Unit 1 building the future Task(2) 课件（28张PPT）

(共28张PPT)

English Writing



What makes a good composition?
What makes a good composition?
Good and clear handwriting
Clear and accurate content
Precise structure
Varied sentence pattern
Advanced vocabulary
Writing
假定你是李华，计划暑假期间去英国学习英语，为期六周。下面的广告引起了你的注意，请给该校写封信，询问有关情况（箭头所指内容）。
注意：1．词数100左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
3．参考词汇：住宿 accommodation。


Part 3.语气错误(礼貌问题)
Part 1.书信格式错误
Part 2.审题信息有误
Step1.学生写作常见错误
Part 4.句子结构错误
Part 5.卷面问题


称呼格式错误及无落款
Part 1.书信格式错误

称呼错误且使用中式英语


正确书信格式
DearTom,
____________________________________________________________
Yours,
LiHua
Dear Editor,
____________________________________________________________
Yours truly,
LiHua
Dear Sir\Madam,
____________________________________________________________
Yours truly,
LiHua


题目中给出具体写信对象的名字或职位称呼的


题目中要求给报社、杂志等刊物写信的


题目中未给出具体写信对象的
Part 2.审题信息有误



与题干要求不符

文章中出现不相关信息
Part 3.语气错误（礼貌问题）

Some useful expressions(礼貌问题)
Would you mind doing sth.
It’s kind of you to do sth.
I’d appreciate it if you could do sth.
I’d be grateful if you could do sth.
Read aloud





Part 4.句子结构错误

中式英语




句子缺谓语





语序不当

固定搭配
错误


Corrective sentences
1.How many hours do we have to relax on the weekend?
2. How many students are there in a class?
3. I want to know what the class size is.
4.I hope to have a comfortable accommodation.
字迹潦草、涂改过多
Part 5.卷面问题
10




Appreciation



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5


How to better your sentences?
Let's have a try:
4.1) 一般表达：I am Li Hua. I am a Chinese student. I want to know some information. It is in your ad.
亮点表达:

4.2）一般表达：I plan to go to Britain and study English for 6 weeks during the summer holiday.
亮点表达：


I am Li Hua, a China student and I want to know some information in your ad.
I'm planning to spend 6 weeks studying English in the UK during the summer holiday.
同位语
固定词组


How to better your sentences?
Let's have a try:
4.3). 一般表达：After reading your ad, I want to know more information.
亮点表达：

4.4）一般表达：What time does the date start?
亮点表达：


Noticing your advertisement, I'm looking forward to knowing more details.
I would appreciate it if you could tell me what time the date starts.
分词做状语
固定短语
固定句式+ 委婉语气


How to better your sentences?
Let's have a try:
4.5). 一般表达：How many courses are there every day? How do you arrange the courses?
亮点表达：
4.6）一般表达：I hope the fee will be cheap.
亮点表达：


Could you please tell me how many courses there are every day and how you arrange the courses?
I hold the belief that the reasonable fee is acceptable.
I hope the fee will be cheap, which is important to me.
委婉语气 + 宾语从句
新的词语 + 同位语从句
非限制性定语从句+增加细节


How to better your sentences?
Let's have a try:
4.7). 一般表达：Please tell me the information as soon as possible.
亮点表达：

If it is possible, could you please tell me the information as soon as possible?
I would be grateful if you could tell me the information as soon as possible.
It is very kind of you to spare some time to tell me the information ...
语气委婉+ 状语从句
语气委婉+ 状语从句
语气委婉+ 固定句式
Summary
Dear Sir/Madam,
I’m planning to spend 6 weeks studying English in Britain. Noticing your advertisement, I’m looking forward to knowing more details.
To begin with, what attracts me most is the start date. In addition, I also care about the class size and study hours per week with the intention of making use of my time. Besides, would you mind telling me the average cost and the type of accommodation, which are really vital to me?
Time permitting, would you mind dropping me a line? I’d be grateful if you can give me a reply.
Your truly,
Li Hua
咨询点（要点）+适当增加细节
背景+写信目的
期待+ 感激
Summary
1）审题 、不少点;
2）适当增加 ;
3）条理清楚，使用 ;
4）句式 ;
5) 交际 ;
6）注意 （三段式、字迹工整、清晰、无涂改）。
写作要求：
精准
细节
过渡词/衔接词
多样
卷面
得体
Consolidation
假设你是李华，正在英国牛津参加短期语言培训，计划星期天去伦敦旅游。互联网上的一则广告引起了你的注意，但一些具体信息不明确, 需给该旅行社发一封电子邮件，询问有关情况。你的邮件必须包括以下的内容：
1．是否有购物时间，学生票价；2．费用是否包括景点门票、午餐；3．回牛津时间。
注意：1.词数100字左右; 2. 可根据内容要点适当增加细节，,以使行文连贯。

One possible version
Dear Sir/Madam,
Nice to contact you. I’m writing for more information about the day tour to London.
As a student at Oxford University, I’d like to know if you have any special price for students. As for the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed? What about lunch? Is it included? Or do I need to bring along my own food?
　　How long will the tour last? Since I need to prepare my
One possible version
lessons for the test day, I’d like to know the time to return. Besides, is there any time for shopping? I really want to have a look at the big stores in London.
　　Yours,
　　Li Hua


Thank you all!