(共30张PPT)
中考话题写作课
Safey
and
first
aid
八年级上册Module
8
Accidents
八年级上册
Module
12
Help
惠东县梁化中学
周佛娣
钟伟琼
earthquake
Enjoy
a
video.
2.How
do
you
feel
after
watching
the
video
1.
What
happened
in
the
video
A
terrible
earthquake
happened
in
Japan
on
March11th,2011.As
a
result
of
the
extreme(激烈的)earthquake，the
huge
waves
washed
away
all
the
coast
area
northeast
of
the
country.The
more
serious
danger
is
nuclear
power
station
explosion(核电站爆炸)Though
a
lot
of
countries
including
China
have
sent
much
help
to
Japan,the
Japanese
are
still
in
trouble,because
many
people
were
killed
in
the
disaster.
And
some
earthquakes
even
cause
tsunamis(海啸).It
was
said
that
300
thousand
people
died
in
Indonesian
tsunamis
as
a
result
of
the
earthquake
in
2004.
How
awful
it
is
when
we
talk
about
them!As
natural
phenomena(自然现象),earthquake
happens
just
like
it
would
rain
and
thunder.People
can’t
avoid
earthquakes
but
can
try
our
best
to
predict
and
evacuate(疏散)before
it
happens.Building
stronger
houses
and
teaching
people
how
to
protect
themselves
when
there
is
an
earthquake
are
also
good
ways
to
reduce
damage.
Information
card
1.The
date
of
earthquake
in
Japan
in
2011
2.What’s
the
more
serious
danger
in
Japan
after
the
extreme
earthquake
3.The
disaster
which
usually
comes
with
earthquakes
4.The
number
of
the
people
who
died
in
Indonesian
tsunami
5.How
to
reduce
damage
and
teaching
people
how
to
protect
themselves.
Read
a
passage
about
the
earthquake
in
Japan,
finish
the
information
card.
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—————————————————.
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On
March
11th
Nuclear
power
station
explosion
Tsunami
300
thousand
Building
stronger
houses
What
will
you
do
if
an
earthquake
happens
If
you
are
……
How
will
you
protect
yourself
Brain-storm
What
to
do
during
an
earthquake.
Video
time
inside
A:
What
can
we
do
in
an
earthquake
Hide
_________________.
B:…
Do
not
____________high
buildings.
________________
windows
and
heavy
furniture.
_______________fires
jump
out
of
under
a
table
Stay
away
from
Keep
clear
of
Do
not
use
_________
the
lift
outside
A:
what
to
do
during
an
earthquake
B:…
________________buildings
Move
away
from
Do
not
stand
near_____________or
under
__________
If
you
are
in
a
bus
or
car,
_________.
street
lights
power
lines
stay
in
it
Be
carful
of
_____________.
Run
away
from
_________and
move
quickly
to
____________
falling
rocks
the
sea
higher
ground
Be
_______
Be
______
Keep
_______
calm
brave
helpful
书面表达
作为一名中学生，假如有一天你所在的地方突然发生地震，你认为你能做些什么和不能做什么？请你以“How
to
keep
safe
when
an
earthquake
happens ”为题写一篇短文。
内容包括：
1.
保持镇定，迅速躲到安全的地方(
move
to
a
safe
location
)去，如坚固的桌子下面。
2.
可以用手或软的东西保护(protect)脸和头。
3.
当确定震动停止时尽快跑到户外，若已在户外，就要远离高的建筑物。
4.
不要乘坐电梯。
作文要求：
1.
不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现学校的真实名称和学生的真实姓名。
2.
语句连贯，词数80个左右。
抄
组
集
连
抓
审
作文
集句成段，
添连接词
组段成篇，
加主题句
审清题意，
构建框架
连词成句，变换句式
抓住要点，
列关键词
抄写规范，
避免错误
如何写作
审清题意
弄清写作主题
弄清写作人称
弄清写作字数
弄清写作时态
弄清写作信息
弄清写作补充
弄清写作要求
作为一名中学生，假如有一天你所在的地方突然发生地震，你认为你能做些什么和不能做什么 请你以“How
to
keep
safe
when
an
earthqueke
happens”为题写一篇短文。
内容包括：
1.保持镇定，迅速躲在安全的地方(move
to
a
safe
location)去，如坚固的桌子下面。
2.
可以用手或软的东西保护(protect)脸和头。
3.
当确定震动停止时尽快跑到户外，若已在户外，就要远离高的建筑物。
4.
不要乘坐电梯。
作文要求：
1.不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现学校的
真实姓名和学生的真实姓名。
2.
语句连贯，词数80左右。
字数
主题
人称
时态
以一般现在时为主
已知信息
ending
body
beginning
hamburger
审清题意，构建框架
1.List
some
keywords
about
how
to
keep
safe
in
an
earthqueke
words
or
phrases:
__________________________
_________________________
__________________________
抓住要点，列关键词
pay
attention
to、keep
calm
run
out、keep
away
from
as…as
possible、try
to
do
sth.
1.
List
some
sentence
patterns
about
how
to
keep
safe
in
an
earthquake.
sentence
patterns
:
__________________________
_________________________
_________________________
2.
List
some
sentence
patterns
about
giving
advice.
sentence
patterns
:
__________________________
__________________________
___________________________
It
is
+adj.
+for
us
.+
to
do
When引导的时间状语从句
If引导的条件状语从句
should/must
do
…
try
to
do…
remember
to
do…
连词成句，变换句式
集句成段，组段成篇
Linking
words
:
__________________________
_________________________
First
of
all,first,second,third,what’s
more
at
last,last
but
not
least,in
a
word…
写作前：认真审题，划出要点
写作时：注意要求，规范写作
写作后：反复检查，追求完美
1、批改符号
2、内容要点和分数分布
3、档次和标准
1.统一批改符号，例如：
删除
插入
替代
佳句
句子不通畅
记住批改符号
Look
the
book
read
Beginning
引出话题。（2分）
卷面书写，酌情加减分（1分）
1
保持镇定……（3分）
2.可以用手或软的东西保护……(3分)
3.当确定震动停止时……(3分)
4.不要乘坐电梯
（3分）
总结话题（1分）
每语句中有错误酌情扣0.5-1分。
Writing
Body
Ending
作文自评，按照每点的具体分值给自己的作文评分。(满分15分)
作文展评，小组讨论评分，作文满分15分
第一档：12-15分
内容涵盖所有的要点，表达清楚，几乎没有语言错误。
第二档：11-12分
内容涵盖所有的要点，表达清楚，但有少量语言错误。
第三档：8-10分
内容涵盖大部分要点，表达尚清楚
,但有一些语言错误。
（以上为及格线）
第四档：4-7分
内容涵盖部分要点，写出少量句子，但表达不连贯，语言错误较多。
第五档：0-3分
只写出个别单词，不成句子，表达不清楚。
评分档次和要求：
展示（show
your
passage）
How
to
keep
safe
when
an
earthquake
happens
It’s
important
for
us
to
keep
safe
when
an
earthquake
happens.
We
should
pay
attention
to
the
following:First
of
all,we
must
keep
calm,and
then
move
to
a
safe
location
quickly,such
as
under
the
hard
tables.Second,we
should
protect
our
faces
and
heads
with
hands
or
other
soft
things.Third,when
the
shake
stops
surely,we
should
run
out
as
soon
as
possible
and
try
to
be
far
away
buildings.If
you
are
outside,remember
to
keep
away
from
tall
buildings.
Last
but
not
least,don’t
take
the
lift
at
this
moment.
I
hope
these
suggestions
can
help
you
a
lot
.
beginning
body
ending
If
an
earthquake
happened,
what
shall
we
do
抄
组
集
连
抓
审
作文
组段成篇，
加主题句
审清题意，
构建框架
连词成句，变换句式
抓住要点，
列关键词
Summary
集句成段，添连接词
抄写规范，
避免错误
Homework:
After
class,
self-edit
your
composition
according
to
what
we
have
learned
today
and
hand
it
in
tomorrow.注意:
1.
第三张幻灯片的信息归纳会有纸质文档给学生
2.
第五张幻灯片,点击空白处将有视频出现
3.第24张幻灯片点击图片处有超链接
谢谢~
