2020高考英语新题型—读后续写和概要写作课件92(共23张PPT)
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(共23张PPT)
The Hidden Treasure
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读
A story
how
where
when
why
who
what
Old Man Donovan
“I”
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (Who)
Leigh Ann
Younger sister
neighbor
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读(When)
1. One summer day, we were playing in a nearby field. It was time to head back home. (para 3)
和old Man 的第一次接触
日后的多次频繁接触
2. As time went on, we often went through Old Man Donovan's farm, and he kept on giving us more luscious fruit. (para 6)
3. One day, we stopped by to see him when he was on his front porch. (para 6)
和old man 的深入交流
4. Soon, he was one of our favorite people to talk to. (para 6)
很快成为了好友
Interpretation of the Text文本解读(How)
①有一次我跟妹妹一起为了抄近路回家，试图穿过老人的果园。因为听闻老人很凶，我们一路小心翼翼，结果就在快要穿过的时候，老人发现了我们。我跟妹妹以为要遭殃了，结果老人非但没有我们预想的那样砸石头和用枪射击而是递给我们果子。这让我们意外万分。
②后来几次经过他家的时候，他依旧不停地给我们果子。
③后来我们有一次促膝聊天后，我们发现了他美好的心灵，并成为了好朋友。
故事情节
情感线：
接触之前，我们听说老人很坏mean。谣传说他会朝孩子扔石头和开枪。因而在一次抄近路，走过老人的农场的时候，我们胆战心惊，被老人叫住的那一刻，更是脑补了石头砸在身上和子弹穿过身体的感觉。
但是，老人却意外地給了我们很多水果，我们又惊又喜地跑开了。后来随着经过农场次数的增加，老人不断的提供水果， 我们走近老人了解后发现老人并不是谣言说的那样，而是有着一颗善良的心。
情感的变化是从 frightened到surprised 到friendly。
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读 (G-N策略）
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 1 Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him.
Given
Information
1. As time went on, we often went through Old Man Donovan's farm, and he kept on giving us more luscious fruit…(Para 6)
2. Soon, he was one of our favorite people to talk to.(Para 6)
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
New Information
① What did they talk when they met every summer?
② What was the matter with Old Man Donovan ?
③ What’s their reaction?
④ How about his family’s attitude to our visit?
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 1 Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him.
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 2 The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.
Unfortunately, his family?never seemed to?enjoy our company. They never smiled or?welcomed us in.（para.6)
Given
Information
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
New Information
① On hearing the news, how would my sister and I
feel?
② What did my sister and I do on the funeral?
③ How about the family’s reaction?
④ What were our final words to the old man?
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 2 The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.
2. Interpretation of underlined words下划线词解读：
Old Man Donovan, farm, my sister and I, summer, fruit, hidden treasure, kind heart, company, his family, welcome
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读
时空线 情节线 情感线
summer Old Man Donovan, farm, my sister and I, fruit, company,
his family, welcome hidden treasure, kind heart
Old Man Donovan
was discharged from the hospital
Interpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读 1
Leigh Ann
“I”
went over to visit him right away
The family
welcomed
had died
decided to go to the funeral
Old Man Donovan
was seriously ill
Interpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读 2
Leigh Ann
“I”
rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition
The family
approached and welcomed us.
had died
mourning for the death
The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：
之修辞的运用篇
Para.6: we realized that we had found?the other?hidden treasure: the sweet,?kind heart?hidden behind his gruff voice.
在本篇续写中，大家可以发现情节线部分提供了较多的关键词，内容较为丰富，然而，情感线主要就是两个名词 “the hidden treasure” 和 “ kind heart”。所以，在续写部分，情感的表达就仁者见仁智者见智了，添加适当的修辞必然会使文采大不相同。本篇主要从修辞角度出发，讨论如何提高本文的语言表达水平。
e.g.
A list of buildings undestroyed was now only a few addresses.
A list of the brave men and women would fill a library.
A list of all those killed will never be made.
The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：
之修辞的运用篇
2. 他一边听着一边一如既往地递给我们香甜的果子。看着我们三五下就吃完果子，他总是温柔地拍着我们的头说： “别着急，慢慢来”。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换
听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他笑得很灿烂。
_______________________________________
(运用metaphor) 听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他的笑容灿烂得如宝石一样闪闪发光。
__________________________________________________________
Hearing us talking about the colorful life, the smile on his face shone like a diamond.
Hearing us talking about the colorful life, he smiled brightly.
While listening, he handed out luscious fruit to us as usual. Watching us eating quickly, he always patted on our heads, saying, “No hurry. Take your time!”
3. 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(运用simile) 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，如坐针毡，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。
__________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________
On receiving the bad news, we felt anxious and restless. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition.
On receiving the bad news, we were anxious and restless, feeling like sitting on pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition.
4. 这台手术的成功与否也许决定了老人是否能活下来。
____________________________________________________________________
(运用simile) 这台手术也许不能成功，老人能否活下来就是一场赌博。
______________________________________________________________________
Whether the old man could survive depended on the success of the operation.
5. 我意识到一起坐着聊天的日子结束了。我们再也尝不到老人亲手种的果子了。
______________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________
(运用parallelism) 我意识到一起坐着聊天的日子结束了。我们再也尝不到老人亲手种的果子了。
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The operation might not succeed and it was a gamble whether he would live or die.
I realized that the day when we sat together chatting with each other came to an end. We wouldn’t be able to have a taste of the fruit grown by him.
I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other. I realized gone were the days when we were lucky enough to have a taste of the luscious fruit grown by him.
Possible version 1
Paragraph 1
Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him. He told us different kinds of stories we were fond of. But one summer, we heard that he was hospitalized because he was sick with his throat. Finding out that he was discharged from the hospital, we went over to visit him right away. The family welcomed us. When asked about his illness, they told us not to worry too much. When we were to leave, surprisingly, they offered us some luscious fruit and asked us to visit him as usual.
Possible version 1
Paragraph 2
The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died. Hearing the bad news, my sister and I couldn’t hold back our tears. We were heartbroken and decided to go to the funeral. When we arrived, we saw lots of familiar faces from the neighborhood. The family kindly greeted us and said they were so glad we had come. At the moment when we had to say goodbye to Mr. Donovan, our friend, forever, we all wept mournfully, but our wonderful memories of him comforted us. We shall live and pass on his message-- to be a man with a kind heart.
Possible version 2
Paragraph 1
Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him. We shared with him our colorful experience at school while he kept giving out his luscious fruits to us as usual. As time went by, we seemed to be more a family than good friends and his family gradually came to greet us with a warm smile. But one summer, we were informed that he was seriously ill and we were anxious and restless, feeling like sitting on pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition. Weak as he was, he comforted us that it wasn’t a big deal. It was from his family that we knew the truth. Old Man Donovan had fell from a tree while looking after the fruits and his head was seriously hurt and need an operation. The operation might not succeed and it was a gamble whether he would live or die.
Possible version 2
Paragraph 2
The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died. Hearing the bad news, my sister and I just couldn’t believe it until we went back home and saw his smiling face on the wall. I felt a lump in my throat, tears welling up in my eyes. The family approached and welcomed us. “ I’m sorry for your loss.” I gave them a big hug. On my way back home, the wind whistled through the trees, as if mourning for the death of Donovan. I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other. I realized gone were the days when we were lucky enough to have a taste of the luscious fruit grown by him. However, he left us a hidden treasure-- his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage of time.
点评：比较上面两篇参考范文，我们不难发现：第一篇用词较为地道，情节简洁紧凑，欠缺的就是情感的表达。让人读起来干瘪，缺乏人情味。第二篇在表达上增加了不少细节和修辞手法。比如，第一段最后一句比喻的使用不仅使表达更加生动，也为下文情节的展开做好了铺垫，起到了承上启下的作用。第二段的felt a lump in the throat和关于风的拟人化描写，成功地描绘了作者内心的痛苦，渲染了悲凉的气氛。最后的排比句更是把文章情感的抒发推向高潮，并和最后的转折形成一个对比，点题呼应标题the hidden treasure. 因此，修辞手法的运用是我们读后续写的一大法门，一定要注意平时多积累。
The Hidden Treasure
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读
A story
how
where
when
why
who
what
Old Man Donovan
“I”
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读 (Who)
Leigh Ann
Younger sister
neighbor
Interpretation of the Text 文本解读(When)
1. One summer day, we were playing in a nearby field. It was time to head back home. (para 3)
和old Man 的第一次接触
日后的多次频繁接触
2. As time went on, we often went through Old Man Donovan's farm, and he kept on giving us more luscious fruit. (para 6)
3. One day, we stopped by to see him when he was on his front porch. (para 6)
和old man 的深入交流
4. Soon, he was one of our favorite people to talk to. (para 6)
很快成为了好友
Interpretation of the Text文本解读(How)
①有一次我跟妹妹一起为了抄近路回家，试图穿过老人的果园。因为听闻老人很凶，我们一路小心翼翼，结果就在快要穿过的时候，老人发现了我们。我跟妹妹以为要遭殃了，结果老人非但没有我们预想的那样砸石头和用枪射击而是递给我们果子。这让我们意外万分。
②后来几次经过他家的时候，他依旧不停地给我们果子。
③后来我们有一次促膝聊天后，我们发现了他美好的心灵，并成为了好朋友。
故事情节
情感线：
接触之前，我们听说老人很坏mean。谣传说他会朝孩子扔石头和开枪。因而在一次抄近路，走过老人的农场的时候，我们胆战心惊，被老人叫住的那一刻，更是脑补了石头砸在身上和子弹穿过身体的感觉。
但是，老人却意外地給了我们很多水果，我们又惊又喜地跑开了。后来随着经过农场次数的增加，老人不断的提供水果， 我们走近老人了解后发现老人并不是谣言说的那样，而是有着一颗善良的心。
情感的变化是从 frightened到surprised 到friendly。
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读 (G-N策略）
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 1 Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him.
Given
Information
1. As time went on, we often went through Old Man Donovan's farm, and he kept on giving us more luscious fruit…(Para 6)
2. Soon, he was one of our favorite people to talk to.(Para 6)
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
New Information
① What did they talk when they met every summer?
② What was the matter with Old Man Donovan ?
③ What’s their reaction?
④ How about his family’s attitude to our visit?
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 1 Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him.
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 2 The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.
Unfortunately, his family?never seemed to?enjoy our company. They never smiled or?welcomed us in.（para.6)
Given
Information
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
New Information
① On hearing the news, how would my sister and I
feel?
② What did my sister and I do on the funeral?
③ How about the family’s reaction?
④ What were our final words to the old man?
1. Interpretation of given information首句解读：
Para. 2 The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.
2. Interpretation of underlined words下划线词解读：
Old Man Donovan, farm, my sister and I, summer, fruit, hidden treasure, kind heart, company, his family, welcome
Interpretation of underlined words and given information划线词和续写首句解读
时空线 情节线 情感线
summer Old Man Donovan, farm, my sister and I, fruit, company,
his family, welcome hidden treasure, kind heart
Old Man Donovan
was discharged from the hospital
Interpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读 1
Leigh Ann
“I”
went over to visit him right away
The family
welcomed
had died
decided to go to the funeral
Old Man Donovan
was seriously ill
Interpretation of writing ideas 写作思路解读 2
Leigh Ann
“I”
rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition
The family
approached and welcomed us.
had died
mourning for the death
The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：
之修辞的运用篇
Para.6: we realized that we had found?the other?hidden treasure: the sweet,?kind heart?hidden behind his gruff voice.
在本篇续写中，大家可以发现情节线部分提供了较多的关键词，内容较为丰富，然而，情感线主要就是两个名词 “the hidden treasure” 和 “ kind heart”。所以，在续写部分，情感的表达就仁者见仁智者见智了，添加适当的修辞必然会使文采大不相同。本篇主要从修辞角度出发，讨论如何提高本文的语言表达水平。
e.g.
A list of buildings undestroyed was now only a few addresses.
A list of the brave men and women would fill a library.
A list of all those killed will never be made.
The Micro-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：
之修辞的运用篇
2. 他一边听着一边一如既往地递给我们香甜的果子。看着我们三五下就吃完果子，他总是温柔地拍着我们的头说： “别着急，慢慢来”。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换
听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他笑得很灿烂。
_______________________________________
(运用metaphor) 听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他的笑容灿烂得如宝石一样闪闪发光。
__________________________________________________________
Hearing us talking about the colorful life, the smile on his face shone like a diamond.
Hearing us talking about the colorful life, he smiled brightly.
While listening, he handed out luscious fruit to us as usual. Watching us eating quickly, he always patted on our heads, saying, “No hurry. Take your time!”
3. 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
(运用simile) 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，如坐针毡，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。
__________________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________
On receiving the bad news, we felt anxious and restless. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition.
On receiving the bad news, we were anxious and restless, feeling like sitting on pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition.
4. 这台手术的成功与否也许决定了老人是否能活下来。
____________________________________________________________________
(运用simile) 这台手术也许不能成功，老人能否活下来就是一场赌博。
______________________________________________________________________
Whether the old man could survive depended on the success of the operation.
5. 我意识到一起坐着聊天的日子结束了。我们再也尝不到老人亲手种的果子了。
______________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________
(运用parallelism) 我意识到一起坐着聊天的日子结束了。我们再也尝不到老人亲手种的果子了。
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The operation might not succeed and it was a gamble whether he would live or die.
I realized that the day when we sat together chatting with each other came to an end. We wouldn’t be able to have a taste of the fruit grown by him.
I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other. I realized gone were the days when we were lucky enough to have a taste of the luscious fruit grown by him.
Possible version 1
Paragraph 1
Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him. He told us different kinds of stories we were fond of. But one summer, we heard that he was hospitalized because he was sick with his throat. Finding out that he was discharged from the hospital, we went over to visit him right away. The family welcomed us. When asked about his illness, they told us not to worry too much. When we were to leave, surprisingly, they offered us some luscious fruit and asked us to visit him as usual.
Possible version 1
Paragraph 2
The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died. Hearing the bad news, my sister and I couldn’t hold back our tears. We were heartbroken and decided to go to the funeral. When we arrived, we saw lots of familiar faces from the neighborhood. The family kindly greeted us and said they were so glad we had come. At the moment when we had to say goodbye to Mr. Donovan, our friend, forever, we all wept mournfully, but our wonderful memories of him comforted us. We shall live and pass on his message-- to be a man with a kind heart.
Possible version 2
Paragraph 1
Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him. We shared with him our colorful experience at school while he kept giving out his luscious fruits to us as usual. As time went by, we seemed to be more a family than good friends and his family gradually came to greet us with a warm smile. But one summer, we were informed that he was seriously ill and we were anxious and restless, feeling like sitting on pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition. Weak as he was, he comforted us that it wasn’t a big deal. It was from his family that we knew the truth. Old Man Donovan had fell from a tree while looking after the fruits and his head was seriously hurt and need an operation. The operation might not succeed and it was a gamble whether he would live or die.
Possible version 2
Paragraph 2
The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died. Hearing the bad news, my sister and I just couldn’t believe it until we went back home and saw his smiling face on the wall. I felt a lump in my throat, tears welling up in my eyes. The family approached and welcomed us. “ I’m sorry for your loss.” I gave them a big hug. On my way back home, the wind whistled through the trees, as if mourning for the death of Donovan. I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other. I realized gone were the days when we were lucky enough to have a taste of the luscious fruit grown by him. However, he left us a hidden treasure-- his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage of time.
点评：比较上面两篇参考范文，我们不难发现：第一篇用词较为地道，情节简洁紧凑，欠缺的就是情感的表达。让人读起来干瘪，缺乏人情味。第二篇在表达上增加了不少细节和修辞手法。比如，第一段最后一句比喻的使用不仅使表达更加生动，也为下文情节的展开做好了铺垫，起到了承上启下的作用。第二段的felt a lump in the throat和关于风的拟人化描写，成功地描绘了作者内心的痛苦，渲染了悲凉的气氛。最后的排比句更是把文章情感的抒发推向高潮，并和最后的转折形成一个对比，点题呼应标题the hidden treasure. 因此，修辞手法的运用是我们读后续写的一大法门，一定要注意平时多积累。