Review of Unit 5 Writing 课件 24张PPT

(共24张PPT)
Writing English Composition
---Changes in Our Hometown
Compare A with B, which is better? Why?
Compare A with B, which is better? Why?
1.Which one is better?
Passage A （ ）Passage B （ ）
2.Why?
Because Passage is better at
Layout ( )
Grammar ( )
Vocabulary ( )
Sentence ( )
Logic ( )
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习作演练(15分)
请根据下列表格的提示，写一篇题为“Changes in Our Hometown ”的英语短文。
过去 1.旧房 2.河水肮脏
3.步行、骑自行车上班
4.道路狭窄 5.居住条件差
现在 1.高楼 2.河水清澈
3.乘公交车、小汽车上班
4.环形路宽阔 5.居住环境舒适
个人感受 I’m glad to see … I think …
要求：
1.必须包含所有提示信息，词数在80词左右，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数；
2.意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范；
3.请勿使用真实姓名、校名及提示信息以外的地名。
Changes in Our Hometown
In the past ten years ,great changes have taken place in our hometown.
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过去
in the past
旧房
河水肮脏
步行、骑自行车上班
道路狭窄
居住条件差
old houses
dirty rivers
go to work on foot or by bike/
walk or ride a bike to work
narrow roads
poor/hard living conditions

now
现在
高楼
河水清澈
乘公汽、小汽车上班
环形路宽阔
居住环境舒适
tall buildings
clean rivers
go to work by bus or car/
Ride a bike or drive a car to work
wide ring roads
comfortable living conditions
he
认 真 审 题
2.What contents should be written?
1.How many paragraphs should be written ?
3.What kinds of tenses will be used?
4.What linking words will be used?
5.How many words should be written?
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认 真 审 题
2.What contents should be written?
(1)Introduction
(2)Details
(3) Conclusion
In the past ten years , great changes have taken place in our hometown .
In the past…… Now……
I’m glad to see…, I think …
1.How many paragraphs should be written ?
Three .
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认 真 审 题
4.What linking words will be used?
and , but ,or, not only …but also, because ,what’s more……
5.How many words should be written?
About 80 words.
3.What kinds of tenses will be used in the composition?
Present Perfect ,
Simple Present
Simple Past ,
列出提纲或画出写作导图
(make a writing map)。


Conclusion :Your feelings
(I’m glad to see…, I think …)
Introduction
Details
The houses, the river, the roads, the way to go to work, the living conditions……
Take place great changes
几点建议：


3.请注意标点和首字母大小写。
( Punctuation and initial case)
1.请注意正确运用时态。(Tense)
2.请注意恰当使用关联词 。(the linking words)
Correct the composition by yourself!
4.请注意书写整洁、美观，得高分的第一要素哦！
(Handwriting)
1. Exchange your articles with another group , then underline the beautiful sentences and circle the mistakes.

2. Score the composition.
评分标准（Writing score standard）
档次 评分
范围 要 求
五 13-15 能写出全部要点，行文连贯，语言基本无误，完全达到写作要求。
四 10-12 能写出全部要点，行文基本连贯，语言有少量错误，基本达到写作要求。

三 7-9 能写出大部分要点，语言虽有较多错误，尚能达意。
二 4-6 能写出大部分要点，语言错误多，未达到写作要求。
一 0-3 只写出一、二个句子，语言错误多,抄袭其他内容，所写内容无法看清者一律给0分。
Correct the mistakes in writing
1.时态的误用

2.“汉语式”英语

3.结构不完整

4.综合性语言错误
(首字母大写、拼写、主谓一致、标点、冠词、名词单复数…）


One possible version
Changes in Our Hometown
In the past ten years , great changes have taken place in our hometown .
In the past ,there used to be old houses . The river was very dirty . The roads were narrow and the living conditions were hard . People went to work on foot or by bike . But now there are many tall buildings in my hometown . The river is clean and the water is clear .There are many ring roads and the living conditions are comfortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car.
I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown . But I think it’s still important to remember the past . It tells that we should cherish the present life .
1.Before writing, read the topic requirement carefully, then make a writing outline/map.
2.While writing, use English expressions as often as possible.
3.After writing, correct your writing again and again, make it correct 、fluent and neat.

Some tips for you!
Homework
1. Continue to correct your composition till it’s wonderful.
2.Write a composition.
习总书记说：“绿水青山就是金山银山。”为了响应他的号召，近年来我市新建了许多美丽的公园，这些公园成了市民休闲健身的好去处，市民的幸福感倍增。请你根据下列提示，写一篇80词左右的英语短文，谈谈公园给城市环境及人们的生活带来的好处。
城市环境 美化城市，净化空气；
贴近自然，欣赏美景……
人们生活 休闲娱乐，放松身心；
运动锻炼，强身健体……
个人感受 Because of many good policies ,I think our lives will become better and better ……