2020高考英语新题型—读后续写和概要写作课件85(共22张PPT)
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Everyday Heroes
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读
A story
how
where
when
why
who
what
Who
Where
When
What
Why
How
TJ Smith; Brad Ware & his wife; Kim; the bearded man
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (Who)
Kim
TJ Smith
the bearded man
a suspect
neighbors
rescue
Brad Ware & his wife
kidnap
Who
Where
When
What
Why
How
TJ Smith; Brad Ware & his wife; Kim; the bearded man
On a street in Wichita Falls, Texas.
Last December, on a crisp Saturday afternoon
The bearded man kidnapped Kim;
TJ Smith tried to rescue her.
Possibly with the help of Brad Ware
If he lost her, TJ feared, she might never be found alive.
Interpretation of underlined words
Time and places
Plot development
feelings
street
alley
catch her breath
walked away
kicking and biting
get free of
Brad Ware
dashed
panicked
first thought
Interpretation of given information
续写首句解读 (G-N策略）
Para. 1 Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house.
Given
Information
Para. 2 Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene.
New
Information
① on the street or near/in that house
② Kim was saved. (possibly by TJ and Ware)
① What was the house like
② What did TJ see and do
③ How was Kim saved
① What happened to Kim and the bearded man in the end
② Who are everyday heroes
③ Why are they considered heroes
panicked
Brad Ware
dashed
first thought
street
kicking and biting
Para. 1 Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house. Its windows were busted, doors boarded up, and yard over-grown. He was shoving the panicked girl through a window. Just then, Ware and his wife pulled up. “Stay here,” Ware told TJ as he took off toward the house. Ware and the man fought with each other, and finally Ware managed to take him down.
Para. 2 Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene. Kim dashed into the safety of her mother’s arms. Meanwhile, officers cuffed and arrested Raeshawn Perez, 26. there were a few heroes that day, but Ware insisted that the quick-thinking, dogged 11-year-old deserved most of the credit.
对上述问题进行回答，我们就可以写出这样两段结尾：
点评：从故事情节上看，两个续写段落已经完整地交代了这个事件的结局。但是，从内容和语言角度看，续写第一段中how was Kim saved应该是该故事最紧张，最扣人心弦的高潮部分，对这个部分进行细致的描述，不仅容易吸引读者也有利于烘托everyday heroes这个主题，传递正能量。而本段仅仅用fight with去描述打斗过程，显得有些干瘪，让满心期待的读者颇感失望。续写第二段虽然清楚交代了受害者和犯罪嫌疑人的结局，以及对everyday heroes这个主题进行了呼应，但是如果能再增加一些细节描写和人们对于该事件的评论的话会更符合本文的报道文学的特点，增加其可信度和可读性。
The Micro-skills Training in writing
表达微技能之动作表达：打斗篇
我们常说，行动从思想中来。动作描写是刻画人物的重要方法之一。人物在各种外在因素的作用下和不同性格的驱使下，会产生不同的表情、心理和动作变化。动作描写常常和人物的表情、心理描写相结合。准确细致的动作描写有助于更立体地反映人物的心理和性格特点，使得情节进展更加顺畅自然，人物形象栩栩如生，跃然纸上。本文主要聚焦打斗类的动作描写。
The Micro-skills Training in writing
表达微技能之动作表达：打斗篇
bear down on 逼近
let go of 放开；松开
crash/bump into 撞到
break into a run 拔腿就跑
slide/ sneak in 潜入；溜进
hit/kick sb in/on 打/踢某人的（身体部位）
hit sb with a loud crash 砰地一声砸/击到某人
bite sb by his leg 咬住某人的腿
leap/jump/hop onto/into/off 跳上/跳进/跳下
pound against 反复击打；砰砰地猛击
11. throw/aim sth at 把…瞄准/对准
12. dash for 冲向
13. rush/dive/jump into
…without pausing 毫不犹豫地冲/跳进去
14. catch up with 赶上
15. pull/ drag sb. into/onto 把某人拉进/上
16. race/chase after 追赶
17. restart/launch another attack 再次发动袭击
18. wrap sb in one’s arms 紧紧抱住某人
19. pull sb back into 把某人拉回去
20. drag…swiftly into/onto/out of 把…迅速拉进去/上去/出去
II. 句子的积累
He dashed along the platform and jumped on the train.
It started to rain so we dived into the nearest café.
He bent down/over and picked up a book from the floor.
He cast a look at the woman.
He stormed out of the room and crashed the door shut behind him.
She fought him desperately, kicking and biting.
She would scream and kick and lie on the floor drumming her heels.
He held up his bicycle and threw it at the wolf, in the hope that the wolf would be frightened away.
Before it could realize what had happened, Paul had already opened the front door and instantly pulled Mac into the car.
Hardly had Mac stood up when the wolf arrived and was about to launch another attack.
III. 片段的积累
1. Every time I made a move to get it, some passing eye detected my purpose, and of course I straightened up and looked indifferent, and pretended that I hadn’t been thinking about the pear at all. This same thing kept happening and happening, and I couldn’t get the pear. I was just getting desperate enough to brave all the shame, and to seize it, when a window behind me was raised, and gentleman spoke out of it, saying: “Step in here, please.”
2. With great care she began the dangerous crossing, sometimes on her hands and knees, hardly daring to look down between the sleepers into the wild flood waters below. If she should slip, she would fall between the sleepers, into the rapidly flowing stream.
3. Mac saw his last straw, jumped off his bike and dashed for the side of the car. He slammed the car door wildly as the hungry wolf was almost reaching him. Paul quickly unlocked the door and Mac dived into the car, out of breath. The hungry wolf seemed unwilling to give up on its prey, growling outside the window. The frightened three sat inside trembling with horror with the wolf trying to enter the car. After what seemed a long time, the exhausted wolf walked away, disappearing into the woods.
3. Mac was panic-stricken, Mac could do nothing but closed his eyes.
改写：
_____________(过去分词作状语), Mac could do nothing but closed his eyes.
2. The wolf kept growling at them from outside the car, and it unwilling to give up on its prey.
改写：
The wolf kept growling at them from outside the car, ___________________________(形容词短语作状语).
1. Henry walked along the street aimlessly, and he was hungry and tired.
改写：
Henry walked along the street aimlessly, _____________(形容词作状语).
Panic-stricken
unwilling to give up on its prey
hungry and tired
Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换
Tip 1: 我们可以借助形容词或过去分词作状语来丰富细节描写。
3. a. Her heart was pounding in her mouth.
b. She rushed to the front door and pounded the doorbell with all her strength.
合并句子：____________________________________________________________________________________________
1. a. The bearded man was bearing down on the little girl.
b. The little girl let go of her new toy and fled away.
合并句子： ____________________________________________________________________________________
With the bearded man bearing down on the little girl, she let go of her new toy and fled away.
2. a. Jack wrapped the thief in his arms.
b. Jack yelled at his wife breathlessly, “call 911!”
合并句子：_______________________________________________________________
With the thief wrapped in his arms, Jack yelled at his wife breathlessly, “call 911!”
With her heart pounding in her mouth, she rushed to the front door and pounded the doorbell with all her strength.
Tip 2: 我们可以用with的复合结构来合并两个意义紧密关联的句子。
2. 翻译：他刚刚打算开门，这时突然有人拍了拍他的肩膀。
______________________________________________________________________
1. a. He was just about to touch that vase.
b. Just at that time, there came the barking of the dog, which suggested someone was coming.
合并句子：_________________________________________________________________________________________________________.
He was just about to touch that vase when there came the barking of the dog, which suggested someone was coming.
He was just about to open the door when suddenly someone patted his shoulder from behind.
Tip 3: 我们可以使用be about to…when；hardly…when; no sooner…than来描述两个接连发生的动作。
3. 翻译：他正要站起来，这时那头狼跳到他跟前只有几码的地方。
___________________________________________________________________________________
He was just about to rise to his feet when the wolf jumped right in front of him, only a few yards away.
3. I rushed to the railway station, ________________________________(结果被告知他们已经走了)。
Tip 4: 我们可以使用only to do来表示事与愿违的结果。
only to find herself too weak to do that.
2. Carl attempted to get away with the vase, __________________________________(结果发现自己已经被警察包围)。
only to be told that they had already left.
only to find himself surrounded by the police.
She attempted to stand up, ________________________________________(结果发现自己太虚弱了，站不起来)。
Possible version
Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house. Its windows were busted, doors boarded up, and yard over-grown. He was shoving the panicked girl through a window. Just then, Brad Ware and his wife pulled up. “Stay here,” Ware told TJ as he took off toward the house. With Ware now bearing down on him, the man let go of Kim in the window frame and walked away, almost calmly. He was about to break into a run when Ware caught up with him. They struggled. Ware kicked the man in the groin and wrapped him in his arms. The man squirmed free and fled across the street. When he stumbled, Ware lunged and tacked him.
Possible version
Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene. Kim dashed into the safety of her mother’s arms, safe and sound. The two cried and hugged. Meanwhile, officers cuffed and arrested Raeshawn Perez, 26. He was charged with aggravated kidnapping and was being held on $50,000 bond as this issue went to press. There were a few heroes that day, but Ware insists that the quick-thinking, dogged 11-year-old deserves most of the credit. “You know, he’s the reason why we managed to find the girl before something terrible happened,” Ware told KFDX, a local newspaper. That news came as no surprise to TJ’s mother. “This is exactly his character,” says Angie Hess Smith. “His first thought is not of himself. It’s always of others.”
评点：这篇文章语言较为平实，表达干净利落，动作描写贯穿全文，推动着情节的发展。续写第一段是动作描写的高潮部分。因此，该段落在继续原文语言风格的同时，精选了一系列动作表达来准确还原当时的打斗场面，如shove sb through; take off toward; bear down on sb; let go of; break into a run; kick sb in the groin; wrap sb in one’s arms; squirm free; flee across; lunge; tack等. 此外，with的复合结构以及句型be about to do…when…的使用，使得句子表达更为紧凑连贯，也烘托了当时打斗场面的紧张氛围，凸显了hero之一Ware的勇敢无畏。而续写第二段主要是为了交代故事主要人物的结局，以及凸显主题Everyday Heroes。
因此本段节奏放缓，气氛由紧张转为轻松，整段洋溢着开心，激动和自豪等情感。因此，续写第二段像电影镜头般地，在各个主角当中切换，用平实的语言依次交代了主要人物的结局。在交代小女孩Kim的结局时，用了形容词safe and sound跟在主句后作状语，让读者悬着的心顿时松了下来。在语言上为了与原文的写实风格呼应，本段使用了两次直接引语，即引用了本故事的主角之一Ware和TJ的妈妈的话，从侧面对TJ的行为进行褒扬，从而点明标题Everyday Heroes，英雄就在我们身边，他们平凡而又伟大。
Everyday Heroes
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读
A story
how
where
when
why
who
what
Who
Where
When
What
Why
How
TJ Smith; Brad Ware & his wife; Kim; the bearded man
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (Who)
Kim
TJ Smith
the bearded man
a suspect
neighbors
rescue
Brad Ware & his wife
kidnap
Who
Where
When
What
Why
How
TJ Smith; Brad Ware & his wife; Kim; the bearded man
On a street in Wichita Falls, Texas.
Last December, on a crisp Saturday afternoon
The bearded man kidnapped Kim;
TJ Smith tried to rescue her.
Possibly with the help of Brad Ware
If he lost her, TJ feared, she might never be found alive.
Interpretation of underlined words
Time and places
Plot development
feelings
street
alley
catch her breath
walked away
kicking and biting
get free of
Brad Ware
dashed
panicked
first thought
Interpretation of given information
续写首句解读 (G-N策略）
Para. 1 Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house.
Given
Information
Para. 2 Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene.
New
Information
① on the street or near/in that house
② Kim was saved. (possibly by TJ and Ware)
① What was the house like
② What did TJ see and do
③ How was Kim saved
① What happened to Kim and the bearded man in the end
② Who are everyday heroes
③ Why are they considered heroes
panicked
Brad Ware
dashed
first thought
street
kicking and biting
Para. 1 Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house. Its windows were busted, doors boarded up, and yard over-grown. He was shoving the panicked girl through a window. Just then, Ware and his wife pulled up. “Stay here,” Ware told TJ as he took off toward the house. Ware and the man fought with each other, and finally Ware managed to take him down.
Para. 2 Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene. Kim dashed into the safety of her mother’s arms. Meanwhile, officers cuffed and arrested Raeshawn Perez, 26. there were a few heroes that day, but Ware insisted that the quick-thinking, dogged 11-year-old deserved most of the credit.
对上述问题进行回答，我们就可以写出这样两段结尾：
点评：从故事情节上看，两个续写段落已经完整地交代了这个事件的结局。但是，从内容和语言角度看，续写第一段中how was Kim saved应该是该故事最紧张，最扣人心弦的高潮部分，对这个部分进行细致的描述，不仅容易吸引读者也有利于烘托everyday heroes这个主题，传递正能量。而本段仅仅用fight with去描述打斗过程，显得有些干瘪，让满心期待的读者颇感失望。续写第二段虽然清楚交代了受害者和犯罪嫌疑人的结局，以及对everyday heroes这个主题进行了呼应，但是如果能再增加一些细节描写和人们对于该事件的评论的话会更符合本文的报道文学的特点，增加其可信度和可读性。
The Micro-skills Training in writing
表达微技能之动作表达：打斗篇
我们常说，行动从思想中来。动作描写是刻画人物的重要方法之一。人物在各种外在因素的作用下和不同性格的驱使下，会产生不同的表情、心理和动作变化。动作描写常常和人物的表情、心理描写相结合。准确细致的动作描写有助于更立体地反映人物的心理和性格特点，使得情节进展更加顺畅自然，人物形象栩栩如生，跃然纸上。本文主要聚焦打斗类的动作描写。
The Micro-skills Training in writing
表达微技能之动作表达：打斗篇
bear down on 逼近
let go of 放开；松开
crash/bump into 撞到
break into a run 拔腿就跑
slide/ sneak in 潜入；溜进
hit/kick sb in/on 打/踢某人的（身体部位）
hit sb with a loud crash 砰地一声砸/击到某人
bite sb by his leg 咬住某人的腿
leap/jump/hop onto/into/off 跳上/跳进/跳下
pound against 反复击打；砰砰地猛击
11. throw/aim sth at 把…瞄准/对准
12. dash for 冲向
13. rush/dive/jump into
…without pausing 毫不犹豫地冲/跳进去
14. catch up with 赶上
15. pull/ drag sb. into/onto 把某人拉进/上
16. race/chase after 追赶
17. restart/launch another attack 再次发动袭击
18. wrap sb in one’s arms 紧紧抱住某人
19. pull sb back into 把某人拉回去
20. drag…swiftly into/onto/out of 把…迅速拉进去/上去/出去
II. 句子的积累
He dashed along the platform and jumped on the train.
It started to rain so we dived into the nearest café.
He bent down/over and picked up a book from the floor.
He cast a look at the woman.
He stormed out of the room and crashed the door shut behind him.
She fought him desperately, kicking and biting.
She would scream and kick and lie on the floor drumming her heels.
He held up his bicycle and threw it at the wolf, in the hope that the wolf would be frightened away.
Before it could realize what had happened, Paul had already opened the front door and instantly pulled Mac into the car.
Hardly had Mac stood up when the wolf arrived and was about to launch another attack.
III. 片段的积累
1. Every time I made a move to get it, some passing eye detected my purpose, and of course I straightened up and looked indifferent, and pretended that I hadn’t been thinking about the pear at all. This same thing kept happening and happening, and I couldn’t get the pear. I was just getting desperate enough to brave all the shame, and to seize it, when a window behind me was raised, and gentleman spoke out of it, saying: “Step in here, please.”
2. With great care she began the dangerous crossing, sometimes on her hands and knees, hardly daring to look down between the sleepers into the wild flood waters below. If she should slip, she would fall between the sleepers, into the rapidly flowing stream.
3. Mac saw his last straw, jumped off his bike and dashed for the side of the car. He slammed the car door wildly as the hungry wolf was almost reaching him. Paul quickly unlocked the door and Mac dived into the car, out of breath. The hungry wolf seemed unwilling to give up on its prey, growling outside the window. The frightened three sat inside trembling with horror with the wolf trying to enter the car. After what seemed a long time, the exhausted wolf walked away, disappearing into the woods.
3. Mac was panic-stricken, Mac could do nothing but closed his eyes.
改写：
_____________(过去分词作状语), Mac could do nothing but closed his eyes.
2. The wolf kept growling at them from outside the car, and it unwilling to give up on its prey.
改写：
The wolf kept growling at them from outside the car, ___________________________(形容词短语作状语).
1. Henry walked along the street aimlessly, and he was hungry and tired.
改写：
Henry walked along the street aimlessly, _____________(形容词作状语).
Panic-stricken
unwilling to give up on its prey
hungry and tired
Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换
Tip 1: 我们可以借助形容词或过去分词作状语来丰富细节描写。
3. a. Her heart was pounding in her mouth.
b. She rushed to the front door and pounded the doorbell with all her strength.
合并句子：____________________________________________________________________________________________
1. a. The bearded man was bearing down on the little girl.
b. The little girl let go of her new toy and fled away.
合并句子： ____________________________________________________________________________________
With the bearded man bearing down on the little girl, she let go of her new toy and fled away.
2. a. Jack wrapped the thief in his arms.
b. Jack yelled at his wife breathlessly, “call 911!”
合并句子：_______________________________________________________________
With the thief wrapped in his arms, Jack yelled at his wife breathlessly, “call 911!”
With her heart pounding in her mouth, she rushed to the front door and pounded the doorbell with all her strength.
Tip 2: 我们可以用with的复合结构来合并两个意义紧密关联的句子。
2. 翻译：他刚刚打算开门，这时突然有人拍了拍他的肩膀。
______________________________________________________________________
1. a. He was just about to touch that vase.
b. Just at that time, there came the barking of the dog, which suggested someone was coming.
合并句子：_________________________________________________________________________________________________________.
He was just about to touch that vase when there came the barking of the dog, which suggested someone was coming.
He was just about to open the door when suddenly someone patted his shoulder from behind.
Tip 3: 我们可以使用be about to…when；hardly…when; no sooner…than来描述两个接连发生的动作。
3. 翻译：他正要站起来，这时那头狼跳到他跟前只有几码的地方。
___________________________________________________________________________________
He was just about to rise to his feet when the wolf jumped right in front of him, only a few yards away.
3. I rushed to the railway station, ________________________________(结果被告知他们已经走了)。
Tip 4: 我们可以使用only to do来表示事与愿违的结果。
only to find herself too weak to do that.
2. Carl attempted to get away with the vase, __________________________________(结果发现自己已经被警察包围)。
only to be told that they had already left.
only to find himself surrounded by the police.
She attempted to stand up, ________________________________________(结果发现自己太虚弱了，站不起来)。
Possible version
Once TJ hit the alley, he spotted the man a couple of blocks down, standing in front of an abandoned white house. Its windows were busted, doors boarded up, and yard over-grown. He was shoving the panicked girl through a window. Just then, Brad Ware and his wife pulled up. “Stay here,” Ware told TJ as he took off toward the house. With Ware now bearing down on him, the man let go of Kim in the window frame and walked away, almost calmly. He was about to break into a run when Ware caught up with him. They struggled. Ware kicked the man in the groin and wrapped him in his arms. The man squirmed free and fled across the street. When he stumbled, Ware lunged and tacked him.
Possible version
Alerted by Julie and other neighbors, the police and the victim’s mother had arrived on the scene. Kim dashed into the safety of her mother’s arms, safe and sound. The two cried and hugged. Meanwhile, officers cuffed and arrested Raeshawn Perez, 26. He was charged with aggravated kidnapping and was being held on $50,000 bond as this issue went to press. There were a few heroes that day, but Ware insists that the quick-thinking, dogged 11-year-old deserves most of the credit. “You know, he’s the reason why we managed to find the girl before something terrible happened,” Ware told KFDX, a local newspaper. That news came as no surprise to TJ’s mother. “This is exactly his character,” says Angie Hess Smith. “His first thought is not of himself. It’s always of others.”
评点：这篇文章语言较为平实，表达干净利落，动作描写贯穿全文，推动着情节的发展。续写第一段是动作描写的高潮部分。因此，该段落在继续原文语言风格的同时，精选了一系列动作表达来准确还原当时的打斗场面，如shove sb through; take off toward; bear down on sb; let go of; break into a run; kick sb in the groin; wrap sb in one’s arms; squirm free; flee across; lunge; tack等. 此外，with的复合结构以及句型be about to do…when…的使用，使得句子表达更为紧凑连贯，也烘托了当时打斗场面的紧张氛围，凸显了hero之一Ware的勇敢无畏。而续写第二段主要是为了交代故事主要人物的结局，以及凸显主题Everyday Heroes。
因此本段节奏放缓，气氛由紧张转为轻松，整段洋溢着开心，激动和自豪等情感。因此，续写第二段像电影镜头般地，在各个主角当中切换，用平实的语言依次交代了主要人物的结局。在交代小女孩Kim的结局时，用了形容词safe and sound跟在主句后作状语，让读者悬着的心顿时松了下来。在语言上为了与原文的写实风格呼应，本段使用了两次直接引语，即引用了本故事的主角之一Ware和TJ的妈妈的话，从侧面对TJ的行为进行褒扬，从而点明标题Everyday Heroes，英雄就在我们身边，他们平凡而又伟大。