your home contry, but we’ll never forget the time which we stayed together. whenWe must good good study.Chi-EnglishNot only I but also others all happy.were all happy.缺乏谓语动词I am writing to you is in order to thank you
for inviting us to your apartment. 多谓语动词书面表达(满分15分)
上周末外籍教师Helen和Michael邀请你和你的
同学去他们的公寓(apartment),你们一起举办了
一个聚会.大家一起唱歌、交谈、拍照,玩得很开
心.现在他们已经回国,你给他们写一封致谢信,重
温一起度过的美好时光,并把照片寄给他们,同时
简单介绍自己的情况.
(三).审题不清1.感谢他们邀请你们去他们的公寓.2.聚会上的活动(唱歌、交谈、拍照),玩得开心.3.寄给他们照片以重温一起度过的美好时光.4.简单介绍自己的情况.(忙于准备期末考试)1.感谢他们邀请你们去他们的公寓.Thank you for inviting us to your apartment.sb be thankful that…I am thankful that you invited us to your
apartment.2.聚会上的活动(唱歌、交谈、拍照),玩得开心.We enjoyed the party greatly, singing, talking and taking photos.We enjoyed ourselves/had a good time in the
party, singing, talking and taking photos.Not only did we sing songs but also we talked
and took photoes. In a word, we had a good
time in the party.3.寄给他们照片以重温一起度过的美好时光.In this letter, I’m sending you the photos of our wonderful stay there.remind sb of sthI’m sending you the photos of the party,which
will remind you of the wonderful time we
spent together.to remind4.简单介绍自己的情况.(最近,忙于准备期末考试)At this moment, I am busy with my lessons, for the final tests are coming.Recently, I have been preparing for the final tests.Recently, I have been preparing myself for the final tests.参考范文:Dear Helen and Michael, Thank you very much for inviting us to your
apartment last weekend.We enjoyed the party greatly, singing, talking and taking photos.In this letter, I’m sending you the photos of ourwonderful stay there.us of the happy hours we spent together.I hope you will like them asthey remindAt this moment, I am busy with my lessons, forthe final tests are coming.I must do well in the exams.Yours,
Yuyi Zhou 1. 主语 + 系动词 + 表语
2. 主语 + 不及物动词 (+ 状语)
3. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语
4. 主语 + 及物动词 + 间接宾语 + 直接宾语
5. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语 + 宾语补足语简单句的五种基本句型他是一名科学家.
He is a scientist.
我同学看起来很聪明.
She looks very clever.1. 主语 + 系动词 + 表语2. 主语 + 不及物动词 (+ 状语)我住在北京.
I live in Beijing.
太阳升起来了.
The sun rises..3. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语我有一台收音机.
I have a radio.
老师决定举行班会.
The teacher decided to hold a class meeting.4. 主语 + 及物动词 + 间接宾语 + 直接宾语昨天他拜访了我.
He paid me a visit yesterday.
昨天他给他的家人写了一封信. He wrote his family a letter yesterday. 5. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语 + 宾语补足语我们叫他李叔叔.
We called him Uncle Li.
那些村民在那时种了许多树. ( have sth done )
The villagers had many trees planted just then.
过渡性的词语:
⒈ 递进：另外，而且
what's more / besides / also / in addition / furthermore2.转折：但是，然而，相反but / however / instead
on the other hand / on the contrary3.因果：因为，因此since / as / so /thus / because (of) /therefore /as a result (of) /so that4. 条件:如果，只要if / unless / as(so) long as on condition that5. 时间not … until / as soon as / later / since/ from then on6. 顺序: 第一/首先above all / first of all / firstly (first) /second (secondly)
in the end finally7. 总结： 总而言之on the whole, in general, in short , in a wordDear editor,
I’m a student of Senior Three. I think my parents should buy me a computer. As we all know, computers are of great use to us students and are widely used in our daily life. computers , we can get more information and improve our English.
_________________ there are many learning softwares that can be used in computers.___________with computers we can enjoy ourselves. _________, I hope my parents can buy me a computer. Do you agree with me?A readerBy usingBesides/ Secondly Thirdly/At last In a word1.多实少虚 :2.短语优先：good humorous,interesting, smart,
warm-heartedI want to meet him.I am looking forward to meeting him. In our school, there are twenty-six classrooms.Our school is made up of twenty–six classrooms.1.When he arrives, please give me an
e-mail.(使用V-ing形式).
2.To his surprise, the little girl knows so
many things.（使用名词性从句）
3. He came in and there was a baby in his
arms. (用with结构)
, please give me an e-mail. is that the little girl knows so many things.On his arrivingWhat surprises himHe came in, with a baby in his arms.4.由于不知道他的电话,他没法跟Mary联系.
(用非谓语)
5.He did not know what had happened until
he had read the news in the newspaper.(使
用强调句型)
It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that ,he can’t get in touch with Tom Not knowing his telephone number he knew what had happened.6.She walked out of the lab and many
students followed her. (使用过去分词) by many students, she walked out of the lab.FollowedStudents’ composition
Studying abroad(1)
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular.
There are some advantages about it. Firstly, it’s better for us to learn foreign language abroad. All people around us speak their own language. Thus, it creats a good environment to learn it. Secondly, it widens our horizon and helps us learn the advanced technology. What’s more, studying abroad can spread the different culture from different countries.
However, there are still some disadvantages about it. We are young. And have no experience of life. We couldn’t look after ourselves well. Maybe we can’t do something that we want to or decide to. Also we may feel lonely and homesick. As a result, we may can’t work as usual. Finally, studying abroad costs too much money. ____________________________________________________________If we are not rich enough, we can’t offord it.
In my opinion, I neither suppose it nor against it. Surely, it is a good chance to study abroad, we can get in touch with various people and learn the differences between two countries. In a word, we may learn many things. On the country, studying abroad costs so much money that our family can’t afford it. Besides, we may feel lonely without a relative abroad.
Thank you. In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. _____ ___________________________________________
There are many advantages in studying abroad. _______ , studying abroad is good for the students to learn foreign language well by using the good language environment._______________ , not only can the students widen / broaden their horizon, but (also) they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology. __________ , after returning to the homecountries, the students who have studied abroad can act as mediators between prople of different cultures.
__________ , there are still many disadvantages. Everyyear thousands of students make great efforts to go abroad for studying. First(ly)Second(ly) / BesidesFinallyHoweverMost of the students are too young to take good care of themselves since they have no living experience. __________, being far away from their home country, they may sometimes feel lonely and homesick. ____________ , it costs a lot more to study in foreign countries.
________________the above disadvatages, there are more advatages. In my opinion, it’s advisable for the students to study abroad if possible.
In addition AlsoIn spite of /Despite In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Every
year thousands of students make great efforts to go abroad for studying
There are many advantages in studying abroad. First(ly)
_____________is good for the students to learn foreign language well by using the good language environment. Second(ly) / Besides, _________the students widen / broaden their horizon, _________they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology. Finally, after _______________________, the students _________ ____________can act as mediators between prople of different cultures.
However, there are still many disadvantages. studying abroadnot only canbut (also)returning to their home countrieswho havestudied abroadMost of the students are too young to take good care of themselves since they have no living experience. In addition
, _____________________________(由于远离祖国), they may sometimes feel lonely and homesick. Also, it costs a lot more to study in foreign countries.
In spite of /Despite the above disadvatages, there are more advatages. In my opinion, it’s advisable for the students to study abroad if possible.
being far away from their home country
运用多种语法结构，句式灵活多变，可以使文章增色不少。first(ly) , second(ly) / besides / in addition/ what’s more/ also
however , finally Students’ composition
Studying abroad(1)
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular.
There are some advantages about it. Firstly, it’s better for us to learn foreign language abroad. All people around us speak their own language. Thus, it creats a good environment to learn it. Secondly, it widens our horizon and helps us learn the advanced technology. What’s more, studying abroad can spread the different culture from different countries.
However, there are still some disadvantages about it. We are young. And have no experience of life. We couldn’t look after ourselves well. Maybe we can’t do something that we want to or decide to. Also we may feel lonely and homesick. As a result, we may can’t work as usual. Finally, studying abroad costs too much money. ____________________________________________________________If we are not rich enough, we can’t offord it.
In my opinion, I neither suppose it nor against it. Surely, it is a good chance to study abroad, we can get in touch with various people and learn the differences between two countries. In a word, we may learn many things. On the country, studying abroad costs so much money that our family can’t afford it. Besides, we may feel lonely without a relative abroad.
Studying abroad(2) In recent years, studying abroad has been popular.
I think it necessary. Firstly, good environment is good at studying. Secondly, it can widen ourselves horizon that learning technique from abroad. Thirdly, it can spreading different culture between different country. But it unnecessary, also. For one thing, at that yong age, lack life’s experience. So can’t look after myself. For another, emotion is longly , because them homesick. What’s more, the living and studying are waste of much money.
At last, I think you want to go abroad. You will must think it over.Thank you.
Most of the students think that music should be played.As we know, music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Besides,after hard study, music can bring us relaxation, which reduces the tiredness. This can help us make full preparations for the next class. Listening to music also makes us feel happy.
On the other hand, some students don’t think so. In their opinion, they can’t get expected effect from playing music, for the class break time is too short. What is needed most during the class break is peace instead of noise produced by music.
In my opinion, it is good to play some soft and peaceful music instead of loud music during the class break. In this way, students can enjoy music as well as have a good rest.
Besides, I suggest choosing some music that is suitable for middle school students.会考书面表达讲与析
(writing)会考书面表达题型命题方式题材正、反观点+自己观点 书信, 短文图画 短文, 稿件 文字/提纲 书信, 短文, 通知, 日记书面表达(满分15分)
上周末外籍教师Helen和Michael邀请你和你的
同学去他们的公寓(apartment),你们一起举办了
一个聚会.大家一起唱歌、交谈、拍照,玩得很开
心.现在他们已经回国,你给他们写一封致谢信,重
温一起度过的美好时光,并把照片寄给他们,同时
简单介绍自己的情况.
存在的问题(一).语言错误1.单词、短语invite(邀请)invent (发明)chatportypartycheat2.语法Thank you for invite us to you apartment.invitingyour(代词,V-ing)We all have a good time.had时态I writing to you to…am writingWe sing, chat and taking photos together. sang, chatted and tookIt gave us so much happy. happiness.词性In recently days… recentLet me tell you that the photos have
developed. have been语态 you are returned…. have returnedThough you have returned to your home contry, but we’ll never forget the time which we stayed together. whenWe must good good study.Chi-EnglishNot only I but also others all happy.were all happy.缺乏谓语动词I am writing to you is in order to thank you
for inviting us to your apartment. 多谓语动词书面表达(满分15分)
上周末外籍教师Helen和Michael邀请你和你的
同学去他们的公寓(apartment),你们一起举办了
一个聚会.大家一起唱歌、交谈、拍照,玩得很开
心.现在他们已经回国,你给他们写一封致谢信,重
温一起度过的美好时光,并把照片寄给他们,同时
简单介绍自己的情况.
(三).审题不清1.感谢他们邀请你们去他们的公寓.2.聚会上的活动(唱歌、交谈、拍照),玩得开心.3.寄给他们照片以重温一起度过的美好时光.4.简单介绍自己的情况.(忙于准备期末考试)1.感谢他们邀请你们去他们的公寓.Thank you for inviting us to your apartment.sb be thankful that…I am thankful that you invited us to your
apartment.2.聚会上的活动(唱歌、交谈、拍照),玩得开心.We enjoyed the party greatly, singing, talking and taking photos.We enjoyed ourselves/had a good time in the
party, singing, talking and taking photos.Not only did we sing songs but also we talked
and took photoes. In a word, we had a good
time in the party.3.寄给他们照片以重温一起度过的美好时光.In this letter, I’m sending you the photos of our wonderful stay there.remind sb of sthI’m sending you the photos of the party,which
will remind you of the wonderful time we
spent together.to remind4.简单介绍自己的情况.(最近,忙于准备期末考试)At this moment, I am busy with my lessons, for the final tests are coming.Recently, I have been preparing for the final tests.Recently, I have been preparing myself for the final tests.参考范文:Dear Helen and Michael, Thank you very much for inviting us to your
apartment last weekend.We enjoyed the party greatly, singing, talking and taking photos.In this letter, I’m sending you the photos of ourwonderful stay there.us of the happy hours we spent together.I hope you will like them asthey remindAt this moment, I am busy with my lessons, forthe final tests are coming.I must do well in the exams.Yours,
Yuyi Zhou 1. 主语 + 系动词 + 表语
2. 主语 + 不及物动词 (+ 状语)
3. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语
4. 主语 + 及物动词 + 间接宾语 + 直接宾语
5. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语 + 宾语补足语简单句的五种基本句型他是一名科学家.
He is a scientist.
我同学看起来很聪明.
She looks very clever.1. 主语 + 系动词 + 表语2. 主语 + 不及物动词 (+ 状语)我住在北京.
I live in Beijing.
太阳升起来了.
The sun rises..3. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语我有一台收音机.
I have a radio.
老师决定举行班会.
The teacher decided to hold a class meeting.4. 主语 + 及物动词 + 间接宾语 + 直接宾语昨天他拜访了我.
He paid me a visit yesterday.
昨天他给他的家人写了一封信. He wrote his family a letter yesterday. 5. 主语 + 及物动词 + 宾语 + 宾语补足语我们叫他李叔叔.
We called him Uncle Li.
那些村民在那时种了许多树. ( have sth done )
The villagers had many trees planted just then.
过渡性的词语:
⒈ 递进：另外，而且
what's more / besides / also / in addition / furthermore2.转折：但是，然而，相反but / however / instead
on the other hand / on the contrary3.因果：因为，因此since / as / so /thus / because (of) /therefore /as a result (of) /so that4. 条件:如果，只要if / unless / as(so) long as on condition that5. 时间not … until / as soon as / later / since/ from then on6. 顺序: 第一/首先above all / first of all / firstly (first) /second (secondly)
in the end finally7. 总结： 总而言之on the whole, in general, in short , in a wordDear editor,
I’m a student of Senior Three. I think my parents should buy me a computer. As we all know, computers are of great use to us students and are widely used in our daily life. computers , we can get more information and improve our English.
_________________ there are many learning softwares that can be used in computers.___________with computers we can enjoy ourselves. _________, I hope my parents can buy me a computer. Do you agree with me?A readerBy usingBesides/ Secondly Thirdly/At last In a word1.多实少虚 :2.短语优先：good humorous,interesting, smart,
warm-heartedI want to meet him.I am looking forward to meeting him. In our school, there are twenty-six classrooms.Our school is made up of twenty–six classrooms.1.When he arrives, please give me an
e-mail.(使用V-ing形式).
2.To his surprise, the little girl knows so
many things.（使用名词性从句）
3. He came in and there was a baby in his
arms. (用with结构)
, please give me an e-mail. is that the little girl knows so many things.On his arrivingWhat surprises himHe came in, with a baby in his arms.4.由于不知道他的电话,他没法跟Mary联系.
(用非谓语)
5.He did not know what had happened until
he had read the news in the newspaper.(使
用强调句型)
It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that ,he can’t get in touch with Tom Not knowing his telephone number he knew what had happened.6.She walked out of the lab and many
students followed her. (使用过去分词) by many students, she walked out of the lab.FollowedStudents’ composition
Studying abroad(1)
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular.
There are some advantages about it. Firstly, it’s better for us to learn foreign language abroad. All people around us speak their own language. Thus, it creats a good environment to learn it. Secondly, it widens our horizon and helps us learn the advanced technology. What’s more, studying abroad can spread the different culture from different countries.
However, there are still some disadvantages about it. We are young. And have no experience of life. We couldn’t look after ourselves well. Maybe we can’t do something that we want to or decide to. Also we may feel lonely and homesick. As a result, we may can’t work as usual. Finally, studying abroad costs too much money. ____________________________________________________________If we are not rich enough, we can’t offord it.
In my opinion, I neither suppose it nor against it. Surely, it is a good chance to study abroad, we can get in touch with various people and learn the differences between two countries. In a word, we may learn many things. On the country, studying abroad costs so much money that our family can’t afford it. Besides, we may feel lonely without a relative abroad.
Thank you. In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. _____ ___________________________________________
There are many advantages in studying abroad. _______ , studying abroad is good for the students to learn foreign language well by using the good language environment._______________ , not only can the students widen / broaden their horizon, but (also) they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology. __________ , after returning to the homecountries, the students who have studied abroad can act as mediators between prople of different cultures.
__________ , there are still many disadvantages. Everyyear thousands of students make great efforts to go abroad for studying. First(ly)Second(ly) / BesidesFinallyHoweverMost of the students are too young to take good care of themselves since they have no living experience. __________, being far away from their home country, they may sometimes feel lonely and homesick. ____________ , it costs a lot more to study in foreign countries.
________________the above disadvatages, there are more advatages. In my opinion, it’s advisable for the students to study abroad if possible.
In addition AlsoIn spite of /Despite In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Every
year thousands of students make great efforts to go abroad for studying
There are many advantages in studying abroad. First(ly)
_____________is good for the students to learn foreign language well by using the good language environment. Second(ly) / Besides, _________the students widen / broaden their horizon, _________they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology. Finally, after _______________________, the students _________ ____________can act as mediators between prople of different cultures.
However, there are still many disadvantages. studying abroadnot only canbut (also)returning to their home countrieswho havestudied abroadMost of the students are too young to take good care of themselves since they have no living experience. In addition
, _____________________________(由于远离祖国), they may sometimes feel lonely and homesick. Also, it costs a lot more to study in foreign countries.
In spite of /Despite the above disadvatages, there are more advatages. In my opinion, it’s advisable for the students to study abroad if possible.
being far away from their home country
运用多种语法结构，句式灵活多变，可以使文章增色不少。first(ly) , second(ly) / besides / in addition/ what’s more/ also
however , finally Students’ composition
Studying abroad(1)
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular.
There are some advantages about it. Firstly, it’s better for us to learn foreign language abroad. All people around us speak their own language. Thus, it creats a good environment to learn it. Secondly, it widens our horizon and helps us learn the advanced technology. What’s more, studying abroad can spread the different culture from different countries.
However, there are still some disadvantages about it. We are young. And have no experience of life. We couldn’t look after ourselves well. Maybe we can’t do something that we want to or decide to. Also we may feel lonely and homesick. As a result, we may can’t work as usual. Finally, studying abroad costs too much money. ____________________________________________________________If we are not rich enough, we can’t offord it.
In my opinion, I neither suppose it nor against it. Surely, it is a good chance to study abroad, we can get in touch with various people and learn the differences between two countries. In a word, we may learn many things. On the country, studying abroad costs so much money that our family can’t afford it. Besides, we may feel lonely without a relative abroad.
Studying abroad(2) In recent years, studying abroad has been popular.
I think it necessary. Firstly, good environment is good at studying. Secondly, it can widen ourselves horizon that learning technique from abroad. Thirdly, it can spreading different culture between different country. But it unnecessary, also. For one thing, at that yong age, lack life’s experience. So can’t look after myself. For another, emotion is longly , because them homesick. What’s more, the living and studying are waste of much money.
At last, I think you want to go abroad. You will must think it over.Thank you.
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