课件37张PPT。Guided writing ---beautify your sentencesHow to improve my writing score from15 to at least 20?Please grade the two compositions.
As for you, what's your main trouble in writing?易于下笔,却难拿高分。
找不出毛病,却难拿高分。习作二By talking with them, my oral English has improved a lot.(4) Finally, some English programs like CCTV-9 contribute to the progress in my speaking ability(5). Through this channel, not only am I kept informed of the current events going on both at home and abroad, I also learn the standard pronunciation and intonation by repeated imitation(6) .
Practice makes perfect, as the saying goes. Only in this way can we improve our spoken English.
What can we conclude? first, also,finally are used to make the composition more organised.
the sentences in blue are not only advanced but also help make the composition more coherent.
创新方案P90-94advanced vocabulary强调句倒装句
虚拟语气
with复合结构advanced
sentence
structures三大从句非谓语动词被动句…小试牛刀(2013·陕西高考)
假定你是李华。请根据写作要点用英语写一篇周记, 记述你周末帮助家人做家务的一次经历。
写作要点: 1. 做家务的理由
2. 做家务的过程;
3. 你的感受。
注意: 1. 词数100左右;
2. 开头部分已写好, 不计入总词数。
I am an 18-year-old middle school student. I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework. Because I feel quite sorry for that, I begin to think about what to do to help.
Last Sunday, when my parents went out shopping, I suddenly got an idea. I could give the rooms a thorough cleaning.
Firstly, I collected all the books, newspapers and other things and put them in place. They were scattered in the rooms . Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture.After that, I swept and mopped the floors.
At this very moment, my parents came back. My mother was surprised and moved to see all the rooms tidy and floors shining. She gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes. Although I was tired , I never felt so happy.
【炼句】
1. 对不能帮父母做家务感到非常愧疚, 我开始思考做什么来帮助他们。
a. (一般表达) Because I feel quite sorry for that, I begin to think about what to do to help.
b. 非谓语动词(短语)作原因状语
Feeling quite sorry for that, I begin to think about what to do to help.
Advanced sentence structures第一步,去掉连词when;第二步,看前后两句话的主语,主语一致,
去掉主语第三步,改从句中的谓语动词为分词The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news.Hearing the bad news, the young man couldn’t help crying.hearingWhen the students were asked whether they needed a period for individual learning, they held different opinons.
Asked whether they needed a period for individual learning, they held different opinons.
practice more1. If you work harder, you will do better in the exam next time.
, you will do better in the exam next time.
2. Because my friend was frightened of losing his job, he said nothing to the police.
, my friend said nothing to the police.Working hard Frightened of losing his job 2. 首先我收集所有的书籍、报纸和其他散在房间里的物品, 并把它们放到合适的地方。
a. (一般表达)All the books, newspapers and other things were scattered in the rooms. I collected them and put them in place.
b. 非谓语动词(短语)作后置定语
c.(定语从句)
Firstly I collected all the books, newspapers and other things that are scattered in the rooms and put them in place.
Firstly I collected all the books, newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place. 3.我突然想到一个主意:
(一般表达)
I suddenly got an idea.
I could give the rooms a thorough cleaning
高级句型(it为形式主语/sb. come up with)
I suddenly came up with an idea that I could give the rooms a thorough cleaning.
It occurred to me that I could give the rooms a thorough cleaning.4.我擦拭了所有的家具。之后,我又扫地拖地。
一般表达: I wiped the dust off all the furniture. After that, I swept and mopped the floors.
高级表达:(定语从句)
高级表达: I wiped the dust off all the furniture, after which, I swept and mopped the floors.
5.妈妈看到房间整洁,地板光亮,很是惊讶和感动。
一般表达:My mother was surprised and moved to see all the rooms tidy and floors shining. She gave me a hug.
高级表达:形容词(短语)作状语
Surprised and moved to see all the rooms tidy and floors shining, my mother gave me a hug .6.虽然我很累,但是我从未感到如此幸福。
一般表达:Although I was tired, I never felt so happy.
高级表达:(倒装)
高级表达:(倒装)Tired as I was, I never felt so happy.
I am an 18-year-old middle school student. I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework. Feeling quite sorry for that, I begin to think about what to do to help.
Last Sunday, when my parents went out shopping, it occurred to me that I could give the rooms a thorough cleaning.
Firstly I collected all the books, newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place. Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture, after which, I swept and mopped the floors.
At this very moment, my parents came back. Surprised and moved to see all the rooms tidy and floors shining, my mother gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes. Tired as I was, I never felt so happy.
TipsI have an apple which is red.
Please tell me the time that you arrive and the days that you stay.
no neednot correct锦上添花,而不是弄巧成拙大显身手 假如你是某大学的学生李津。你校英语俱乐部将选举新一届副主席,负责规划、组织俱乐部的相关活动。你欲参选。请按以下提示,写一篇竞选演讲稿。
1.个人优势介绍(如性格,特长等);
2.组织校内活动的设想(如举办讲座、英语晚会等);
3.表达当选的愿望。
注意: 1. 短文词数100左右;
2. 可以增加细节,以使行文连贯。
参考词汇:
副主席:vice president, 竞选run for
Good morning, my dear friends,
My name is Li _______________
____________________________
____________________________
____________________________
______________________________________________________________________________________
Thank you. 审题: 谋篇布局写作意图个人优势 组织活动设想表达当选愿望
I am hard-working, and I am gifted in English.I have been considered to be a good English speaker. I have organised many activities so I have a lot of experience.
If I get elected, I am going to give lectures and hold English parties.
I'd appreciate it if you give me a chance.利用高级表达并可适当增加细节
Accumulation+Practice+Reflection
=SuccessHomework书面表达针对训练(四)Thank you for listening.