近日，某中学 “iPad进课堂”的消息引起了学生和家长们的讨论。你们学校的English Newsletter正在以iPads, coming into the classrooms为题举行征文活动，请根据下列表格提示的内容，用英语写一篇征文。
学生们认为 1.不需要背沉重的书包去上学2.很新鲜，学习更感兴趣3.……
家长们认为 1.影响孩子视力2.增加家庭负担
你的观点 1.……2.……
要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2）必须包括表格中所有的相关信息，并适当发挥；
3）词数：100词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents are arguing about the new teaching method.
It’s welcomed by most students. First, they needn’t carry heavy bags any more because of iPads. Second, it’s really cool to have lessons with iPads. They will have more interest in it. Third, they believe that they will learn more and better than before.
However, it worries the parents a lot.. Some children use iPads for so long that they will have poorer eyesight. Besides, they will pay no attention to their lessons. What is worse, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
In my opinion, there are many advantages to use iPads in classrooms. We can read and search for information on the Internet any time. It’s easy for us to chat with our classmates and teachers about our lessons. I love iPads.
近年来，作为一种新兴的交流方式，微信（WeChat）正变得越来越受欢迎。请根据以下提示写一篇英语短文谈谈微信的利弊以及你的观点，并适当扩展。
赞成者 反对者 你自己
观点 利于交友获取新闻便于交流 浪费时间损害健康泄露个人信息 考生自拟（至少2点）
词汇： 泄露信息 leak information
注意：
1.词数90左右。短文的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数；
2.短文须包括所有要点，不要遂词翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺；
3.短文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
WeChat, Good or Bad
Nowadays, WeChat is becoming more and more popular in the world. Is it good or bad People have different ideas about it.
It is welcomed by some people. They think it makes a great difference to our life. First, it creates more chances for people to make friends. WeChat offers the information about people around us. Second, it is a way of getting up to date news. Third, it is easy for us to keep in touch with friends.
However, some don’t like WeCat. They think it may waste time. Many people can’t stop looking at their mobile phones. As a result, they can’t go on with their work or study. Besides, It will do harm to their health if people keep looking at mobile phoes. What’s more, our personal information is easy to be revealed.
In my opinion, WeChat has many advantages as long as we use it wisely.
当今，越来越多的人喜欢在手机上购物，请你根据下列表格中的要点提示，以“Shopping on the mobile phone”为题用英语写一篇短文。
赞成者 反对者 你自己
观点 购买付款方便选择多有优惠 1.容易受骗2.过度消费3.账户不安全 考生自拟（至少2点）
词汇：bank account 银行账户
注意：
1.词数90左右。短文的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数；
2.短文须包括所有要点，不要遂词翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺；
3.短文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
Shopping on the mobile phone
Some people think it is easier and faster to shop on the mobile phone. What’s more, there are lots of things for us to choose from. Besides, there is often a special offer if people shop on the mobile phone.
However, other people have different ideas. First, they think people are more likely to be cheated when they shop on the mobile phone. Second, shopping on the phone is so convenient that some people can’t stop shopping until they run out of money. Finally, when shopping on the phone, their bank accounts may be broken into by others.
I like shopping on the mobile phone because it can help save time. But as a student, I don’t think we should spend too much money or time on shopping.Writing
当堂练习 姓名：___________
根据下列提示写一篇作文
近年来，作为一种新兴的交流方式，微信（WeChat）正变得越来越受欢迎。
请根据以下提示写一篇英语短文谈谈微信的利弊以及你的观点，并适当扩展。
赞成者 反对者 你自己
观点 利于交友获取新闻便于交流 浪费时间损害健康泄露个人信息 考生自拟（至少2点）
词汇：泄露信息 leak information
注意： 1.词数90左右。短文的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数；
2.短文须包括所有要点，不要遂词翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺；
3.短文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
WeChat，Good or Bad
Nowadays, WeChat is becoming more and more popular in the world. Is it good
or bad Different people hold different ideas.
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写作评价标准：
第一档：符合要求，内容完整，层次结构清晰，表达清楚，基本无错。16-20分。
第二档：基本符合要求，内容较完整，结构较清晰，表达较清楚，有少量错误。12—15分。
第三档：部分内容符合要求，内容不够完整，层次结构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，
语言有较多错误。6-11分。
第四档：不符合题目要求，整篇表达不清楚，或照抄、拼凑几个词语。0-5分。
档次 得分
自评
他评
师评
课后作业
当今，越来越多的人喜欢在手机上购物，请你根据下列表格中的要点提示，
以“Shopping on the mobile phone”为题用英语写一篇短文。
赞成者 反对者 你自己
观点 购买付款方便选择多有优惠 1.容易受骗2.过度消费3.账户不安全 考生自拟（至少2点）
词汇：bank account 银行账户
注意：
1.词数90左右。短文的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数；
2.短文须包括所有要点，不要遂词翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺；
3.短文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
Shopping on the mobile phone
Nowadays, more and more people like shopping on the mobile phone. __________________
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Symbol Meaning Example error
S A spelling error (拼写错误） The anser is right.
WO A mistake in word order（词序错误） I like very much it.
G A grammar mistake（语法错误） I am going to buy some furnitures.
T Wrong verb tense（时态错误） I see him yesterday.
WW Wrong word (用词错误) I am interested on Jazz music
P A punctuation mistake（标点错误) Do you like London.
O Something is not necessary.(多余之处） He was not too strong enough.(共25张PPT)
Writing
Taicang Xinqu Middle School Lu Linlin
不同观点型写作专训
My student Jim
The senior high school entrance examination (中考) is coming…
upset 沮丧
14
Level Evaluation criterion 评价标准
第一档 符合题目要求，内容完整，层次结构清晰，表达清楚，语言无误。16-20分。
第二档 基本符合题目要求，内容较完整，层次结构较清晰，表达较清楚，语言有少量错误。12—15分。
第三档 部分内容符合题目要求，内容不够完整，层次结构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，语言有较多错误。6-11分。
第四档 不符合题目要求，整篇表达不清楚，或照抄、拼凑几个词语。0-5分。
审题
Person(人称)
Tense(时态)
Theme(主题)
Structure(结构)
Word number(字数)
…
Before writing, what should we do
What should we pay attention to
近日，某中学 “iPad进课堂”的消息引起了学生和家长们的讨论。你们学校的English Newsletter正在以iPads, going into the classrooms为题举行征文活动，请根据下列表格提示的内容，用英语写一篇征文。
要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2）必须包括表格中所有的相关信息，并适当发挥；
3）词数：90词左右；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
学生们认为 1.不需要背沉重的书包去上学
2.很酷，学习更感兴趣
3.……
家长们认为 1.影响孩子视力
2.增加家庭负担
你的观点 1.……
2.……
人称：
时态：
主题：
字数：
结构…
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
审题
一，三
一现
90
近日，某中学 “iPad进课堂”的消息引起了学生和家长们的讨论。你们学校的English Newsletter正在以iPads, going into the classrooms为题举行征文活动，请根据下列表格提示的内容，用英语写一篇征文。
要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2）必须包括表格中所有的相关信息，并适当发挥；
3）词数：90词左右；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
学生们认为 1.不需要背沉重的书包去上学
2.很酷，学习更感兴趣
3.……
家长们认为 1.影响孩子视力
2.增加家庭负担
你的观点 1.……
2.……
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
审题
分段
近日，某中学 “iPad进课堂”的消息引起了学生和家长们的讨论。你们学校的English Newsletter正在以iPads, going into the classrooms为题举行征文活动，请根据下列表格提示的内容,用英语写一篇征文。
要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2）必须包括表格中所有的相关信息，并适当发挥；
3）词数：90词左右；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
学生们认为 1.不需要背沉重的书包去上学
2.很酷，学习更感兴趣
3.……
家长们认为 1.影响孩子视力
2.增加家庭负担
你的观点 1.……
2.……
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
审题
分段
学生们认为 1.不用背重书包上学
2.很酷，学习更感兴趣
3.……
1. 他们不用背重书包上学。
They will learn more and better than before.
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
审题
分段
扩充
They don’t have to carry heavy bags to school.
They needn’t carry heavy bags to school any more because of iPads.
It’s cool. It’s more interesting to study.
It’s very cool to have lessons with iPads. And they will have more interest in study.
They don’t have to carry heavy bags to school.
They needn’t carry heavy bags to school any more because of iPads.
学生们认为 1.不用背重书包上学
2.很酷，学习更感兴趣
3.……
It’s cool. It’s more interesting to study.
It’s very cool to have lessons with iPads. And they will have more interest in study.
They will learn more and better than before.
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
审题
分段
扩充
It is welcomed by most students.
_____, they needn’t carry heavy bags to school any more because of iPads. ________, it’s very cool to have lessons with iPads. And they will have more interest in study . ______, they will learn more and better than before.
_________________________________________
添加连词
First
Second
Third
家长们认为 1.影响孩子视力
2.增加家庭负担
_________________________________________
However, it worries parents a lot!
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
添加主题句
审题
分段
扩充
美化
添加主题句
学生们认为 1.不需要背沉重的书包去上学
2.很酷，学习更感兴趣
3.……
They think it will influence children’s eyesight. It will increase a family’s burden.
However, it worries parents a lot! Some children use iPads for so long that they will have poor eyesight. Besides, they will pay no attention to their lessons. What’s more, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
家长们认为 1.影响孩子视力
2.增加家庭负担
However, it worries parents a lot!
审题
分段
扩充
美化
Besides, they will pay no attention to their lessons. What’s more, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
What’s more, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
分析关系 适当扩充
美化句子
表并列：
both…and; not only…but also; neither..nor...
表转折：
but; however;…
表因果：
because; so; as a result; so…that…;
表目的：
so that…; in order to…;
表观点：
in my opinion; I think…
表总结:
in all; in a word…
Linking words (连词)
审题
分段
扩充
美化
In my opnion, there are many advatages to use iPads in classrooms. We can read and search for information on the Internet any time. I love iPads！
opinion
advantages
审题
分段
扩充
美化
你的观点 1.……
2.……
选择最有把握的表达方式
I think iPads should come into classrooms. There is no need to worry about the bad points as long as(只要) we can use it properly.
审题
分段
扩充
美化
检修
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! …
It’s welcomed by most students. First, they needn’t carry heavy bags any more because of iPads. It’s convenient. Second, it’s really cool to have lessons with iPads. They will have more interest in study. Third, they believe that they will learn more and better than before.
However, it worries the parents. Some children use iPads for so long that they have poor eyesight. Besides, some pay no attention to their lessons. What is more, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
In my opinion, there are many advantages to use iPads in classrooms. We can read and search for information on the Internet any time. I love iPads.
审题
分段
扩充
美化
检修
要点
字数
语法
人称
时态
主谓一致
单复数
固定搭配
…
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have argued about the new teaching method.
It’s welcomed by most students. First, they needn’t carry heavy bags any more because of iPads. Second, it’s really cool to have lessons with iPads. They will be more interest in study. Third, they believe that they will learn more and better than before.
However, it worries the parents a lot! Some children use iPads for too long that they have poor eyesight. Besides, some pay no attention to their lessons. What is more, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
In my opinion, there are many advantages to use iPads in classrooms. We can read and search for informations on the Internet any time. I love iPads!
找一找文中的错误并修改
interested
so
/
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method.
It’s welcomed by most students. First, they needn’t carry heavy bags any more because of iPads. Second, it’s really cool to have lessons with iPads. They will be more interested in study. Third, they believe that they will learn more and better than before.
However, it worries the parents a lot! Some children use iPads for so long that they have poor eyesight. Besides, some pay no attention to their lessons. What is more, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
In my opinion, there are many advantages to use iPads in classrooms. We can read and search for information on the Internet any time. I love iPads!
不同观点
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method..
It’s welcomed by most students/some people. First, they needn’t carry heavy bags a
ny more because of iPads. Second, it’s really cool to have lessons with iPads. They will be more interested in study. Third, tFhey believe that they will learn more and better than before.
However, it worries the parents/others a lot. Some children use iPads for so long that they have poorr eyesight. Besides, some pay no attention to their lessons. What is worse, some poor families can’t afford to buy iPads.
In my opinion, there are many advantages to use iPads in classrooms. We can read and search for information on the Internet any time. I love iPads.
Some people think/prefer to …/like...
...
While others don’t agree/ think so…
However, it is not welcomed by others…
As for me, I want to….
I think we can…
First, 原因1; Second, 原因2; Third, 原因3....
理由1；Besides, 理由2; What’s more, 理由3....
不同观点型
审题
分段
扩充
美化
检修
How can we improve our writing
近年来，作为一种新兴的交流方式，微信（WeChat）正变得越来越受欢迎。请根据以下提示写一篇英语短文谈谈微信的利弊以及你的观点，并适当扩展。
词汇：泄露信息： leak information
注意：
1.词数90左右。短文的开头已写好,不计入总词数；
2.短文须包括所有要点，不要遂词翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺；
3.短文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
赞成者 反对者 你自己
观
点 利于交友
获取新闻
便于交流 浪费时间
损害健康
泄露个人信息 考生自拟
（至少2点）
审题
分段
扩充
美化
检修
人称：
时态：
主题：
字数：
结构…
一，三
一现
90
WeChat, Good or Bad
Nowadays, WeChat is becoming more and more popular in the world. Is it good or bad People hold different ideas.
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
档次 得分
自评
他评
师评
WeChat, Good or Bad
Nowadays, WeChat is becoming more and more popular in the world. Is it good or bad People hold different ideas.
Some people think it makes a great difference to our life. First, it creates more chances for people to make friends. Second, it is a way of getting the latest news. Third, it is easy for us to keep in touch with friends.
However, WeCat isn’t welcomed by others. They think it may waste time. Many people can’t stop looking at their mobile phones. As a result, they can’t go on with their work or study. Besides, It will do harm to their health if people keep checking it. What’s more, it will leak our personal information.
In my opinion, WeChat is worth using though there are some disadvantages. We only need to use it properly.
Homework:
当今，越来越多的人喜欢在手机上购物，请你根据下列表格中的要点提示，以“Shopping on the mobile phone”为题用英语写一篇短文。
词汇：bank account 银行账户; 受骗 be cheated
注意：
1.词数90左右。短文的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数；
2.短文须包括所有要点，不要遂词翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯、通顺；
3.短文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
赞成者 反对者 你自己
观
点 购买付款方便
选择多
有优惠 1.容易受骗
2.过度消费
3.账户不安全 考生自拟
（至少2点）
Shopping on the mobile phone
Some people think it is easier and faster to shop on the mobile phone. What’s more, there are lots of things for us to choose from. Besides, there is often a special offer if people shop on the mobile phone.
However, other people have different ideas. First, they think people are more likely to be cheated when they shop on the mobile phone. Second, shopping on the phone is so convenient that some people can’t stop shopping until they run out of money. Finally, when shopping on the phone, their bank accounts may be broken into by others.
I like shopping on the mobile phone because it can help save time. But as a student, I don’t think we should spend too much money or time on shopping.课 题 讲 学 时 间
Writing 2016.3
课前准备
研读写作评价标准（见第2页） 姓名:_________________
近来，某学校把iPad引入课堂辅助教学，引起了学生和家长们的讨论。你们学校的English Newsletter正在以iPads, going into the classrooms为题举行征文活动，请根据下列表格提示的内容，用英语写一篇征文。
学生认为 1. 不需要背沉重的书包去上学2. 很酷，学习更感兴趣3.……
家长认为 1. 影响孩子视力2. 增加家庭负担
你的观点 1.……2.……
要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2）必须包括表格中所有的相关信息，并适当发挥；
3）词数：90词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
审题填下表
Topic（话题）
Person (人称)
Tense (时态)
word number
Type (类型) article of different views (不同观点型文章)
参考词汇： 第一人称 the first person; 第二人称 the second person; 一般现在时 simple present tense; 一般过去 simple past tense;
根据上面写作题列提纲分段
Introduction: Can you use an iPad in the classroom…. (第 ______ 段)
_____________ 2.
Main body （第_____段） 3.
1.
———————
（第_____段） 2
Conclusion _______________ (第 ______ 段)
根据下列提示写一篇作文
姓名:_________________
近来，某学校把iPad引入课堂辅助教学，引起了学生和家长们的讨论。你们学校的English Newsletter正在以iPads, going into the classrooms为题举行征文活动，请根据下列表格提示的内容，用英语写一篇征文。
学生们认为 1.不需要背沉重的书包去上学2.很酷，学习更感兴趣3.……
家长们认为 1.影响孩子视力2.增加家庭负担
你的观点 1.……2.……
要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；
2）必须包括表格中所有的相关信息，并适当发挥；
3）词数：90词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
Can you use an iPad in the classroom The answer is yes! Recently, students and parents have discussed about the new teaching method(方法).
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写作评价标准：
第一档：符合要求，内容完整，层次结构清晰，表达清楚，基本无错。16-20分。
第二档：基本符合要求，内容较完整，层次较清晰，表达较清楚，有少量错误。12—15分。
第三档：部分内容符合要求，内容不够完整，层次结构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，语言有较多错误。6-11分。
第四档：不符合题目要求，整篇表达不清楚，或照抄、拼凑几个词语，词组。0-5分。
档次 得分
自评9下Writing
Lu Linlin, Taicang Xinqu Middle School
Learning goals:
By the end of this lesson, students are expected to
be inspired in writing better sentences.
have more ideas in writing articles of different views.
Teaching procedure:
Step 1 Lead-in
Get to know the evaluation criterion in students’ writing.
Find out their own goals in writing.
Step 2 Presentation of a sample writing
Analyze the material and divide the article into paragraphs.
Deal with each paragraph and think about better sentences to write the major points.
Think about better ways to join sentences and paragraphs together.
Learn to list the aspects when checking the writing.
Pay attention to the handwriting.
Remember the useful expressions in writing articles of different views.
Step 3 Practice
Analyze the second writing material and write.
Self-check and mark.
Step4 Group work
Take turns to check writing in groups.
Evaluate classmates’ writing.
Step 5 Homework
Write another composition about shopping on mobile phones.
