磨课稿
强蛟中学 李洁
接到通知说要准备上初三写作教学专题课，心里感到慌慌的，因为第一次接初三的课，这种专题复习课缺乏见识和经验。但课是注定要上了，于是到处翻阅资料，最后在《中小学外语教学》这本书刊上有关作文的一种过程体裁教学模式。因此，我也尝试了一下，把课堂分成了示范分析、模仿分析、技巧训练、独立创作四大步骤。
首先播放音乐把学生吸引到课堂上来，用大脑分暴法让学生想出一些和写作主题有关的单词和句子，激活学生头脑中和写作话题相关的东西，从词到句进行扩展训练。然后给出两篇短文让学生进行比较并说出哪一篇更好，好在哪里？让学生观察发现一篇文章它的框架结构包括了： beginning，main part, ending三部分。并让学生分别找出相对应的句子。
让学生根据这个提纲口头复述一下这篇文章进而总结出在写作前写提纲对写作有帮助。接着让学生从这篇文章中找出一些好词好句，然后让学生总结出写提纲时要考虑一些好词好句，尽量使用连接词使文章更加条理、清晰。在技巧训练环节给出一篇缺失的文章让学生自己加开头、主题句和结尾。
最后独立创作部分，让学生写好与主题相关的提纲。然后叫学生在10分钟内根据自己写好的提纲完成作文。接着叫同桌互改。一方面可以拓宽学生写作思路，还可以向同学习得精彩的词组和表达方式式。最后让学生推荐班里同学写得较好的作文来共享。初中英语主题教研活动听评课记录
听课教师： 所在学校： 强蛟中学 活动时间： 2012 年 3 月 9 日
活动主题 初三写作教学专题课
听课学校 深圳中学 年级班级 九年级 执教教师 李洁
教学内容 English writing for Grade nine
课 堂 实 录 听 课 散 评
Teaching aims:The Ss will be able to form the basic ideas about a standard composition in graduation testsThe Ss will be able to write an outline before writing.二．Teaching difficult and important points1. How to get Ss to know the outline of a composition.2. How to make Ss’ composition better.三. Teaching ProceduresStep1.Warm-up Engage Ss’ interest by asking Ss to say“I like English, I like English teachers”Qs: 1.Do you like this English song 2. What do you think of English Brainstorming: EnglishAsk Ss to try to think a lot of words to describe EnglishStep2. Practice Ask Ss to write some easy sentences about English English is… English is so… English is so…that… paring1. Show two compositions and ask Ss to tell which one is better. And give reasons. Beginning Topic Main Part : Key sentences Ending Ask Ss to retell the composition according to the outline. Step4.PracticeAsk Ss to add a beginning, two other key sentences and an ending.Step5 WritingShow the topic: How can we keep a healthy life Activity1:Write an outlineActivity2:Write a compositionStep6. Sharing time1.Check the compositions with each other2.Ask some of them to read the composition to the classStep7. Sum upGive tips for English WritingStep8 HomeworkShare your composition with your friends, find and learn some good sentences or words.Try to memorize some of the sayings in your handout
反思与建议（关于主题）
区域初审意见 负责人： 年 月 日 县评定意见 （盖章） 年 月 日初中英语主题教研活动听评课记录
听课教师：____________ 所在学校：___________ 活动时间： 年 月 日
活动主题
听课学校 年级班级 执教教师 徐燕春
教学内容 “话题和词块运用”写作教学
课 堂 实 录 听 课 散 评
Teaching aims:The main task in this lesson. (Outcome)Help the students learn to write English compositions well1. Language goalThe students will be able to get familiar with some writing strategies and realize the importance of lexical chunks in writing.fall asleep, make a dream, talk with others, hang out with friends, Why not consider doing sth by doing sth, in my opinion, As for me, I think……2. Ability goal1) The students will be able to write outline of writing 2) The students will be able to find out the keys word and phrases in writing.3. Emotional goalThe students will be able to realize the importance of lixical chunks in writing. Teaching steps:Step I Warming-up1. Let’s be friends. Greet with students2. The High School Entrance Exam is coming. Jack, a student in Grade Nine, is busy and tired. He fell asleep in class and made a dream. Jack’s dreams--Relax Task 1 用简短的话来复述Jack的问题和梦境参考词汇：a student in Grade 3/ tired/ fall asleep/ make a dream/ watch TV/ play sports/ talk with othersProverb : All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.Q: How to relax Step II. Presentation ( I say/ you say/ everybody say)Brainstorming (头脑风暴)： Ways for students to relaxListen to music（一句多译）有些学生通过听音乐来放松 （比一比谁造的句子最多）Hang out with friends（谁有火眼金睛）错误大本营： 句子结构、固定搭配、习惯用法do sportsplay computer games5. ……Task 2 连句成篇 （让我来连一连）连词：表示并列，时间关系，因果关系，目的，列举等Task 3 Your opinions在你看来，哪些放松方式是最适当的？为什么？表达个人观点的句子：in my opinion/ as for me/ I think…/ I agree that….Step III. PracticeTask 4 中考练笔Topic : Ways for students to relaxRead and find key words b、Translate the sentences into English.
在你看来，哪些放松方式是最适当的？为什么？表达个人观点的句子：in my opinion/ as for me/ I think…/ I agree that….Step III. PracticeTask 4 中考练笔Topic : Ways for students to relaxRead and find key words3. show time 4. 参考作文Step IV. Homework1. Show a pictureQ: Besides study, What makes Jack so tired A: Doing sports2. Writing: 初三学生要不要进行体育锻炼 （提示： 先列出提纲）
反思与建议（关于主题）
区域初审意见 负责人：------------- 年 月 日 县评定意见 （盖章） 年 月 日
TV—watch TV---Jack watches TV to relax
basketball—play basketball—Jack….
talk to others
字-词-句
A
BH
C
DF磨课感想
梅林中学 章佩华
确定思路
进入第一轮复习阶段以来,学生对于写作部分的练习总有畏难情绪,如果听说这篇文章不用写,只作其他的练习部分,竟会像吃了蜜般的开心.那时我就想既然这是学生的薄弱环节,就应该加强一下写作技巧的指导,掌握了方法,或许对于写作就不会这么害怕.
2,磨课过程
磨课过程是比较痛苦的. a.单是例题的选择就换了好几个,最后确定还是热点的低碳生活较好,一是热门,二是贴近学生生活,让他们有话可说可写. b从传统的审列加连四个步骤入手开展任务,在上课中师生的互动活动又出现了问题:老师讲得过多,学生说得有些少.最后决定加入美化这一步,因为对于学生的写作帮助感觉很大,就是感觉时间上可能 会有些不够. c.还有一开始导入就是和学生Free talk ,不够自然.然后改为由受伤的地球导入,这样贴切真实自然多了.
在最后一刻,又有组员看到我这个课件之后,又提出是不是这种思路过于传统,应该结合某个话题一步步引导学生去写作.真是纠结郁闷.
课后反思
虽然感觉是传统的写作技巧指导,可我感觉这样还是更实用一些. 学生有了一个可行的写作指导思想，那么在以后的写作练习中我会更多的设计一些真实热门的话题 ,一步步地引导学生说出会写出更多的要点和词组,然后通过所掌握的技巧把它连成一篇美文.如果发现在写作中,学生哪个方面运用得较弱,可以针对性地设计多种练习形式,来强化他们的能力和技巧.Unit3 Teenagers should be allowed to choose their own clothes.
Words and phrases
西店镇初级中学 邬燕燕
Teaching Object Students in Junior three
Teaching aims 1. language focus:The students will be able to pronounce the words correctly and know the meaning of the following words and phrases. The students will be able to use these words and phrases.Pierce, license, silly, instead of stay up, concentrate on , present, at present, opportunity, have an opportunity to do sth, volunteer, local, experience member, old people’s home, sleepy, reply, get in the way, achieve, race , taught , importance, care about , succeed2. Language skillsThe students will be able to pronounce words by themselvesThe students will be able to guess the meaning of new wordsThe students will be able to write short passages by the words and phrases they have learnt.
Difficult points Let students write using the words and phrases they learned
Teaching Aids PPT
Teaching Procedures
Teacher’s Student’s purpose
Step1. Greetings and lead in Talk about the family rules students have.Step2. Task for wordsRead and spell. Review the words in this unit, race, member, silly, present, succeed, license, concentrate, taught, importance, experience.Guess the meaning of some words, silly, sleepy, race, achieveChange the form of some words, importance, succeed, sleepy, experience.Choose the right form of the wordsStep3. Task for the phrasesTranslate the phrases into English.Fill in the blanks with the phrases above.Choose the correct answer.Step4. Task for sentences.Make sentences with the phrases given. 1.get my ears pierced2.get to class late 3.fail a test4. at present 5. care about 6.be allowed to7. driver’s license8. not serious enough 9.be sleepy10.make my own decisions 11.achieve one’s dreams12. the importance of working hardStep5. Task for article Ask students to write an article about Anna Students say the rules and use the sentences like I am allowed to ……and I am not allowed to ……1.Students read and spell the word2. Students guess the meaning of the word.3. Students say the different forms out and use them Students do the exercises on the work paper.Students choose the phrases and make sentences by themselves.Students write the article by themselves. 用自由谈论的形式来制造缓和的气氛，同时复习这个单元的重点句型。用简单的单词拼读来开始复习单词，增强学生的自信心，提高课堂气氛。用英文意思猜单词，提高难度。词性变换，学生学会正确使用词的不同形式。通过不同形式的练习巩固学生学过的词组。对于单个单词或者词组，学生不容易记住或者区分意思，但放在句子中去理解，就容易理解他们的意思。词要不离句。学生总是一味的接受知识，所以我让学生自己造句，发挥他们的创造性，培养他们自主意识。学生用所学词组写作文，把刚才所复习的词组单词运用于实践。
Homework Finish the rest of the work paper. 家庭作业是课堂教学在课外的延续，达到更好的巩固。初中英语主题教研活动听评课记录
听课教师：____________ 所在学校：__深甽________ 活动时间：2012 年 月 日
活动主题 初三写作复习课
听课学校 年级班级 执教教师 许斌
教学内容 初三英语写作教学（phrases and writing）
课 堂 实 录 听 课 散 评
Teaching aims:Ss will be able to recall the useful phrases they have learned.Ss will be able to use the phrases to make sentences.Ss will learn some connective words.Ss will be able to write a passage and learn how to check it.Teaching steps:ⅠLead in Self-introduction: Introduce myself and my school.ⅡBefore writingTalk about my diet.a、T：I like eating a lot of vegetables and fruit. And I eat less meat. Sometimes I go to KFC to eat hamburgers. But I never eat burnt food.Q: What would you like to eat Do/Would you like eating vegetables/fruit/meat… Why Lead Ss to say out these phrases:be good for, stay away from, increase the risk of cancer, stay away fromAsk Ss to write these phrase on the paperb、Ask Ss to do the exercise: Choose the correct phrases to complete the passage.Talk about my exerciseTalk about my exercise：Play soccer with my SsQ: What exercise do you often do Lead Ss to say out these phrases: play basketball/soccer…, run, take part in, … times a week Ask Ss to write these phrases on the paper b、Connect the words to make a sentence.Talk about how to relaxa、T：After a day’s hard work, I like watching TV at night. Q: After a day’s or a week’s hard work, what do you often do to relax yourself Lead Ss to say out these phrases: listen to music, sleep a lot, do sports, hang out with friends b、Translate the sentences into English.
connective wordsChoose the right connective words to complete the passageⅢ、Writing Write a passage about “How to keep healthy”Ⅳ、After writingTell Ss how to check the passage.Ss exchange their passage and check.Ask one or two Ss to present their passage.Ⅴ、Some advice and homeworkAdvice:Remember useful phrases and sentences.Keep some good articles in mind.Do more writing.Homework:Find some useful phrases and sentences from your textbook about diet, exercise and how to relax, then write down on your notebook.Diet: P4，P5，P6,P11 (Book 8上); P50(Book9)Exercise: P5,P6(Book 8上);P16（Book8下）Relax:P5 p12(Book 8上)
反思与建议（关于主题）
区域初审意见 负责人：------------- 年 月 日 县评定意见 （盖章） 年 月 日
A
BH
C
DF教学目标：
The students will be able to understand the steps of writing..
The students will be able to know using some conjunctions to beautify the compositions.
The students can know how to self –check their own compositions .
教学过程：
Step 1 Free talk and lead-in
I introduce myself and show them the picture of my son .Tell Ss my house is not beautiful ,but I can show some beautiful house pictures to them. Then I say writing an article is just like building a house .
(从free talk导入，自然过渡，并且让学生欣赏图片，消除课堂紧张气氛)
Step 2 The steps of writing
We can divide the procedure of writing into three parts(six steps)
Before writing :Cross-question .Arrangement
While writing : List key words , Express your opinions
Sentence connection
Post writing : beautifying
(渗透写作策略教学，并以2011年宁波中考卷书面表达为例
进行策略的实战演练)
Step3 Discussion
“less pressure ,better life.” But we know pressure is everywhere. For you ,studying is your pressure. For me ,how to teach well is a problem. For our earth, pollution is a big problem. How to protect our environment ,what can we do to protect it let us discuss.
（先让学生说，说完了，那么写的内容也已经呈现出来了）
Step 4 writing
Write an article about the “Earth hour”.
Step 5 self –check
Let Ss self –check their own compositions according the form I gave them. Then change with their parteners, give scores. I will choose two or three articles to analysis.
Step 6 Analysis the articles of students
Step7 Homework
初三作文专题复习课磨课过程及反思
深圳中学 徐燕春
刚接到上写作课任务的时候，一直在想一个问题：该如何确定课型，是上一堂话题作文课还是写作技巧指导课？记得曾经在桃源中学听过戴芬芳老师的一堂写作课，至今仍记忆犹新。戴老师以“审-列-加-连-美”五字展开写作教学，非常精彩。本来也想借鉴此思路，再丰富下内容，但唯恐和其他老师撞车。左思右想，最后决定以话题和词块运用为主展开作文教学。但是在周五听了其他几位老师的说课之后，意识到了自己的浅薄。既然是初三的作文复习课，还是以指导方法为主，对学生的帮助更大。
下面谈谈我这堂话题作文课的大致思路：
本节课以“Jack’s dream”为导火线（Jack是一个为中考努力奋斗过度劳累而在课上睡着做梦的学生），正因为太辛苦，他在梦中畅想着各种能放松减压的方式（即文章的话题：How to relax ）之所以选择这个话题，是为了能贴近学生的生活实际，引起他们感情的共鸣。这总体上来说是一堂以说写结合为主的写作课。
Step I Warming-up
由 Q：Do you enjoy the life in Grade Nine 引出Jack这一角色，既而导出Jack’s dream ，在梦中由字到词，再到句子，巩固学生已学过词块的同时锻炼学生说英语的能力。然后用任务一：用简短的话来复述Jack的问题和梦境，以说的形式巩固短文，为降低难度，给学生个别的参考词汇。接着用谚语:All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy”引出Jack need to relax. 在班内四人一组进行对“放松方式”进行调查。
Step II Presentation ( I say/ you say/ everybody say)
Brainstorming: Ways for students to ralax，以四幅图片展出学生最常用的放松的方式,对每幅图片分别用2到三个短语来表达同个意思 P 1：listen to music/ enjoy music P 2:hang out with friends/ go shopping / do some shopping P 3: do sports/ play sports P 4: play computer games/ surf the Internet 然后拓展图片一：一句多译(有些学生通过听音乐来放松) 四五种不同的表达方法。图片二：谁有火眼金睛（展示学生最易犯的错误，如句子结构问题，中式英语，固定搭配习惯用法错误） Task 2 连句成篇，引入连接句子的连词，对上面的4幅画进行二度利用，组成完整的短文，体会连词的用法。 Task 3 展示出我的观点。在班中做完调查后，要求表达自己的观点和理由，引出表达个人观点的常用句型，如 in my opinion/ as for me/ I think+ 句子
Step III Practice
Task 4 中考练笔（Task 4 是对Task1 、2、 3的综合提升），展示中考作文 Ways for students to relax 侧重对学生写作技巧的培养，如step 1 Read and find the key words step 2 Find the tense and person Step 3 use outline to improve the writing给学生一定的写作时间，展示中考评分当堂讲评，指出其优缺点。然后展示范文，让学生找其亮点借鉴其词块和句型。
Step IV Homework
最后一环节，话题又转到Jack的身上，除了学习，初三每天的锻炼也是让Jack疲惫不堪的原因，引出家庭作业：初三学生要不要进行体育锻炼？
在上公开课的前一天，也就是周四，王老师来听了我的课，对我指出如下意见：
1. 在操练连词的这个环节，挑两三幅图片对不同类型的连词进行操练显得有些突兀，于是我增设了一张PPT，让学生根据语境填连词。
另外，自己觉得所选的词汇不够丰富，可以再改一下。
再次感谢能有这样一次学习的机会，在教学的路上要学得东西还有好多，定当虚心学习。
2012. 03.09初三写作指导教学评课稿
西店中学 王钰莹
这次是初三作文的指导教学课，下面我代表西店中学和深圳中学的全体英语组老师发表我们共同探讨的结果。
第一堂许斌老师的课，我们认为他有很多值得我们学习的地方：
教师自身亲和力非常强，课堂上与学生的互动比较多，充分调动了学生的学习积极性。
许老师的选题比较贴近生活，在让学生写作之前的铺垫也做得比较充分，接着的巩固形式也比较多样，有选词填空，连词成句，汉译英等，使学生的信息输入有了第一步的输出过程。
以“How to keep healthy ”为题，让学生可以开放性写作，符合中考的命题方向，使学生有不同层次的提升。
建议：本次活动的主题是初中英语写作教学，我们认为许老师可以更加侧重多讲些写作技巧的指导教学，当然在本堂课中，许老师也涉及了一些写作技巧，如：合理运用关联词，但是否可以从不同方面再渗透得多点呢？
第二堂邬燕燕老师的课，我们认为也有很多亮点和值得大家学习的地方：
教师上课教态亲切、自然、自信、心态非常好，能够耐心地引导学生，对学生“My girl, my boy”的亲切称呼能够拉近学生之间的距离。
以“审、列、加、连”四步曲的写作模式展开写作课堂，层层深入，贯穿写作技巧，上课思路清晰、明了。
建议：课的开始设置的问题有些难，学生听起来有点懵，可以把问题转换成简单店小二表达，让学生积极参与课堂。
2012.3.15(共20张PPT)
Enjoy writing!
Amy Wu
Xidian Middle School
----skills for writing
假设你是李明，你的国外网友Eric在网上看到几幅中国剪纸(Chinese paper cut)，Eric对此很感兴趣，给你发来邮件询问有关中国剪纸的信息，请你根据下表提示给他回复邮件。
Chinese Paper Cuts
long history over 2,000 years
very popular in different parts of China, young or old, be fond of, do well in…
different shapes bird，animals, flowers
Where do people put Chinese paper cuts …
write
First think then write
第一步 审
Present simple
First person
假设
你是李明，你的国外网友Eric在网上看到几幅中国剪纸(Chinese paper cuts)，
Eric对此很感兴趣，给你发来邮件询问有关中国剪纸的信息，请你根据下表提示给他回复邮件。
Tense
Person
Main idea
Chinese paper cuts
第二步 列
make a list of key points
Chinese Paper Cuts
long history over 2,000 years
very popular in different parts of China, young or old, be fond of, do well in…
different shapes birds, animals, flowers
Where do people put Chinese paper cuts …
1.Chinese paper cuts have a long history.
2.Chinese paper cuts are very popular.
3. Chinese paper cuts have many different shapes.
4. People put Chinese paper cuts on doors
or windows.
Key points
加
连词成句,覆盖要点
单句为主,复句慎用
句式多样,主次分明
写作第三步：
1.Chinese paper cuts have a long history.
2.Chinese paper cuts are very popular.
3. Chinese paper cuts have many different shapes.
4. People put Chinese paper cuts on doors or windows
Key points
over 2,000 years
in different parts of China, young or old,
be fond of, do well in…
birds, animals, flowers
when ,why
I am so glad to know that you are interested in Chinese paper cuts. Now let me tell you something about it.
I hope you’ll come to china to see more Chinese paper cuts one day.
a head
a tail
a body
连
写作第四步：
巧妙组合、顺畅过度、上下连贯、语意畅达、
注意搭配、运用恰当的关联词
1.表示并列或递进:
2.表示选择:
3.表示转折:
4.表示因果:
5.表示条件:
6.表示对比:
7.表示解释:
8.表示顺序:
9.表示强调:
10.表示观点:
关联词
and, as well as, both…and,
not only…but also, neither…nor;
or, either…or;
but, however, although, though, after all,
because, so;
if , unless
to begin with, firstly, first (of all), second(ly), next,
later, since then, from then on, finally, in the end;
for example, such as, that is to say, in other words;
also, besides, what’s more, actually, in fact;
instead，on the one hand…on the other hand;
in my opinion
Skill one Make your sentences correct
Skill two Make your handwriting clear
1.单词拼写正确吗
2.名词的单复数正确吗？
3.主谓保持一致吗？
4.时态和语态正确吗？
5.词类使用正确吗？
6.有Chinese English 现象吗？
Skill three Express in different ways
1.Many people like Chinese paper cuts.
Many people are fond of Chinese paper cuts.
2.Chinese paper cuts have a long history of over 2,000 years.
Chinese paper cuts were invented over 2,000 years ago.
中考作文评分标准
第一档（14-15分）
能写明全部要点，语言基本无误，行文连贯，表达清楚。
第二档（11-13分）
能写明大部分要点，语言有少量错误，行文比较连贯，表达比较
清楚。
第三档（8-10分）
能写明部分要点，语言有较多错误，行文不太连贯，但尚能表达
清楚 。
第四档（5-7分）
能写明少部分或个别要点，语言错误较多，只有个别句子可读、
可看懂。
第五档（0-4分）
无内容要点，语言错误较多，只有一些词汇堆积，不知所云。
conclusion
审题，抓点
定词, 定态
造句，成文
改错，誊写
如今，中学生的假期生活发生了很大变化。假定你是李明，美国的笔友Lisa想了解中国学生现在的假期生活。请写封回信。要点如下： 学习和休闲仍然重要;
（as important as , study , relax oneself） 帮忙做家务或干农活;
(be busy with/in, do chores , provide help on the farm)
参加社会活动，做志愿者工作，帮助他人。
(take part in , social activities, be a volunteer, help others )
注意;1.词数100左右。短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；
2.短文须包括所有内容要点，并阐明自己的观点，不要逐
句翻译，可适当发挥，使短文连贯，通顺；初三作文专题课学习稿
Writing Topic How can we keep a healthy life
Activity1 Write an outline
Beginning
Topic Main Part
Ending
Activity2 Write a composition
How can we keep a healthy life
Useful sentences
学习
A good beginning is half done. 良好的开端是成功的一半。
A good book is a good friend. 好书如挚友。
All roads lead to Rome. 条条大路通罗马。
All things are difficult before they are easy. 凡事总是由难而易。
All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. 只会用功不玩耍，聪明孩子也变傻。
An hour in the morning is worth two in the evening. 一日之计在于晨。
Doing is better than saying. 与其挂在嘴上，不如落实在行动上。
Don't put off till tomorrow what should be done today. 今日事，今日毕。
Every minute counts. 分秒必争。
Easier said than done. 说得容易，做得难。
Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母。
Great hopes make great man. 伟大的抱负造就伟大的人物。
Knowledge is power. 知识就是力量。
It is never too old to learn. 活到老，学到老。
Never say die. 永不言败。
No pains, no gains. 没有付出就没有收获。
Nothing in the world is difficult for one who sets his mind to it.世上无难事，只怕有心人。
One cannot put back the clock. 时钟不能倒转。
One hour today is worth two tomorrow. 争分夺秒效率高。
Practice makes perfect. 熟能生巧。
Rome is not built in a day. 冰冻三尺，非一日之寒。
The early bird catches the worm. 早起的鸟儿有虫吃。
Where there is a will, there is a way. 有志者事竟成。
健康
An apple a day keeps the doctor away. 一天一苹果，不用请医生。
Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise.早睡早起身体好。
Health is better than wealth. 健康胜过财富。
Health is happiness. 健康就是幸福。
议论文
Every coin has two sides. 事物有两面性
Do as the Romans do. 入乡随俗。
Money isn't everything. 钱不是万能的。
Many heads are better than one. 三个臭皮匠，赛过诸葛亮。
You cannot eat your cake and have it. 鱼与熊掌，不可得兼。
Unity is strength. 团结就是力量。
Think twice before you do. 三思而后行(共18张PPT)
Let’s enjoy writing.
強蛟中学 李洁
What do you think of English
English
interesting
扩写练习：
English is…
English is so… that…
It is … for sb to do sth.
English is so…
Compare:
B is better than A in
English is so important that we need to learn it very well. If we want to learn English well, the following tips can help you. Before class, we’d better read the textbook, and we are supposed to make a vocabulary lists in class, listening to the teacher carefully is a good way to learn English. it’s also important to take notes. After class we should memorize the words, and we’d better watch some English movies.
English is not so difficult. The most important thing is to put your heart into it. As the saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way.”
fluency流畅
consecution条理
Before class, we’d better read the textbook, and we supposed to make a vocabulary lists in class, listening to the teacher carefully is a good way to learn English. t’s also important to take notes. After class we should memorize the words, and we’d better watch some English movies.
English is so important that we need to learn it very well. If we want to learn English well, the following tips can help you. Before class, we’d better read the textbook, and we supposed to make a vocabulary lists. In class, listening to the teacher carefully is a good way to learn English. It’s also important to take notes. After class, we should memorize the words, and we’d better watch some English movies.
English is not so difficult. The most important thing is to put your heart into it. As the saying goes, Where there is a will, there is a way.
beginning
key sentence
ending
Beginning:
Main part:
(正文)
Ending:
Before class
In class
After class
English is so…very well
English is not…there is a way
How can we learn English well
Outline
Key sentence
(If…help you)
read
make
listen to
take notes
memorize
watch
Linking words
(If…help you)
Beginning:
Main part:
(正文)
Ending:
Before class
In class
After class
English is so…very well
English is not…there is a way
How can we learn English well
Outline
Key sentence
read
make
listen to
take notes
memorize
watch
Can you retell the composition orally (口头地）according to the outline
Strategy
Write an outline before writing a composition is helpful
写前先写提纲对写作有帮助
English is so important that we need to learn it very well. If we want to learn English well, the following tips can help you. Before class, we’d better read the textbook, and we are supposed to make a vocabulary lists in class, listening to the teacher carefully is a good way to learn English. it’s also important to take notes. After class we should memorize the words, and we’d better watch some English movies.
English is not so difficult. The most important thing is to put your heart into it. As the saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way.”
Writing
1. While we’re writing, think about good sentences and words we can use.
2. Try to use some linking words to make your writing more fluently
My hobbies
( Beginning ): ___________________________________. ( Key sentence A):______________________. I often read in my free time. I read many kinds of books. And I like the stories that have good endings.
(Key sentence B ): ______________________. I like all kinds of music. I often listen to the music programs on radio. Although I can’t sing English songs well, I like them a lot. (Key sentence C ): _____________________.I often play ping-pong after classes. When I am doing sports, I forge all my trouble and worry. Of course it is necessary for students to play sports.
(Ending) _______________________________________.
Can you add a beginning, two other key sentences, some linking words and an ending
Practice:
I am a lover of reading
My hobbies
( Beginning ): ___________________________________. ( Key sentence A):______________________. I often read in my free time. I read many kinds of books. And I like the stories that have good endings.
(Key sentence B ): ______________________. I like all kinds of music. I often listen to the music programs on radio. Although I can’t sing English songs well, I like them a lot. (Key sentence C ): _____________________.I often play ping-pong after classes. When I am doing sports, I forge all my trouble and worry. Of course it is necessary for students to play sports.
(Ending) _______________________________________.
Can you add a beginning, two other key sentences, some linking words and an ending
Practice:
I am a lover of reading
Title:____________
I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.
I am a lover of reading.
I am also a music lover.
I like sports as well.
In short, I enjoy my life in school. Reading books, listening to music and doing sports are very helpful to my health and my studies.
My hobbies
Beginning:
Key sentence B:
Key sentence A:
Ending:
Main part
(正文):
Key sentence C:
(linking words)
Check:
spelling（拼写）
tense (时态)
handwriting（书写）
punctuation marks(标点符号)
After writing
Sum Up
What do we learn today
1.Write an outline before writing a composition is helpful
2. While we’re writing, think about good sentences and words we can use.
3. Try to use some linking words to make your writing more fluently
1. Share your composition with your friends, find and learn some good sentences or words.
2. Try to memorize some of the sayings
In your handout.(共25张PPT)
初三英语写作教学
phrases and writing
大佳何中学 许斌
football
traveling
apple
watch TV
thin, but healthy
How to keep healthy
Eat a balanced diet
Do much exercise
relax yourself
fruit
vegetables
hamburger
meat
burnt food
And…….
Sometimes…
But……
Diet
be good for, stay away from, eat less meat,
increase the risk of, eat a balanced diet
You should eat lots of vegetables and fruit. They ____________ your health. And you should ____________. Because eating more meat can make you fat. But you must ______________ burnt food. Because burnt food can __________________ cancer.
In a word, you should ___________________ to keep healthy.
选择适当的词组，完成下面短文
are good for
eat less meat
stay away from
increase the risk of
eat a balanced diet
Exercise
After-school activities
连词成句
1、play, I, basketball, three, a, times, week
2、should, you, part, activities, in, after-school, take, the
3、running, good, is, health, for, your
4、 healthy, keep, can, help, exercise, lot, you, of, a
I play basketball three times a week.
You should take part in the after-school activities.
Running is good for your health.
A lot of exercise can help you keep healthy.
Relax
Translation（中译英）
1、我喜欢在晚饭后散步。
2、我经常在周末和朋友们闲逛。
3、听音乐能使你感到放松。
4、得到充足的睡眠是重要的
I like taking a walk after dinner.
I often hang out with my friends on weekends.
Listening to music can make you feel relaxed.
It’s important to get enough sleep.
Writing
从diet, exercise, relax三个方面写一篇关于“How to keep healthy ” 的文章。开头已给出，字数不少于70字。
It’s very important for us to keep healthy. Here are some ways to keep healthy.
connective words(关联词)
恰当运用关联词句，使得文章层次清晰，
各个部分衔接自然。
表示举例:
for example, such as，...and so on
表示结果:
as a result, therefore
表示转折:
but, however
表示顺序:
to begin with, first(ly), second(ly), next, later, finally, at last, in the end，since then, from then on
Connective words(关联词)
表示并列或递进:
and, as well as, both…and, not only…but also,
neither…nor; either…or; what’s more = besides
connective words(关联词)
表示总结:
in general, in a word
How to be a good student
Everyone wants to be a good student, but how to be a good student
______, we should work hard, _____ try to do well in all the subjects. We should listen to the teachers carefully in class. We must review and preview lessons every day.
_______, behave well all the time. __________, be polite to others, ready to help people in need and get on well with classmates. We should obey rules, never be late for school ________.
______, health is very important to us students. We should play sports often and keep fit.
We can do everything well and be a good student as long as we try our best.
First
and
Second
For example
and so on
Third
Writing
从diet, exercise, relax三个方面写一篇关于“How to keep healthy ” 的文章。开头已给出，字数不少于70字。
It’s very important for us to keep healthy. Here are some ways to keep healthy.
如何复查
一查要点是否齐全，字数是否符合要求。
二查语法是否有错误。
三查拼写、大小写、标点是否正确。
Some advice
Remember useful phrases and sentences.
Keep some good articles in mind.
Do more writing.
Homework
Find some useful phrases and sentences from your textbook about diet, exercise and how to relax, then write down on your notebook.
Diet: P4，P5，P6,P11 (Book 8上); P50(Book9)
Exercise: P5,P6(Book 8上);P16（Book8下）
Relax:P5 p12(Book 8上)九年级写作指导课教案
梅林中学 章佩华
Teaching aims :
1.All the students will be able to write an article according to the words and expressions that they can remember about lower-carbon.
2.All the students will be able to write with ease and grace and pay attention to the correctness of the language.
3 All the students will be able to know to use the conjunctions properly.
Teaching difficult points:
Students will write an article fluently and correctly.
Teaching procedures:
I. Before writing
1. Lead-in
Show a picture of the hurting earth , talk about how important to protect our home . then lead in lower-- carbon life . lead Ss to say out some ideas about lower-carbon.
(设计意图:通过受伤的地球引出低碳生活,使学生思考哪些生活行为是低碳生活的表现, 联想生活中如何节能环保,为下面作文的呈现作好思维上的铺垫.)
II. While-writing
在今年6月5日世界环境日即将到来之既,请写一篇发言稿呼吁全校同学共同保护环境,从我做起. 内容包括如下:
经常骑自行车或走路上学,父母骑车或走路上班.
节约用水,用电.不把污水倒入河中,不乱扔垃圾.
不用或少用一次性筷子或餐巾纸.
把用过的书本留给下届(lower grades) 学生.
请再提出1或2条建议.
search (审)
Make sure the topic ,the tense ,the person and the key points.
list (列)
Go to school on foot. Ride a bike , save water , don't pour the waste water into the river , throw about the rubbish . Try not to use one-off chopsticks and napkins . Give away the used book to lower grades students .one or two advice .
add .(加)
Put the head and end in the phrase.
We should go to school on foot .
We shouldn't pour the waste water into the river.and So on ...
connect (连)
Pay attention to use the connection words to make the article better .
(设计意图:教师指导学生从以上几个方面开始入手写作、修改和润色原文。从而有效的调动学生写作的积极性，循序渐进地提高学生的写作能力。)
III. After-writing
1.Show some students' article s , ask the students to give a mark and tell the reasons.
2.lead the ss check the article by spelling ,tense , handwriting and connection words .
(设计意图: 通过不同层次学生的写作内容，反馈学生通过自评、互评后学生最终的学习效果,能够提高语言表达的准确性和连贯性。)
3. Summary
It' s necessary to search-list -add-connect . If possible, please beauty the article to make it better .(善用高级词汇,活用多种句型和妙用引文和例子.)
(设计意图:总结好作文的方法，强化语言的正确性，行文的连贯性和逻辑性。同时鼓励学生继续努力，不断创新和发展。)
4. Homework
台湾是中国的宝岛，请根据以下要点写一篇介绍台湾的短文。
注意：所有提示必须用上，再适当加以发挥。词数80左右。
(1).台湾岛位于我国的东南部，是我国的第一大 岛。
(2).风景优美，当地人们友好。每年有许多游客去旅游参观。
(3).盛产稻米、茶叶、各种水果和鱼类。
(4).希望台湾的未来更美好。
教学反思
这是一堂写作技巧指导课，我在课堂中更多地设计了写作指导思想，在实际上课过程中可能会变成以教师为主体的这么一堂课。在以后实施具体写作任务的过程中，我会把重点放在内容上并多设计一些互动性任务，尽力创造更多的机会让学生用目的语进行真实交流，设计贴近学生生活的有趣而实用的任务，真实的生活型的任务可以刺激和引起学生的兴趣, 提高其完成写作任务的积极性；同时，也要注意语言的表达力求准确流畅。通过这么一堂课，让我明白写作课也是可以上得精彩生动的，我将不断提升自己，更好地做好自己的本职工作。磨 课 稿
桥头胡中学 杨潇潇
接到王老师 的通知，主题是初三作文专题复习。我当时认为初三的复习课，应该注重学习方法指导，学到了写作策略，以后每次写作的时候不是可以加以运用了吗。所以我 开始的设计思路是让学生欣赏美丽的房子照片，然后说写作就如造房子，写作的步骤为审-------列--------加---------美---------抄。审题又可以分审体裁，审时态，审人称；列重点；加主语，加连词；美化，找出错误；最后誊抄一遍。学完写作学习方法之后，就是实际运用。我以2011年宁波市英语中考试卷中的书面表达为例，详细介绍了写作五步法。然后给学生15分钟时间写作，面批作文，展示中考作文评分标准。让学生自己意识到写作中该注意什么，尽量避免写作中容易犯的的错误。
上了一堂课后，感觉课堂气氛很沉闷，同事们说导入有些突兀，连接词，与学生的反馈语都有些少。所以导入的时候我改为先是Free-talk,导入到my house，再由my house到beautiful houses.经过这一改变之后,导入更加自然，衔接的也更加顺畅了些。在上完第二堂课后,因为是在程度比较好的班级上课，所以气氛有所改变。但是我觉得与学生之间的互动还是少了些。在开始写作训练之前我又加了一个步骤，让学生谈谈如何保护环境，从说到写，不致于太过于空洞。
听了许老师的课后，我突然有一种醍醐灌顶的感觉。原来作文课也可以上的这么轻松，这么活跃，说实在的这是我没有想到的。许老师的课条理清晰，让学生有话可讲，形式多样，有中译英，有缺词填空，有造句等。而且我觉得这堂课很有效率，最起码让学生真正写好了一篇文章。所以我想在上完我的课堂作文指导课后，接下来就可以模仿许老师上有效的作文课了。
2012、3、12(共23张PPT)
“话题和词块运用”
写作模式
深圳中学 徐燕春
The High School Entrance Exam(中考) is coming!
tired
busy
Jack
The High School Entrance Exam(中考) is coming!
Jack
Jack’s dream
watch TV
play basketball
talk to others
He relaxed by…... / He liked …… to relax.
Task 1
All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.
只工作不玩耍，聪明的孩子会变傻。
参考词汇：a student in Grade 9 / tired /
fall asleep / make a dream / watch TV /
play sports / talk with others
用简短的话来复述Jack的问题和他的梦境
Brainstorming 头脑风暴
ways for students to relax
……
listen to music
enjoy music
go shopping
hang out with friends
do sports
play sports
play computers
surf the Internet
do some shopping
一句多译: 有些学生通过听音乐来放松
Some students relax by listening to music.
Listening to music is a good way to relax.
When you are tired, you can listen to music to relax.
Why not consider listening to music when you are tired.
比一比：谁造的句子最多！！！
……
谁有火眼金睛？？？
I very like going shop, so I think going shop good.
I often with friends go out on weekend.
错误大本营：
句子结构
I like going shopping very much
so I think going shopping is good
I often go out with friends on weekends.
2. 固定搭配、习惯用法
Task 2 连句成篇
1）表示并列和递进关系的：
and, also, besides, what’s more,
on one hand …on the other hand….
2）表示转折关系的：
but, yet, however, although, though…
3）表示时间关系的： first, then, later,
in the end
4）表示因果关系的：
so, bacause ,as a result, thanks to…
5）表示目的的：
in order to, in order that , so as to, so that…
6）表示列举的：
for example , for instance ,such as…
We have a discussion about the ways to relax .
Some……others…….
。。。。
1. Some students prefer to listen to music they think music is relaxing.
2. keep healthy, most students do sports to relax.
3. There are many ways to relax. , you can go shopping with friends. Also, playing computer is a good way.
4. Most students prefer to watch TV, , others are different.
because
In order to
For example/ For instance
however
在你看来，哪一种（些）放松方式是适当的？为什么？
表达个人观点的表达：
in my opinion / As for me, I think……/ I agree that…..
Task 3 Your opinions
Task 4 中考练笔
中学生学习时间长、压力大，专家建议学生每天课后应采取适当的方式放松自己。某英文报正在就“学生适当的放松方式”这一话题进行征文。假设你是深圳中学初三某班的学生，最近你对班上同学课后放松方式进行了调查。请根据表格提供的调查信息和要求写一篇短文向该报投稿。 开头已给出
常用放松方式 1.看电视（15%） 2.玩电脑游戏（5%） 3.听音乐（15%） 4.进行体育锻炼（65%）
你的观点 哪一种（些）放松方式是适当的？ 为什么？
注意： 1.短文包括对现象的陈述 对调查相关信息的介绍 和你自己的观点；
2.词数：80—100 词。
学生适当的放松方式
对调查相关信息的介绍
自己的观点
Step1 : Read and find the key words
Step 2 pay attention to the tense and person
Tense:
Person:
The present simple (一般现在时）
I 3
现象陈述
Beginning
ways
to
relax
Body
Ending
Strategy
Use outline to improve your writing
提纲
现象陈述
对调查相关信息的介绍
自己的观点
Life in Grade 9 is really tired, so it’s necessary for us to relax after class. Recently we had a discussion about the ways for students to relax. Here are the results.
In my opinion/ I think……
watch TV 15%
play computer games5%
listen to music 5%
do sports 65%
中考作文评分标准
第一档（14-15分）
能写明全部要点，语言基本无误，行文连贯，表达清楚。
第二档（11-13分）
能写明大部分要点，语言有少量错误，行文比较连贯，表达比较清楚
第三档（8-10分）
能写明部分要点，语言有较多错误，行文不太连贯，但尚能表达清楚
第四档（5-7分）
能写明少部分或个别要点，语言错误较多，只有个别句子可读、可看懂
第五档（0-4分）
基本上没有写出内容要点，语言错误较多，只有一些词汇堆积，不知所云。
参考作文
The ways for students to relax
Life in Grade 9 is really tired, so it’s necessary for us to relax after class. Recently we had a discussion about the ways for students to relax. Here are the results. Different students have different ways to relax. Most students think doing sports is a good way . 15% of the students like to watch TV in their spare time. Besides, another 15% agree to listen to relax themselves, While the rest prefer to play computer games. I think every student should choose proper ways to relax. In my opinion, watching TV or playing computer games is not a proper way to help us to relax. I think taking exercise is a proper way because it can rest our brains and eyes. What’s more, It can help improve our health. Therefore, I often play ping pong after class. It’s really helpful to both my health and my study.
Guessing: What makes Jack so tired besides study
Is doing sports a necessary way for students in Grade Nine
Homework
假如你叫李华，你校初三同学正在开展一场讨论，主题是“初三学生要不要参加体育锻炼”请根据下面所提供的信息，用英语总结出讨论结果，并发表自己的看法
提示：一些人认为应该每天进行体育锻炼，但不要时间过长，锻炼能增强体质，保持健康，能使大脑休息，使学习效果更好；
另一些人则不赞成，他们认为锻炼浪费时间，使人疲劳；锻炼以后很兴奋，较长时间不恩投入学习：锻炼中可能手上
要求：语句通顺，句意连贯；次数为80个词左右；发言稿的开头已经写好，但不计入总字数。
(You should make an outline first)
同学在作文课上表现突出，
特发此状，以资鼓励.
深圳中学
同学在作文课上表现突出，
特发此状，以资鼓励.
深圳中学初中英语主题教研活动听评课记录
听课教师：____________ 所在学校：__________________ 活动时间： 年 月 日
活动主题 初中英语书面写作技巧指导
听课学校 深圳中学 年级班级 执教教师 邬燕燕
教学内容 初中英语书面写作技巧指导
课 堂 实 录 听 课 散 评
Step1.before wring Talk about writing.Step2. while writing第一步 审 the main idea, the tense ,the person第二步 列Make a list of the key points1. Chinese paper cut has a long history.2. Chinese paper cut is very popular.3. Chinese paper cut has many different shapes.4. People put Chinese paper cuts on……第三步 加1.连词成句,覆盖要点单句为主,复句慎用句式多样,主次分明2.加首尾，使结构完整。可以采取总、分、总结构或者总、分结构，开头或结尾的句子应注意简洁，漂亮。第四步 连巧妙组合、顺畅过度、上下连贯、语意畅达、注意搭配、运用恰当的关联词
Step3. after writingShow students articles and make some commentsStep4. homework
反思与建议（关于主题）
区域初审意见 负责人：------------- 年 月 日 县评定意见 （盖章） 年 月 日
A
BH
C
DF磨课稿
大佳何中学 许斌
我在周五深圳中学正式上课前，在本校进行了两次磨课。
第一次磨课是在周二，听课的是本校的英语组教师。听完后同组的教师提出了几点建议：
在课件中出现了几个单词出错和答案出错的地方，还有一个自定义动画播放顺序出错。
在谈论完自己的饮食习惯后，问学生时的问题是这样的：What kind of food do you like Do you like ….. 同组老师认为问题太单一，可以问成：What would you like to eat Would you like …. Do you like ….
在学生写完文章后，叫学生朗读习作进行展示和点评。同组老师认为可以使用实物投影进行展示，这样更加直观。
在改进了以上三点后，周四又进行了试上。这次听课的还有胡元妹老师带领的90学时培训的一个小组12名老师。他们听后也提出了一些宝贵的建议：
在导入时可以使用一个思维导图，展现一些词块。就是周五上课时课件中第7张幻灯片，从Eat a balanced diet, Do much exercise和Relax yourself三个方面说明自己healthy。
在叫学生写作时，可以介绍一些关联词，并插入练习加以巩固。我就在前几年的中考范文中找了一篇带有较多关联词的范文，去掉这些关联词，叫学生填空。
最后一点是关于作业，原先的作业范围太大了，缺乏有效性。之后我就缩小了范围，叫学生寻找与上课出现的话题有关的词组和句子。
以上就是通过两次磨课发现的问题和改进的地方。非常感谢各位听课和提出宝贵建议的教师。(共23张PPT)
Qiaotouhu Middle School Yang Xiaoxiao
Improving Your Writing
They are different styles of houses but have the same steps of building.
Let’s share some pictures!
How
How can we build a beautiful house
First …
Second…
Third….
…
Put them in order:
__ designing the house
__ decorating(装饰，装修)
__ collecting material
__ building
Building a house:
1
4
2
3
__ read topic carefully and outline-drawing
(认真审题 罗列提纲)
__ beautifying （美化）
__ material collecting
___ writing
1
2
3
4
Writing an article:
Writing articles is just like building houses.
Six steps for writing (写作六步骤）
1. Cross-question(审题)
※ Style（文体）
※ Verb tense
※ Person
3.key words (抓要点)
2.Arrangement(布局)
4. Sentence connection(连句)
Words/phrases Sentences
6. beautifying(书写、查错）
5. Express your opinion (发表观点）
Conjunctions（连接词）
sentences
passage
Starting
(topic)
Body
(supporting ideas)
ending
为了使同学们更加健康快乐地成长，学校决定向同学们征求建议。假如你是刘波，用英语向校长写一篇80个词左右的建议信。注意：文中应包含所有要点，并适当发挥；不能出现真实的校名和姓名。开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。（2011宁波 ）
Style (体裁）：__________
Person（人称）：_________
tense（时态）: _________________
议论文
第一人称
一般现在时和一般将来时结合
1. 给学校的建议：
2. 给老师的建议
Open the library more often
Organize more after-class activities
Give us more time for sports
Organize fewer exams
Make classes more interesting
Talk less but more clearly in class
Finish classes on time
Give us less homework
Second
Next
And
As for
And
what’s more
Second，next ,and ,as for, what’s more
…First ,I hope our school will open the library more often. _______,I think our school can organize more after-class activities. _____ I hope our school will give us more time for sports, art and music. _______ I suggest our school should organize fewer exams as well.
_______ our teachers, I hope they will be our friends and
make classes more interesting. _____ if they can talk less but more clearly in class, we will be more interested in studying and have more time to practice. ___________, I hope they will give us less homework and finish classes on time
Hope my suggestions will be helpful. …
表列举说明的关联词:
Firstly/ First of all/ To begin with, .... Secondly… Thirdly…Finally
表示递进、强调的关联词
.... Besides/ What’s more
(2011,杭州）I t’s too late to invite any more people._____,you know how Tim hates parties.
A Besides B However C Still D Instead
表示转折关系
but; however; while; though; even though
1 I really enjoyed your lecture,__ there were some parts I didn’t quite understand.
A because B unless C though D after
2 come on ,____ you will be late.
A and B but C so D or
…First ,I hope our school will open the library more often. Second ,I think our school can organize more after-class activities. Next I hope our school will give us more time for sports, art and music. And I suggest our school should organize fewer exams as well.
As for our teachers, I hope they will be our friends and
make classes more interesting. And if they can talk less but more clearly in class, we will be more interested in studying and have more time to practice. What’s more, I hope they will give us less homework and finish classes on time
Hope my suggestions will be helpful. …
范文
water pollution
air pollution
Noise pollution
在今年的“地球一小时（Earth Hour）”活动中，中国很多城市的人们都自觉熄灯一小时，体现了低碳生活的新理念。假定你是CCTV9的记者，请你根据以下采访信息用英语写一篇80个词左右的新闻稿。
注意：部分内容已为你写好，不计入总词数。(2010年宁波中考）
Shanghai：
taking a
walk with
the
family
Beijing：
having a
nice talk
with friends
Ningbo：
holding a
party in the
park
Protect the environment：
·plant more trees
·use paper both sides
· ．．．
spend more time with family and
friends
Change lifestyle：
Earth Hour
What people are doing
What people plan to do
附作文评分标准（供参考）：
第五档（很好）：13—15分
表达清楚，行文连贯，复合句运用自如正确，有文采，用上
全部关键词语言得体，基本无误或错误很少。
第四档（好）：10—12分
表达基本清楚，行文基本连贯，尚能运用复合句，语言有少量错误。
第三档（还好）：7—9分
只能运用简单句表达，语言有较多错误，但尚能答意。
第二档（较差）：4—6分
能写出几个要点，但语言错误较多，影响了意思表达。
第一档（差）：0—3分
白卷或文不对题，错误百出，不知所云。
典型病例
名词的单复数问题
主谓一致问题
时态和语态问题
Chinglish 现象
行文的逻辑性问题
词类错用
Thank you for joining CCTV’s Around China show ! Now it’s
8∶45 P．m．during the famous Earth Hour．People in many cities
have turned off their lights and are having a very special time．In Shanghai，some people are taking a walk with their family．They feel very relaxed．In Beijing，some people are having a nice talk with their friends．And in Ningbo，some young people are holding a party in the park，singing and dancing Without lights，people can aslo enjoy themselves．
Many people share with us their plans．Some say they will
spend more time with their family and friends．Others say they will
try their best to protect the environment，like planting more
trees，saving water and so on．What’s more，some people tell me
that they will use paper both sides（drive less，ride bikes， use
plastic bags less．．．）in their daily life．
审题是关键
重点要明确
要点要全面
格式要正确
语言要地道
行文要流畅
字迹要工整
卷面要漂亮
summary
Thanks for your listening评课稿
梅林中学 陈爱华
徐斌的课
这是一堂词块和写作课，一堂新型的写作课教学。徐老师做了精心的准备。从介绍自己和自己的学校导入，很有亲和力，同时激起学生对自己的好奇心，吸引学生的注意力，激起学生学习英语的兴趣。他的课思路清晰，从词块到句子，再从句子到语篇，逐步递进。每一环节配有相应的练习，选词填空，连词成句和翻译句子。形式多样。呈现关联词后同样配了相应的联系加以巩固。之前这些讲解和练习为学生的写作做好了铺垫。降低了写作的难度。增强了学生写作的信心。学生积极参与。课堂轻松有趣。学生在这样的课堂中不知不觉学到知识,这堂课很不错。
邬燕燕的课
这是一堂侧重写作技巧指导的写作课。邬老师也做了精心的准备。她课堂上用my boy, my girl称呼学生拉近了于学生的距离。在授课过程中并及时的给予评价。他从审-列-加-连四个环节步步递进。思路清晰。在呈现关联词的时候，应配相应的练习，以起到落实的效果。她的选题有点偏难，学生没有话说。课堂气氛不够活跃。如果选了这个题，是不是可以呈现一些背景资料，让学生能够掌握更多的信息，让学生有话可说。初中英语书面写作技巧指导
邬燕燕
技巧: 审 –列 – 加 – 连
小窍门：1）注意书写，卷面整洁。
2）注意自查，消灭病句。
注意积累，多看范文。
关联词：1.表示并列或递进: and, as well as, both…and, not only…but also, neither…nor;
2.表示选择: or, either…or;
3.表示转折: but, however, although, though, after all,
4.表示因果: because, so,
5.表示条件: if , unless
6.表示对比: instead, on the one hand…on the other hand;
7.表示解释: for example, for instance, such as, that is to say,
8.表示顺序: to begin with, firstly, first (of all), second(ly), next, later, since then, from then on, finally, in the end;
9.表示强调: also, besides, what’s more, actually, in fact,
10.表示观点: ,in my opinion
Ⅹ. 书面表达（共15分）
假设你是李明，你的国外网友Eric在网上看到几幅中国剪纸(Chinese paper cut)，Eric对此很感兴趣，给你发来邮件询问有关中国剪纸的信息，请你根据下表提示给他回复邮件。
Chinese Paper Cuts
long history over 2,000 years
very popular in different parts of China, young or old, be fond of, do well in…
different shapes bird, animals. flowers
Where do people put Chinese paper cuts …
1. Chinese paper cuts have a long history.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2. Chinese paper cuts are very popular.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
3. Chinese paper cuts have many different shapes.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
4. People put Chinese paper cuts on……
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The beginning:
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The ending
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Dear Eric,
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Best wishes!
Li Ming
Ⅺ．书面表达
如今，中学生的假期生活发生了很大变化。假定你是李明，美国的笔友Lisa想了解中国学生现在的假期生活。请写封回信。要点如下：
学习和休闲仍然重要；（as important as , study , relax oneself）
帮忙做家务或干农活；(be busy with/in, do chores , provide help on the farm)
参加社会活动，做志愿者工作，帮助他人。(take part in , social activities, be a volunteer, help others )
注意：1．词数80一100； 2．请结合实际增加细节，适当发挥； 3．信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。参考词汇 : volunteer 志愿者
Dear Lisa,
I'm glad to have received your letter. Our holiday life has changed a lot.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Exercise
“话题和词块运用”写作模式
主线：Jack’s dream 话题：How to relax
Task 1 用简短的话来复述Jack的问题和他的梦境 (连词成句)
参考词汇： a student in Grade 9/ tired/ fall asleep/ make a dream/ watch TV/ play sports/ talk with others
Proverb: All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. (只工作不玩耍，聪明的孩子会变傻)
一句多译：有些学生通过听音乐来放松 （至少3句）
Task 2 连句成篇
1）表示并列和递进关系的连词：and, also, besides, what’s more,
on one hand …on the other hand….
2）表示转折关系的：but, yet, however，although, though…
3）表示时间关系的: first, then, later, in the end
4）表示因果关系的：so, bacause ,as a result, thanks to…
5）表示目的的：in order to, in order that , so as to, so that…
6）表示列举的：for example , for instance ,such as…
根据语境，用适当的连词填空
1. Some students prefer to listen to music they think music is relaxing.
2. keep healthy, most students do sports to relax.
3. There are many ways to relax. , you can go shopping with friends. Also, playing computer is a good way.
4. Most students prefer to watch TV, , others are different.
Task 3 你的观点
在你看来，哪一种（些）放松方式是适当的？为什么？
Task 4 中考练笔 （课堂作业）
中学生学习时间长、压力大，专家建议学生每天课后应采取适当的方式放松自己。某英文报正在就“学生适当的放松方式”这一话题进行征文。假设你是深圳中学初三某班的学生，最近你对班上同学课后放松方式进行了调查。请根据表格提供的调查信息和要求写一篇短文向该报投稿。开头已给出
常用放松方式 1.看电视（15%） 2.玩电脑游戏（5%） 3.听音乐（15%） 4.进行体育锻炼（65%）
你的观点 哪一种（些）放松方式是适当的？ 为什么？
Life in Grade 9 is really tired, so it’s necessary for us to relax after class. Recently we had a discussion about the ways for students to relax. Here are the results.
Task 5 Homework
假如你叫李华，你校初三同学正在开展一场讨论，主题是“初三学生要不要参加体育锻炼”请根据下面所提供的信息，用英语总结出讨论结果，并发表自己的看法
提示：一些人认为应该每天进行体育锻炼，但不要时间过长，锻炼能增强体质，保持健康，能使大脑休息，使学习效果更好；
另一些人则不赞成，他们认为锻炼浪费时间，使人疲劳；锻炼以后很兴奋，较长时间不能投入学习：锻炼中可能受伤。
要求：语句通顺，句意连贯；字数为80个词左右；发言稿的开头已经写好，但不计入总字数。
Dear classmates:
I’m Li Hua , recently we had a discussion about whether it is good for students to do exercise. Here are the results.(共30张PPT)
Let’s enjoy writing.
--A lesson on how to improve your writing.
Meilin Middle School
Zhang Peihua
pollution
endangered animals
The problems of the Earth
natural disaster
Taking care of the environment is very important.
World Environment Day
On June 5th
在今年6月5日世界环境日即将到来之既,请写一篇发言稿呼吁全校同学共同保护环境,从我做起. 内容包括如下:
经常骑自行车或走路上学,父母骑车或走路上班.
节约用水,用电.不把污水倒入河中,不乱扔垃圾.
不用或少用一次性筷子或餐巾纸.
把用过的书本留给下届(lower grades) 学生.
请再提出1或2条建议.
How to write a composition well.
Lower Carbon
topic
phrases
tense
persons
sentences
conjunctions
在今年6月5日世界环境日即将到来之既,请写一篇发言稿呼吁全校同学共同保护环境,从我做起. 内容包括如下:
经常骑自行车或走路上学,父母骑车或走路上班.
节约用水.不把污水倒入河中,不乱扔垃圾.
不用或少用一次性(one-off)筷子或餐巾纸.
把用过的书本留给下届(lower grades) 学生.
请再提出1或2条建议.
审 (search)
仔细读题，认真审题，抓住要点
go to school by bike.
go to work on foot.
save water and electricity.
Don’t waste water or electricity.
pour waste water into the river
throw/litter rubbish about
try not to use one-off chopsticks or napkins.
leave the used books to the students of lower grades.
give away
列(list)
经常骑自行车或走路上学,父母骑车或走路上班.
节约用水.不把污水倒入河中,不乱扔垃圾.
不用或少用一次性(one-off)筷子或餐巾纸.
把用过的书本留给下届(lower grades) 学生.
请再提出1或2条建议.
we should go to school by bike or on foot.
we shouldn't drop the litter everywhere.
we should keep our river clean and never pour waste water into the river. …….
加(add)
加首尾 ,单句为主, 复句慎用
连(connect)
巧妙组合、顺畅过度、
上下连贯、语意畅达、
注意搭配、运用恰当的关联词
How can we write it well
解释说明：
On the one hand /on the other hand /on the whole
Firstly, secondly, thirdly, at last
发表感想连接词
To be honest
= To tell you the truth = Honestly speaking
In my opinion / in my mind / in my view
递进关系：
what’s more = besides
Meanwhile = at the same time
Let’s try
_____________ I am tired, I keep on working till midnight.
He didn’t go to movies, he went to the concert ______.
We like doing kinds of sports _____ swimming, running and hiking.
_____, he stood up. Then he got out. _____, he went back. ____________, he smiled.
Though\Although
instead
like
First
Next
Finally\At last
表示举例:
for example, for instance, such as
表示结果:
as a result, therefore, in this way,
表示转折:
but, however
表示时间顺序:
first, next, then, later, after that, finally, meanwhile
表示总结:
in general, in a word, in short
美(beautify)
善用高级词汇
活用多种句型
妙用引文和例子
Writing skills
方法一:善用高级词汇
Which is better
1 我们很累。
A We were very tired.
B We were really exhausted.
2 他们在海滩上听音乐。
A They listened to the music on the beach.
B They enjoyed the music on the beach.
Which is better
3 我希望你能帮助我。
A I hope you can help me.
B I’m looking forward to your help.
4 我们应该努力取得好成绩。
A We should work hard to get good grades.
B We’re supposed to try our best to get good grades.
Which is better
5 我不吃垃圾食品。
A I don’t eat junk food.
B I stay away from junk food.
6 他们很早就到了。
A They arrived early.
B They arrived as early as they could.
方法二:活用多种句型
Writing skills
Which is better
5 我认为学英语很有趣。
A I think learning English is interesting.
B I find it really fun to learn English .
6 我们应该在英语课上记笔记。
A We should take notes in English classes.
B Taking notes in English classes is necessary.
find it to
Taking
necessary
Which is better
3 她还小，搬不动这么重的箱子。
A She is very young. She can’t carry the heavy box.
B She is too young to carry the heavy box.
4 我们必须采取措施来拯救地球，这样才能过上更好的生活。
A We must do something to help save the earth. Then we will have a better life.
B The more we do to help save our planet, the better life we will have.
too
to
The more
the better
Which is better
7 小组合作学习可以帮助你学得更好。
A Working in groups can help you learn better.
B Work in groups, and you will learn better.
8 我们应该保护环境。
A We should protect the environment.
B It’s our duty to protect the environment.
Work and
方法四:妙用引文和例子
Writing skills
加谚语(Proverb)
集中注意力于学习
We should concentrate on our studies.
As the saying goes, “No pains, no gains.” We should concentrate on our studies...
青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球。
We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth.
For example, we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags, stop using napkins, plant more trees and save water and energy.
加例子
Examples:
We should love our earth. We should ride bike to school or work. If we can, we can go to school or work on foot. We should save water and electricity. We shouldn’t pour waste water into the river. We can’t threw rubbish. We shouldn’t use one-off chopsticks and paper napkins. We can give away our used books to the students of lower greades.
How many marks can he get
Make many mistakes in grammar.
It has no connective sentences(过渡词).
The structure (结构) is not very fluent(流畅).
The last point is missing.
Check:
spelling（拼写）
tense (时态)
handwriting（书写）
punctuation marks(标点符号)
After writing
Let's enjoy the composition
As we know, environment is very important in our daily life, but do you know how to protect the environment
First, we should go to school by bike or on foot. Second, we shouldn't drop the litter everywhere. Third, we should keep our river clean and never pour waste water into the river. Don’t forget to turn off the lights when we leave home. If possible, we shouldn't use one-off chopsticks or paper napkins too many. Meanwhile, we shouldn't cut down trees. Instead, we should plant trees in spring. The more, the better. If we try our best , I'm sure our environment can get better and better!
审
列
加
连
美
首
尾
巧用关联词
善用高级词汇
活用多种句型
necessary
If possible
妙用引文和例子
Summary
Writing step
1. Enjoy the compositions I will give you.
2.Write a composition：
台湾是中国的宝岛，请根据以下要点写一篇介绍台湾的短文。
注意：所有提示必须用上，再适当加以发挥。词数80左右。
(1). 台湾岛位于我国的东南部，是我国的第一大 岛。
(2).风景优美，当地人们友好。每年有许多游客去旅游参观。
(3).盛产稻米、茶叶、各种水果和鱼类。
(4). 希望台湾的未来更美好。
Homework
Don’t be
afraid of
Writing.
