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作 文 讲 评
(一)教学内容
香香.张含韵等同龄人凭借自己的一技之长打拼出一片天空。于是，人们对“读书是否有用”持不同的看法。
读书无用论 所有的人想通过读书获取成功是不可能的。如爱迪生，盖茨等既然教育不能公平地对待每个人，那就应当鼓励人们另谋出路。
读书有用论 知识无用论者目光短浅，教育投资会获得最好的利润有天赋的人也得像植物一样需要修剪（学习）
你的观点 现代社会需要知识型人才，机会属于有准备的头脑，我们应该努力学习
注意：1。必须包括所有内容要点，可适当发挥
2．词数120左右
3．参考词汇：投资 investment修剪 prune(vt)
(二)教学目标
1． 熟练运用表达中常用的过度性词语：on the one hand…on the other hand; in addition ;most importantly; as far as I know; what’s more; as a result, etc.
2．能熟练使用表达意见的句型，较清晰地表达自己的观点和态度。
3．在原有习作的基础上，培养学生自我反思，自我修改的习惯和能力。
（三）教学重点和难点
本文内容多，要点长，引导学生发现，纠正自己的语言错误（尤其是汉式表达方式）成为教学的重点；此外，多数学生将本文写作变成了翻译句子，缺乏连贯性和流畅性。如何引导学生灵活拆分要点成为教学的难点。
（四）教学过程
Step ⅠPlease correct the mistakes in the following sentences.
1. All people want to get success is impossible. (汉式表达方式)
2. Since education can’t treat everyone fair, so it is necessary that people should be encouraged to make life in other ways.
3. The people who think knowledge unuseful have a short sight.
4. Educational investment can get the best interests. （汉式表达方式）
5. Even gift people should work hard , just like plants need prune.
6. Our society needs knowledge people. （汉式表达方式）
7. Opportunities are belonged to the preparing minds; we should work hard.
8. Only doing this can we succeed.
（简评：拼写无误，词汇选用恰当丰富是高分作文的关键之一。通过呈现学生的典型错误，学生自查互查相结合，使学生最大限度地减少语言失误。）
Step Ⅱ Discussion Please paraphrase the following sentences in different ways and make comparisons between them.
Eg: 1.That all people want to achieve success is impossible.
（生）It’s impossible for all people to achieve success by receiving education.
Not all people can make great achievements by receiving education.
2. The people who think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
（生）Those who think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
Whoever think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
3. Educational investment can get the best interests. （汉式表达方式）
（生）Educational investment always results in the best interests.
An investment in education makes it possible for people to get the best interests.
4. Our society needs knowledgeable/learned people. （汉式表达方式）
（生）There’s a great demand for learned people in our society.
There’s an urgent need for learned people in our society.
Knowledgeable people are badly needed in our society.
5. Opportunities belong to the prepared minds.
（生）Opportunities are always for the prepared minds.
Opportunities belong to those who have already got well prepared.
（简评：词汇贫乏，句型单一简单是影响学生高分作文的重要因素之一。通过小组讨论交流，能激活学生原有的知识储备，变被动的语言输出为有意义的交流。学生在该过程中既能感受英语语言的无穷魅力增强合作意识又为今后的有意识的语言输出做好了准备。）
Step Ⅲ Combine the following sentences into one, using proper conjunctions.
1. Those who think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
An investment in education always results in the best interests.
Eg: Those who… because they fail to realize that…
2. Opportunities are always for the prepared mind; we should work hard.
We are supposed to work hard since opportunities are …
Opportunities …. Therefore, we should work hard.
3. Gifted people are supposed to work hard. Plants need to be pruned.
Even gifted people are supposed to work hard, just like plants, which need to be pruned constantly.
4. Some peers, like Xiangxiang, Zhang Hanyun took advantage of their own strengths and achieve immediate success.
They became known all over the country.
People hold different opinions on whether it is useful to receive education.
Recently some peers, like Xiangxiang, Zhang Hanyun have achieved immediate success, taking advantage of their own strengths and became known all over the country, which arouse a heated discussion on whether it is useful to receive education.
（简评：有效地使用语句间的连接成分使全文结构紧凑是高分作文的保障。本步骤旨在帮助学生在众多的要点中能灵活拆分要点，通过句间的逻辑关系，选择恰当的过渡性词语，避免单调的单句翻译。）
Step Ⅳ Consolidation
Based on the above sentences and explanation, correct the mistakes in the composition and make necessary changes to make it better.
One possible version:
Recently some peers, like Xiangxiang, Zhang Hanyun have achieved immediate success, taking advantage of their own strengths and became known all over the country, which arouse a heated discussion on whether it is useful to receive education.
Some people think that it seems impossible for all the people to achieve success in the same way-by going to school. Many people, such as Edison and Bill Gates, took different routes. Since education doesn’t treat everyone fairly, we should encourage some people to develop in other ways.
However, others argue that those who think knowledge useless are very short-sighted, because they fail to realize that an investment in education makes it possible for people to get the best interests. Even gifted people are supposed to study, just like plants, which need to be pruned constantly.
As far as I’m concerned, opportunities belong to those who have already got well prepared. We have no alternative but to devote ourselves entirely to study. Only in this way can we make a success in life.
反思： 批改作文是许多英语老师棘手的一件事。学生作文中的错误多而杂，老师要花费很多时间和精力进行批阅，非常麻烦。因此，培养学生自我反思自我改进的习惯和能力尤为重要。本节课从减少语言失误，优化表达方式，拆分要点精选连词三个方面指导学生如何自我改进作文。学生反应良好，合作到位。写作能力非一日之功，高分作文有赖于学生日常的点滴积累。因此教师应抓好学生的日常积累以更利于学生的语言输出。同时，教无定法，不同的体裁应选用不同的教学方法。
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作 文 讲 评
(一)教学内容
香香.张含韵等同龄人凭借自己的一技之长打拼出一片天空。于是，人们对“读书是否有用”持不同的看法。
读书无用论 所有的人想通过读书获取成功是不可能的。如爱迪生，盖茨等既然教育不能公平地对待每个人，那就应当鼓励人们另谋出路。
读书有用论 知识无用论者目光短浅，教育投资会获得最好的利润有天赋的人也得像植物一样需要修剪（学习）
你的观点 现代社会需要知识型人才，机会属于有准备的头脑，我们应该努力学习
注意：1。必须包括所有内容要点，可适当发挥
2．词数120左右
3．参考词汇：投资 investment修剪 prune(vt)
(二)教学目标
1． 熟练运用表达中常用的过度性词语：on the one hand…on the other hand; in addition ;most importantly; as far as I know; what’s more; as a result, etc.
2．能熟练使用表达意见的句型，较清晰地表达自己的观点和态度。
3．在原有习作的基础上，培养学生自我反思，自我修改的习惯和能力。
（三）教学重点和难点
本文内容多，要点长，引导学生发现，纠正自己的语言错误（尤其是汉式表达方式）成为教学的重点；此外，多数学生将本文写作变成了翻译句子，缺乏连贯性和流畅性。如何引导学生灵活拆分要点成为教学的难点。
（四）教学过程
Step ⅠPlease correct the mistakes in the following sentences.
1. All people want to get success is impossible. (汉式表达方式)
2. Since education can’t treat everyone fair, so it is necessary that people should be encouraged to make life in other ways.
3. The people who think knowledge unuseful have a short sight.
4. Educational investment can get the best interests. （汉式表达方式）
5. Even gift people should work hard , just like plants need prune.
6. Our society needs knowledge people. （汉式表达方式）
7. Opportunities are belonged to the preparing minds; we should work hard.
8. Only doing this can we succeed.
（简评：拼写无误，词汇选用恰当丰富是高分作文的关键之一。通过呈现学生的典型错误，学生自查互查相结合，使学生最大限度地减少语言失误。）
Step Ⅱ Discussion Please paraphrase the following sentences in different ways and make comparisons between them.
Eg: 1.That all people want to achieve success is impossible.
（生）It’s impossible for all people to achieve success by receiving education.
Not all people can make great achievements by receiving education.
2. The people who think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
（生）Those who think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
Whoever think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
3. Educational investment can get the best interests. （汉式表达方式）
（生）Educational investment always results in the best interests.
An investment in education makes it possible for people to get the best interests.
4. Our society needs knowledgeable/learned people. （汉式表达方式）
（生）There’s a great demand for learned people in our society.
There’s an urgent need for learned people in our society.
Knowledgeable people are badly needed in our society.
5. Opportunities belong to the prepared minds.
（生）Opportunities are always for the prepared minds.
Opportunities belong to those who have already got well prepared.
（简评：词汇贫乏，句型单一简单是影响学生高分作文的重要因素之一。通过小组讨论交流，能激活学生原有的知识储备，变被动的语言输出为有意义的交流。学生在该过程中既能感受英语语言的无穷魅力增强合作意识又为今后的有意识的语言输出做好了准备。）
Step Ⅲ Combine the following sentences into one, using proper conjunctions.
1. Those who think knowledge useless are short-sighted.
An investment in education always results in the best interests.
Eg: Those who… because they fail to realize that…
2. Opportunities are always for the prepared mind; we should work hard.
We are supposed to work hard since opportunities are …
Opportunities …. Therefore, we should work hard.
3. Gifted people are supposed to work hard. Plants need to be pruned.
Even gifted people are supposed to work hard, just like plants, which need to be pruned constantly.
4. Some peers, like Xiangxiang, Zhang Hanyun took advantage of their own strengths and achieve immediate success.
They became known all over the country.
People hold different opinions on whether it is useful to receive education.
Recently some peers, like Xiangxiang, Zhang Hanyun have achieved immediate success, taking advantage of their own strengths and became known all over the country, which arouse a heated discussion on whether it is useful to receive education.
（简评：有效地使用语句间的连接成分使全文结构紧凑是高分作文的保障。本步骤旨在帮助学生在众多的要点中能灵活拆分要点，通过句间的逻辑关系，选择恰当的过渡性词语，避免单调的单句翻译。）
Step Ⅳ Consolidation
Based on the above sentences and explanation, correct the mistakes in the composition and make necessary changes to make it better.
One possible version:
Recently some peers, like Xiangxiang, Zhang Hanyun have achieved immediate success, taking advantage of their own strengths and became known all over the country, which arouse a heated discussion on whether it is useful to receive education.
Some people think that it seems impossible for all the people to achieve success in the same way-by going to school. Many people, such as Edison and Bill Gates, took different routes. Since education doesn’t treat everyone fairly, we should encourage some people to develop in other ways.
However, others argue that those who think knowledge useless are very short-sighted, because they fail to realize that an investment in education makes it possible for people to get the best interests. Even gifted people are supposed to study, just like plants, which need to be pruned constantly.
As far as I’m concerned, opportunities belong to those who have already got well prepared. We have no alternative but to devote ourselves entirely to study. Only in this way can we make a success in life.
反思： 批改作文是许多英语老师棘手的一件事。学生作文中的错误多而杂，老师要花费很多时间和精力进行批阅，非常麻烦。因此，培养学生自我反思自我改进的习惯和能力尤为重要。本节课从减少语言失误，优化表达方式，拆分要点精选连词三个方面指导学生如何自我改进作文。学生反应良好，合作到位。写作能力非一日之功，高分作文有赖于学生日常的点滴积累。因此教师应抓好学生的日常积累以更利于学生的语言输出。同时，教无定法，不同的体裁应选用不同的教学方法。
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