2020高考英语新题型—读后续写和概要写作课件74(共17张PPT)
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(共17张PPT)
概要写作
文本内容与结构解读
写作思路解读
写作思路微技能之指示代词策略
表达微技能之主语与指称篇
牛刀小试
参考范文欣赏
体裁：
主题：
结构：
1.文本内容与结构解读
体裁：说明文
主题： “greener grass” syndrome.
结构：
Para 1
Para 4
Para 2&3
Para 5
1.文本内容与结构解读
阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。
Have you ever met the situation where you kept thinking that there are better opportunities out there compared to your current one you are having? This is the syndrome when one is always looking at the other side of the fence and thinks that the grass is greener there. This is what I call the “greener grass” syndrome.
Why are you like this? Uncertainty and curiosity play a big part in creating the “greener grass” syndrome. It is because we are uncertain of whether what we are holding onto now is the best for us and whether there are any better alternatives out there. Such uncertainty causes us to keep looking into alternatives.
Humans are also curious by nature and we love new things. We mostly prefer new over old because new things are fascinating and our curiosity keeps reminding us to explore the other side of the grass. These are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied with what we have and always thinking of finding the greener grass at the opposite side.
In fact, it sometimes does us more harm than good because often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust our energy and attention and finally we can grow even angrier, or at least more dissatisfied. If you have this syndrome, chances are you are missing out lots of things you currently have now. When you are always focusing on other opportunities, sometimes you may waste the opportunity right in front of you.
So what can you do to cure the “greener grass” syndrome? The first thing is to recognize that your current job is your best choice right now. Try to focus on “what is” instead of “what if”. Secondly, always apply your best efforts in your current job. Last but not least, always keep this truth in mind. The grass is always greener on the other side, and the other side is always greener no matter which side you are at. Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
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④
③
①
⑤
causes
phenomenon
effects
solutions
causes
Para. 1: Have you ever met the situation where you kept thinking that there are better opportunities out there compared to your current one you are having? This is the syndrome when one is always looking at the other side of the fence and thinks that the grass is greener there. This is what I call the “greener grass” syndrome.
写作思路解读
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome.（要点1）
写作思路解读
Para. 2: Why are you like this? Uncertainty and curiosity play a big part in creating the “greener grass” syndrome. It is because we are uncertain of whether what we are holding onto now is the best for us and whether there are any better alternatives out there. Such uncertainty causes us to keep looking into alternatives.
Para. 3: Humans are also curious by nature and we love new things. We mostly prefer new over old because new things are fascinating and our curiosity keeps reminding us to explore the other side of the grass. These are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied with what we have and always thinking of finding the greener grass at the opposite side.
Uncertainty and curiosity are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied.（要点2）
写作思路解读
Para. 4: In fact, it sometimes does us more harm than good because often looking out for the“greener grass”will exhaust our energy and attention and finally we can grow even angrier, or at least more dissatisfied. If you have this syndrome, chances are you are missing out lots of things you currently have now. When you are always focusing on other opportunities, sometimes you may waste the opportunity right in front of you.
Often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust your energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of you.（要点3）
写作思路解读
Para. 5: So what can you do to cure the “greener grass” syndrome? The first thing is to recognize that your current job is your best choice right now. Try to focus on “what is” instead of “what if”. Secondly, always apply your best efforts in your current job. Last but not least, always keep this truth in mind. The grass is always greener on the other side, and the other side is always greener no matter which side you are at. Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.（要点4）
写作思路解读
若将上述的所有要点连句成文，便得到了这样一段概要：
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome. Uncertainty and curiosity are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied. Often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust your energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of you. Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
点评：该概要尽管覆盖了文章的全部要点，但有多处指代不明，人称不一致，或是表达抄袭原文，此外，有些要点之间缺乏连贯性。这些与概要写作的评分标准要求相差甚远。那么我们该如何用自己的话进行改写，让文章更简洁精炼呢？
3.表达微技能之主语与指称
本章节将以此文本的初写概要为例聚焦“主语与指称”对于概要写作语段连贯性的影响。
①The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome.
②Uncertainty and curiosity are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied.
③Often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust your energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of you.
④Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
如①中的主语为the thought，而②中的主语又变成了Uncertainty and curiosity，如若脱离文本，两句的主语间并不存在任何联系，这样就使得要点间欠缺连贯性。因此。可以将②句改写为：This syndrome is the result of two factors: people’s uncertainty and curiosity. 这样就可以用代词this将①②两句衔接起来。
同理，可将③改写为：Those who often look out for the “greener grass” will exhaust their energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of them.
将④改写为：Therefore, people need to choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
3.表达微技能之主语与指称
然后，我们可以将这些句子串起来，连成一篇指代明确，主语连贯的概要写作：
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome. This syndrome is the result of two factors: people’s uncertainty and curiosity. Those who often look out for the “greener grass” will exhaust their energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of them. Therefore, people need to choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
一、按要求改写以下语段，使语段连贯
As we all know, going on vacations benefits people a lot. However, we still feel less satisfied after vacations because of two mistakes. For one thing, some people are always making an attempt to take full advantage of money. For another, too many strategic issues are taken into consideration. Therefore, to ensure people’s vacation happiness, we should choose the right companions and destinations and shop wisely.
该语段中反复出现的人称有we与people两词，但这两个词并不能相互指代，因此这个语段应改写为：
As _____ all know, going on vacations benefits ___ a lot. However, _____ still feel less satisfied after vacations because of two mistakes. For one thing, _____ are always making an attempt to take full advantage of money. For another, too many strategic issues are taken into consideration. Therefore, to ensure _____ vacation happiness, _____ should choose the right companions and destinations and shop wisely.
5.牛刀小试
we
us
we
we
our
we
Schools have many occupants, so the indoor air quality problems is forced to be solved. The pollution is mainly from the inside of school building, such as photocopiers, wood products and so on. In addition, ventilation will bring pollutants from the outside. Sensitive students have higher respiration rates because of pollutants. If we are aware of the importance of clean air and shoulder our duty to create them.
划线部分应该与前文pollutants一词在内容上有所承接，且应该与前文的第三人称保持一致，因此可以改写为：
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
5.牛刀小试
Because of these pollutants, sensitive students have higher respiration rates. Therefore, the importance of clean air should be aware of and creating clean air would be a duty to shoulder.
It has been confirmed that more than 25 people were killed by Typhoon Usagi in Guangdong. Many houses are damaged owing to Usagi. Most transports will be suspended due to the effect of typhoon. The traffic was also stopped. Electricity and water supply was cut off in Jieyang. Many fishermen were trapped in harbor and all beaches were closed, too.
可将所有句子调整为“台风造成了……”这一结构，达成指称与主语的一致，因此改写为：
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
5.牛刀小试
Typhoon Usagi struck Guangdong China, causing at least 25 deaths. In addition to having damaged many houses, it also stopped traffic and transports. What’s worse, the typhoon cut off electricity and water supply, and it kept fishermen onshore and students off school as well.
参考范文欣赏1
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome. (point 1) This syndrome is the result of two factors: people’s uncertainty and curiosity. (point 2) But those who often look out for the “greener grass” will waste their energy and attention, losing their opportunity instead. (point 3) Therefore, people need to hold onto the chance they own and do their best. (point 4) (67w)
参考范文欣赏2
The “greener grass” syndrome refers to people’s desire for better opportunities over the existing ones. (point 1) It is uncertainty and curiosity that drive people to feel dissatisfied with what they currently possess and pursue other opportunities. (point 2) However, owing to this, people tend to let chances slip away instead. (point 3) Therefore, people ought to hold onto the chance they own and do their best. (point 4) (65w)
参考范文欣赏3
The “greener grass” syndrome refers to people’s desire for better opportunities over the existing ones. Driven by uncertainty and curiosity, people are likely to feel dissatisfied with what they currently possess and pursue other opportunities, possibly resulting in the loss of chances. To deal with that, people ought to hold onto the chance they own and work with their best efforts. (65w)
概要写作
文本内容与结构解读
写作思路解读
写作思路微技能之指示代词策略
表达微技能之主语与指称篇
牛刀小试
参考范文欣赏
体裁：
主题：
结构：
1.文本内容与结构解读
体裁：说明文
主题： “greener grass” syndrome.
结构：
Para 1
Para 4
Para 2&3
Para 5
1.文本内容与结构解读
阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。
Have you ever met the situation where you kept thinking that there are better opportunities out there compared to your current one you are having? This is the syndrome when one is always looking at the other side of the fence and thinks that the grass is greener there. This is what I call the “greener grass” syndrome.
Why are you like this? Uncertainty and curiosity play a big part in creating the “greener grass” syndrome. It is because we are uncertain of whether what we are holding onto now is the best for us and whether there are any better alternatives out there. Such uncertainty causes us to keep looking into alternatives.
Humans are also curious by nature and we love new things. We mostly prefer new over old because new things are fascinating and our curiosity keeps reminding us to explore the other side of the grass. These are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied with what we have and always thinking of finding the greener grass at the opposite side.
In fact, it sometimes does us more harm than good because often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust our energy and attention and finally we can grow even angrier, or at least more dissatisfied. If you have this syndrome, chances are you are missing out lots of things you currently have now. When you are always focusing on other opportunities, sometimes you may waste the opportunity right in front of you.
So what can you do to cure the “greener grass” syndrome? The first thing is to recognize that your current job is your best choice right now. Try to focus on “what is” instead of “what if”. Secondly, always apply your best efforts in your current job. Last but not least, always keep this truth in mind. The grass is always greener on the other side, and the other side is always greener no matter which side you are at. Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
②
④
③
①
⑤
causes
phenomenon
effects
solutions
causes
Para. 1: Have you ever met the situation where you kept thinking that there are better opportunities out there compared to your current one you are having? This is the syndrome when one is always looking at the other side of the fence and thinks that the grass is greener there. This is what I call the “greener grass” syndrome.
写作思路解读
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome.（要点1）
写作思路解读
Para. 2: Why are you like this? Uncertainty and curiosity play a big part in creating the “greener grass” syndrome. It is because we are uncertain of whether what we are holding onto now is the best for us and whether there are any better alternatives out there. Such uncertainty causes us to keep looking into alternatives.
Para. 3: Humans are also curious by nature and we love new things. We mostly prefer new over old because new things are fascinating and our curiosity keeps reminding us to explore the other side of the grass. These are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied with what we have and always thinking of finding the greener grass at the opposite side.
Uncertainty and curiosity are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied.（要点2）
写作思路解读
Para. 4: In fact, it sometimes does us more harm than good because often looking out for the“greener grass”will exhaust our energy and attention and finally we can grow even angrier, or at least more dissatisfied. If you have this syndrome, chances are you are missing out lots of things you currently have now. When you are always focusing on other opportunities, sometimes you may waste the opportunity right in front of you.
Often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust your energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of you.（要点3）
写作思路解读
Para. 5: So what can you do to cure the “greener grass” syndrome? The first thing is to recognize that your current job is your best choice right now. Try to focus on “what is” instead of “what if”. Secondly, always apply your best efforts in your current job. Last but not least, always keep this truth in mind. The grass is always greener on the other side, and the other side is always greener no matter which side you are at. Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.（要点4）
写作思路解读
若将上述的所有要点连句成文，便得到了这样一段概要：
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome. Uncertainty and curiosity are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied. Often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust your energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of you. Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
点评：该概要尽管覆盖了文章的全部要点，但有多处指代不明，人称不一致，或是表达抄袭原文，此外，有些要点之间缺乏连贯性。这些与概要写作的评分标准要求相差甚远。那么我们该如何用自己的话进行改写，让文章更简洁精炼呢？
3.表达微技能之主语与指称
本章节将以此文本的初写概要为例聚焦“主语与指称”对于概要写作语段连贯性的影响。
①The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome.
②Uncertainty and curiosity are the two factors that cause us to feel dissatisfied.
③Often looking out for the “greener grass” will exhaust your energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of you.
④Choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
如①中的主语为the thought，而②中的主语又变成了Uncertainty and curiosity，如若脱离文本，两句的主语间并不存在任何联系，这样就使得要点间欠缺连贯性。因此。可以将②句改写为：This syndrome is the result of two factors: people’s uncertainty and curiosity. 这样就可以用代词this将①②两句衔接起来。
同理，可将③改写为：Those who often look out for the “greener grass” will exhaust their energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of them.
将④改写为：Therefore, people need to choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
3.表达微技能之主语与指称
然后，我们可以将这些句子串起来，连成一篇指代明确，主语连贯的概要写作：
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome. This syndrome is the result of two factors: people’s uncertainty and curiosity. Those who often look out for the “greener grass” will exhaust their energy and attention, wasting the opportunity right in front of them. Therefore, people need to choose a side, stick to it and make the best out of it.
一、按要求改写以下语段，使语段连贯
As we all know, going on vacations benefits people a lot. However, we still feel less satisfied after vacations because of two mistakes. For one thing, some people are always making an attempt to take full advantage of money. For another, too many strategic issues are taken into consideration. Therefore, to ensure people’s vacation happiness, we should choose the right companions and destinations and shop wisely.
该语段中反复出现的人称有we与people两词，但这两个词并不能相互指代，因此这个语段应改写为：
As _____ all know, going on vacations benefits ___ a lot. However, _____ still feel less satisfied after vacations because of two mistakes. For one thing, _____ are always making an attempt to take full advantage of money. For another, too many strategic issues are taken into consideration. Therefore, to ensure _____ vacation happiness, _____ should choose the right companions and destinations and shop wisely.
5.牛刀小试
we
us
we
we
our
we
Schools have many occupants, so the indoor air quality problems is forced to be solved. The pollution is mainly from the inside of school building, such as photocopiers, wood products and so on. In addition, ventilation will bring pollutants from the outside. Sensitive students have higher respiration rates because of pollutants. If we are aware of the importance of clean air and shoulder our duty to create them.
划线部分应该与前文pollutants一词在内容上有所承接，且应该与前文的第三人称保持一致，因此可以改写为：
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
5.牛刀小试
Because of these pollutants, sensitive students have higher respiration rates. Therefore, the importance of clean air should be aware of and creating clean air would be a duty to shoulder.
It has been confirmed that more than 25 people were killed by Typhoon Usagi in Guangdong. Many houses are damaged owing to Usagi. Most transports will be suspended due to the effect of typhoon. The traffic was also stopped. Electricity and water supply was cut off in Jieyang. Many fishermen were trapped in harbor and all beaches were closed, too.
可将所有句子调整为“台风造成了……”这一结构，达成指称与主语的一致，因此改写为：
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
5.牛刀小试
Typhoon Usagi struck Guangdong China, causing at least 25 deaths. In addition to having damaged many houses, it also stopped traffic and transports. What’s worse, the typhoon cut off electricity and water supply, and it kept fishermen onshore and students off school as well.
参考范文欣赏1
The thought that there are better opportunities out there is called the “greener grass” syndrome. (point 1) This syndrome is the result of two factors: people’s uncertainty and curiosity. (point 2) But those who often look out for the “greener grass” will waste their energy and attention, losing their opportunity instead. (point 3) Therefore, people need to hold onto the chance they own and do their best. (point 4) (67w)
参考范文欣赏2
The “greener grass” syndrome refers to people’s desire for better opportunities over the existing ones. (point 1) It is uncertainty and curiosity that drive people to feel dissatisfied with what they currently possess and pursue other opportunities. (point 2) However, owing to this, people tend to let chances slip away instead. (point 3) Therefore, people ought to hold onto the chance they own and do their best. (point 4) (65w)
参考范文欣赏3
The “greener grass” syndrome refers to people’s desire for better opportunities over the existing ones. Driven by uncertainty and curiosity, people are likely to feel dissatisfied with what they currently possess and pursue other opportunities, possibly resulting in the loss of chances. To deal with that, people ought to hold onto the chance they own and work with their best efforts. (65w)