1.4 Writing
"三步五要素法"写游记
话题分析
本单元主要话题是节日与假期,与本单元相关的写作题目可以与节假日里的旅游相结合。命题内容以游览为主,根据提示记叙在节假日里旅游的大致情况。写作时应注意游记的内容、格式以及事态的运用。
内容一般从以下几方面着手:
1. Where did you go?
2. How was the weather?
3. What did you do?
4. How was the food?
5. How was the people?
6. How did you feel about the trip?
写作步骤
◆ 步骤一:在第一行写明日期(年月日与星期)和天气等信息。
◆ 步骤二:正文用一般过去时态描述当天发生的事情。
◆ 步骤三:在日记的最后描述自己的感受和体会。
假设你去年夏天和你的家人一起去了海边度假,请以"My Vacation"为题,讲述一下你的旅游经历。
写作要点:1. 你和家人在海滩的活动。
2. 你对这次度假的感受。
写作要求:条理清晰,意思连贯,词句通顺。词数80左右。
My Vacation
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【思路导航】
本篇作文叫小作者介绍去年暑假去海边度假的情况,小作者首先要阅读前面的提示认真审题,确定文章的中心。注意文章文体、人称和时态。写作完成后,还必须认真查验是否有漏写情况、有无拼写错误及标点误用等。
【佳作展示】
My vacation
Last summer I went to the beach with my family. Our vacation was pretty good. We went there by bus and the bus trip was relaxing. The beach was very beautiful and clean. I played with the sand. It was sunny, cool and wet. The people there were friendly and the food was delicious. I ate lots of sea food. We enjoyed the vacation very much and we hope to go there again.
【名师点评】
这篇短文使用了大量的较高级表达,可见该生英语功底扎实。如The people there were friendly and the food was delicious. I ate lots of sea food. We enjoyed the vacation very much and we hope to go there again.等使文章的表达更丰富,更有逻辑性,更富有条理。
(一)
上个月2号(5月2号),周五,天气晴朗,你和父母去北京观光旅游,参观了以下几个地方,玩得非常开心。
要求:1. 写一篇英语日记,注意格式;
2. 词数不少于60。
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(二)
请以"My Vacation"为题写一篇短文。假如你是 Mike,你印象最深的是去年暑假和家人一起去乡下(countryside)的爷爷家。乡下的空气很好,天气也不错;你和爷爷去爬山、钓鱼(go fishing),和堂弟去游泳;奶奶每天都给你做好吃的。你们过得很愉快。
要求50词左右,文章的开头已给出。
My Vacation
I remembered my last summer vacation ________________________________________________________
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(三)
你在Facebook上认识到了美国男孩John和印度女孩Seema,并谈论了各自的假期生活。请根据表格以"Summer vacation around the world"为题写一篇文章。
In America
◆与父母一起去野营;
◆参加各种社团;
◆作为志愿者(volunteer)去图书馆工作。
In India
◆睡觉休息;
◆帮父母干农活;
◆和同学一起制作模型。
My summer vacation
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注意:1. 文章必须包括表中全部内容,可适当增加细节;
2. 文章开头已给出,不计入总词数,你只需接着写;
3. 词数:不少于60。
Summer vacation around the world
Students in different countries have different life in summer vacation. In America, ______________________
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参考答案
(一)
【思路导航】
【佳作展示】
Friday May 2nd Sunny
The weather was sunny and warm. I went to Beijing with my parents on vacation. ①It was my first time there, so everything was really interesting. We visited three places and took quite a few photos. ②First we went to Tian’anmen Square. ③It was beautiful. ④Then we went to the Palace Museum. We saw many old things there. ⑤It was cool. ⑥In the afternoon, we went to the Great Wall. We saw many beautiful things from the top. ⑦It was great and exciting, I think. we had a good time there.
【名师点评】
(二)
【思路导航】
这是一篇提纲类作文,要求写一篇介绍自己假期的短文。本题给出的材料较为详细,动笔前应先认真阅读材料,围绕所给材料组织内容,确定主要短语、句式等问题。通过阅读材料可知这篇短文主要使用的人称就是第一人称,时态为一般过去时态,这方面需要注意的问题比较少。动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲,写出关键单词。注意语意通顺,符合逻辑关系,适当使用连接词。
【佳作展示】
I remembered my last summer vacation. My family and I went to see my grandparents in the countryside. The air there is fresh, and the weather there was good, too. I went to the mountains and went fishing with my grandfather. And I went swimming with my cousin. My grandmother cooked delicious food for us every day. We had a great time.
(三)
【思路导航】
这是一篇给材料作文。本文给出了一些要点,并给出了作文的开头。我们要做的就是用正确的英语把要点表达出来,并适当发挥想象说出自己的观点。动笔前要认真阅读材料,不要遗漏要点,并适当发挥。根据材料内容可知本文主要是用一般现在时态来写,要注意主谓一致等问题。写作中要适当使用连词,注意上下文联系紧密,符合逻辑关系。
【佳作展示】
Summer vacation around the world
Students in different countries have different life in summer vacation. In America, they usually go camping with their parents. They often take all kinds of groups. They also work as a volunteer in the library. In India, the students want to have a good sleep to relax themselves. They often help their parents to work on the farm. They are with each other to make models. My summer vacation is coming to the end. I have spent a happy summer vacation with my parent and my younger sister. During the holiday, we went to Dalian for a visit, I saw the beautiful sea over there, it was really amazing. When I was swimming in the sea, as if I was a little fish, I like that feeling very much.
【名师点评】