Unit11 How was your school trip?( section B 3a-3c)
【学习目标】
1.（98%学生）能通过写作修改评价量表和老师的批注，找到自己写作的薄弱点；通过对例文出
现的常见语法和拼写错误的修改和老师的批注，独立改正写作中出现的类似错误；
2.（95%学生）能通过对例文的分析和学习，再一次明确日记的书写格式；完善文章的结构框架，使文章层次清晰，并注重文章段落结构的意识；
3.（90%学生）能通过对两篇例文的对比分析和学习，正确运用一般过去时态描述人物和事件，抒发情感，完善丰富写作内容；学会使用常见的连接词表示顺序和逻辑关系，使文章更加连贯
4.（80%学生）能通过对例句的对比分析，能欣赏优美的语言；学会使用更加具体的词汇，短语及句型，使文章语言更准确得体；并注意文章中避免出现中式英语，使语言表达更加地道；
5. (85%学生) 能通过参考写作修改评价量表和文章修改思维导图及老师的批改，独立或通过小组讨论修改自己的文章，二次成文。并能根据写作修改及评价量表，通过小组讨论合作的形式，再次进行自评和互评
【目标—活动—评价 设计】
学习模块
活动设计
对应目标
评价设计
writing
Pre-revising：
例文找错改错比赛；
目标1
1.回答问题（合作赋分评价）
While-revising:
正确划分出例文文章结构，使例文文章层次更加清晰。
根据预习视频的思维导图及两篇例文的对比分析，学会从事件和情感两方面完善丰富写作内容；
对比分析两篇例文，注意关联词的使用；并通过练习学会使用关联词
通过写作中出现的一些句子对比，总结美化文章语言的方法；
根据导图和写作评价量表修改文章,二次成文；
目标2
目标3
目标3
目标 4
目标4
2.回答问题（合作赋分评价）
3回答问题（合作赋分评价）
4.填空 （合作赋分评价）
5.回答问题（合作赋分评价）
6.参见书面表达写作及修改量表
Post-revising：
1.通过小组讨论形式，修改互评
目标 4
7参见书面表达写作及修改评价量表
【活动过程设计】
Step one. Pre-revising （目标1, 评价1： 学生找出错误加一分，改正错误加一分）
Task: Read the diary written by one of the students. Find out the mistakes and then correct them.
Step Two: While-revising
Task 1: divide the passage into three parts(目标2，评价2：学生回答正确加1分)
Task 2：Compare the two passages and summarize what the content should be about: facts and feelings (目标3，评价3：学生主动回答问题加1分，回答正确加2分)
Task 3：Learn to use link words to make the content more coherent.(目标3，评价4：学生回答正确加1分)
Task 4： Learn to beautify the language by comparing sentences and summarize the mind-map of how to revise the writing.(目标4，评价5；学生主动回答问题加1分，回答正确加2分)
Task 5: Revise the your writing and have a second writing.(目标4，评价6；参考写作及修改评价量表)
Step Three： post-revising
Task：Group Assesment (目标4，评价7：参见写作及修改评价量表)
Step four: Homework
Level A： Revise your writing again to make it better.
Level B: Write a diary about your family trip
【板书设计】
Unit 11 How was your school trip?
课件24张PPT。Unit 11 How was your school trip ? Section B (3a-3c)Please write a diary about your school tripWriting Competition: Find out the wrong sentences (句子） I and my classmates went to the museum yesterday. It is interesting. We by bus there. The weather was sunny. I looked a lot of things. I took some photos. For lunch, we eat some rice and vegetables. They was delicious. And we went to the gift shop. I bought some gifts for my parents. It was a great day.ttsJune 23rdJune 23rd
I went to the museum with my classmates yesterday. It was interesting. We went there by bus. The weather was sunny. I saw a lot of things. I took some photos. For lunch, we ate some rice and vegetables. They were delicious. And we went to the gift shop. I bought some gifts for my parents. It was a great day.
Assessment （评价）June 23rd
I went to the museum with my classmates yesterday. It was interesting. We went there by bus. The weather was sunny. I saw a lot of things. I took some photos. For lunch, we ate some fruit. And we went to the gift shop. I bought some gifts for my parents. It was a great day.
Structure(结构）Beginning Body Ending June 23rd
I went to the musem with my classmates yesterday. It was interesting.
We went there by bus. The weather was sunny. I saw a lot of things. I took some photos. For lunch, we ate some fruit. And We went to the gift shop. I bought some gifts for my parents.
It was a great day.
Where When
How was the trip How
What How was your day? (summary) Review: The mind mapContent(内容): important facts June 23rd
I went to the museum with my classmates yesterday. It was interesting.
We went there by bus. The weather was sunny. I saw a lot of things. I took some photos. For lunch, we ate some fruit. And We went to the gift shop. I bought some gifts for my parents.
It was a great day.
WhenWhereHowWhatHowJune 23rd
My school went to the museum yesterday. It was really interesting.
We went there by bus. The weather was sunny. I saw a lot of things. I also took some photos. For lunch, we ate some fruit. And we went to the gift shop. I bought some gifts for my parents.
It was a great day.
What kind of museum?What did you see?What did you buy ?
What did your parents think
of the gifts? How long? What did you do on the bus?science museum, history museum…Content(内容): examples and details (细节）
What did you see in a science museum?What did the robots do?What did you see in a history museum?Content(内容): examples and details (细节）
If you go to the zoo...What aninals did you see?What does the animal look like?I saw many animals, such as... and.... What did they do?June 23rd
My school went to the museum yesterday. It was really interesting.
We went there by bus. We visited the museum first. In the museum, I a lot of things. I also took some photos. I was so happy. Because I learned something important. For lunch, we ate some rice and vegetables. They were delicious. After that, we went to the gift shop. I bought a book for my sister. It was a little expensive. We went back at 6 o’clock. I was tired but happy.
All in all, it was a great day.
June 23rd
I went to the museum with my classmates yesterday. It was interesting.
We went there by bus. The weather was sunny. I saw a lot of things. I took some photos. For lunch, we ate some rice and vegetables. And we went to the gift shop. I bought some gifts for my parents.
It was a great day.Content(内容): feelings
What did you think of something? Why?
adj.: interesting, exciting, cute, boring...
What did your classmates think of it ?
different feelings
Linking words（关联词）: first表叙事顺序：first; then; after that; 表总结 ：all in all ThenAfter thatAll in all Linking words: 表并列：and; also; too.
表因果: because；so
表转折：but; however
表让步： although
In the museum, I saw a lot of things. I _____took some photos. I was happy________ I learned a lot. I bought a book for my sister __________ it is a little expensive. We went back at six o’clock. I was tired_____ happy.
also becausealthoughbutCompare: Which one is better? We had a school trip yesterday. It was good.
We had a school trip yesterday. It was exciting.
We had a good lunch. The food was good.
We had a good lunch. The food tasted delicious.3. I bought some gifts. They were good.
I bought some gifts. They looked beautiful. Polish: Use specific words
多用具体词汇Compare: Which one is better? I saw many animals and I took some photos.
I saw a lot of animals and I took quite a few photos. I bought some gifts. They were expensive.
I bought some gifts. They were a little expensive. Polish : Use good phrases （短语）
Compare: Which one is better? I saw a lot of animals in the zoo. They were cute. For lunch, we had some fruit. It was delicious. Then we went to the gift shop and bought some gifts. They were a little expensive.
I saw a lot of animals in the zoo. How cute they were! For lunch, we had some delicious fruit. Then we went to the gift shop and bought some gifts. They were a little expensive.
Polish: Use different sentence structures.
1. In the museum, I saw so many special things. It was exciting.
It was exciting to see so many special things in the museum. Polish: Use good sentence structures.
Compare: Which one is better? 2. The museum is so interesting. I want to go there again.
The museum is so interesting that I want to go there again. Compare: Which one is worse? 1. All in all, today was happy.
All in all, I had a happy day.
All in all, It was a happy day. 2. I saw two elephants have big ears.
I saw two elephants with big ears. No Chinglish (中式英语）. StructureContentLinking
wordsDateClearfacts
examplesfeelingsNecessaryPolishGood wordsDifferent sentence structuresNo ChinglishSpecific words and phrasesDifferent sentence structuresNo ChinglishSummary: How to make your writing better? Don’t forget your handwriting!Revise(修改) your writingGroup Assessment(评价）Homework Level A:
Revise(修改)your writing again to make it better if you still get less than 6 points.
Level B:
Write a diary about your family trip.
Thank you！
