Unit 4 law and order Project(1) 课件（24张PPT）

(共24张PPT)
What makes a good writing?
A good writing
structure
several parts
topic sentence
content
all points covered
language
words
phrases
sentences
variation
Fresh and not overused words
我们需要比从前更意识到解决这个问题的迫切性。
1. We need to wake up to the urgency to address this issue more than ever before.
2. We need to realize the importance to deal with this problem more than ever before.
Highlight 1
1.“表明，论证→用___________ 替换show/indicate
【秒杀】”他真的热爱这份工作”不仅仅表明了他对于职责的奉献还有他对于祖国的忠诚。(扬州2017一模作文）

“He really loves his job”demonstrates not only his devotion to his duties but his loyalty to our country as well.
Fresh and not overused words
Practice
demonstrate
2.“阻止某人做某事”→用____________________替换prevent sb from
【秒杀】不要让对于失败的恐惧阻止你追求你的梦想。(苏锡常镇2017三模作文）
Don’t let the fear of failure hold you back from pursuing your dream.
Fresh and not overused words
Practice
hold sb. back from
3.“面对，面临”→用_________________ 替换face sth./be faced with
【秒杀】面对不断的让人倍感压力的考试，我们身心俱疲，焦躁不安。(南京、盐城2017二模作文）
Confronted with constant stressful exams, we seniors are suffering from extreme tiredness and severe anxiety.
Fresh and not overused words
Practice
be confronted with
4.“不知道”→用______________________替换don’t know/have no idea
【秒杀】另外，如果没有它的话，我们也许就不知道要做什么以至于最后一事无成。(苏北四市2017一模作文）
Moreover, without it, we might be in the dark about what to do, thus achieving nothing in the end.
Fresh and not overused words
Practice
in the dark/at a loss
It can be difficult to figure out what to save and what to toss.
It can be ____________ to figure out what to save and what to toss.

It can be __________ __________ to figure out what to save and what to toss.

challenging
a
struggle
It can be __________ __________ __________ to figure out what to save and what to toss.
a
Herculean
task
Fresh and not overused words
Practice
2. It is classmates’ encouragement and love that help me go through this period of difficult time.(南京、盐城2017二模作文）
3. It is everyone’s duty to obey the regulations to keep our society in order and going on the right track. (2015江苏卷作文）

inspiration
affection
tough
observe/
submit to
Fresh and not overused words
Practice
4. On-line voting becomes more and more popular , and many competitions
have people take part in it . (2016江苏卷作文）

5. It is important that tourists should
behave well when overseas.

enjoys great popularity
essential
behave themselves
get people involved in it.
Fresh and not overused words
Practice
e.g. He ignored what had happened to his friends, which made them upset.
He turned a blind eye to what had happened to his friends, which made them upset.
e.g. We try our best to promote the traditional friendship between us.
We spare no efforts to promote the traditional friendship between us.

Phrases come first
Highlight 2
1. Your fluency in English makes you better than the other candidates for the job.
Your fluency in English gives you ________ _______ ________ the other candidates for the job.
2. We should remember that everyone is the master of his own fate.
We should ________ _______ ________ that everyone is the master of his own fate.

an
advantage
over
bear
in
mind
Phrases come first
Practice
e.g. Trevor puts his genius idea into action by doing a favor for three people. He also appeals to the recipients of favor to pay the favor forward.(苏州2017一模）
Not only does Trevor put his genius idea into action by doing a favor for three people but he also appeals to the recipients of favor to pay the favor forward.
Tip: transitional words
Variation of sentences
Highlight 3
When people talk about success, they often fix their mind on success itself and ignore some hidden factors. (镇江2017一模）

When talking about success, they often fix their mind on success itself ignoring some hidden factors.
If you see it and use it more frequently, it can be better remembered. (常州2017一模）
The more frequently you see it and use it, the better it can be remembered.
Tip: non-finite verb
Tip: inversion
Variation of sentences
Practice
From my perspective, such an initiative and behavior should be encouraged.(苏锡常镇2017二模）

Such an initiative and behavior，from my perspective, should be encouraged.
Tip: change the word order
Variation of sentences
Practice
Because there is no enough relevant regulations, some uncivilized people deliberately damage shared bikes. They throw them into rivers or pile them up randomly.(南京、淮安2017三模作文）
Tip: use the phrases to replace sentences
For lack of relevant regulations, some uncivilized people deliberately damage shared bikes throwing them into rivers or piling them up randomly.
Variation of sentences
Practice
1. We can feast our eyes on the flowers in the wild.
2. We can feast our eyes on the delicate flowers in the wild in various colors and gestures.
Enrich your expressions
Highlight 4
For the benefit of the future generation, it is our duty to seek a/an_____________ economic development.
high-quality/high-speed/eco-friendly /thriving/stable/sustainable/healthy/steady/constant/ lasting/balanced
Enrich your expressions
Practice
____________ laws and regulations (v.)
observe/obey//break/violate//
enforce/strengthen// launch/ issue/exert
issue ________ laws and regulations (adj.)
effective/ relevant/ strict/
precisely-targeted/specific
concerning/ regarding/ with regard to /…
issue effective laws and regulations ________the adoption of children
Enrich your expressions
Practice
Summary:
Is the writing divided into parts?
Are there any topic sentences?
Are all the points clearly stated?
Are there any mistakes?
Does the writer use any transitional words?
Is there a variation of words and phrases?
Are various sentence patterns used?
A good handwriting does count !
Checklist

Structure

Content



Language



Comment on the given writing from the three aspects mentioned : structure, content, language
1. Correct the mistakes
2. Polish the writing
Challenge Yourself!
You learn to write by writing.
There is no good writing, only good rewriting.
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