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黄其玉
中考作文五步走写法
一、审清题目,列出要点
二、结合要点,简单表达
三、连词成句,表达正确
四、适当发挥,丰富表达
五、组合成文,适当过渡
中考作文举例 指 导
假如你是李林,你的美国笔友Sam 要来你的家乡,恰巧你不在,你想介绍一位与Sam志趣相同学刘凯接待他。请参考下表中Sam的相关信息,用英语写一封邮件,说明刘凯的情况。
Age 16
Hobbies sports, music, traveling…
Personality(性格) honest, friendly, helpful…
Other information want to learn Chinese, like Chinese culture…
要求:1、语句通顺,意思连贯,书写工整;可适当发挥
2、文中不得出现真实地名;
3、词数:80词左右(邮件的开头和结尾已给出,但不计入总词数)。
Dear Sam,
————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
Yours,
Li Lin
一、审清题目,列出要点
审文体:
应用文中的书信
(书信的格式是:称呼、问候语、正文、结束语、落款)
2. 审人称:
第一人称 (介绍刘凯第三人称)
3. 审时态:
一般现在时(主体时态)和将来时
4. 审内容要点及字数:
(重点,下页列出)
一、审清题目,列出要点
朋友要来,自己不在,表达歉意,并说明刘凯接。
介绍刘凯情况:
(1)年龄 (2)喜好(3)性格
3. 处理表格中的其他信息:
Sam可以和刘凯学习汉语,了解中国文化。
4. 表达美好的祝愿。
5、字数80左右。
二、结合要点,简单表达
朋友要来,自己不在,表达歉意,并说明刘凯接。
2.介绍刘凯情况: Liu Kai:
(1)年龄 16 years old
(2)喜好 like sports, music, and traveling
(3)性格 honest, friendly, and helpful
3.其他信息 Other information:
help him learn Chinese, know about Chinese culture
4.美好的祝愿 best wishes
come to my hometown,
will be away,
feel sorry,
Liu Kai as the host.
三、连词成句,表达正确
You are coming to my hometown.
I will be away.
I feel sorry.
I will ask my friend Liu Kai to be the host.
Liu Kai is 16 years old.
Liu Kai likes sports, music, and traveling.
Liu Kai is honest, friendly, and helpful.
3. Liu Kai can help you learn Chinese.
You can learn more about Chinese culture.
4. I hope you will have a good time here.
四、适当发挥,丰富表达
分析一下,需要扩充的是介绍刘凯情况的部分,这是本文的核心所在,所以,对此部分进行适当发挥,发挥部分符合全文逻辑。
Liu Kai is 16 years old.
Liu Kai likes sports, music, and traveling.
Liu Kai is honest, friendly, and helpful.
适当发挥:
He especially likes basketball and football.
If you have some problems, please ask him for help.
五、组合成文,适当过渡
Dear Sam,
I am glad that you are coming to my hometown. But I feel sorry because I will be away. And I will ask my friend Liu Kai to be your host.
Liu Kai is 16 years old. He likes sports, and he especially likes basketball and football. He likes pop music and traveling,too. He is honest ,he is also friendly and helpful. If you have some problems, please ask him for help. He can teach you Chinese. And I am sure you can learn more about Chinese culture during your stay here.
I hope you will have a good time in China.
Best wishes.
Yours,
Li Hua
(恰当使用关联词 )
书写规范, 卷面整洁。
注意:书写规范, 卷面整洁
注意!
认真检查,修改错误
总 结
中考作文五步走写法:
一、审清题目,列出要点
审文体(包括格式),审人称,
审时态,审内容要点(含字数)
二、结合要点,简单表达
三、连词成句,表达正确
四、适当发挥,丰富表达
五、组合成文,适当过渡
Practice(Hmomework)
2010年以来,人类面临着越来越多的生存考验:地震、干旱、火山喷发……。由于自然灾难频发,我们的地球已不堪重负。作为地球的主人—人类,该做些什么呢?假如你是校学生会主席David,请你以学生会的名义,根据下面的图示内容向全校学生发出倡议:号召大家保护环境,共同维护我们的美好家园。
要求:图示信息要全;词数80左右;语言流畅;语句规范。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
参考词汇:blow away吹走;刮走 running