书面表达指导 (课件PPT39张)

初中英语写作指导课
Advice on making your articles perfect

---中考书面表达备考训练

Advice on making your articles perfect
中考正向我们款步走来，
我们以什么来面对中考？
信心和态度决定60%,
那么剩下的40%是什么？
那就是方法，
Good ways，half done
中考写作也是如此，
因此，这节课，
对占中考笔试one sixth总分的作文，
给同学们丁点的建议和方法并让你们有收获，
那，就是我所期待的……

档次
（分数）
评分标准(Evaluation Standards)
第五档
（15-13分）
很好地完成了规定的写作任务。包含所有内容要点，结构完整，语句完整，语句流畅，意思清楚、连贯。使用较为丰富的语法结构和词汇，语法结构和词汇错误极少，格式正确，书写规范。
第四档
（12-10分）
较好地完成了规定的写作任务。基本上包含所有内容要点，结构较为完整，语句完整，意思清楚。语法结构和词汇错误较少，格式基本正确，书写较为规范。
第三档
（9-7分）
基本上完成了规定的写作任务。包含所有内容要点，结构欠完整，少数语句不通顺，意思基本清楚。语法结构和词汇错误较多，格式基本正确，书写基本规范。
第二档
（6-4分）
未能按要求完成规定的写作任务。只包含少数内容要点，结构不完整，多数语句欠完整，意思不够清楚。语法结构和词汇错误较多，影响理解，格式不够正确，书写欠规范。
第一档
（3-0分）
未能按要求完成规定的写作任务。只写出个别要点，结构不完整，多数语句不完整或意思不明。语法结构和词汇错误很多，书写不规范。
1. 审题不清（漏段首观点句、漏要点）
2.拼写问题（拼错、大小写）
3. 语法问题
主要包括：1）名词单复数,
2）动词的时态与语态以及缺少动词的情况, 3）形容词和副词的等级形式,
4）代词、介词、数词和冠词的使用,
5）主谓一致等方面的错误。
6）诸多常见的固定句式的错误。
7）“中国式英语表达”。
　　
易犯的错误（mistakes)
健康很重要。在学习和工作的压力日趋增大的今天，会休息的人才会有健康的身体。人们是如何度过假期的呢？国际健康组织对此作了一次调查，右图是他们此次的调查结果。根据你所得的信息，请为国际健康组织写一篇完整的调查报告,并提倡大家进行假日休闲。
travel
stay at home
visit friends or parents
work
Style (体裁)：_____________
Person(人称)：_____________
Tense (时态): _______________
调查报告，记叙文
第三人称
一般现在时
1. 审(search):
据实描写：
适当发挥：
度假方式
细节及提倡假日休闲

A lot of people travel.
Some people stay at home.
Some other people visit friends or parents.
A few people work.
Enjoy your vacation.
stay at home
work
visit friends or parents
travel
2.列(list)
根据以下关键词及图表用
简单的句子列出文章的要点。
A lot of people travel. Some people stay at home. They watch TV or surf the internet. Some other people visit friends or parents. A few people work.
3.加(add)
加首尾，使结构完整，突出主题。
2.The body
1.The beginning
How do people spend their vacation? We made a survey and here is our report.
3.The ending
Come and enjoy your vacation. People who relax will work well.
4.美（beautify）
选好词句，美化文章。在有把握的情况下展示自己的语言功底。
选好词句，美化文章。在有把握的情况下展示自己的语言功底。
Writing skills（“写”的技巧）
方法一:善用词汇
Which is better?
我希望你能帮助我。
A I hope you can help me.
B I’m looking forward to your help.
Which is better?
他们很早就到了。
A They arrived early.
B They arrived as early as they could.
Which is better?
最后，他的狗得救了，他感到很惊讶。
A His dog was saved at last.
He was very surprised.
B To his surprise, his dog was saved at last.
方法二:活用多种句型
Writing skills（“写”的技巧）
她还小，搬不动这么重的箱子。
A She is very young.
She can’t carry the heavy box.
B She is too young to carry the heavy box.
C She is so young that she can’t carry the …
D She is not old enough to carry the…
方法三:妙用关联词
Writing skills（“写”的技巧）
1.表示并列或递进: and, both…and, what’s more
not only…but also, neither…nor
2.表示转折: but,however,although\though,anyway
3.表示因果: because,so,therefore,since,as a result
4.表示对比: instead, not…but, while,
on one hand…on the other hand
5.表示解释: for example, such as, that is to say, in other words, to tell the truth
6.表示顺序: firstly, first (of all), second(ly), next, finally, in the end, from then on
7.表示强调: besides, especially, actually, in fact
8.表示结论:in a word, generally speaking, in short
关联词(connection words)
Let’s try
_____________ I am tired, I keep on working till midnight.
He didn’t go to movies, he went to the concert ______.
We like doing kinds of sports _____ swimming, running and hiking.
_____, he stood up. Then he got out. _____, he went back. ____________, he smiled.
Though\Although
instead
like
First
Next
Finally\At last
模考作文
美(beautify)
方法四:妙用Proverb（谚语）/saying
Writing skills（“写”的技巧）
加谚语(Proverb/saying)
可用于”beginning”和”ending”，多用后者。
Come and enjoy your vacation. People who relax well work well.
As the saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” Come and enjoy your vacation. People who relax will work well.
只会用功不玩耍，聪明孩子也变傻
Proverb（谚语）
Enjoy some proverbs
1.Practice makes perfect.
2.Think twice before you do.

4.When in Rome, do as the Romans do.


三思而后行。
熟能生巧。
有志者事竟成。
入乡随俗。
失败是成功之母。
3.Where there is a will,
there is a way.
5.Failure is the mother of success.
Enjoy some proverbs
6.An apple a day keeps the doctor away.
7.All roads lead to Rome.

8.Never too old to learn.


一天一苹果， 医生远离我。
条条大路通罗马。
活到老，学到老。
模考作文
美(beautify)
5.Check
Spelling(拼写)
Tense(时态)
Grammar (语法)
Handwriting(书写)
Punctuation marks(标点符号)
查：通览全文仔细检查
书写、卷面 ------ 一条隐藏的评分标准
Handwriting
书写、卷面 ------ 一条隐藏的评分标准
Handwriting
basic rules
(写作考试规则)
search（审）
list（列）
add(加: 开头和结尾)
beautify(美：谚语/例子)
check(查：通览全文仔细检查）handwriting （书写工整）
Show time
Let’s practice! (练练笔)
暑假将至，学校呼吁每天花三小时自主读书．但是，同学们对于主要读什么产生了分歧。请根据下表提示，写一篇英文短文，向学校报刊投稿．
注意：1．必须包括表中所有提示内容，并作适当发挥；
2．文中不得出现你的真实姓名和学校名称；
3．表达清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯，书写规范；
4．词数不少于100．文章的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数．
5．参考词汇：长篇读物 full-length reading n．[u]；
文学作品 works of literature n．（pl．）
观点一：
读长篇读物如文学作品、科学书籍，因为能培养阅读习惯
观点二：
读实用短文如社会新闻、生活知识，因为能更多了解世界
你的选择：
长篇读物还是实用短文？
你的理由：
…（至少两点）
Sample writing
Our school asks us to spend three hours on self-reading every day in the summer vacation. However, opinions are divided on what to read．
Some students believe we should spend most of the time full-length reading，such as works of literature and science books. Because keeping reading a long time every day can help us developing a good reading habit. However, others think that we should read practical articles like social news and knowledge. In their eyes, practical articles can let them know more about the world.
In my opinion, I would like to choose practical articles. On the one hand，they can help us deal with our life problems. On the other hand, social news can let us know what happens every day around the world. So we may not be out of date. And we can save some time and feel relaxed.
Homework
After class, self-edit your own compositions.
2. Write a composition : How to get on well with others (复习指导P145)
Secrets of learning English:
Practice makes perfect.
Hard work leads to success.