中考英语专题复习--作文讲解

(共23张PPT)
Bashu Middle School
Your school
We study
__________
We play
_________
We live
__________
We eat
__________
in the classrooms
on the playground
in the dormitory
in the student’s
canteen
Miss Sun
知名企业老板和当地
政府合作修建一所国
际学校，现广泛征求
你的建议。请你以
“周杉’的名义写封邮
件，提出你的建议并
说明其理由。
内容要点：1、学习环境（如：教室、操场等）
2、特色课程（如网球钢琴等）
3、。。。。。。
要求：1. 词数：80词左右，邮件开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
2. 文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称。
Dear Miss. Sun,
I’m glad to hear you’ll build an international school, and I’d like to give
you some advice. _________________________________________
________________________________________________________
I hope I can enter the school.
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Shan
What can you do
怎么办？
* 审题目要求（词数，格式）
* 审参考词汇
* 审时态
* 审语态
* 审人称
* 审要点
写作第一步
审
environment
special courses
the food in the canteen
apartment/ dormitory
Classrooms
Library
Playground
Gardens
…
Music
Art
Science
…
列
用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。
根据关键词用简单的句子列出文章的要点
classroom
library
playground
garden
How many words or phrases describe them
你能想出多少词或短语来修饰形容他们？
modern, grow
with TV, plants
comfortable
tables and desks
such as music
beautiful, large,
play sports
read and study
to be healthy
special courses
Can you match these words
请选用适当的词或短语。
classroom: comfortable tables and desks, with TV
Library: modern, read and study
Playground: large, play sports, to be healthy
Gardens: beautiful, grow, plants
Special courses: such as music
列
Can you use those words to make up sentences
用所给词造句
We have classrooms. In it there are TVs, comfortable tables
and desks.
The modern library is needed because we can read
and study after class.
We like a large playground to play sports. We can be healthy.
Around our classrooms, we can see beautiful gardens with plants and flowers.
The school can provide special courses. We like music, art
tennis, handwriting.
1、We should have classrooms. In it In it there are TVs, comfortable tables and desks.
2、The modern library is needed because we can read and study after class.
3、I can’t wait to study in this great school and we believe
we will get wonderful education and experience.
4、We like a large playground to play sports. We can be healthy.
5、Around our classrooms, we can see beautiful
gardens with plants and flowers.
6、The school can provide special courses. We like music, art, tennis, handwriting. Those will make the life
colorful and interesting.
7、Our school should be very beautiful.
7 1 5 2 4 6 3
Put them in the right order.请排序
Our school should be very beautiful. We should have comfortable classrooms. In it there are TVs ……
Dear Mr. White,
I’m glad to hear you’ll build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice.
I hope I can enter the school.
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Shan
a nice head
a nice tail
a nice body
加
加首尾，使结构完整。
可以采取总分总结构或者总分结构，开头或结尾的句子应注意简洁，漂亮。
写作第三步：
Dear Miss. Sun,
I’m glad to hear you’ll build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice.
Our school should be very beautiful. We should have classrooms. In it there are TVs, comfortable tables and desks. Around our classrooms, we can see beautiful gardens with plants and flowers. The modern library is needed because we can read and study after class. We like a large playground to play sports. We can be healthy. The school can provide special courses. We like music, art, tennis, handwriting. Those will make the life colorful and interesting. I can’t wait to study in this great school and we believe we will get wonderful education and experience.
I hope I can enter the school.
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Shan
1.表示并列或递进: and, as well as, both…and,
not only…but also, neither…nor;
2.表示选择: or, either…or;
3.表示转折: but, however, although, though, after all,
4.表示因果: because, so, therefore
5.表示条件: if , unless
6.表示对比: instead, not…but,
on the one hand…on the other hand;
7.表示解释: for example, for instance, such as,
that is to say, in other words;
8.表示顺序: to begin with, firstly, first (of all), second (ly), next, later, since then, from then on, finally, in the end;
9.表示强调: also, besides, what’s more, actually,
in fact,
10.表示结论: all in all, altogether, in a word, generally speaking,
关联词（收、收、收礼物）
连
恰当运用关联词句，使得文章层次清晰，各个部分衔接自然。
写作第四步：
连
Our school should be very beautiful. ______ we should have classrooms. In it there are TVs, comfortable tables and desks. Around our classrooms, we can see beautiful gardens with plants and flowers. ______ the modern library is needed because we can read and study after class. ______ we like a large playground to play sports. We can be healthy. ______ the school can provide special courses. We like music, art, tennis, handwriting. Those will make the life colorful and interesting. I can’t wait to study in this great school and we believe we will get wonderful education and experience.
First
Then
Next
Last
美
选好词句，美化文章。在有把握的情况下展示自己的语言功底。
写作第五步：
Our school should be very beautiful. First we should have classrooms. In it there are TVs, comfortable tables and desks. Around our classrooms, we can see beautiful gardens with plants and flowers. Then the modern library is needed because we can read and study after class. Next we like a large playground to play sports. We can be healthy. Last the school can provide special courses. We like music, art, tennis handwriting. Those will make the life colorful and interesting. I can’t wait to study in this great school and we believe we will get wonderful education and experience.
美
查
1、人称、主格和宾格使用正确。
2、名词单复数正确。
3、动词时态、语态、分词、不定式正确。
4、形容词和副词及级别使用正确。
5、单词拼写、标点符号、大小写正确。
Our school should be very beautiful. First we should have classrooms
with TVs, comfortable tables and desks. Around our classrooms,
we can see beautiful gardens with plants and flowers. Then the modern
library is needed because we can read and study after class. Next we
like a large playground to play sports to be healthy. Last the school
can provide special courses, such as music, art, tennis,
handwriting which will make the life colorful and interesting.
I can’t wait to study in this great school and we believe we will get
wonderful education and experience.
抄
书写工整，卷面整洁
Dear Miss. Sun,
I’m glad to hear you’ll build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice.
Our school should be very beautiful. First we should have classrooms with TVs, comfortable tables and desks. Around our classrooms, we can see beautiful gardens with plants and flowers. Then the modern library is needed because we can read and study after class. Next we like a large playground to play sports to be healthy. Last the school can provide special courses, such as music, art, tennis, handwriting which will make the life colorful and interesting. I can’t wait to study in this great school and we believe we will get wonderful education and experience.
I hope I can enter the school.
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Shan
7大考场秘笈：
1、审
2、列
3、加
4、连
5、美
6、查
7、抄
中考作文评分标准
第四档(12—15分）覆盖所有内容要点。准确使用丰富的词汇和语言结构。全文结构紧凑，有效地使用了语句间的连接成份，符合英语交际习惯；具备较强的语言运用能力。
第三档(8—11分）覆盖所有内容要点。恰当使用较丰富的词汇和语言结构。适当运用了语句间的连接成份，较好地达到了交际的目的。
第二档(4—7分）没能覆盖所有内容要点。词汇和语言结构不能完全满足写作任务的要求。文章不够连贯，影响对写作内容的理解。
第一档(0—3分）漏掉较多内容要点或写的内容与规定任务无关。词汇和语言结构错误较多。内容不连贯，无法传达有效信息。
根据作文评分标准，给下面作文打分。