中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
第20讲写作指导一
知识梳理
小六英语写作技巧
一、用介词短语替代从句
例：
原句：While
they
were
playing
tennis,
she
started
an
argument
that
lasted
all
morning.
修改后：During
tennis
she
started
an
argument
that
lasted
all
morning.
原句：When
you
come
to
the
second
traffic
light,
turn
right.
修改后：At
the
second
traffic
light
turn
left.
二、删除诸如"who
is”或"that
is"之类的关系代词，变从句为短
例：
句：The
novel,
which
is
written
in
three
parts,
told
a
story
that
took
place
in
the
Middle
Ages.
修改后：The
three-part
novel
told
a
story
set
in
the
Middle
Ages.
注：把句中的"three
parts"改用形容词来表达，节省了四个不必要的单词"which
is
written
in"。我们经常可以将关系代词如"that"去掉，这只会引起最少的变动。
三、剔除你不需要的单词
例：
Two
joint
partners
will
present
their
views
over
a
long-distance
telephone
call.
写完这样的句子后，你自己再读一遍，挑出单词"joint"和"telephone"，注意删去不必要的词。
教学重难点
重点教学作文审题的过程和技巧
难点教学如何通过学习深入作文。
特色讲解
(1)
以“My
friend
and
I”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。
要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。???????
??2.不得少于50个单词。?
【要领点评】
写法：这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友和我”。既然写作范围是两个人物，就要笔墨均匀，两者缺一不可。不能只描写朋友，也不能只叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。解决这个难点的关键是：找出两个人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、外貌、喜好等方面列举出每个人的具体实际情况，再进行比较，通过比较突出每个人物的特点。这样就把人物活灵活现的展现给读者了。
时态：像此类题目的作文，运用一般现在时即可。
句型：因为涉及两个人的比较，不要忘记使用比较级句型：A+be+比较级+than+B。
注意：在列举两个人的“体貌、喜好”等方面情况时，应一边列举，一边比较。不要一味指出不同，还要列举相同之处。两人能成为朋友，一定有共同语言和喜好，共性不容忽视。在表达喜好时，不同的句型应交叉运用，避免枯燥的重复。例“Our
favorite
colors
are…”，“We
like
…best”,
“We
both
like…,too”,
为突出不同时间做不同运动,
用“On
Saturdays…”，“On
Sundays…”，形成鲜明对比。常使用并列连词and
和转折连词
but
，使文章读起来更流畅。结尾以How
happy
we
are!突出了两人从友谊中得到的快乐！
参考例文：
My
friend
and
I
I’ve
got
a
lovely
friend
at
school.
His
name
is
Jack.
Jack
is
12
years
old
now.
I’m
11.
He’s
older
than
me.
He’s
150
cm
tall.
I’m
148
cm.
He’s
taller
and
stronger.
He’s
43
kg
and
I’m
41
kg.
He’s
heavier.
We’ve
got
round
faces
and
short
hair.
But
my
eyes
are
bigger
and
my
legs
are
longer.
Our
favoritecolors
are
white
and
blue.
We
like
summer
best.
We
both
like
sports,
too.
On
Saturdays,
we
play
table
tennis.
On
Sundays,
we
play
basketball.
He’s
good
at
basketball.
But
I
do
better
at
table
tennis.
We
laugh
and
play
together.
How
happy
we
are!
（2）
以“A
Bad
Cold”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。?
要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。???????
??2.不得少于50个单词。?
【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙了得病、病的症状、服药及治疗的全过程。写出了小作者希望快点康复，好去上学的愿望。
时态：这篇文章可以采用一般现在时来写。如果主语是第三人称单数，动词别忘加s。
句型：要用feel
加形容词，和表示“患某种疾病”的用法“have+表示的疾病的单词”。
注意：在表示疾病时，可以使用-ache,hurt
和sore。不要只用一个单词，以避免枯燥。要写出得病后的简单治疗及心情，不能只写得病的情况。常见病句：My
nose
is
hurt。因为be后面要加形容词，而hurt是动词，因此应使用sore；东西放在床上要用on
the
bed。生病，是卧床不起，应该说stay
in
bed。表示吃药时，通过用take
some
medicine，不用eat。
参考例文：
A
Bad
Cold
I’m
not
feeling
well
today.
I
think
I
have
a
bad
cold.
I
have
a
headache.
I
have
a
fever.
My
nose
hurts.
My
throat
is
sore.
I
have
to
take
some
medicine
and
stay
in
bed.
My
parents
will
take
me
to
the
hospital.
What
a
bad
cold!I
hope
I
can
be
better
soon.
And
I
want
to
go
to
school
（3）
以“Zoom’s
Weekend”为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。
要求：1.要详细写出此周末的主要活动。?
2.条理清楚，意思连贯，标点正确，书写规范。????????
?
3.不少于50个单词。
【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按时间顺序记叙了Zoom的周末活动。
时态：这篇文章可以用三种时态来写，由于本单元主要讲的是一般过去时态，所以我们采用一般过去时态比较合适。
句型：主语+动词过去式+过去时间。
注意：活动的相关表达法采用新旧知识结合的方法，但要注意动词过去式的拼写。
参考例文：
Zoom’s
Weekend
Zoom
had
a
busy
weekend.
On
Saturday
morning,
he
washed
his
clothes
and
went
to
a
park.
He
did
his
homework
and
went
fishing
on
Saturday
afternoon.
On
Sunday
morning,
he
cleaned
his
room
and
visited
his
grandparents.
He
played
football
and
watch
TV
on
Sunday
afternoon.
Zoom
was
too
tired.
.?当堂练习
A
以一种文具为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。
要求：1.要写出此文具的主要特点。?
?2.条理清楚，意思连贯，标点正确，书写规范。????????
?3.不少于50个单词。?
参考例文：
My?Pencil-box?
??I?have?a?pencil-box.?It?is?nice?and?big.?It?has?many?colours.?There?are?two?blocks?on?my?pencil-box.?One?is?yellow,?the?other?is?orange.?In?my?pencil-box,?there?are?pens,?pencils,?a?ruler?and?an
eraser.?I?like?my?pencil-box?very?much?and?my?pencil-box?looks?like?my?best?friend.
B
以“Myself”（我）为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。?
??要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。???????
??2.不得少于50个单词。?
参考例文：
Myself
My?name?is?Wang?Dong.?I'm?12?years?old.?I'm?a?student?of?No.?5?Primary?School?in?Beijing.?I?have?many?hobbies.?I?like?reading?and?watching?TV?in?my?free?time.?Snow?White?is?my?favourite?book.?
?
?I?have?some?friends?in?my?class.?My?best?friend?is?Chen?Gang.?I?often?play?games?with?him.?My?English?teacher?is?Miss?Hu.?I?like?her?very?much.
当堂检测
(1)
以“My
Trip”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。??
?要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????????????
2.不少于50个单词。?
参考例文：
My
Trip
Japan
was
fun.
It
was
very
cool
and
windy.
We
flew
kites
in
the
park.
I
bought
a
watch
there.
I
wanted
to
buy
more,
but
I
didn’t
have
money.
The
gardens
there
were
beautiful.
I
liked
them
the
best.
The
department
stores
were
too
big.
I
couldn’t
find
Mom.
The
food
was
delicious.
We
ate
a
lot
of
fish,
and
I
also
liked
the
vegetables
and
cake
there.
I
hope
I
can
go
to
Japan
one
more
time.
(2)
以自己最喜欢的宠物为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。??
?要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????????????
2.不少于50个单词。
参考例文：
I
have
a
cat
.It
is
a
lovely
cat.
Her
name
is
Lucy
.Her
fur
is
black
and
white.
She
is
my
best
friend.
I
like
her
very
much.
I
often
tell
stories
to
her.
I
think
she
can
understand
me.
Because
she
jumps
up
with
the
joy
when
I
tell
her
stories
家庭作业
（1）
以你自己的宠物或你熟悉的小动物为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。??
?要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????????????
2.不少于50个单词。?
参考例文：
My?dog?
I?have?an?English?dog.?Its?name?is?Laike.It's?two?years?old.?It's?grey.?Its?body?is?very?long.?Its?mouth?is?white.?Its?two?eyes?are?blue.?It?has?two?small?ears.?Its?four?legs?are?very?long.?Its?tail?is?
thin?and?long.?It?runs?fast.?It?likes?meat.?I?like?to?play?with?it.?It's?my?good?friend.?
(2
)
以My?Bedroom?(我的卧室)为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。
???要求：1.?要写出卧室内的主要物品。?
????????2.?条理清楚，语句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????
?3.?不少于50个单词。?
参考例文：
My?Bedroom?
I?have?a?big?bedroom.?There?are?many?things?in?it.?There?is?a?big?desk?in?the?middle?of?the?
room.There?are?some?books,?a?computer,?a?keyboard?and?mouse?on?it.?There's?a?pencil-box?and?a?
lamp?on?it,?too.?Near?the?desk,?there's?a?bed.?Near?the?bed,?there?is?a?big?wardrobe.?There?are?two?windows?in?the?wall.?There?are?four?pictures?and?a?nice?clock?on?the?wall,?too.?I?often?clean?my?
bedroom?.I?love?my?bedroom
（3）
以My?Day（我的一天）为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。???
要求：1.有一定的内容，条理清楚，语句通顺，书写规范。???????????????
2.不少于50个单词。
?
参考例文：
My?Day?
I'm?a?boy,?and?I'm?a?pupil.?I?go?to?school?from?Monday?to?Friday.?I?have?no?class?on?Saturdays?and?Sundays.?I?often?get?up?at?six?o'clock.?I?go?to?school?at?seven?o'clock.?I?have?four?lessons?in?themorning?and?two?in?the?afternoon.?I?go?home?at?five.?I?do?my?homework?at?home.
2.阅读
Buying
a
ticket
Wang
Bin
is
a
football
fan.
There
is
a
football
match
between
Chinese
team
and
American
team.
He
wants
to
watch
it.
He
comes
to
the
box
office(售票处)
and
gives
the
clerk
10
yuan.
The
clerk
says,“please
give
me
another
10
yuan.
The
price(价格)
of
a
ticket
is
20
yuan.”“Why?”
says
Wang
Bin,
I
just
watch
Chinese
team.
I
don’t
want
to
watch
the
other
team
at
all.
Do
you
want
me
to
buy
a
ticket
for
them?
No,
no,
no…”
根据短文内容选择正确答案。
(
)1.
How
does
Wang
Bin
like
football?
Little.
B.
A
little.
C.
Very.
D.
Very
much.
(
)2.
Can
you
guess
the
meaning
of
“clerk”
in
the
passage?
A.
商人
B.
老板
C.
买主
D.
售票员
(
)3.
Can
Wang
Bin
buy
a
ticket
with
10
yuan?
A.
Yes,
he
can.
B.
Yes,
he
does.
C.
No,
he
can’t.
D.
No,
he
doesn’t.
(
)4.“Do
you
want
me
to
buy
a
ticket
for
them?”
The
word
“them”
refers
to
A.
Chinese
team
B.
British
team
C.
American
team
D.
French
team
(
)5.
Can
Wang
Bin
watch
the
match?
A.
Yes,
he
will.
B.
Yes,
he
can.
C.
No,
he
can’t.
D.
No,
he
won’t
Keys:
1----5.
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21世纪教育网(www.21cnjy.com)中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
第20讲写作指导一
知识梳理
小六英语写作技巧
一、用介词短语替代从句
例：
原句：While
they
were
playing
tennis,
she
started
an
argument
that
lasted
all
morning.
修改后：During
tennis
she
started
an
argument
that
lasted
all
morning.
原句：When
you
come
to
the
second
traffic
light,
turn
right.
修改后：At
the
second
traffic
light
turn
left.
二、删除诸如"who
is”或"that
is"之类的关系代词，变从句为短
例：
句：The
novel,
which
is
written
in
three
parts,
told
a
story
that
took
place
in
the
Middle
Ages.
修改后：The
three-part
novel
told
a
story
set
in
the
Middle
Ages.
注：把句中的"three
parts"改用形容词来表达，节省了四个不必要的单词"which
is
written
in"。我们经常可以将关系代词如"that"去掉，这只会引起最少的变动。
三、剔除你不需要的单词
例：
Two
joint
partners
will
present
their
views
over
a
long-distance
telephone
call.
写完这样的句子后，你自己再读一遍，挑出单词"joint"和"telephone"，注意删去不必要的词。
教学重难点
重点教学作文审题的过程和技巧
难点教学如何通过学习深入作文。
特色讲解
(1)
以“My
friend
and
I”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。
要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。???????
??2.不得少于50个单词。?
（2）
以“A
Bad
Cold”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。?
要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。???????
??2.不得少于50个单词。?
（3）
以“Zoom’s
Weekend”为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。
要求：1.要详细写出此周末的主要活动。?
2.条理清楚，意思连贯，标点正确，书写规范。????????
?
3.不少于50个单词。
.?当堂练习
A
以一种文具为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。
要求：1.要写出此文具的主要特点。?
?2.条理清楚，意思连贯，标点正确，书写规范。????????
?3.不少于50个单词。?
B
以“Myself”（我）为题按下面的要求写一篇英语小作文。?
??要求：1.语句通顺，条理清楚，书写清晰、规范。???????
??2.不得少于50个单词。?
当堂检测
(1)
以“My
Trip”为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。??
?要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????????????
2.不少于50个单词。?
(2)
以自己最喜欢的宠物为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。??
?要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????????????
2.不少于50个单词。
家庭作业
（1）
以你自己的宠物或你熟悉的小动物为题按下面的要求写一篇英语作文。??
?要求：1.意思连贯，词句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????????????
2.不少于50个单词。?
(2
)
以My?Bedroom?(我的卧室)为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。
???要求：1.?要写出卧室内的主要物品。?
????????2.?条理清楚，语句通顺，标点正确，书写规范。????????
?3.?不少于50个单词。?
（3）
以My?Day（我的一天）为题按要求写一篇英语小作文。???
要求：1.有一定的内容，条理清楚，语句通顺，书写规范。???????????????
2.不少于50个单词。?
2.阅读
Buying
a
ticket
Wang
Bin
is
a
football
fan.
There
is
a
football
match
between
Chinese
team
and
American
team.
He
wants
to
watch
it.
He
comes
to
the
box
office(售票处)
and
gives
the
clerk
10
yuan.
The
clerk
says,“please
give
me
another
10
yuan.
The
price(价格)
of
a
ticket
is
20
yuan.”“Why?”
says
Wang
Bin,
I
just
watch
Chinese
team.
I
don’t
want
to
watch
the
other
team
at
all.
Do
you
want
me
to
buy
a
ticket
for
them?
No,
no,
no…”
根据短文内容选择正确答案。
(
)1.
How
does
Wang
Bin
like
football?
Little.
B.
A
little.
C.
Very.
D.
Very
much.
(
)2.
Can
you
guess
the
meaning
of
“clerk”
in
the
passage?
A.
商人B.
老板C.
买主D.
售票员
(
)3.
Can
Wang
Bin
buy
a
ticket
with
10
yuan?
A.
Yes,
he
can.B.
Yes,
he
does.
C.
No,
he
can’t.D.
No,
he
doesn’t.
(
)4.“Do
you
want
me
to
buy
a
ticket
for
them?”
The
word
“them”
refers
to
A.
Chinese
teamB.
British
team
C.
American
teamD.
French
team
(
)5.
Can
Wang
Bin
watch
the
match?
A.
Yes,
he
will.B.
Yes,
he
can.
C.
No,
he
can’t.D.
No,
he
won’t
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