【原创精析】2021届高考英语读后续写最新真题剖析+模拟题分析递送

【原创精析】2021届高考英语读后续写最新真题剖析+模拟题分析递送
真题部分
①——2020.7高考浙江卷
One
fall,
my
wife
Elli
and
I
had
a
single
goal:
to
photograph
polar
bears.
We
were
staying
at
a
research
camp
outside
“
the
polar
bear
capital
of
the
world
”
—
the
town
of
Churchill
in
Manitoba,
Canada.
Taking
pictures
of
polar
bears
is
amazing
but
also
dangerous.
Polar
bears
—
like
all
wild
animals
—
should
be
photographed
from
a
safe
distance.
When
I’m
face
to
face
with
a
polar
bear,
I
like
it
to
be
through
a
camera
with
a
telephoto
lens.
But
sometimes,
that
is
easier
said
than
done.
This
was
one
of
those
times.
As
Elli
and
I
cooked
dinner,
a
young
male
polar
bear
who
was
playing
in
a
nearby
lake
sniffed,
and
smelled
our
garlic
bread.
The
hungry
bear
followed
his
nose
to
our
camp,
which
was
surrounded
by
a
high
wire
fence.
He
pulled
and
bit
the
wire.
He
stood
on
his
back
legs
and
pushed
at
the
wooden
fence
posts.
Terrified,
Elli
and
I
tried
all
the
bear
defense
actions
we
knew.
We
yelled
at
the
bear,
hit
pots
hard,
and
fired
blank
shotgun
shells
into
the
air.
Sometimes
loud
noises
like
these
will
scare
bears
off.
Not
this
polar
bear
though
—
he
just
kept
trying
to
tear
down
the
fence
with
his
massive
paws
(爪子).
I
radioed
the
camp
manager
for
help.
He
told
me
a
helicopter
was
on
its
way,
but
it
would
be
30
minutes
before
it
arrived.
Making
the
best
of
this
close
encounter
(相遇),
I
took
some
pictures
of
the
bear.
Elli
and
I
feared
the
fence
wouldn’t
last
through
30
more
minutes
of
the
bear’s
punishment.
The
camp
manager
suggested
I
use
pepper
spray.
The
spray
burns
the
bears’
eyes,
but
doesn’t
hurt
them.
So
I
approached
our
uninvited
guest
slowly
and,
through
the
fence,
sprayed
him
in
the
face.
With
an
angry
roar
(吼叫),
the
bear
ran
to
the
lake
to
wash
his
eyes.
Para
1:
A
few
minutes
later,
the
bear
headed
back
to
our
camp.
Para
2:
At
that
very
moment,
the
helicopter
arrived.
背景信息
During
October
and
November,
the
local
people
both
dread
and
celebrate?Polar
Bear
High
Season.
This
is
the
time
when
polar
bears
migrate
to
the
region
and
visitors
from
all
over
the
world
follow.
It
is
a
GREAT
deal
of
fun
especially
if
you
get
to
view
polar
bears
being
airlifted
from
the?Polar
Bear
Jail.?The?Churchill
Northern
Studies
Centre,
17
km
south
of
town,
serves
as
base
camp
for
serious
arctic
research.
In
town
are
a
number
of
reasonably
comfortable
hotels
and
good?shopping?opportunities.！
范文1：
A
few
minutes
later,
the
bear
headed
back
to
our
camp.
Then
we
realized
that
the
spray
had
only
angered
him
even
more,
for
he
seemed
much
fiercer
this
time
and
violently
pushed
the
fence
like
mad.
My
heart
raced
wildly,
not
knowing
what
to
do.
At
this
critical
moment,
Elli
grabbed
several
pieces
of
garlic
bread
and
threw
them
over
the
fence.
It
worked!
The
bear
stopped
the
attack
and
ran
to
the
bread.
But
it
wasn’t
long
before
he
ate
up
all
the
bread
and
came
back
again.
At
that
very
moment,
the
helicopter
arrived.
“Thank
goodness
we
are
saved!”
Elli
cried
out.
Once
the
helicopter
landed,
we
got
onto
it
in
no
time,
excited
and
relieved.
When
we
were
safe
on
the
helicopter
up
in
the
air,
I
was
amazed
to
spot
that
the
bear
had
finally
torn
down
the
fence
and
ran
towards
the
food
we
left
behind.
I
quickly
took
out
the
camera
and
photographed
the
rare
scene
—
we
were
robbed
by
a
polar
bear!
范文2（原创）
A
few
minutes
later,
the
bear
headed
back
to
our
camp.Shrieks
and
howls
of
utter
fury
broke
the
silence
and
extreme
terror
gripped
us.The
bear
reared
up
,attacked
the
fence
and
even
desired
to
tear
down
us
with
flames
blazing
in
its
eyes
owing
to
the
dreadful
spray.
My
wife
Elli
grasped
my
clothes
and
trembled,swallowing
hard.In
a
perspicacious
approach
to
win
time
from
the
battle
against
death,my
mind
raced
and
it
occurred
to
me
to
throw
the
bread
little
by
little
The
bear
could
hardly
resist
the
temptation
of
the
bread,admittedly,avarice
urged
him
to
yearn
for
more.He
flew
into
a
rage
and
hit
his
chest,glaring
at
us
aggressively.With
little
hesitation,I
fumbled
for
my
camera
,captured
the
last
shot
of
the
bear
and
smashed
it.
At
that
very
moment,
the
helicopter
arrived.Hope
met
us!I
dashed
straight
to
the
camp
haltingly,
nearly
stumbling.If
only
I
could
fly!My
wife
was
corresponding
with
the
pilot
through
radio
who
ensured
whether
we
had
suffered
any
injury.The
fierce
noises
got
on
the
bear’s
nerves
and
after
a
glimpse
of
the
enormous
thing,the
bear
disappeared
towards
the
lake.
Seeing
all
of
these,we
sighed
with
relief
,
sparkles
of
delight
arising
in
our
faces.In
spite
of
the
glorious
sacrifice
of
my
precious
camera,the
photographs
were
miraculously
survived.What
really
touched
our
heartstrings
was
the
encounter,adversity
and
ceaseless
strive.
②——2020.7高考山东卷（精深）
When
Mrs.
Meredith
heard
of
John’s
idea,
she
thought
it
was
a
good
one,
too.
With
everything
ready,
Bernard
started
out
on
his
new
business.
Para.
1
When
Mrs.
Meredith
heard
of
the
idea,
she
thought
it
was
a
good
one,
too.
Then
Mrs.
Meredith
searched
the
internet
and
ordered
a
household
popcorn
machine.
After
that,
Mrs.
Meredith,
together
with
her
three
children,
paid
another
visit
to
the
family
and
told
them
about
the
popcorn
plan.
Needless
to
say,
they
were
deeply
moved,
especially
Bernard
who
finally
found
a
way
to
make
money
for
his
family.
A
few
days
later,
the
machine
was
delivered
to
Mrs.
Meredith’s
doorstep.
And
it
wasn’t
long
before
they
got
the
hang
of
using
the
machine
to
make
popcorn.
Para.
2
With
everything
ready,
Bernard
started
out
on
his
new
business.
Although
it
was
a
hard
time
and
things
were
tight
for
everybody,
Bernard’s
business
worked
out
quite
well.
He
carried
the
popcorn
on
his
small
bike,
going
from
door
to
door
to
sell
it.
People
were
surprised
to
see
such
a
little,
poorly-dressed
boy
selling
popcorn
at
their
doors,
but
eventually
almost
all
of
them
would
buy
a
bag
or
two.
It
is
love
that
makes
the
world
go
round
and
Bernard
felt
it
deep
in
his
little
heart.
范文分析：
模拟题部分：
①——精诚联盟2020.9联考
This
story
happened
to
me
many
years
ago
but
I
can
still
remember
it
well.
When
I
was
fresh
out
of
school
and
working
in
Denver,
I
was
driving
to
my
parents'
home
in
Missouri
for
Christmas.
On
my
way,
I
found
that
my?car?was
running
out
of
gas.
So
I
stopped
at
a
gas
station
about
50
miles
from
from
Oklahoma
City,
where
I
was
planning
to?stop?and
visit
a
friend.
While
I
was
standing
in
line
at
the
cash
register(收款台),
I
said
hello
to
a
couple(夫妻)
who
were
also
paying
for
gas
and
they
responded
with
their
warm
smiles.
I
took
off,
but
had
gone
only
a
few
miles
when
black
smoke
poured
from
the
back
of
my
car.
My
car
just?broke
down.
What
a?trouble!
I
stopped
and
was
wondering
what
I
should
do
next
when
a
car
pulled
up
behind
me.
It
was
the?couple?I
had
spoken
to
at
the
gas
station.
They
said
they
would
take
me
to
my
friend's.
We
chatted?happily?on
the
way
to
the
city,
and
when
I
got
out
of
the
car,
the
husband
gave
me
his
business
card.
Arriving
home,
I
wrote
to
him
and
his
wife
a?thank-you
note?for
helping
me.
Soon
afterwards,
I
received
a
Christmas
present
from
them.
In
their
note
they
said
that
helping
me
had
made
their
holidays?meaningful.
Years
later,
I
drove
to
a
meeting
in
a
nearby
town
in
an
early
morning.
The
road
condition
was
quite
poor
on
the
way
and
it
was
said
that
cars
broke
down
frequently
there.
Anyway,
I
got
there
safe
and
sound.
After
the
meeting,
I
returned
to
my
car
and
found
that
I'd
got
a
flat
tire(瘪胎).
I
was
at
a
loss
when
I?noticed?that
the
Friendly
Ford
Dealership-
a
shop
selling
Ford
cars--
was
right
next
door.
I
walked
over
and
found?two
salesmen?in
the
shop.注意：
1.
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.
应使5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.
续写完成后,
请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph
1:?I
entered
the
shop,
and
one
of
the
salesmen
came
to
me.
I
couldn't
believe
my
eyes.
Paragraph
2:?After
a
while,
they
quickly
drove
a
pick-up
truck
to
my
car
and
started
it.
?二、下水思路
1.
确定主题：大主题是人与社会--良好的社会关系与社会交往。主旨是乐于助人，人生才有意义。原文中第三段最后一句--helping
me
had
made
their
holidays
meaningful--体现全文的主题。所以结尾处须有点题。I
will
never
forget
the
lesson
Arthur
taught
me:
Life
is
meaningful
when
you
can
give
a
hand
to
those
in
trouble.
2.
时空变化：第一段情节发生的时间是会议结束以后after
the
meeting.
地点是in
a
shop
selling
Ford
cars，第二段情节发生在作者的小车边，时间是第一段以后不久after
a
while
3.
续写难点：第一段情节比较简单，第二段开头提示语理解有难度--After
a
while,?they?quickly
drove
a
pick-up
truck
to
my
car
and?started
it.
应该思考的一个问题是they指代the
couple还是the
two
salesmen；另一个问题是轮胎漏气为什么要启动汽车started
it。下水时，最后安排启动汽车听发动机的声音，先检查汽车发动机是否有问题，确保汽车不会在路上break
down。检查发动机以后，再补轮胎这样的情节安排应该是合理。另外，原文的the
husband在续写时应该给出姓名，原因是
the
husband?gave
me
his
business
card.
Arriving
home,
I?wrote
to
him
and
his
wife
a
thank-you
note?for
helping
me.
Soon
afterwards,
I?received
a
Christmas
present?from
them.
所以续写时the
husband以多年未见的好友(Arthur)身份出现。
Paragraph
1:?I
entered
the
shop,
and
one
of
the
salesmen
came
to
me.
I
couldn't
believe
my
eyes.?Surely,
it
was
my
long-lost
friend,
Arthur,
always
wearing
a
warm
smile.
What
a
coincidence
that
Arthur
would
appear
in
front
of
me
when
I
had?trouble!
I
thought.
For
a
second,
I
stared
at
him
in
disbelief,
my
mouth
hanging
open.
In
the
meanwhile
Tom
instantly
recognized
me
and
he
gave
me
a
huge
hug.
“What
brings
you
here?”
he
asked
with
a
puzzled
expression
on
his
face.
So
I
told
him
that
my?car?got
a
flat
tire
and
that
considering
the
poor
road
condition,
it
might?broke
down?on
my
way
back
home.
Knowing
what
had
happened
to
me,
he
said
that
he
would
be
glad
to
give
me
a
hand
again.
Paragraph
2:?After
a
while,
they
quickly
drove
a
pick-up
truck
to
my
car
and
started
it.?After
listening
to
the
sound
of
the
engine,
Arthur
told
me
that
there
was
nothing
wrong
with
it.
And
then
they
started
to
fix
the
tire
and
we
chatted?happily.
Arthur
told
me
that
the?thank-you
note?from
me
inspired
him
to
live
a?meaningful?life
by
helping
others.
Soon
afterwards,
he
got
the
tire
fixed.
He
got
up,
wiped
the
sweat
from
his
face
and
wished
me
a
pleasant
journey.
I
couldn’t
thank
him
enough.
Many
years
have
passed,
but
I
will
never
forget
the
lesson
Arthur
taught
me:
Life
is
meaningful
when
you
can
give
a
hand
to
those
in
trouble.
②——浙江名校联盟Z20第一次联考
It
was
a
beautiful
October?evening,
a
cool
gentle
breeze
was
blowing
as
the
moon
rose
high
in
the
sky,
and
I
had
gotten
home
from
work
about
an
hour
earlier.
As
I
often
did
after
a
long
day,
I
went
straight
to
my
backyard
and
did
some
work
in
my
flower
garden
before
deciding
to
light
the
grill
to
make
dinner
for
my?husband?and
myself.
I
had
only
just
walked
a
few
steps
when
I
suddenly
felt
a?horrible?blow
to
the
right
side
of
my
neck.
It
felt
as
though
someone
had
hit
me
with
a
baseball
bat(棒球棒).
I
knew
that
no
one
was
in
the
yard
with
me,
so
no
one
could
have
hit
me.
Totally
confused,
I
reached
up
and,
to
my
shock
and
horror,?realized?that
I
had
been
shot-
with
an
arrow.
I
grabbed
the?arrow?tightly
where
it
had
gone
through
my
neck
and
ran
inside,
screaming
my
husband's
name.
Ed
was
in
the
back
of
the
house
talking
to
our
daughter,
Keila,
on
the
phone.
He
dropped
the
phone
and
ran
to
me.
Ed
grabbed
me
by
the
shoulders
to
stop
me
from
running
and
told
me
to
lie
down
on
the
couch.
Then
he
went
to
call
911.
I
lay
there
and?prayed.
I
didn't
know
if
there
was
any
way
that
I
could?survive.
The
next
hour
or
so
was
a
crazy,
disorderly
mix
of
events.
The
arrow
had
come
from
a
young?hunter?practicing
with
a
compound
bow,
used
for
hunting,
in
his
backyard.
Luckily,
he
was
using
a
practice
arrow,
which
is
smooth
and
rounded;
a
broadhead
arrow
for
hunting
would
have
killed
me.
He
lived
across
the
back
street
and
was?shooting?to
the
north.
The
arrow
had
bounced
and
turned
back
to
the
south.
It
went
over
two,
possibly
three,
fences,
through
the
bushes
and
an
oak
tree,
between
two
large
hanging
baskets,
and
into
my?neck?as
I
walked
to
the
grill.
A
shot
from
a
compound
bow
can
travel
up
to
200
miles
per
hour,
or
300
feet
per
second.
注意：
1.
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.
应使5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.
续写完成后,
请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph
1:?Soon,
I
was
sent
to
the
hospital.
Paragraph
2:?The
bow
hunter
paid
a
visit
to
me
the
next
day.
二、下水思路
1.
确定主题：考查遇险如何解决问题的能力，第一段可以提及first
aid，第二段可以强调安全教育，同时，强调学会宽容他人的过失
2.
时空变化：第一段应该是故事当天送到医院，第二段是是第二天应该是作者住院的病房内。
3.
续写难点：情节比较简单，但很难确定主题。如果是强调急救，应该属于人与自然--自然灾害与防范，安全常识与自我保护方面的内容。如果是强调宽容，应该是人与社会--良好的人际关系与社会交往。如果强调生命的意义与价值，应该属于人与自我。因此，文章很难收尾。根据原文第三段，这支箭能如此离奇地射中“I”，那这支箭为什么不能射中我的女儿
(Keila)
的心,
最后年轻人成了我女儿的男友呢？来个surprise
ending不是很好吗？下水时有过这样的思考，但还是放弃了。
Paragraph?1.?Soon,
I
was
sent
to
the
hospital.?But
again
panic
started
to
boil
up
inside
me.
At
this
point,
my?neck?seemed
to
explode
in
pain,
and
even
worse,
I
could
hardly
breathe.
I
was
close
to
tears
at
the
thought
that
I
was
going
to
die.
How
I
wished
that
the?horrible?nightmare
could
end
soon!
Fortunately,
after
doing
a
CT
scan
on
my
neck,
the
doctors
immediately
performed
an
operation
on
me.
The
moment
I
woke
up,
one
doctor
showed
me
the?arrow?that
might
kill
me,
saying
that
if
it
had
not
been
for
my
husband’s
quick
action
and
knowledge
of
first
aid,
I
would
not
have?survived.
Hearing
this,
I
smiled
at
my?husband?and
then
sighed
with
relief.?
Paragraph
2.?The
bow
hunter
paid
a
visit
to
me
the
next
day.?In
front
of
the
hospital
bed
stood
the
young?hunter,
who
bowed
his
head
in
shame
and?prayed?for
forgiveness.
I
sat
up
slowly,
with
no
idea
what
to
say.
There
was
a
moment
of
silence
before
Ed
pushed
open
the
door.
When
he?realized?who
the
young
man
was,
an
angry
look
crossed
his
face,
but
he
managed
to
contain
his
anger.
“It
was
an
accident,
but
you
mustn’t
practise?shooting?in
the
street,”
my
husband
said
sternly,
patting
him
on
the
shoulder.
Soon
the
young
man’s
eyes
gleamed
with
relief
and
joy,
and
he
promised
that
he
wouldn’t
do
that
again.
With
a
few
more
words,
he
bowed
to
us
both,
thanked
us
again
and
left.
③——浙江2020.10五校联考
一、续写原题?
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
September
is?most
beautiful
in
Strathroy,
where
people?wholeheartedly?enjoy
the
simple
pleasures
of
life
and
nature.
Roland?was
no?exception.
He
was
a
magnificent
German
Shepherd(德国牧羊犬),a
little?lazy?and
overweight
though.
He
loved
to
doze
in
the
backyard.
He
yawned
and
stretched
his
body
as
he
heard
the
slowly
approaching
footsteps
of
Mrs.
Proudfoot.
“Come
have
your
lunch
dear!”
said?Mrs.
Proudfoot?with
her
usual
fondness
for
him
and
he?wagged
his
tail?affectionately
in
return.
Roland
was
licking
the
last
piece
of
meat
in
his
plate
when
the
doorbell
burst
into
music.
Mrs.
Proudfoot
hurried
to
answer
the
door.
Roland
stood
alert
by
her
side.
“Good
noon
Mrs.
Proudfoot”.
It
was?Sam,
her
teenage
neighbor.?“My!
My!
You
look
pale!
What
happened?”
asked
Mrs.
Proudfoot
with
genuine
worry.
She
immediately
waved
him
in
and
closed
the
door
behind.
Mrs.
Proudfoot
was
alonely?widow,?but
was
well?loved?in
her
neighborhood
especially
by
kids,
though
she
had
no
kids
to
call
her
own.
Once
encouraged,
Sam
disclosed
his
dilemma.
“My
friend
Barry
lost
a
rare
book
of
school
library.
It
costs
150
dollars,
but
he
has
only
55
dollars
and
his
poor
parents
can’t
afford
to
pay
the
rest.
Barry
is
working
part
time
but
that’s
far
from
enough.”
With
a
dramatic
sigh
he
continued,
“If
he
didn’t
refund
the
loss
before
the
end
of
term,
he
will
be
dismissed
from
final
exams.That
will
ruin
his
future!
I
have
to
help
him,
whatever
it
takes.
He
is
my?best
friend.”
“Don’t
worry,
Sammy.
You
want
me
to
pay…”
but
Mrs.
Proudfoot
was
interrupted.
“No,
No,
Mrs.
Proudfoot.
This
is
not
what
I
came
here
for.
I’ll
work
for
you.?Would
you?favor
me
to?walk?your
dog
please?
For
2
dollars
a
day.”
He
looked
up
with
begging
eyes.
Mrs.
Proudfoot
clapped
her
hands
in
agreement,
“That
can’t
be
better!
I’ve
been
worried
about
Roland
lately.
He
does
need
some
exercise!
It’s
nice
of
you
to
make
such
an
offer.”?
Sam
thanked
her
over
and
over,
“I
will
start
tomorrow
morning.”
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.
应使5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.
续写完成后,
请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语
Paragraph
1:?Sam
arrived
very
early
the
next
morning.
Paragraph
2:?A
month
later,
Mrs.
Proudfoot
was
delighted
to
find
Roland
fit
and
energetic.
二、下水思路
1.
确定主题：患难之交才是真正的朋友。(A
friend
in
need
is
a
friend
indeed.)
或者是，赠人玫瑰，手有余香。(A
bit
of
fragrance
always
clings
to
the
hand
that
gives
you
flowers.)?主要人物Sam不但帮助了自己的朋友Barry，而且帮助了Mrs.
Proudfoot-a
lonely
widow
2.
时空变化：时空变化较大，可以叙述环绕主题的主要事件，不必面面俱到。
3.
续写难点：续写部分与原文在内容与语言上如何保持一致。
Paragraph
1：Sam
arrived
very
early
the
next
morning.?He
rang
the?
doorbell
and
politely
waited
for?Mrs.
Proudfoot?to
answer.
Then
he
could
hear
Roland
barking
and
whining
inside,
frantic
to
get
out.
Sam
stood
by
the
door,
debating
with
himself
whether
to?walk?the
unfriendly
dog
to
help
his?best
friend.
After
a
while,
the
door
flung
open
and
Mrs.
Proudfoot
came
out,
greeting
him
with
a
beaming
smile.
Surprisingly,
the?lazy?dog
grinned
up
at
him
and?wagged
his
tail,
eager
to
go
out
with
him.
Mrs.
Proudfoot
put
a
leash
on
the
dog,
stroked
his
glossy
head
and
said,
“Have
a
good
time,
dear!”
Without
saying
goodbye,
Sam
and
the
dog
danced
around
and
then
dashed
out
of
the
house
Paragraph
2：A
month
later,
Mrs.
Proudfoot
was
delighted
to
find
Roland
fit
and
energetic.?Obviously,
Sam’s
efforts
paid
off—Roland?was
healthy
and
active.
But
what
pleased
her
most
was
that?Sam,
together
with
the
other
kids,
would
stay
with
her
on
weekends,
chatting
and
laughing.
Besides,
they
would
help
her
clean
up
the
yard.
From
then
on,
laughter
filled
her
house
and
she
no
longer
felt?lonely.
Then
came
the
moment
Sam
had
been
looking
forward
to—the
day
he
was
paid
for
his
work.
What
a
big
surprise!
Tears
of
gratitude
welled
up
in
Barry’s
eyes
as
he
knew
what
Sam
had
done
for
him.
Sam
just
stood
there,
smiling,
glad
that
he
could?wholeheartedly?support
his
friend
when
he
was
in
trouble.
读后续写最新模拟题递送④——浙江2020.10十校联考
二、下水思路
1.
确定主题：主要内容是作者掉入冰窟，在哥哥的营救下脱险。主题侧重于增加安全意识，正确的自救方法
2.
时空变化：时空变化不大，第一段紧接上一段情节，中间可安排Harry跑到橡树林拿树枝救我，我在等待Harry时的心理活动描写。第二段主要写回家后妈妈看到我以后的情节。
3.
续写难点：续写部分与原文在内容与语言上如何保持一致。由于字数的限制很难展开细节描写，尤其是哥哥如何救我上岸时，只能一笔带过(Thank
goodness,
I
was
able
to?climb?out
of
the
ice
hole)。
三、下水续写
Paragraph
1:?Harry
turned
and
ran
from
the
pond.?“Wait
for
me!
It
won’t
be
long,”
he
exclaimed
to
me.
Desperate
and
hopeless,
I
closed
my
eyes,
praying
this
was
all
a
dream.
And
even
worse,
the
water
was
so
cold
it
felt
like
millions
of
needles
were
stabbing
me.
How
I
wished
that
I
could
fly
out
of
the?icy?water
like
a
bird!?After
what
seemed
to
be
ages,?Harry?returned
to
the?pond,
with
a
long
oak
branch
in
his
hand.
As
I
grabbed
hold
of
one
end
of
the
branch,
my
brother
started
to?drag?the
other
with
every
last
ounce
of
his
strength.Thank
goodness,
I
was
able
to?climb?out
of
the
ice
hole
and
then
we
galloped
home.?
Paragraph
2:?The
moment
I
crashed
through
the
kitchen
door,
sobbing,
mum
rushed
over.?“Oh,
my?God!
Where?have?you?been?”
she
said
in
surprise.?“You're
completely
wet.”
“It’s
Harry’s
fault!”
I
complained
to
her
through
my
chattering
teeth.
When
I
told
her
what
had
happened
to
me,
her
eyes
were
wide
with
horror.
All
of
a?sudden,
she
took
my
arm,
pulled
me
into
the
bathroom
and
then
gave
me
a
warm
bath.
After
that,
mum
dressed
me
in
a
warm?coat,
wrapped
me
in
a
blanket
and
poured
me
a
cup
of
hot
milk.
She
sat
next
to
me,
smiling,
relieved
that
I
was
all
right.
Sure
enough,
my
brother
was?criticized?by
mum
for
his
lack
of
safety
awareness.
⑤——2020温州三模
一、续写原题
It
was
a
rainy
November
morning.
Overcome
with
anger,
I
knew
if
I
didn't
leave
the
house
soon
I
would
lose
my
temper
with
my
husband,?Joe.
As
rain
came
down
in
sheets,
Joe
offered
to
take
me
to
work.
I?struggled?into
my
jacket,
seized
my
bag
and
teaching
plans
and
ignored
him.
He
insisted
and
reached
for
his
boots.
I
looked
at
the
piles
of
newspapers
and
the
dirty
dishes
still
on
the
table.
"Don't
you
have
enough
to
do?
I
can
take
care
of
myself."
I
stormed
out,
not
even
kissing
him
good-bye.
Joe?shouted?after
me
not
to
take
the?shortcut(捷径).
Joe
and
I
had
been
eagerly
looking
forward
to
our
retirement
when
a
heart
attack
that
past
spring
forced
him
to
leave
his
job
earlier
than
we
had
planned.
As
the
medical
bills
mounted
we?realized?I
would
have
to
continue
working
full-time
while
Joe
stayed
home
and
took
over
the?housework.
The
new
arrangement
was
a
disaster.
Exhausted
after
a
day
of
full
work,
all
I
wanted
was
a
hot
homecooked?meal?and
a
good
night's
sleep.
However,
what
greeted
me
at
the
table
was
a
microwave
package.
Sometimes
he
would
serve
oatmeal(燕麦)
for
several
nights
in
a
row.
One
night
when
I
dragged
myself
to
bed,
I
was
terrified
to
discover
Joe
had
turned
our
white
sheets
blue.
He
told
me
he
had
found
out
how
to
save
on
water,
soap
and
electricity.
He?patted?his
blue
trousers
and
announced
proudly
washing
everything
together
was
just
the
secret.
Ten
minutes
later,
ignoring
Joe's
warning
I
turned
off
the
main
route(道路).
I
thought
it
hadn't
rained
enough
to
flood
the
road,
but
as
I
rounded
the
corner,
water?rushed?across
my
path.
After
a
few
feet,
the
car
got
stuck.
I
opened
the
door
and
water
poured
in.
I
hurriedly
closed
the
door.
I
couldn't
risk
walking
in
this.
Almost
20
minutes
passed.
The
car
began
to
shake.
I
got?frightened?to
death
when
I
heard
three
long
honks(喇叭声).
注意：1.
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.
应使5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.
续写完成后,
请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph
1:?Looking
over
my
shoulder,
I
stared
into
the
flashing
lights
of
a
truck.
Paragraph
2:?I
screamed
that
I
couldn't
make
it.
二、下水思路
1.?确定主题：大主题是老夫老妻的爱情故事。以第一人称的视角进行叙述。故事讲的是我对丈夫的一些生活琐事的误解，通过上班遇险，丈夫奋力抢救，误解得以消除，爱意涌上心头。
2.
时空变化：?地点是在转弯处的一条被水淹没的小路上(...rounded
the
corner,
water
rushed
across
my
path)。丈夫的卡车在车子的后面(Looking
over
my
shoulder,
I
stared
into
the
flashing
lights
of
a
truck.
)。时间是上午上班路上。(It
was
a
rainy
November
morning....Joe
offered
to
take
me
to
work.
)
3.
续写难点：情节安排相对较复杂，尤其是对丈夫如何营救我的描写，涉及较多的动作描写。(问题解决类续写，要注意细节须紧扣主题，情节须合情合理，须反映解决问题的能力。)
此外，通过对险境的描写，突出丈夫的形象，为消除误解，体会真爱作铺垫。
三、下水续写
Paragraph
1:?Looking
over
my
shoulder,
I
stared
into
the
flashing
lights
of
a
truck.?A
familiar
figure
leaped
out,?rushed?towards
me
and
waded
into
the
water.
Thank
goodness,
it
was?Joe?who
came
to
my
rescue.
However,
the
water
was
running
so
rapidly
that
he
had
to
go
back.?Frightened?and
a
little
angry,
I
could
hardly
help
shedding
tears.
How
I
wished
that
my
husband
were
like
a
superman
who
could
save
me
from
disaster.
But,
after
a
while,
it
turned
out
that
Joe
returned
with
one
end
of
a
rope
in
his
hand
and
the
other
end
tied
to
the
truck.
He?struggled?to
throw
the
rope
to
me
and?shouted,
"Catch!
Open
the
door!"
Paragraph
2:?I
screamed
that
I
couldn't
make
it.?At
that
moment,
the
sound
of
the
raging
water
outside
grew
louder,
and
the
car
rocked
more
violently.
Worse
still,
the
water
came
up
to
Joe’s
waist
and
he
almost
lost
his
footing
in
the
water.
After
several
vain
attempts,
Joe?realized?that
there
was
no
chance
to
make
it.
He
put
every
ounce
of
strength
into
getting
close
to
me
and
said
soothingly,
"Don't
panic,
honey!
I'm
here."
With
Joe's
help,
I
burst
the
door
open,
and
Joe
immediately
tied
the
rope
around
my
waist.
The
moment
we
pulled
ourselves
out
of
the
water,
the
car
was
washed
away.
What
a
narrow
escape!
I
hugged
Joe
tightly,
happiness
and
love
welling
up
inside
me.
⑥——2020.9浙江“七彩阳光”高三联考
Once
there
was
a
slave
named?Androcles,
who
was
so
badly
treated
by
his
master
that
he
resolved
to
run
away
from
him.
He
therefore
secretly
left
his
master’s
house
and
hid
himself
in
a?forest,
some
miles
distant
from
the
city.
After
wandering
about
for
some
time,
he
came
to
a
large
cave,
and?overcome?by
hunger
and
tiredness,
he
lay
down
in
it,
and
soon
fell
fast
asleep.
He
was
suddenly
awakened
by
the
roar
of
a
wild
beast;
a
great?lion?stood
right
at
the
mouth
of
the
cave.
There
was
no
way
he
could
escape!
Androcles
expected
nothing
else
than
to
be
at
once
torn
to
pieces,
but
to
his
great?surprise,
the
lion
came?gently?towards
him,
without
showing
any
signs
of
anger.
It
gave
forth
a
low
and
mournful
(悲哀的)sound,
as
if
it
were
begging
for
his
assistance.
As
the
lion
approached
him,
he
noticed
that
one
of
its
feet
was
swollen.
He
then
went
up
to
the
lion,
took
hold
of
the
wounded
paw(爪子),
and
examined
it
as
a
surgeon
would
examine
a
patient.
He
was
not
long
in
finding
out
the?cause?of
the
swelling;
for
he
saw
in
the
ball
of
the
foot
a
very
large
thorn
(刺).
The
slave
pulled
out
the
thorn,
and
pressed
out
of
the
wound
a
quantity
of
matter,
which
gave
the
lion
immediate?relief.
Then,
the
lion
began
to
show
his?gratitude?by
every
means
in
his
power.
He
jumped
about
like
a
playful
spaniel
(西班牙猎犬),
wagged
his
great
tail,
and?licked?the
hands
and
feet
of
his
physician.
From
that
moment
Androcles
became
his
guest;
the
lion
always
shared
his
prey.
The
slave
continued
to
live
like
this
for
several
months.
At
length,
wandering
carelessly
through
the
woods,
he
was
seized
by
a
company
of
soldiers
who
were
sent
by
the
master
to
search
for
him.
Paragraph
1:?He
was
sentenced
to
be
torn
by
a
lion
in
the
public?arena
(竞技场).?
Paragraph
2:?However,
the
lion
didn’t
act
as
most
had
imagined.
?二、下水思路
1.
确定主题：寓言讲的是奴隶与狮子的故事，奴隶帮助了狮子，狮子知恩图报（From
that
moment
Androcles
became
his
guest;
the
lion?always
shared
his
prey.），最后救了奴隶。故事告诉我们善有善报。
2.
时空变化：根据两句句首提示语，第一段地点应该发生在角斗场，时间应该是即将与狮子角斗的时候。第二段在时间与空间上与第一段一致，时空变化不大。
3.
续写难点：很难确定故事寓意，可以是善有善报，也考虑过珍惜友谊。
Paragraph
1:?He
was
sentenced
to
be
torn
by
a
lion
in
the
public
arena
(竞技场).?The
terrifying
day
finally
arrived.
All
the
people
in
the
city
went
there
to
see
the
brutal
fight
between
the
poor
slave
and
a
bloodthirsty
beast.
When?Androcles?appeared
in
the
arena,
they
began
to
cheer
and
hoot.
All
eyes
were
on
him,
and
time
seemed
to
stop.?Overcome?by
a
stab
of
fear,
he
almost
collapsed
to
the
ground,
his
heart
pounding
and
his
knees
shaking.
And
then
came
a
furious
roar
and
the
great?lion?charged
at
him
with
its
flaming
eyes
and
gaping
jaws.
Desperate
and
hopeless,
the
slave
closed
his
eyes
and
dropped
his
sword,
thinking
that
he
was
done
for.?
Paragraph
2:?However,
the
lion
didn’t
act
as
most
had
imagined.?Much
to
their?surprise,
the
savage
beast
stopped
short
,
knelt
down
and
then?licked?the
slave’s
hands
and
feet.
He
behaved
like
a
pet
dog.
And
then
he
let
out
a
low
roar,
as
if
whispering
to
his
friend,
“Didn’t
you
recognize
me?”
Indeed,
it
was
the
very
lion
the
slave
had
helped
in
the?forest.
Sighing
with?relief,
the
slave
stroked
his
neck?gently,
tears
of?gratitude?welling
up
in
his
eyes.
So
moved
were
people
by
the
story
that
they
begged
the
master
to
set
free
the
slave
and
the
lion.
One
good
turn
deserves
another,
and
in
the
end,
Androcles,
the
slave,
became
a
free
man.
⑦——2020.5杭高二模
Old
Man
Donovan?was
a
mean
man
who
hated
children.
He
threw
rocks
at
them
and
even
shot
at
them
with
a
shotgun.
At
least
that's
what
we
had
heard.
His
small?farm?bordered
our
neighborhood
where
my
younger
sister,
Leigh
Ann,
and
I
lived
when
we
were
growing
up.
His
farm
was
long,
narrow,
and
quaint.
It
held
two
treasures.
One
was
his
beautiful
fruit.
There
were
many
varieties
of
fruit:
pears,
apples,
and
lots
more
I
just
can't
think
of.
The
fruit
naturally
drew
the
children
to
his
land.
It
made
them
into
thieves.
But?my
sister
and
I?didn't
dare
to
take
his
fruit
because
of
the
horrible
rumors
we
had
heard
about
Old
Man
Donovan.
One?summer?day,
we
were
playing
in
a
nearby
field.
It
was
time
to
head
back
home.
My
sister
and
I
were
feeling
very
daring
that
day.
There
was
a
short
cut
to
our
house
that
went
through
the
Donovan
farm.
We
thought
he
wouldn't
be
able
to
see
us
run
across
his
property
around
the
luscious?fruit?trees.
We
were
almost
through
the
farm
when
we
heard,
"Hey,
girl!"
in
a
gruff,
low
voice.
We
stopped
dead
in
our
tracks!
There
we
were,
face
to
face
with
Old
Man
Donovan.
Our
knees
were
shaking.
We
had
visions
of
rocks
pounding
our
bodies
and
bullets
piercing
our
hearts.
"Come
here,"
he
said,
reaching
up
to
one
of
his
apple
trees.
Still
shaking,
we
went
over
to
him.
He
held
out
several
ripe,
juicy,
red
apples.
"Take
these
home,"
he
commanded.
We
took
the
apples
with
surprised
hearts
and
ran
all
the
way
home.
Of
course,
Leigh
Ann
and
I
ate
the
apples.
As
time
went
on,
we
often
went
through
Old
Man
Donovan's
farm,
and
he
kept
on
giving
us
more
luscious
fruit.
One
day,
we
stopped
by
to
see
him
when
he
was
on
his
front
porch.
We
talked
to
him
for
hours.
While
he
was
talking,
we
realized
that
we
had
found
the
other?hidden
treasure:
the
sweet,?kind
heart?hidden
behind
his
gruff
voice.
Soon,
he
was
one
of
our
favorite
people
to
talk
to.
Unfortunately,?his
family?never
seemed
to
enjoy
our?company.
They
never
smiled
or?welcomed?us
in.
注意：1.
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.
应使5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.
续写完成后,
请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph
1:?Every
summer,
we
would
visit
Mr.
Donovan
and
talk
to
him.
Paragraph
2:?The
next
winter,
word
got
around
that
Old
Man
Donovan
had
died.
二、下水思路
1.?确定主题：大主题是人与人的关系。故事告诉我们不要相信谣传，不要以貌取人。故事中Old
Man
Donovan是一个外表可怕，其实是一个心地善良的老人。短文结构清晰，以农场中有two
treasures为线索，原文描写了第一个treasure--his
beautiful
fruit,
第二个看不见的treasure，就是老人善良的内心，这是续写的重点描写内容。
2.
时空变化：?要特别注意第二句句首提示语的时间The
next
winter,...这就意味着第一段必须提到某一个夏天，而不是every
summer。所以，第一段应该有两个时间，第一个是每年夏天做了什么，第二个时间应该是某一个夏天发生的事。在这一点上估计会出现离题。
3.
续写难点：第一是主题难以把握，估计都会提到a
kind
heart,
但是最好在结尾处有不能以貌取人的感悟。第二是时间空间的转换，尤其是对the
next
winter的理解，容易跑题。第三原文中提到老人的家人对他们不友好，在续写部分应该有相关的交代(his
family
never
seemed
to
enjoy
our
company.
They
never
smiled
or
welcomed
us
in)。第四原文情节相对曲折，多叙述少细节描写。
Paragraph
1:?Every
summer,
we
would
visit
Mr.
Donovan
and
talk
to
him.?As
always,
he?welcomed?us
with
open
arms
and
treated
us
to
some
red
apples.
Sometimes,
he
even
let
us
climb
up
the?fruit?trees
to
pick
the
ones
we
liked.
On
his?farm,
we
talked
and
laughed
cheerfully,
as
if
a?hidden
treasure?had
been
discovered.
While
talking
to
him,
we
got
to
know
why
there
were
horrible
rumors
about
him.
One?summer?morning,
however,
when
we
got
there,
we
were
shocked
to
find
that
he
was
ill
and
his
health
was
declining
rapidly.
But
we
could
see
the
joy
in
his
eyes,
whenever?my
sister
and
I?kept
him?company.
So
we
went
to
see
him
now
and
then,
hoping
that
he
would
recover
soon.
Paragraph
2:?The
next
winter,
word
got
around
that
Old
Man
Donovan
had
died.?When
we
heard
the
bad
news,
a
sense
of
grief
overwhelmed
us.
At
the
idea
of
never
seeing
our
old
friend
again,
we
stood
still,
tears
streaming
down
our
cheeks.
Then
we
dashed
to
the
farm,
only
to
find
that
our
friend
was
nowhere
to
be
seen.
In
spite
of
the
fact
that
his?family?were
a
little
unfriendly,
we
plucked
our
courage
to
go
to
his
funeral.
Thinking
back
to
the
happy
moments
we
spent
together,
we
started
to
weep
uncontrollably.
To
date,
we
remember?Old
Man
Donovan?and
the
lesson
we
learned:
Never
believe
rumors,
never
judge
a
person
from
his
appearance,
or
you
may
miss
a
person
with
a?kind
heart.
⑧——2020.6浙江名校联盟（Z20）联考
"Missy,"
I
cried
to
my
wife,
"did
you
put
the
banana
skin
on
my
desk?"
"No,
honey,?Meghan?probably
did,
"As
I'd
feared,
she
had
missed
my
real
purpose
of
the
question
which
was
to
make
it
clear
to
her
that
she
hadn't
done
her
job:
defend
my?desk?against
the
invader--our
naughty
girl.
I
abandoned
the
conversation.
I
sat
here
at
the
desk,
and
stared
at
the
screen.
I
waited
patiently
for
ideas
to
come
to
me,
exam
questions
for
a
test
I
would
give
my
English
students.
My
wife
was
off
to
a
reunion
somewhere,
but
I
was
not
alone.
Meghan,
our
22-month-old
daughter,
kept
me?company.
Yet
her
plans
that
day
seemed
to
go
against
mine.
She
followed
a
daily
routine
that
was
both
time-consuming
and
challenging.
It
included
certain
basic
tasks:
watching
the
fish,
sweeping
the
carpet
in
her
room,
climbing
up
and
down
her
bed.
At
first
I
could?concentrate
on?designing
my
test
paper.
But
I
was
soon
sidetracked(分心的).
I
had
not
counted
on
the
arrival
of
the"bib-bibs"("Bib-bibs"
were
birds).
"Bib-bibs,
bib-bibs!"
Meghan
screamed?excitedly,
her
eyes
alive
with?expectation.
She
insisted
that
I
go
with
her
to
the
window.?
"In
a
second.
Just
let
me
finish
this
question,"
I
said.
She?pulled?me
by
the
hand
(two
fingers,
actually)
toward
the
window.
I
saw
myself
as
a
fool,
being
led
to
watch
the
bib-bibs.
And
we
did
watch
them.
They
chattered
and
leaped
back
and
forth
on
the
lawn
just
outside
our
apartment
window.
Meghan
was
absorbed,
but
as
I
watched
them,
I
still
thought
about
my?work.?
Suddenly
she
rushed
out
from
the
room,
and
I
heard
her
naked
feet
slapping
against
the
wooden
floor
outside.
She?returned?with
her
doll,?Dumpty.
She
held
him
up
to
the
window,
stretching
him
out
by
his
two
arms
and
whispering
into
his
nonexistent
ear.
"Bib-bibs,
Dumpty,
bib-bibs!"
Then
I
left
them
in
conversation
and
returned
to
my
desk.
Paragraph
1:?Unfortunately,
she
came
again
soon,
with
her
shoes
in
hands
and
preparing
for
an
outing.
Paragraph
2:?Out
of
the
corner
of
my
eye
I
could
see
the
little
girl
sobbing
because
I
didn't
have
time
for
her.
二、思路
1.?确定主题：大主题是家长应该多陪伴孩子，理解孩子。短文以第一人称进行叙述。讲的是妻子外出聚会，将孩子留给我照顾，但我忙于工作，觉得孩子时刻在打扰自己。续写部分应该是通过与孩子的接触，感悟到作为家长除了工作，应该留出时间多陪伴孩子
2.
时空变化：没有大的时空转换，但随着情节的发展，会用到then,
shortly
after等时间状语。时间状语的有效使用能使行文连贯，逻辑紧密。
3.
续写难点：情节比较简单，但想象的空间很大。一般的处理方法是侧重细节描写，这就需要掌握一定量的能表现人物情绪的具体动作词汇，平时需有一定的积累。
Paragraph1:?Unfortunately,
she
came
again
soon,
with
her
shoes
in
hands
and
preparing
for
an
outing.?She
stood
at?the?desk,
and
gazed
up
at
me,
waiting
for
me
to
nod
my
head.
"Dumpty?is
crying.
Go
play
with
him!"
I
coaxed,
pretending
not
to
know
what
she
wanted
to
do.
Hearing
this,
she
reluctantly
laid
her
shoes
down
and
toddled
towards
the
window.
Like
a
mother
caring
for
her
baby,
she
stroked
her
doll
tenderly
as
she
hummed
softly
to
him.
Then
I
turned
around
and
set
to?work?again,
pleased
that
my
girl
could?concentrate
on?her
doll.
However,
not
long
after
that,
she?returned,?saying?excitedly,
"He's
sleeping!"
"Meghan!"
I
snapped,
"Daddy
is
busy
now!"
Paragraph2:?Out
of
the
corner
of
my
eye
I
could
see
the
little
girl
sobbing
because
I
didn't
have
time
for
her.?I
shook
my
head
helplessly,
unsure
of
what
to
do.
How
I
wished
my
wife
would
come
back
home
and
keep
her?company!
After
a
few
silent
minutes,
I
stood
up
from
the
seat
and
slowly
walked
over
to
her,
trying
to
comfort
her,
but
she
just
wiped
her
eyes
and
looked
away.
"I'm
sorry,
sweetie!"
I
said
gently,
reaching
out
my
hands.
Out
of
my?expectation,
my
girl
threw
herself
in
my
arms
and
easily
forgave
my
rudeness.
Overjoyed,
I
decided
to
take
a
break
from
work,
and
went
for
an
outing.
Suddenly
it
dawned
on
me
that
the
best
way
to
be
a
good
parent
is
to
spend
time
with
your
kids.
⑨——2020年3月高三模拟考
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I
stood
under
the?mistletoe(榭寄生).
The
green,
leafy
clusters(团，簇)spotted
with
waxy-white
berries
hung
from
the
branches
of
every
apple
tree.
That's
the
same
stuff
they
sell
in
the
stores
for
Christmas
decorations,
I
said
to
myself.
Why
can't
I
sell
mistletoe
too?
It
would
be
a
perfect
way
to
earn
money
to
buy
a
Christmas?gift?for
my
brother,?Derek.
I
took
a
few
steps
back,
ran,
leaped,
and
reached
as
high
as
I
could.
But
the
lowest
mistletoe
cluster
was
too
high.
Frustrated,
I
had
started
for
home,
when
something
strange
caught
my
eye.
At
the
edge
of
the
apple?orchard(果园),
one
tree
stood
bare.
All
the
mistletoe
had
fallen
off
the?branches.
Delighted,
I
carefully
picked
out
the
best
clusters
and
put
them
in
my
lunch
box.
When
it
was
full,
I
rushed
across
the
cornfield
to
go
home.
I
entered
the
side
door,
listening.
Yes,
a
guitar
was
playing.
I
pounded
on
the
door.
The
guitar
stopped.
A
moment
later
the
door
was
open.
My
brother
stood
there
wearing
his
brown
leather
jacket.
"Where
are
you
going?"
I
asked.?
"None
of
your
business,"
he
muttered,
sailing
past
me.
It
wasn't
easy
sharing
that
small
bedroom
with
my
older
brother.
With
Derek
out
of
the
room,
I
emptied
the
contents
of
my
lunch
box
onto
my
bed.
As
I
looked
for
something
to
put
the
mistletoe
in,
I
saw
Derek's
guitar
on
his
bed,
wrapped
in
an
old
towel.
That
guitar
was
the
only
beautiful
thing
Derek
owned,
and
I
knew
what
to?buy?with
the
mistletoe
money:
a?case?for
that
guitar.
Even
if
Derek
was
bad-tempered
sometimes,
he
was
still
my
brother,
and
I
loved
him.
Obviously
I
needed
more
mistletoe.
The
next
day,
I
cut
through
the
apple
orchard
again.
A
surprise
awaited
me—two
more
trees
were
bare,
and
more
mistletoe!
I
came
across
the
orchard
owner
who
said
he?paid?a
guy
to
cut
all
that
mistletoe
out
of
his
apple
trees.
He
was
happy
I
collected
the
mistletoe.
As
I
raced
for
home,
I
saw
Derek,
in
his
leather
jacket,
was
crossing
the
cornfield.
But
he
ignored
me.
That
night
I
picked
more
mistletoe.
With
all
mistletoe
sold
out,
I
hurried
over
to
the
music
store.
In
the
front
display
window
lay
a
row
of
wooden?recorders.
I
had
learned
to
play
a
plastic
one
at
school,
and
I
wanted
one
of
those
wooden
ones.
Each
year
that
was
at
the
top
of
my
Christmas
list.
But
each
year
there
wasn't
enough?money.
Paragraph
1:?I
was
calculating
how
much
more
money
I'd
need
to
buy
a
recorder
when
I
saw
the
towers
of
guitar
cases
in
the
back
of
the
store.
Paragraph
2:?I
reached
the
orchard
again,
overhearing
a
familiar
voice
talking
with
the
orchard
owner.
Paragraph
1:?I
was
calculating
how
much
more
money
I'd
need
to
buy
a
recorder
when
I
saw
the
towers
of
guitar
cases
in
the
back
of
the
store.??I
was
torn
between
a?recorder?for
myself
and
a
guitar?case?for
my
older
brother,?Derek.
However,
eagerness
to
own
a
wooden
recorder
built
inside
me.
I
couldn't
help
but
rush
into
the
store.
To
my
joy,
the?money?is
just
enough
for
me
to?buy?a
recorder,
and
I?paid?for
it
without
a
second
thought.
The
instant
I
raced
out
with
the
recorder,
I
realized
what
I
had
done.
I
stood
there,
deeply
ashamed
of
my
selfish
choice.
Having
wandered
aimlessly
in
the
street
for
a
long
time,
I
thought
to
myself,
"I
have
to
return
to
the?orchard?to
earn
enough
money."
Paragraph
2:?I
reached
the
orchard
again,
overhearing
a
familiar
voice
talking
with
the
orchard
owner.?Sure
enough,
it
was
my
brother.
"How
can
you
let
another
guy
cut
the?mistletoe?from
the?branches?"
he
exclaimed
angrily.
"I
need
money
to
buy
a?gift?for
my
younger
brother!"
But
the
orchard
owner
turned
around
and
left,
refusing
to
respond
to
any
complaint.
It
was
not
until
then
that
I
figured
out
how
much
my
brother
loved
me.
Hiding
behind
an
apple
tree,
I
didn't
dare
to
tell
him
what
had
happened.
Over
the
next
few
days,
I
secretly
went
to
the
apple
orchard
and
finally
my
hard
work
paid
off.
A
few
days
before
Christmas,
when
I
gave
money
to
my
brother
and
told
him
everything,
he
hugged
me
tightly.
⑩——2020年台州期末调研
Peter
walked
home
from
school.
Salty
tears
ran
down
his
cheeks,
and
his
stomach
hurt.
He
didn't
know
what
to
do.
Nokomis
was
waiting
for
him
on
the
front
porch.
"What's
wrong,
Biyen?"
said
Peter's
grandmother.
Biyen
was
the
Ojibwe(齐佩瓦人)
name
for?Peter.
He
called
her
Nokomis,
which
meant
grandmother.
Peter
looked
up.
"I
have
to
give
a?presentation?where
I
talk
about
a
family?tradition.
I
know
we
have
lots
of
beliefs
and
customs.
Can
you?remind?me
of
one?"
Nokomis
smiled
and
nodded
with
a
smile.
"Come
with
me,
"
she
said
softly.
Peterfollowed?Nokomis.
She
went
to
a
closet,
stretched
to
reach
the
top
shelf
and
pulled
out
a
small
box.
She
handed
it
to
Peter,
asking
him
to
open
it.
Peter
opened
the
box.
Present
before
him
was
a
wooden
hoop(圈).
It
was
in
the
shape
of
a
circle.
String
was
woven
and
twisted
around
the
hoop.
It
looked
like
a
spider
web.
A
black
bead(珠子)
sat
near
the
center
with
feathers
hanging
from
the
bottom.
Seeing
it,
Peter
wiped
away
his
tears
and
smiled.
"This
is
a?dream
catcher,"
said
Nokomis.
"Our
people
have
made
these
for
many
years.
Circles
are?symbols?of
unity
and
strength.
Let's
hang
it
over
your
bed
tonight.
It
will
catch
your
bad
dreams
in
the
web,
and
your
good
dreams
will
fall
through
the
center.
Maybe
it
will
give
you
courage
to
do
your
presentation."
Looking
at
Nokomis,
Peter
asked
whether
he
could
take
that
to
school.
Nokomis
refused
because
the
dream
catcher
was
extremely?precious,
which
meant
a
lot
to
her.
Peter
felt
disappointed
at
her
words
because
he
wanted
to?share?the
dream
catcher
with
his
class.
"We
could
make
you
one,
"
said
Nokomis.
"I'd
like
that!"
cried
Peter?in
excitement.
Without
delay,
Nokomis
and
Peter
worked
together
and
they
made
a
dream
catcher.
Paragraph
1:?That
night,
as
Peter
looked
at
the
dream
catcher
over
his
bed,
he
had
an
idea.
Paragraph
2:?Thunders
of
applause
exploded
after
Peter
gave
the
presentation.
Paragraph
1:
That
night,
as
Peter
looked
at
the
dream
catcher
over
his
bed,
he
had
an
idea.?“Why
not
share
the
story
of
the?dream?catcher?with
my
class
on
thepresentation?day?”
Peter
said
to
himself,
his
eyes
sparkling
with
joy.
Immediately,
he
started
to
prepare
for
it.
And
it
took
him
quite
some
time
before
he
got
everything
ready.
Early
the
next
morning,
he
arrived
at
the
school
and
waited?in
excitement.
Then
came
the
moment,
and
with
butterflies
in
his
stomach,
he
made
his
way
to
the
platform.
A
little
nervous
as
he
felt,
his
grandmother’s
words
seemed
to
echo
inside
his
head
and
words
just
flooded
out
of
his
mouth.
“Today,
I’m
going
to
give
a
presentation
on
dream
catchers.
It
is
a?tradition?for
our
people
to
make
these,
which
are
the?symbols?of
courage,
unity
and
strength....”
Paragraph
2:
Thunders
of
applause
exploded
after
Peter
gave
the
presentation.?The
moment?Peter?stepped
off
the
platform,
he
was
surrounded
by
his
classmates.
Curious
to
know
more
about
the
dream
catcher,
they
insisted
that
Peter
make
one
in
front
of
them.
Brimming
with
confidence,
Peter
took
out
all
the
materials
that
he
had
prepared
the
night
before.
He
explained
every
steps
carefully
as
he
showed
them
how
to
weave
and
twist
string
around
the
hoop.
A
few
minutes
later,
a
beautiful
hand-made
dream
catcher
appeared
like
magic.
What
an
fantastic
presentation
Peter
did!
After
school,
he
could
hardly
wait
to
get
home
to?share?it
with
his
grandmother.?
附加题——资深山东模拟读后续写
Though
it
is
one
of
the
faded
memories
of
my
life
today,
there
are
times
when
I
remember
his
face
clearly,
especially
his
eyes.
As
he
had
yellow
spots
on
his
eyes
we
called
him
Spotty.
He
would
have
been
a
stray(流浪)
dog,
until
he
came
to
me.
I
was
seven
years
old.
My
dad
had
just
got
a
new
job
in
Nasik.
We
had
moved
into
a
rented
house.
It
was
raining
very
heavily
on
the
day
we
moved.
It
was
a
cold
dark
night.
We
had
our
meal
and
went
to
sleep.
Somehow
in
the
midnight
I
heard
some
strange
sounds
outside
the
main
door.
I
gathered
courage
and
looked
out
through
the
window
and
I
was
really
amused
with
what
I
saw
outside.
There
was
a
small
puppy
lying
on
an
old
doormat
which
my
mother
had
put
outside
the
door.
It
was
wet
and
trembling.
At
first
it
was
difficult
to
see
the
little
one.
It
was
the
yellow
spots
on
its
eyes
that
made
me
realize
its
presence.
It
was
trying
to
get
under
the
doormat
to
avoid
the
cold
air
outside
and
it
had
managed
to
get
in
as
I
could
see
only
its
head
outside
the
doormat.
Was
it
sick
or
injured?
I
felt
pity
for
the
poor
soul.
I
went
in
and
came
out
with
an
old
towel.
I
went
near
the
innocent
one
and
held
it
in
my
hand
and
wiped
the
puppy
till
he
had
become
dry.
I
took
him
into
my
room
and
made
a
bed
for
him
with
a
woolen
blanket
and
a
small
pillow.
He
seemed
very
healthy
and
comfortable
in
his
new
bed
as
he
went
to
sleep
immediately.
The
next
morning,
everyone
in
the
family
came
to
know
about
the
unusual
guest.
"Shall
we
keep
him
with
us?"
I
questioned
my
mom.
Like
any
other
parents
would,
my
parents
first
totally
refused
my
idea
but
my
sister
and
I
convinced
them
to
keep
Spotty.
Slowly
Spotty
got
on
with
everyone
and
became
one
of
the
family
members.
Paragraph
1:?One
day,
Spotty
returned
from
his
daily
walk
with
a
broken
leg.
____
Paragraph
2:?Almost
a
year
later,
one
midnight
we
heard
Spotty
barking
breathlessly
____
总体思路
第一段第一句：Spotty有一天回家，断了一条腿。
作者当时的反应是什么？
看到了什么？
Spotty状态描写
为什么会断了一条腿？(最难处理)
作者一定是误解了，对Spotty有过激的反应。
Spotty逃跑
到处寻找，但找不到
一段时间以后得知真相
第二段第一句：一年以后，我们听到Spotty在气喘吁吁地叫
看到了什么(骨瘦如柴)？为什么Spotty叫起来气喘吁吁？看到Spotty的情感反应并做了什么？为什么Spotty回来？(最难处理)心理的感受是什么？为此做了什么？但几天以后，Spotty还是死了。作者的心情及感悟是什么(呼应开头...especially
his
eyes)？
尤其是：一、为什么Spotty会断了一条腿？二、一年以后Spotty为什么会回来？三、全文的主题是什么？花了不少时间考虑。最后确定将全文主旨定位在人与自然、动物的关系上--人与动物的和谐关系。另外，在描写上将eyes作为全文的一个重要线索并与开头句...I
remember
his
face
clearly,?especially?his
eyes呼应。
范文：
Paragraph
1:?One
day,
Spotty
returned
from
his
daily
walk
with
a
broken
leg."?"Oh,
no!"
I
let
out
a
loud
scream
as
I
saw
Spotty
limping
in
with
a
pained
expression
on
his
face.
But
Spotty
seemed
to
take
no
notice
of
me
and
hid
under
my
bed,
his
whole
body
trembling
and
his
eyes
full
of
terror
and
distrust.
It
was
so
unlike
him
to
react
like
this,
that
for
one
moment
I
was
at
a
loss
how
to
coax
him
to
me.
Feeling
a
little
upset
and
furious,
I
somehow
came
holding
a
long
stick,
trying
to
drive
him
out.
However,
before
the
stick
reached
him,
Spotty
suddenly
howled
and
escaped
through
the
door.
In
the
next
few
days,
we
searched
everywhere
for
Spotty,
but
in
vain.
Later,
we
were
shocked
to
learn
that
a
man
beat
him
with
a
stick
when
Spotty
was
approaching
a
little
girl.?
Paragraph
2:?Almost
a
year
later,
one
midnight
we
heard
Spotty
barking
breathlessly.?We
rushed
out
of
the
house
only
to
see
my
Spotty
lying
on
the
doormat,
dying.
Upon
seeing
us,
Spotty
rose
awkwardly
to
his
feet,
wagging
his
tail
and
his
eyes
sparkling
with
excitement.
Immediately,
I
knelt
down
to
hug
him
and
tears
began
to
well
up
in
my
eyes
uncontrollably.
Spotty
looked
at
me,
licking
my
cheeks
as
if
to
tell
me
something.
And
it
was
at
that
moment
that
I
realized
why
Spotty
returned
to
me--he
had
forgiven
me
for
what
I
had
done.
Unfortunately,
Spotty
didn't
stay
long
and
he
closed
his
eyes
forever
the
next
day.
Many
years
has
passed
since
Spotty
left
us,
but
the
valuable
lesson
he
taught
me
will
remain
in
my
memory.