2020-2021学年下学期高一英语写作衔接练（通用版）33
意见反馈信+读后续写+概要写作
1．假设你是李华，你上个星期天去市图书馆看书时发现以下问题，你写信向馆长Mr
Li反映：
1．新书太少；
2．书架上的书比较混乱；
3．阅览室的一盏灯坏了；
4．管理员工作时彼此闲聊。
注意：
1．词数100~120左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．信的开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear
Mr.
Li,
Last
Sunday,
I
went
to
do
some
reading
in
your
library._______________________________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
So,
for
the
sake
of
readers,
I
suggest
that
you
change
all
these
as
soon
as
possible.
Yours,
Li
Hua
2．阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Sally
was
only
eight
years
old
when
she
heard
Mommy
and
Daddy
talking
about
her
little
brother,
Georgy.
He
was
very
sick
and
the
doctors
told
them
that
only
a
very
expensive
operation
could
save
his
life.
However,
his
family
could
not
afford
it.
Sally
heard
Daddy
say
sadly,
“Only
a
miracle
(奇迹)
can
save
him
now.”
Sally
went
to
her
bedroom
and
found
her
piggy
bank.
She
shook
all
the
money
out
on
the
floor
and
counted
it
carefully.
Then
she
put
all
the
money
in
her
pocket
and
made
her
way
to
a
drugstore
(药店).
She
waited
patiently
for
the
storekeeper
to
give
her
attention,
but
he
was
busy
talking
to
another
well-dressed
man.
Sally
cleared
her
throat.
No
good.
Then
she
took
out
a
coin
from
her
pocket
and
threw
it
onto
the
glass
counter
(柜台).
That
did
it!
“What
do
you
want?”
the
storekeeper
asked
angrily.
“Can’t
you
see
I’m
talking
to
my
brother?”
“Well,
I
want
to
talk
to
you
about
my
brother,”
Sally
answered
back
bravely.
“He’s
sick,
and
I
want
to
buy
a
miracle.”
“I
beg
your
pardon,”
said
the
storekeeper.
“My
Daddy
says
only
a
miracle
can
save
him
now,
so
how
much
does
a
miracle
cost?”
“We
don’t
sell
miracles
here,
little
girl.
I
can’t
help
you.”
“Listen,
I
have
the
money
to
pay
for
it.
Just
tell
me
how
much
it
costs.”
Then
that
well-dressed
man
asked,
“What
kind
of
miracle
does
your
brother
need?”
“I
don’t
know,”
Sally
answered.
Tears
started
to
rush
into
her
eyes.
“I
just
know
he’s
really
sick
and
Mommy
says
he
needs
an
operation.
But
my
family
doesn’t
have
enough
money,
so
I
have
brought
all
my
money.
I
love
my
little
brother.”
“How
much
do
you
have?”
asked
the
well-dressed
man.
“A
dollar
and
eleven
cents,”
Sally
answered.
“And
that’s
all
the
money
I
have.”
注意：
1.
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.
应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph
1:
“Well,
I
can
help
you,”
said
the
well-dressed
man.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph
2:
It
wasn’t
long
until
Georgi
was
home
again.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
3．阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。
A
recent
UN
report
shows
that
many
of
us
are
working
longer
and
harder
than
ever.
In
the
past,
employees
worked
eight
or
nine
hours
a
day.
Today,
however,
many
companies
expect
their
employees
to
work
longer.
In
addition,
the
boundary
between
work
and
personal
life
has
become
less
clear.
If
we
are
not
working
in
the
office,
we
might
be
working
at
home.
We
are
required
to
be
on
call
whenever
our
company
needs
us.
In
short,
we
are
all
working
and
having
less
time
with
family
and
friends.
This
over-emphasis
(过分强调)
on
work
can
lead
to
serious
problems
in
our
personal
lives.
The
more
time
we
spend
at
work,
the
less
time
there
is
available
for
maintaining
relationships
with
our
friends
and
family.
Many
of
us
spend
so
much
time
on
the
job
that
we
hardly
ever
get
to
see
our
partners
or
children.
When
we
do
get
home,
we
are
often
tired
and
lack
the
energy
to
spend
time
doing
what
we
really
enjoy.
There
are,
however,
a
number
of
ways
in
which
we
can
regain
control
of
our
lives
and
correct
the
work-life
balance.
First
of
all,
workers,
especially
those
employed
in
offices,
have
to
realize
that
work
is
rarely
finished.
In
other
words,
taking
work
home
does
not
usually
decrease
the
amount
of
work.
As
one
task
finishes,
another
one
appears.
This
means
that,
unless
there
is
a
strict
deadline,
work
should
stay
at
work.
Another
way
to
regain
a
work-life
balance
is
to
plan
your
free
time.
Most
of
us
spend
a
lot
of
time
planning
our
working
week.
Few
of
us
put
the
same
effort
into
organizing
our
leisure
time.
However,
if
we
don’t
have
a
plan,
there
is
a
danger
that
we
will
miss
out
on
the
things
that
we
really
enjoy
doing.
So,
if
you
like
going
to
the
cinema,
make
sure
that
you
go
regularly.
Write
it
in
your
diary.
If
you
enjoy
having
friends
visit,
plan
a
time
and
write
that
in
your
diary
too.
It’s
all
too
easy
to
let
your
precious
time
slip
away.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2020-2021学年下学期高一英语写作衔接练（通用版）33
意见反馈信+读后续写+概要写作
1．假设你是李华，你上个星期天去市图书馆看书时发现以下问题，你写信向馆长Mr
Li反映：
1．新书太少；
2．书架上的书比较混乱；
3．阅览室的一盏灯坏了；
4．管理员工作时彼此闲聊。
注意：
1．词数100~120左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．信的开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear
Mr.
Li,
Last
Sunday,
I
went
to
do
some
reading
in
your
library._______________________________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
So,
for
the
sake
of
readers,
I
suggest
that
you
change
all
these
as
soon
as
possible.
Yours,
Li
Hua
【答案】
Dear
Mr.
Li,
Last
Sunday,
I
went
to
do
some
reading
in
your
library.
Over
the
time
1
was
there,
I
found
something
unpleasant.
Therefore,
I'
d
like
to
voice
my
opinions,
which,
I
hope,
would
be
of
help
for
you
to
create
a
more
comfortable
place
for
readers.
First,
there
are
few
new
books
on
the
shelves,
and
most
books
are
not
popular
today.
Second,
some
books
are
not
sorted
in
proper
order,
making
it
difficult
for
readers
to
find
what
they
want
quickly.
Third,
the
assistants
didn't
offer
good
service.
Instead,
they
were
chatting.
In
addition,
they
took
no
notice
of
the
fact
that
a
light
wasn't
working.
Leave
this
state
of
affairs
to
stay
the
same,
and
I
am
afraid
there
will
be
fewer
and
fewer
readers.
So,
for
the
sake
of
readers,
I
suggest
that
you
change
all
these
as
soon
as
possible.
Yours,
Li
Hua
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封信。
【详解】
第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封信；你上个星期天去市图书馆看书时发现一些问题，你写信向馆长Mr
Li
反映，内容包括新书太少、书架上的书比较混乱、阅览室的一盏灯坏了、管理员工作时彼此闲聊，读者无法安心看书；时态应为一般现在时和一般过去时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：library
（图书馆），something
unpleasant（不愉快的事情），voice
my
opinions（提出我的观点），shelf（书架），in
proper
order（良好的顺序），assistant（管理员），chat（聊天）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】
范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如定语从句Therefore,
I’d
like
to
voice
my
poinions,
which,I
hope,would
be
of
help
for
you
to
create
a
more
comfortable
place
for
readers.；First,
there
are
few
new
books
on
the
shelf,
most
of
which
are
not
popular
today.；Instead,
they
were
chatting,
which,
made
the
raders
not
focus
on
what
they
read.；同位语从句Inaddition,
they
took
no
notice
of
the
fact
that
a
light
wasn’t
working.全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，first，second，in
addition等词（组）的运用使得文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
2．阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Sally
was
only
eight
years
old
when
she
heard
Mommy
and
Daddy
talking
about
her
little
brother,
Georgy.
He
was
very
sick
and
the
doctors
told
them
that
only
a
very
expensive
operation
could
save
his
life.
However,
his
family
could
not
afford
it.
Sally
heard
Daddy
say
sadly,
“Only
a
miracle
(奇迹)
can
save
him
now.”
Sally
went
to
her
bedroom
and
found
her
piggy
bank.
She
shook
all
the
money
out
on
the
floor
and
counted
it
carefully.
Then
she
put
all
the
money
in
her
pocket
and
made
her
way
to
a
drugstore
(药店).
She
waited
patiently
for
the
storekeeper
to
give
her
attention,
but
he
was
busy
talking
to
another
well-dressed
man.
Sally
cleared
her
throat.
No
good.
Then
she
took
out
a
coin
from
her
pocket
and
threw
it
onto
the
glass
counter
(柜台).
That
did
it!
“What
do
you
want?”
the
storekeeper
asked
angrily.
“Can’t
you
see
I’m
talking
to
my
brother?”
“Well,
I
want
to
talk
to
you
about
my
brother,”
Sally
answered
back
bravely.
“He’s
sick,
and
I
want
to
buy
a
miracle.”
“I
beg
your
pardon,”
said
the
storekeeper.
“My
Daddy
says
only
a
miracle
can
save
him
now,
so
how
much
does
a
miracle
cost?”
“We
don’t
sell
miracles
here,
little
girl.
I
can’t
help
you.”
“Listen,
I
have
the
money
to
pay
for
it.
Just
tell
me
how
much
it
costs.”
Then
that
well-dressed
man
asked,
“What
kind
of
miracle
does
your
brother
need?”
“I
don’t
know,”
Sally
answered.
Tears
started
to
rush
into
her
eyes.
“I
just
know
he’s
really
sick
and
Mommy
says
he
needs
an
operation.
But
my
family
doesn’t
have
enough
money,
so
I
have
brought
all
my
money.
I
love
my
little
brother.”
“How
much
do
you
have?”
asked
the
well-dressed
man.
“A
dollar
and
eleven
cents,”
Sally
answered.
“And
that’s
all
the
money
I
have.”
注意：
1.
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.
应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph
1:
“Well,
I
can
help
you,”
said
the
well-dressed
man.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph
2:
It
wasn’t
long
until
Georgi
was
home
again.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【答案】
Paragraph
1:
“Well,
I
can
help
you,”
said
the
well-dressed
man.
“What
a
coincidence,”?smiled
the
well-dressed
man.?A
dollar
and
eleven
cents
was
the
exact
price
of
a
miracle
to
save
a
little
brother.?He
took
her
money
in
one
hand
and
with
the
other
hand
he
grasped
her
mitten
and
said?“Take
me
to
where
you
live.
I
want
to
see
your
brother
and
meet
your
parents.”
That
well-dressed
man
was?a
renowned
surgeon,
specializing
in
solving
Georgy’s
malady.
The
operation
was
completed
without
charge.
Paragraph
2:
It
wasn’t
long
until
Georgy
was
home
again.
His
body
was
recovering
well.
Mommy
and
Daddy
were
happily
talking
about
the
chain
of
events
that
had
led
them
to
this
place.?“That
surgery,”?Mommy
whispered.?“It’s
like
a
miracle.
I
wonder
how
much
it
would
have
cost.
Sally
smiled
to
herself.?She
knew
exactly
how
much
a
miracle
cost.
That’s
one
dollar
and
eleven
cents
plus
the
faith
of
a
little
child.
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，小女孩Sally听到父母说弟弟Georgy病重，只有买到“奇迹”才能救弟弟，便把自己存的钱拿了出来，偷偷到药店为弟弟买“奇迹”。小女孩感人的一幕正好被店主的哥哥看到，他问Sally有多少钱，Sally说自己只有一美元和十一美分。
【详解】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：“好吧，我可以帮助你，”这位穿着考究的男人说道。后文可以这样讲述：“真是巧合!”
这位穿着考究的男人微笑着说道。一美元和十一美分正好可以购买奇迹来拯救你的弟弟。他一只手拿着她的钱，另一只手抓住了她的手套，说：“带我去你住的地方。
我想见见你的弟弟和你的父母”。那个穿着考究的男人是一位著名的外科医生，他擅长治疗Georgy的病。他为Georgy治病没有收费。
第二段开头是：不久，Georgy回到了家。后文可以这样讲述：他的身体恢复得不错。妈妈和爸爸愉快地谈论着这一连串事情。妈妈低声说那个手术就像是一个奇迹一样。妈妈想知道它要多少钱？Sally微笑着，
她确切地知道这个奇迹花费了多少钱。那就是她积攒的一美元和十一美分还有一个小孩子的信念。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
【点睛】
续写内容详略得当，使用了固定短语和主从复合句。如：specialize
in，led
sb
to
a
place等固定短语。Take
me
to
where
you
live.
该句使用了where引导的宾语从句；Mommy
and
Daddy
were
happily
talking
about
the
chain
of
events
that
had
led
them
to
this
place.
该句使用了that引导的定语从句。
3．阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。
A
recent
UN
report
shows
that
many
of
us
are
working
longer
and
harder
than
ever.
In
the
past,
employees
worked
eight
or
nine
hours
a
day.
Today,
however,
many
companies
expect
their
employees
to
work
longer.
In
addition,
the
boundary
between
work
and
personal
life
has
become
less
clear.
If
we
are
not
working
in
the
office,
we
might
be
working
at
home.
We
are
required
to
be
on
call
whenever
our
company
needs
us.
In
short,
we
are
all
working
and
having
less
time
with
family
and
friends.
This
over-emphasis
(过分强调)
on
work
can
lead
to
serious
problems
in
our
personal
lives.
The
more
time
we
spend
at
work,
the
less
time
there
is
available
for
maintaining
relationships
with
our
friends
and
family.
Many
of
us
spend
so
much
time
on
the
job
that
we
hardly
ever
get
to
see
our
partners
or
children.
When
we
do
get
home,
we
are
often
tired
and
lack
the
energy
to
spend
time
doing
what
we
really
enjoy.
There
are,
however,
a
number
of
ways
in
which
we
can
regain
control
of
our
lives
and
correct
the
work-life
balance.
First
of
all,
workers,
especially
those
employed
in
offices,
have
to
realize
that
work
is
rarely
finished.
In
other
words,
taking
work
home
does
not
usually
decrease
the
amount
of
work.
As
one
task
finishes,
another
one
appears.
This
means
that,
unless
there
is
a
strict
deadline,
work
should
stay
at
work.
Another
way
to
regain
a
work-life
balance
is
to
plan
your
free
time.
Most
of
us
spend
a
lot
of
time
planning
our
working
week.
Few
of
us
put
the
same
effort
into
organizing
our
leisure
time.
However,
if
we
don’t
have
a
plan,
there
is
a
danger
that
we
will
miss
out
on
the
things
that
we
really
enjoy
doing.
So,
if
you
like
going
to
the
cinema,
make
sure
that
you
go
regularly.
Write
it
in
your
diary.
If
you
enjoy
having
friends
visit,
plan
a
time
and
write
that
in
your
diary
too.
It’s
all
too
easy
to
let
your
precious
time
slip
away.
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【答案】
Currently
employees
tend
to
work
longer
hours
and
harder
than
ever
before,
breaking
the
work-life
balance(要点1).
Actually
too
much
devotion
to
work
has
a
negative
impact
on
their
family
and
social
bonds(要点2).
To
solve
this
problem,
employees
should
strike
a
balance
between
work
and
life
by
figuring
out
a
clear
boundary
and
scheduling
their
leisure
time
with
some
effort(要点3).
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words)
【分析】
文章的主要结构为提出问题-分析问题-解决问题。主要讲现在员工的工作时间要比以往任何时候长，也更努力，这样就打破了工作和生活的平衡。在工作上投入太多时间对家庭和社会都会产生负面影响，所以员工要明确工作和生活的界限，计划好休息时间，以便在工作和生活之间找到一个平衡点。。符合概要写作常规出题思路。
【详解】
第一段讲述提出问题：现在员工的工作时间要比以往任何时候长，也更努力，这样就打破了工作和生活的平衡。可以用到的词汇或句型有：tend
to,
work
longer
hours
and
harder,
ever
before,
the
work-life
balance等。第二段讲述太多的工作投入会对我们的家庭和社会关系产生负面影响。可以用到的词汇或句式有：actually,
too
much,
devotion
to
work,
negative,
impact,
family
and
social
bonds等。第三、四段主要讲为了解决这一问题，员工应该在工作和生活之间找到一个清晰的界限，并努力安排他们的休闲时间。可以用到的词汇或句式有：solve,
strike
a
balance
between
work
and
life,
figure
out,
clear
boundary,
schedule
their
leisure
time等。
【高分句型】
If
you’re
spending
most
of
your
time
working,
though,
your
home
life
and
social
bonds
will
take
a
hit.
不过，如果你把大部分时间都花在工作上，你的家庭生活和社会关系会受到影响。运用if引导的条件状语从句。take
a
hit受到影响。
